SilentandBroken

Finally getting back to this story, sigh…I’ll say it again. David is dreamy.

I agree the lot of you. The fault lies on the Kildaires. Victor is a shitbag but that’s what’s expected with him. I suspect he drugged Will’s drink. I think this whole thing put Jonah in series risk of going back to NC. There’s problems all over now on the horizon now and who knows where the chips are going to fall. I get the feeling Monte is gonna get some payback. Maybe that’s just me wishful thinking

I think both films have merit but there is a lot of things that could’ve improved them both for sure. I think it’s important to recognize these are both amateur films and for what it’s worth, they’re much better than anything I could’ve done. Even in this site there’s many stories that would make excellent films, both short ones like these and big time budget films. I think sometimes these short films are deliberately left thin on dialogue to keep it short so it fits the time limit, which unfortunately, can affect the quality a lot too. Still, these are giving these kids a chance at being seen and getting noticed if they’re aspiring actors way more than any other time in history or any other opportunity that they could possibly get in a more professional setting. Contextually speaking, story wise, sure I think there are many possible outcomes that happen in real life. The writers chose these for whatever reason. Perhaps that’s what happened to them, their story perhaps. GA uses stories. These folks used YT. I think both have pros and cons to using. Just the fact these topics are no longer taboo and removed from the web speaks to the success of the advocacy that has been done. 30-40 yrs ago, all of this was a but a dream for some, in its infancy for others. Frankly, I love it all. I think it’s courageous. Hopefully it inspires young gay teens in real life to stand up for themselves.

Damn..

Exactly. Well said.

It may have been a bit originality but in the end the fight is the same every time. Us vs bullies or society

I don’t know if this is the appropriate area to post this but ..I felt the need to share. It hit me right in the feels. Sigh…

I really like these two boys . I hope things continue to grow for them.these are the kinds of stories I’m drawn to. Not too slow, lots of growth and healing from a potentially painful experience and most importantly, boy romance.

Very valid concern. How horrible would it be if he hurts Will or worse…

Victor seems like he’s hinting at a violent dark side he’s got that apparently Will has seen before. He’s plotting something and clearly has Jonah in his sights as the primary target. This is not good. Awesome chapter

I think you’re right about that. Great observation.

While cute, yes he’ll need to learn boundaries before he gets hurt. Sounds like this kid hasn’t the faintest idea what those are.

I did! So much so I want more 😂. I love how you’ve built the characters. I’m hooked.

Great start. Comsi would’ve loved this. You did great

Ugh so sick of Nathan’s narc drama. I don’t care how good he is in bed. I’d be so gone ages ago. Would rather use my hand than deal with his drama.. Rory needs to stop teasing and change teams.

Oh man..so far you’ve put me back in 8th grade. I remember having the social awkwardness and anxiety and poor self esteem much like Billy. You’ve created these characters so well. David is…in a word dreamy.

Exactly. Especially for the first mtg

I can tell you why from someone who’s had survivor’s guilt and trauma. He omitted that stuff because it is frankly extremely difficult to talk about and going into that much detail for the context and relevance for their conversation, it’s overkill. That isn’t to say he doesn’t need to do so because he’s also avoiding iț. Still though, this is huge progress. as for the sec scene, mmm nah man you did fine..so fine I got hard instantly 😘..trust me if keep writing like that you won’t have ANY issues

I guess I can see that

I just wanted a sequel because well now I’m invested in the characters and want more what can I say ? 😂

Good points.

Ok ok first of all there better be a sequel coming focusing on Neil and Chandler because there needs to be. Shame on you for teasing us on all our emotions 😂 secondly, did I miss something? The attitudes of everyone towards Lucas seemed to do a complete 180 between this chapter and the last. I get there was a bit of a minor time jump but that won’t changes hearts and minds THAT fast…unless they learned of how Lucas was abused sexually prior to get curb stomped and then some by his uncle. I’m just saying the extreme level of care they’re extending to him now is waay more than I’d expect so soon. Idk, maybe I’m reading way into it too much. I think Sammy told Mr. C not Neil’s mom about the eye flirting between Neil and Chandler. I’m thinking Mr C asked her to give him the old tour. Idk, doesn’t matter. Bottom line is that there needs to be a sequel . Great story though

Ooommmg I was gonna a berate you something super horribly because no way can this end here. What a superb chapter. Now, where’s the rest?! I wasn’t done! it better be MUCH much longer.

Ok ok where the hell have you been hiding this talent? Cute chapter dynamically between them. I love how you continue to write them having the same train of thoughts and anxieties. It’s brilliant.

This story is very well constructed. I like how you’ve built in the anxiety and self torture thoughts. The build up to this chapter was great.