Nephylim

Okay, I tried to respond to each one of you individually but the stupid system wouldn't let me post it. I kept getting the message that the number of opening quotes didn't match the number of closing quotes even though I made sure they did. Technology batters me down again Soooooo THANK YOU EVERYONE> Have some cake

Thank you for your kind comments and taking the time to review. I am very fond of Ash and I'm glad you like him He's a very thoughtful character and a foil for some of the things I have been pondering. I think it is possible to fall in love with a mind and that is what happens online. Don't deprive yourself of sleep over it, but there's a whole lot more to come. If you're anything like me you will be peeping at the end soon. If you cheat you are only cheating yourself

All of life is experience, hun. Just because yours are different to many others doesn't make them less so. You can always go back and do the teen things but not many teens can ever have the experiences you have had; the good and the bad. There are plenty of older gay couples out there. There is a group on facebook. Stamp Out Homophobia on The Net. They have albums of the weddings of members. They are all ages, all sizes, all colours and all very happy. Maybe you should take a look because love can come from anywhere, at any time. It is never too early; never too late. Keep smiling.

I like the story and it's interesting to see where it goes. The dialogue is good. Dialogue is one of the hardest things to get right and yours is 'real' and fluid. The characterisation is solid and the basis of the story a good foundation. My criticism would be in editing issues like grammar and tenses. You mix up the tenses sometimes and you write as though you are not a first language English speaker, which is fine but needs polish to make it not matter. Basically you need to get yourself an editor to polish the window so the good story and bright characters to shine through. There is definitely a lot of potential

No, it didn't advance the story. It was pure self indulgence Don't worry, we get back to the story in the next chapter And there were a few little things in there that won't become relevant until later. Thanks, as always for the reivew

All thoughts of Felix have long since slipped from my mind. I am practically asleep, purring like crazy. I have my head buried in Sar’s lap, breathing his scent so deeply it’s drugging me. Sar isn’t even touching my ears any more. I feel like I’m floating. The gentle motion of the car beneath me is adding to the general sense of unreality and disassociation. “Glory?” a voice says gently. “Mmm.” “I thought you were asleep.” “Almost.” Mmm I rub my cheek gently against his belly and feel the m

You understood me? I must be losing my touch To Cy, Gabriel was a boy and he was certainly dangerous to him. What makes you think that vampires can't go out in the daylight? They don't like the sun very much and, indeed it burs but only if we sunbathe too much Thanks for the review hun

History is full of homosexuality. I could write pages. It seems that in lots of civilisations where the men went off to war they would have no contact with women, sometimes for years and they would have only themselves to turn to. Celts, Romans, Greeks, Egyptians, Phoenicians, all were recorded as having homosexual relations. In many cultures it was not only tolerated but accepted, In Greek and Roman society it was well accepted that wealthy, powerful or learned men would take young male pupils, many of whom were sexual partners. The process was called paiderastia. Welathy families would be eager to find places for their sons with a well connected patronand it could lead to political advancement. These boys often went on to marry and settle with women but were still free to take male lovers, although in the case of Roman society it was not socially accepted to be a bottom (submissive) so that part of the relationship was usually kept secret Alexander the Great doted on his lover, Hephaesteon and was devastated when he died. In Celtic society homosexuality was widespread and socially accepted. That will do for now I think

Well it's as good a thing as anything to celebrate, although, as James said it wasn't the only tragedy.

I'm glad I missed a few chapters. It's been a real roller coaster read and I've loved every minute of it. This has all your characteristic spark and fire and plenty of details to get my teeth into. You're one of the few writers I know who torture their characters as much, if not more, than I do. Beautiful story. I am not going to be missing any more chapters,

Thank you hun. I have such a lot of projects ongoing at the moment but I am not saying the end... only the end for now

Thank you for the review hun. I agree totally and that's why I wrote the story, to illustrate a real example, fortunately not as extreme.

Happy Birthday, Darling. Have a totally chilled, wildly exciting and especially sexy birthday Love you to pieces weird and wonderful boy. I was going to give you a sexy man but didn't want to upset Stu so....

Fabulous

Thanks hun. I really appreciate that especially when I know you are busy with your own things.

If you can get on a train to Wales you would be more than welcome to the spare room but there's not much I can do for you in London.

WOW now that was a twist i didn't expect. Nice nice nice work

Thank you so much. Well... if you knew what I knew you would be saying Poor Gabriel. He really should have killed him. Maybe one day I'll tell you why.

Awww thank you I hope you have a good festival too, Daddy Why would you say that I am evil. It was a good end right? I mean definitely a happy ending... well a happier one than it could have been from Cyan's point of view

Thank you so much. That was just the best review EVER. I'm so glad that you got the 'lair' and you also got the things I didn't say The problem is that as soon as Cyan was in a place where the alarm bells should have been ringing it was already too late becuase Gabriel already has his claws into him. You know what these vampires are like.

Cyan is afriad of boys, especially beautiful boys. When he met the beautiful boy on the bus he really shouldn't have looked and when he bumped into him in the club he should have walked away

The boy on the bus looked dangerous; but then all boys looked dangerous to Cyan, especially pretty ones. This one wasn’t pretty: he was beautiful. Cyan had never seen anyone so beautiful. It was as if he was sculpted from alabaster and not alive at all. It was a sunny day and no surprise that he was hiding from the glare behind a pair of reflective sunglasses: but he seemed to have been hiding from the sun too as his skin was milky pale. To be honest, Cyan couldn’t actually see his face because

Oh shit o shit o shit. What's happened? write fast and tell me. That was just the cutest thing ever and Kaleb as Peter Pan whispering he was goig to get hard!!!!! OMY I just melted. Come on, write woman, Not a writer?? Yeah right

This gets better and better. I love them to death. Well... not Helen but everyone else. ALthough even with helen I think she's truly trying to look out for her son so I can't see her as ALL bad. Things are moving on and I have a feeling that Chase is going to be asking Kaleb to move in with him soom. THAT is going to give Helen a coronoary for sure

HAPPY BIRTHDAY