Nephylim

I'm always late to the party. Welcome to the site. I hope you enjoy it here and I look forward to reading some of your work. A short gay romance sounds good. There are a few her who write screenplays. I think there are one or two posted. Jonathan Colourfield writes good plays Anyway... Welcome Hopefully once you've made the five posts you will be able to get chatting and making lots of friends. Most of us are a friendly bunch although some of us bite. I think everyone has a slightly skewed view of their own work. At the end of the day what is a story for? It's for enjoyment... the writer in writing it and the reader in reading it. If you have a good story, well written and interesting then who the hell is going to care about subjects and verbs. I would never tell you that you don't comply to the standard norms. One because I wouldn't have the first idea what the norms are (If it sounds right it probably is and if it sounds wrong it probably isn't is the way i view the rules of grammar) and secondly becaue i don't like complying with any norms and like it when other people don't either. If you're nervous get an editor or beta reader to go through it. All of the editors and betas here know their stuff and not only that but they know what the readers here like and don't like and will be able to give you some pointers. Reading is a very subjective action. You like what you like and it doesn't matter if it's technically perfect or not. A good story can have a profound effect on readers but if you strive for that it can end up being dry and preachy. So aim for enjoyment and anything else is a bonus.

When I read It Was A Monday, I was left unsatisfied because some things didn't make sense. I'm glad that was the case becaust filling the holes this way is so much better than trying to fit all the details in one story. It's easier to really get into the head of the character without having to rush on to the next part of the story. I like the idea and I like this chapter. I always have wanted to know what happened to Puck and I can't wait to get to him.

This is a really tricky one. Is it worth straining or breaking the relationship over something this small? On the other hand is it something small? Is it something that is important to you. Different people have different feelings about the subject. To some it's important; to some it's not. Is it something that is going to ruin the relationship anyway because you'll think of it every time you see her and gradually confusion will turn into anger and it will be a real barrier between you? Only you can know If you do decide to tell her I would suggest you do it in a non confrontational way. For examply.... You know what you said the other day about being gay is a lifestyle choice well I've been thinking and that;s not the way I see it, can we talk about it? Give her your point of view and if she's a friend she'll either accept it or accept your opinions differ. If she makes a huge deal of it then I think you can assume that she wasn't that easy with it in the first place.

Haha, Glory is a lot of things but the cat is always first and foremost of them. He likes nothing more than curling up on a rug in front of the fire and lapping at a bowl of cream. he goes into ecstacy over things like cream and coffee BUT he has claws and a tail that has a life of its own and Cat ALWAYS howls when he has sex. Gods I love Glory

Well... one - he's a cat and rover is a dog and two - Glory is a Damphir... half vampire and half... anything else. To be a Damphir in Glory's world is a death sentence and he has spent his life trying to hide it. He's scared that if they know his true nature they will tear him to shreds. I mean Glory's a sweet little purring pussy and Rover is a great big hairy dog.

HAHAHA Wallowing? Yeah I guess.... who doesn't like a good wallow now and again. Actually it's raining a lot right now, I could probably find a nice patch of mud Suck it up? Mmmmmm *licks lips* I am so going to slap you in August... with love of course *blows raspberry*

Thank you hun. I will be uploading every Wednesday and I have completed the story so there will be no waiting or stopping

Thank you You'll get one every Wednesday I hope you like the way it develops and, in particular that you grow to like my beautiful little cat.

The first thing that surfaces in my awareness is warmth. Shit. Warmth is bad. I shouldn’t be feeling warm lying down. That means... that means... Wait. It’s not only warm it’s comfortable. It’s soft. The ground isn’t soft. I move my head and my cheek brushes something cool and silky. Extending my awareness I realise that there is more of the soft silkiness all around me. I’m in a bed, a huge warm soft bed with silk sheets and down pillows. Am I dead? I must be dead. How else would...? Sudd

That was a nice chapter. I think that both films were really sweet and inspiring. The only bit I didn't like was the part at the end with the teacher which I felt was unrealistic but apart from that sweet story

Nice idea alternating POV's by chapter. I like the little details, like the make of the camera etc. I also like the way that things fitted and a new stant is given to something we have already read. I am liking this story a lot

Nice start. I'm warming to both Eli and Viz. And the whole premise,( popular jock meets and makes friend with freak/geek) which is kind of cliche, is dealt with in and interesting way

Thank you I'm quite fond of this story because it was fun to write the lyrics. And the torture was quite cool too

Phana you are just beautiful and the hugs are the best thing in the world Carl... you are SO right. I hadn't thought of that. Everyone is wonderful. And of course I will survive. Battered and worn but alive and still kicking... and biting

