Great story. Very real, yet with a surreal touch. This could work as a short film, the kind you don't grasp at once and that leaves you with a strange feeling. But you can't shake it off as it makes you think. Well done!
Another beautifully written story of yours. The descriptions are vivid. I could imagine every tree and pebble. I could 'hear' the silence and I could see the 'words on tiny feet'. I'm happy Aslan decided to embrace life, which is not easy often. A very good story again. I loved the message
I liked your story a lot. I loved the flow and pace. It's beautifully written. And it's very believable. I'm glad you submitted your story. I truly enjoyed it
I admire your talent. This story is simply perfect. It is.very well written and it has depth. The style is uncommon, but I think it's excellent. The way you addressed the theme is just amazing. An excellent piece of writing. Kudos again!
I usually lack the patience and stop reading long stories. I finished yours! You managed to draw me in. I saw the end coming, but nonetheless I enjoyed your writing. The story is very well written. Great.
I didn't see the end coming. I felt truly shocked and I feel very sorry for Ben. I didn't like Sharon and her nasty plan. Luckily, her plan worked for Ben. I would like to know the continuation of the story. What will happen to Carl? And what will happen to Ben? Great story!