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"A fated encounter, a forbidden bond—can love break the chains of destiny?" You will find out ! What a great story bringing together wolf shifters, witches and vampires and their waring leaders. You will read about battles, deaths, scares, possible no-win situations and surprises. You will remain challenged and worried for the ones you grow to really like. Read on for a great ride.
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Great conclusion... Renato achieved his revenge. He created the situation for Lord Valerius and Mother to turn on each other while trapped in a blazing inferno. They died in severe, unrelenting pain. Their lives ended. They will not hurt others ever again. Renato survived victorious and moved on away from the shifters and witches. Renato knew ..."Life was waiting" We wish him well.
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This conclusion is so revealing about Jimmy---"There are over three thousand people on this floor," Patricia said wryly, "and when you laugh, everyone on the floor can hear it. I do not know how you do it, but your laugh carries through this entire floor and is infectious. He says it makes him happy to hear at least someone loves their job." I loved knowing this. He did make positive impacts--on his fellow workers and gay rights As for the first Andrew to present, I am interested in the one who first goes after Jimmy and succeeds.
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Hugo was transformed into a fierce warrior. He incapacitated several of Dottie's fighters shocking everyone. Leaving when he ran out of bullets, Dottie incensed sent Miller after him. But Hugo was warned in advance by Stoker that Miller coming after him. Hugo had discussed Miller's impending attack with Thomas, the fiddler. In the end Hugo and Henry left Miller to the fiddler who helped Miller see the evil actions and cruel deaths of his past. Miller's mind broke. I assume Dottie has lost Miller and will be even more upset. Now on to D-Day!
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Richter cannot two betwee two being and they begin a contest with bets being waged, As usual, Richter is clueless." Kotetsu senpai and Aether seem to have been staring at each other motionlessly for a bit longer than I expected." Hunter jumps in to win over Richter by drugging him. Hunter fails. This is all up in the air with lots of public attention. I do not see how this will end well for Richter. We will see.
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So, a cow saves the day and makes a bastard lose! Jimmy turns the table. He notices Andrew3, too.
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They are going to Warren, first. Zeke wants to see and save Josh in some way. Darius expects Josh's phone has been tapped. How are they going to avoid a trap and being killed in Warren?
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Utter chaos---What? Why? So we have to wait two weeks to find out if anyone is killed or seriously injured. Did the evil being Josel sensed attack them? Did Renn play a part? This potential attack seems small next to the confusion and pain Josel felt about Zdain and his anger toward the mocking Renn. Josel keeps being reminded about the enchanting kiss he had with Zdain. The scary tension from the chaos and necessary heightened attention to what matters after any attack is handled could give Josel and Zdain more reason to come clean with each other when they take a break.
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The are ready for the end game. Two weapons and ammo. Hugo has spent 30 years training with Henry. Henry has cancer and is not going to live much longer Henry is helping Hugo and is adding to the plan. I cannot wait to see how their efforts unfold.
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Act III - Hammer To Fall
akascrubber commented on Jack Poignet's story chapter in Act III - Hammer To Fall
The two groups are working together. Ray and Gabriel expressed their love for each other. United , they are ready to face the future which looks bright. I am hoping the epilogue ties up enough loose ends. However, you have enough material for an additional story Thank you for Big Paws. -
What a sad compulsion--to not let go on your dead husband and to not let others support and help you move on. He devoted 20,years to his dead partner."It took two decades to finally gather the strength to set him down." I am concerned. Did he commit suicide to end his imaginary relationship?
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I have a feeling students wanted to take your classes. They could sense your sincerity and interest in educating your students through complex issues. You wanted them to learn and it had to show. I had a chemistry professor in college who had a very interesting, unusual background--a merchant seaman in WWII whose ship was sunk by a German U-boat--who was brilliant and passionate about explaining his subject.
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That was a fascinating story.... I am glad your confidence was strengthened by the experience. The 10 year lead time is a new one for me.You were not wary of recruiters after your Toronto experience. Today, I mostly hear about recruiters going after high-tech skilled stars with the priority going to those in Artificial Intelligence.
