Johnathan Colourfield

HAPPY BIRTHDAY my fabulous editor/beta reader/rewriter haha

I really did enjoy the mystery of this story The blog is great where it is - I like being able to have the time to read without the pressure of oh theres another one tommorow *panic*

The Shrouded One decided that time was up. She was no longer feeling weak and her shroud was at full intensity. In fact she was feeling quite strong. Her hospital bed began to creak as she swung her legs round. She felt her feet touch the floor and she felt good. Her guilt had passed. She knew exactly what she had to do. It was merely a case of escaping the chamber that they had kept her in. She pondered upon the thought when she just placed her hand upon the door. It wasn’t concrete. She

Her memory was still fragmented but they were coming back piece by piece. In fact, at this moment, her memories were nearly completely intact and she could remember what happened… That event that she thought was so beautiful was something quite vulgar… ** It happened years ago. The glimpse of light. The hand reaching out to hers, saving her from the darkness. She was taken… She had been saved, by a man she loved. But then she was taken… Her creator came to collect

If i get stationed in SoCal and i have a day off then i'll be happy to come along. All location dependent really

That was an excellent read AJ. You have a great ability to show the reader the emotions the characters are experiencing. You really caught me with this one. Thank you for sharing with us. You should write more - you have a great talent. However, you dont' escape a slight telling off. Head Hopping, you do a very sudden change of point of view and it distorts the reader. Although it does work in this story, you need to look out for this in future. Congrats on a brilliant story! I expect to see some much greater work from you in the near future!

Happy Birthday Mum.... I mean Nephy! hehe Hope you got spoilt rotten!

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Such a creepy little story! Poor guy! I'm scared of Jonas now

They travelled together and it was midday; they had to carry on in order to reach the next town or they would die in the cold. Ash was the stronger of the two of them so he held The Mental Patient up as they travelled; wishing they could find somewhere to stop that was safe. ‘Ash, where are we. I feel so weak.’ He began to cough. ‘We are nearly to safety, just stay awake. You need to stay awake, please.’ A tear began to drop down Ash’s face. The Mental Patient tried to st

I have written a review for the Blog but i thought i would just give you my thoughts. This is an excellently well written story, with completely 3D characters and i was engrossed throughout. Bravo Dolores!

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**same reaction as Cassie...** Err... i wear boxers lol

HI Hayden Welcome to GA We're a bunch of crazy folks here Make sure you come into chat at some point - sometimes we have a lot of people in there

Oh my gosh how did i miss this! Happy Belated Birthday!

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Happy Birthday Sweetie! Hope you had a great day!

Good to hear If it makes you happy you should definately do it it's never too late to go to university

Chapter Four Blank. The room was blank. A haze of white and a glistening light from above where she was laid. She had begun to awake from what felt like a months’ worth of sleep. She was unsure where she was. Immediately checking her wrist for her heartbeat, she took a breath of relief. Death had evaded the situation. Alive… The walls were tiled with black lining. Then, an image appeared before her eyes. ‘You…’ ‘Yes it is me.’ The man laughed and looked down upon h

It's a really excellent story Also, buy a copy of "The Runaway" Also by Nephylim, it is an excellent novel.

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It's a really sweet story and cute However, the story isnt perfect, by a long shot. Needs a good rewrite for it to dazzle The characters are adorable and one can easily identify with them - their relationship is very volatile and realistic which i find is a strength in the writing. Translation. You say he's a translator but you don't mention the language. You say it enhances the readers views, but for me it just annoyed me. I think you need to say, even if its only once what language he works with. maybe include some examples (Italian Maybe?) The joke make me laugh a lot - little moments of genius ^^ Generally, I enjoyed the story and it was well written, considering it was written when you were 16 *pats you on the back* Well done! I'd reccomend this story to any reader

Happy Birthday Podga!!!

Good to hear CJ. I've not read your work - I need to at some point but i look at it and go oh god thats alot of words - but i've heard alot of good things about it. It's amazing what a bit of reader feedback can do for a story isnt it?

The thin light that came through the room she was sleeping in was shining directly across her face. In normal circumstances a light that bright would wake someone but she was in a sleep that was too deep for her to awaken from for a few hours yet. Her leg twitched as she rolled over in her sleep. The silk night gown rode up her arm revealing her tattoo. She could hear them talking about her, in this dream world. The doctors. They were speaking about her condition. They had given her