peter rietbergen
-
Posts
1,068 -
Joined
-
Last visited
Content Type
Forums
Stories
- Stories
- Story Series
- Story Worlds
- Story Collections
- Story Chapters
- Chapter Comments
- Story Reviews
- Story Comments
- Stories Edited
- Stories Beta'd
Blogs
Store
Help Center
Writing
Gallery
Events
Everything posted by peter rietbergen
-
Horrific. But inevitable.
-
Chapter IV: The Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come
peter rietbergen commented on andy cannon's story chapter in Chapter IV: The Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come
Ah, that might be the alternative... Given that I've no thespian talents whatsoever, I should perhaps settle for that role. Alas, precisely the casting directors did/do apparently mostly mis-use their power for sexual abuse. -
‘Yeah, it does,’ I said, as I sat myself down on the bed. They both sat down as well, one on either side of me. ‘There’s some stuff I need you both to know . . . even if only so that you don’t put your foot in it around Tom and Beth, than for any other reason.’ This is a repetiton - he's said that already. Bu otherwise: a good continuation of the story!
-
"And you, Monsieur Levesque," Lorelei countered, meeting his bet without a flicker of hesitation, "have a tendency to compliment a lady's perception most extravagantly when you are bluffing. It's a desperate gambit." "I am always flattering," Levesque grinned, a flash of white in his dark face. "It is as natural to me as breathing." "Then you are perpetually desperate," she said sweetly, turning over a full house, queens high. A lovely exchange!
- 16 comments
-
- 10
-
-
-
-
Chapter IV: The Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come
peter rietbergen commented on andy cannon's story chapter in Chapter IV: The Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come
Very cute. if only life-style conversions came so easily...By maybe fairy-tales do help - that is, after all, their function...So: get someone to turn this story into a Youtube 'indie', or a TikTok tale...I'm pondering what role I'll audition for. -
dear author, providing "food for thought" is, obviously, a mutual experience. So for that: I thank you !
-
This is a very impressive scene. The more so since - or so I feel - the very same actions could have been taken, indeed: the very same words spoken by a leader who's ideology is the complete opposite of the one we must feel WC has espoused. Which makes us - me - wonder if the outcome, the fulfilment of the ideaology, would be the same, too. To put it otherwise: when the ways and means are the same, only the end counts. But who's to judge whether that end is good or evil?
-
Chapter III: The Ghost of Christmas Present
peter rietbergen commented on andy cannon's story chapter in Chapter III: The Ghost of Christmas Present
Do we find Tommy in the tub? All wrapped up in soapsuds? -
I was wrong: Hign Noon was nothing compared to this....
- 19 comments
-
- 10
-
-
-
a good story, this - the more so since the supranatural interventions somehow held their tongues.... So: thank you. But... since there's always a "but": any more KK stories will show a 'diminishing return' since we will have some trouble believing that someone so impulsive will always end up so lucky...
-
Good heavens, your Will-saga is now gaining global proportions. But well-done, for this is how it usually starts - whether through the infested rats and mice that caused the death of about a third of the population of western EurAsia during the 'Bubonic Plague' or, indeed, the virus that brough AIDS. Not always through the godd intentions or despite the bad actions of "our"politicians: we survived Covid - but only to now wait for another such pandemic. Whether we - or, again: "our" politicians - have learned our lesson remains, alas, to be seen.
-
Chapter 4: Hidden agendas
peter rietbergen commented on vanalas's story chapter in Chapter 4: Hidden agendas
The question is: how long do we have to wait before the "baddies" in this saga get their "come-uppance", rather than believe that Julian doesn't act and Robert continues to be spinelessly insensitive, even cruel? -
"I work better without a plan." That is an understament. More perplexing: all people around KK seem content to let him go on like a knight in shining armour(aka visions from beyond), but without any real weapons. How believable is that?
-
Act II: The Ghost of Christmas Past
peter rietbergen commented on andy cannon's story chapter in Act II: The Ghost of Christmas Past
"...I just think people get scared of love ’cause it’s the only weight you can’t drop without hurting yourself.”” A perfect chapter - yes, (also) because the fucking didn't happen (yet). -
Frosted Hearts: The Abyss
peter rietbergen commented on Jason Rimbaud's story chapter in Frosted Hearts: The Abyss
You're the author. yes. I'm the reader, so you might as well please me. Of course Mario is coming back, with his boner and his craving for sex. All else? Covered in snow. -
Good Heavens, you DO like cliff-hangers, don't you! Now we'll have to hang on till the bitter, or triumphant end...
-
A Perfectly Executed Escape, No Notes
peter rietbergen commented on ThePhallocrat's story chapter in A Perfectly Executed Escape, No Notes
You've kept us - me - waiting far too long. But again: I can't stop laughing. Thanks. -
The "cock-blocking" belongs to this soapily-operatic Western - makes it even better...
-
Splendid. Already I know that my annual treat of one of the many versions of A Christmas Carol from now on will be supplemented with what I'm sure wil be delectable but alas quite probably irrealistic 'alternatives'. As to: It wasn’t Charles I missed. it was the version of me reflected in his bullshit, overpriced realtor eyes.. Or who I pretended to be. Or who I desperately hoped I could become if I could just keep him long enough. Yes, we've all been there.
-
It’s a poison pill for your partisan ambitions, Caleb, but it’s a golden ticket for your ideological ones. Do you want to save the country, or do you just want to talk about it on television?" I'm certain that over the past three years, you must have been reading the Dutch newspapers and watching our daily dose of appalling so-called "talk-shows" - all the "media", in fact, that allow most of the men and women who are our elected politicans to simply act for their own pride and status rather than for anything even approaching the "common weal"... In doing so, in being given that opportunity, they have managed to cause three cabinet crises and three failed governments - and left a nation that doesn't know where it's going anymore.
-
this is indeed a nice chapter, though I'm a bit amazed at the fact that Creek is present when D has some sort of future/job-interview with "Mom" and Katherine. D is, after all, an adult - and Creek is not his father, or mentor or something...
-
Worse, from the beginning I somehow didn't trust the way the author has woven Adam into the tale. Narratively speaking, or: plot-wise, it would make some sense if he were part of the "baddies,". The story will tell....
- 15 comments
-
- 10
-
-
-
-
-
I am uncertain about the sentences running from: "To Theo, Sawyer.....? wasn't a man... " Because that suggests Theo feels no emotion of secret desire and longing. But yet, immediately following that, he is described as "waiting" - for what? And as confused - by what...! But maybe I'm not close-reading enough.
-
An exciting and hilarious mix of High Noon and, dare I say it: "Mr Ed.", though many readers may not ever have seen either. But all with the unmistakable Topher-mark.
-
This really is a good chapter! It shows sides of all three that round out their persona a bit more.
- 25 comments
-
- 10
-
-