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I am left with a great respect for Hugo who was there for Billy at critical junctures. Hugo did not let his own problems stop him from helping Billy. Hugo was a good friend when Billy needed one. Billy has grown more confident and well grounded. He has become a better person who is open to love and is no longer fearful.
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Good--Darious and Joey and Zeke are on the road driving to west VA to meet Nina with Agent Riley. Two unmarked FBI cars are following at a distance who will not interfere unless trouble happens. Zeke will help them but is looking out for Josh, Joey's older brother, to strike up a roamnce and have sex. So much can go wrong. They do not have a solid plan yet and I guess will wing it. Let us j hope they do not follow Murphy's Law: Anything can go wrong and will go wrong.
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[Memory, October, Sophomore Year] – Visceral Reaction
akascrubber commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, October, Sophomore Year] – Visceral Reaction
Lyn is tightly wound and repressed. Brad gets him into tough, embarrassing situations even without lots of lubricating alcohol. Forced by two girls to kiss Brad to be able to see their bare breasts. Lyn resists but Brad kisses him and Lyn gets sick at this kissing and runs away and vomits. Alexander follows him later after he has vomited and asks if Lyn is alright showing concern. Lyn is still upset at his actions and sharply blows Alexander off. Lyn later regrets how he responded to Alexander. He has disappointed both Brad and Alexander. -
Chapter 12: Silent Witness
akascrubber commented on BrokenBoundariesGayErotica's story chapter in Chapter 12: Silent Witness
I cannot wait to see what these two do in the next chapter. Will their actions really mean a new way of treating each other?. -
Thank you for the outline and explanation. Carrying out your vision was shown to be very successful in your stories.
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I love your interplay and extensive relationship with loving, caring Wil., Nice brief mention of the Andrews, your writing habits and productivity and leaving Toronto. So, we really need to learn more, please As a start, can you tell us what Jackie told you was the right outline for a successful story?
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Chapter 12: Silent Witness
akascrubber commented on BrokenBoundariesGayErotica's story chapter in Chapter 12: Silent Witness
Don't stop..... I am betting Mason wants blow job from Eli who cannot say no. He dreams of sucking Mason off. Given Eli's track record I can see him being used one time and maybe ignored until Mason has a dry spell with the girls. But maybe Eli will be so talented that Mason will want repeats. -
Hugo rejected the object offering the possibility of severe devastation and temporal crisis. He did not take what Sinjin offered him. He needed to find another way Hugo returned to the mirrors and Thomas , the fiddler. After reflection, he asked Thomas to help him see into another person's soul. Then, he asked Thomas to show him Billy, who was just crying after learning his last parent, his father, we killed in WWII. So what will Billy help Hugo learn to better help him fight Dottie and bring Alec back?
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Duncan's ending and passing was so touching. Jimmy endured as he always did. Wil helped Jimmy be made anew like that broken plate. Wil and Jimmy got very close. That overnight experience in the so very cold bus shelter had to be a test of stength. As for their intimate connection--it was strong emotionally and will become stronger. I cannot see Wil staying, I assume they have more to grow. I appreciate Wil's influence on helping Jimmy write the first two Carter stories.
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Both Hugo and Alec are going to be understood as forces of nature. Alec has now been seen as one with Hugo coming up soon They were shocked that Alec was not a drooling idiot. They do not know he will keep learning and trying to get out. Plus, he has a goal and wants to know about 1981. Just a minor point--A US Marine installation would not be located by Mount Ranier, WA. Its presence would raise questions. The area is near Joint Base Fort Lewis a huge Amy -Airforce base for the West Coast. Then Army trains in this area. The US Marines are located very far south at Camp Pendleton, CA.
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Scary cliffhanger--Charles has been stunned and kidnapped. No one saw his disappearance by a robot. I am ready for Book II
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But, they need ideas to turn things around. Maybe we will see your ideas in the next chapter or two?
