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Great chapter showing how different sections of the media twist facts to suit their own agenda. The release of the the security video at least shut up some of the conspiracy theorists. It's sad when people are hounded for their story, when they just need time to get over the terrible things that have happened.
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I have a bad feeling about this... The description in this chapter is as lush as the gardens. I like the way you are introducing us to the characters and intrigues of the palace, in the same gradual way Somesh learns about them.
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Feroz seems as if he might cause some trouble.
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This has hooked me. The setting is unusual and the characters are well described.
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There was so much packed in to this chapter, but it flowed easily through the different events. I loved Mary Ellen's notes she left for them to find after she'd gone. I also enjoyed the way this story tied in to the Maple Hollow stories. The school shooting was horrifying, as it should be. You left us in suspense wondering if Evan was still alive, then even when we knew he was, wondering about the extent of his injuries.
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You may get your wish fairly soon!
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They should definitely go for the DNA test as soon as the festive season is over. They should also be concerned regarding Nathan's dad's next move. He'll definitely report them, as his main aim in life seems to be making Nathan unhappy. If they've already got proof they aren’t related by then, it scuppers his plans. If they find out they are really twins/brothers/half-brothers then their best bet is to move as far away as they can and start over.
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Adam and Andy taking on the bigots was brilliant. Eric going clothes shopping (even in a charity shop) is another step forward for him. Hopefully Emily will be able to help Felicity to at least acknowledge her controlling marriage isn't right. It might take her a while to do anything - poor woman is obviously living in fear.
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Excellent first chapter. It's so refreshing to find accepting parents. I'm already sad about what is going to happen to Mary Ellen, but look forward to reading about how Evan and his dad cope with the loss and carry on.
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As @Clancy59said, the canon stories concentrated more on Benden 400 Turns later. I knew that Zalna transferring to Benden would mean she was one of those left behind and wanted to write this from her perspective. If I’d been one of those riders at Benden, particularly if I’d had friends from the other Weyrs, I’d have been imagining the worst and trying to figure out where they'd gone.
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I suppose it was just a time period Anne and Todd didn't find interesting. That's the good thing about fan fiction - you can fill in the blank spaces.
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Zalna went back to her weyr to prepare for bed. Thoughts raced around her head. Now, she’d be unable to meet D’gar as she’d promised. She imagined T’ron would be telling all the Fort Weyr riders later, so he’d understand the reasons. When are we going to the beach again? Gemalth asked sleepily. Not for a while. We aren’t allowed to leave the Weyr. There is sickness and we must isolate ourselves. That is a pity. I liked seeing my old friends again. Although I did not like Ramoth.
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I agree with all the other posts. DNA tests all round. Nathan's dad has lied so many times can we really believe anything he's saying. Reading this chapter made me look up the relevant laws in England and Wales. Interestingly enough, prior to 2003, incest was only illegal between a related man and woman. The 2003 act extended the scope to any siblings of whatever gender. Prior to finding out they were related, no offense was committed, but if they carry on now that they know, it would be illegal to have penetrative sex. So hand jobs would be OK! What a can of worms.
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No, a different one. Lessa remembered the tapestry had been displayed at her family hold before Fax invaded. It was found again and brought to Benden Weyr. It portrayed the last battle against Thread at the end of the Eighth Pass over Ruatha. Lessa figured out that changes had been made to the Hold, as it didn't look the same in modern times and used the picture as a reference to go back in time.
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Comments such as yours mean a lot to me. I write because I enjoy it, but having feedback is a bonus. I am so glad my words have helped you through some bad times. Because fan fiction is based around someone else's copyrighted work, an author can’t charge for it. It's written purely to fill in the gaps the original author left blank.
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It was a hard scene to write, as well. I had to stop a few times because my glasses were misting up. Thank you.
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I imagined one contained a longbow and arrows, so the 'scapegoat' could be taken down if he or she attempted to run. The other probably contains a sword or knife, to finish off the job.
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I agree. He might be good at organising the Weyr to fight Thread, but he's never had to deal with something like this before. All he's been told is he must keep what's happening secret or he might imperil the future of Pern.
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Thank you. This is a different sort of story than the others and it's my first one written from the point of view of someone who is close to the top of the hierarchy.
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It's not mentioned what excuse was given in the book, just that the only person from Benden Weyr privy to the meetings was the Weyrleader, who was told his Weyr must remain 'ignorant and intact' and that Lessa's presence must not be mentioned, as that, too was unknown in her time. Infectious disease is the next most feared catastrophe on Pern after Thread (they've had their fair share of plagues) so it would be a good way to ensure no one from Benden leaves while the other five Weyrs are getting ready for the Big Move.
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After three months, Zalna was only just becoming used to the rhythm of life without Threadfall to interrupt the routine of the Weyr every few days. Over the winter, it hadn’t made a huge difference; Benden Weyr was far enough north that many of the Falls would have been non-viable due to freezing temperatures. Weyrleader N’rax, ever cautious, sent out regular patrols just in case but nothing out of the ordinary was reported. Zalna herself could see that the Red Star was steadily dwindling in the
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Shortly after the end of the Eighth Pass, five of the six Weyrs on Pern are found empty. Zalna, a junior weyrwoman at Benden Weyr, tries to discover what might have caused all the other weyrfolk and dragons to disappear and where they could have gone.
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A simple, but heartfelt story showing how hope gradually dawns and grief can't last forever. The descriptions of the park and the people using it is cinematic.
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Lovely, uplifting story. Sometimes it feels as if grief will never let go. I like the way you wove in the symbolism of spring with Maurice's own renewal.
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This is a wonderful sequel to 'Sidewinder', bringing in another character from the previous story. I don't want to give away too much about the plot, but I would recommend anyone who enjoyed 'Sidewinder' to read this one too. You will be moved to tears and want to kick a certain stubborn man a few times, but by the end you will feel uplifted and hopeful.
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