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Interesting beginning also has me wondering, where we shall end up. Also, like the story begins with a bus trip to Canada for band competitions.
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This is an interesting beginning to a part of America I have never understood, the Bible belt. Being born in Australia, where religion has not held a firm grip on the population since the 1960's I still find it odd that there is a strong sense that religion is all and more, in the USA. I shall read the naptown tales with interest.
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I hope the writing gets better the spacing is most irritating.
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Alex is playing with fire and could well finish up getting his fingers burnt. What was he thinking about having sex in the unlocked room he is lucky Carlos is more than just his friend, being loyal to a fault. If it we're to get out about his preference for male sex he would be next on the list to a very bad ending. This story of inside prison make a very good read, thanks to your effort👍
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When the boys come out to play they need to be on the down-low. This setting is interesting, as well as being one hell of a fuck up. How will Alex keep control of his section if this becomes known? Things are getting interesting.
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Well that was not expected Alex getting stabbed! While prison is worst place everything appeared to be quiet in this part. Another interesting chapter 👍
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I like this story even more than, Jacob finds his way. I suppose it is because we are now hearing about the real Alex, also the family he comes from. Several things are so much easier to understand. Well done.
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Thank goodness that is over! I have been getting made and made, with every chapter that was written. While there was much to like about the story the amount of time spent on describing sex between different couples was beyond boring. Sex should be acknowledged but not page after page. As for the behaviour of the mother Gloria right up until the end of the last chapter she was still trying to be a dominating bitch. It wasn't good enough that the furniture was moved into the house but had to be placed exactly the way she wanted it to be. The ungrateful creature still has learned nothing. Last of all the use of English was appealing! I am dyslexic and still could find many errors.
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As we come to the close of this story I am driven to make an observation. I wonder why there is so much descriptive sex in every chapter? A story can have as much interest and mystery when less is more! I find myself skimming the sex as it has become so repetitive as to be boring. The entrance of Ethan was an interesting concept, the farm boy who has made such an impact upon Chase is an interesting twist. While I have enjoyed the story there were a number of times was going to stop reading as the plot was becoming absurd. But it is only a story and once I begin a story I never give up on to though this one has surely tested my will.
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While Jake did go too far, it is playing right into his mothers game of causing mayhem, one can only hope Jame is alright.
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What a scumbucket the bitches brother is, needing help to settle the injured pride of his sister. And how could Andy allow her to kick Jake out of the wedding. Andy has always been the weaker of the two brothers so it comes as no surprise really.
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Jake should cancel the contract on the house his mother lives in and tell the bitch to just get out of his life then let his sister live in it or least it out to another couple of friends.
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What a difficult situation Jakes mother is now partly titled holder of Joes Aunts house. While Joe's father has just given both his mother and sister another bashing. What isto becomeof them?
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How could a mother be so callous as to say she accepts 👍the love between the two young men, then to start plotting against them. How evil can she be? She has lost her eldest son and now wants to stop her youngest son from being happy. One may love their children but they shall never own them!
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Is Jake really sick again or is he just worn out after being locked up in the cage, then going out to play blade hockey.
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Tom is so weak, hiding who he is is understandable in one sense but to get involved in hurting the person he professed to loving, is beyond callous.
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Jake seems to be unable to make up his mind about Joey if he keeps punishing himself over this mess maybe he should end it altogether. As for accepting the promotion in JROTC his own principles will be questioned.
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Joey as a lover to Jake is like the asp was to Cleopatra not the best of matches.
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What a self-centred spoilt kid Joey has turned into Jake was trying to do what was best for them both and Joey gets all petulant because he needs more of Jakes time. Jake is better off without him if that's the way he is going to behave.
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The cat incident was a joy to read, it broke the tension in a light hearted way.Then we get hit with the new District Attorney, asking Jake to help put the enforcer, Aljendro behind bars. Interesting way to move forward. I really am enjoying your writing.
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David and Tom atre in the same position as many sports men and women who are gay. They are scorned and abused by so-called "straight" people. Even this week, a soccer player was abused by spectator players from the opposition team members. Welcome to bigotry 2022 Australia, will it ever stop.
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The judgment was right, and, had Jake been there to see justice come through for him it did in a small way make up for the disappointment he must feel toward his mother. The grandfather also has locked the money away from Jakes mother even though she is on her own. The way she took to him with a belt after sitting in hospitals seeing the way he had been treated was deplorable. Let's hope wherever he is he is safe.
