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Well, unless the members of the Pagan club are hiding their true selves under a spell, they are totally harmless. Peter was better this chapter, but I do think he should have talked to Jane over the weekend. Okay, if the missing girl is who Jane really saw; then this has been going on longer than anyone realizes.
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Sorry, but Peter came across as a real ass in this chapter. He should have checked on Jane. He could easily tell that she was really upset and then just acted like it was her issue; when he was the one that drug her out to look around.
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I think Peter was hunting Simon more than Tommy. Jane is a kook.
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Well, what an interesting conversation this turned out to be for the first time that Peter and Simon had a real conversation about something... Well written and the pacing continues to be excellent.
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An interesting chapter, good mix of characters and the pacing was excellent.
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I vote that Levi gets a large pure silver dildo stuck and locked deep in his ass....
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If every single member of Levi's family is not killed; I am going to find a certain person and make sure that they are badly injured; maybe not the hands, have to keep typing. I was still hoping that some how or another that Dorian managed to survive this ordeal; I sort of hope that maybe he was able to get Karissa pregnant and continue his direct line. Well written, but these damn cliffhangers are starting to really wear on me...
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I do have to say that the story is well written; but the story development is somewhat lacking. There really isn't enough information given to fully understand the characters backgrounds. The pacing was good except for two or three chapters that were a little choppy. The writing really was good, and the adventures were interesting. I can recommend the story to those that enjoy this genre. Was left wondering if this was either a sequel to a previous story or the start of a series. Just kept feeling like I was missing some of the information need to fully understand what was going on in the story.
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Good chapter, but it left perhaps more questions opened than it answered.
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Well, it seems that Hope's service to the Thieves Guild is a gift that keeps on giving. Better pacing in this chapter.
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Okay, very choppy flow to this chapter, writing was okay but the pacing seemed way off.
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Okay, color me beyond confused..
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Honestly to God, listening to them bicker makes me think of "Who's Afraid of Virginia Wolfe"....
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Damn, sounds like without bad luck; they would not have any luck at all.
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Interesting give and take between Hope and Elluin, but they both seem to be understanding each other a little better. Have to question the merchant they are with, is there more to him?
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Have to admit the bickering is strangely pleasant. Wish we had a better description of Hope.
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Well really, a priest charging a100 gold pieces to save someone? How rude. Elluin was just in the nick of time. Elluin is right about one thing; Hope does need to learn to control his power or he will get someone killed that he doesn't want to.
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Not sure Elluin should have lied about why he was tracking Hope, have a feeling it will come back to bite him. Well this chapter did answer some questions about Elluin's past.
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Does Elluin lose control when he changes that one time a month? Why did he leave the woods? Just to hunt those that came and killed his people? Seems to be a lot of missing information.
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As Elluin found out; the story is told from only one point of view, and rarely right. Seems like if he had headed straight for the woods, he might have already caught up to Hope, but I guess he did not think that Hope would go that route.
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Is Hope talking to a particular God or just the universe on these ramblings? Keeping us all interested and the pacing has been really good, well written as usual.
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What world is this being based off of? Seems to be a large variety of beings that you would not normally find together.
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Gathering Information
centexhairysub commented on Yeoldebard's story chapter in Gathering Information
I would have thought that Hope would have done a little checking to find out who the halfling really worked for before just accepting the assumption that she was from the Thieves Guild. Well, the trip sounds like the beginning of more trouble for him. -
Better pacing in this chapter; just flowed better from start to finish. I could do with a little more background on each of the main protagonist but still holding all my interest.
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Hmmm, an interesting first chapter; more than enough to keep me interested. Well written; but the pacing seemed off somehow.