Don't worry, you know me and happy endings. I can promise tears but whether they will be good ones or bad ones well... that I'm not saying

Well that was unexpected. A threeway split? i don't think that Jed is in the running, at least I hope not. That was a cheap shot. To be honest I have no idea who I would pick... Bill or David although I think that Bill is the guy i would put my money on. He's the one who's in deepest and has most to lose. I'm interested that people seem to think that David will win in the end.At the moment i would be putting my money on Bill. There is so much about the story to like. It flows smoothly and the chapter is ended almost before you realise it has begun. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Awww... that was wicked hot. I like Bill so much... so why do i get the feeling that he is up for getting his heart broken? I am feeling that the way Bill was looking at TR the way he was becuase he knows that David is intersted and is worried about the competition. I'm wondering 2 things... Is every man in that town gay and does every gay man in that town after TR I really really don't like Jed and I have a feeling that if he's not up to no good now he will be soon. He just doesn't seem like a man who takes rejection well

I like Julie, although I'm not sure I would want to talk to her for any length of time I'd like to taste her pie though. The plot thickens eh? I never did like the equestrian type although there suddenly seem to be a lot of men in TR's life.

So yeah... David likes TR and Bill knows it. My only wonder is whether David likes Doc or he was jealous of TR likeing Doc, i think it's the latter. Of course David's wife has 'left' and I'm very intersted in the ghost. Again the lovely little touches like the pasta. I am so loving this story.

I spent the first half laughing and the second half smiling. The whole scene with the rednecks was hilarious and the conversations with Bill sweet as hell. And then in the middle we have a mind blowing... erm... blow and that's a hell of a good recipe for a very enjoyable chapter to what is heating up to be a great story

Hot hot hot. And still with the detail, although i won't be checking YouTube thank you very much It says much for your writing that i feel I am getting to know all three men, and a little about Bill too. I'm not really one for big sassy men in uniform but if it floats your boat sail with it and having a big throbbing motor between your legs can only be a good thing right?

I really should finish reading Gordy as I had come to a critical place BUT I then started reading this one and I have to keep it going. I have no idea who this guy is, not really but I love him already. There are so many little irrelevant details that make the story incredibly rich. I love it... the mare with the carrot... priceless. I have always enjoyed the fluidity with which you write and this story doesn not disappoint.

WOW. That was twisty and turny. Nice plot nevelopment and super hot sex. And then ending with a chuckle and a desire for more. I'd say that was pretty well done mister.

I've been having quite a few problems with regard to doing the right thing lately and more often than not they have turned out to be the wrong thing. The thing I am concerned about today is my job Being a lawyer you would think i'd be cool headed and analytical... well I am when I'm behind the desk or in the courtroom. I am far better sorting out the lives of strangers then I am with my own and those close to me. I think it says a lot that I am the most disorganised person EVER and my home is cluttered every surface has SOMETHING on it and even the floor is usuall scattered with toys, cards (like Pokemon and Yugioh), stacks of boxes etc. Everything is very 'untogether' and there is 'stuff' everywhere... paintings, dolls, candles, art, supplies, crystals... yu get the ides. HOWEVER, in work my desk is totally neat and organised. I get antsy if there is a paperclip on the floor or in the wrong place in the drawer. All my files are neat and rigidly arranged and I HATE it when anyone puts the papers in out of order. They say that your space reflects your mind and i think that's true. I don't know which way round it works. Is my work desk neater because I am more focussed in work or am I more focussed in work becaue my workspace is neater. Hmm However, I digress. No matter how cool headed, calm and controlled in work the absolute opposite is true in my personal life and I get myself into all sorts of scrapes because I am hot headed, impulsive, passionate and tend to rush into things without thinking them through or looking at them clearly at all. Add to that the fact that I am always striving to do the right thing, usually what's right for someone else rather than me, and that I am far too ready, even eager to accept responsibility that really aren't mine to take and I'm a bloody mess. So I lost my job. What was the big issue? That I missed having a job... not really it's been great to be at home. That I had to go on state benefits... well that was a pain in the arse but I got there in the end and they've pretty much left me alone in the end. That i would lose my house... so what, I'm trying to sell it anyway and the only difference would be that we wouldn't get to Harry Potter World... also I know I won't starve or be out on the streets because I have too many friends... and have found ebay. So what was the real issue about not having a job? Reason One Efan. He doesn't really care that he can't have what he's used to having and Harry Potter World was never really anything more than a dream BUT.. I DO CARE. I don't want to see disappointment on the face of my son. I don't want him to put on more weight because I can't afford all the fruit. I don't want to send him to school in old or bad quality clothes. I don't want him to be worried or upset or deprived of anything. I don't want things to change for him Reason Two Lori Lori is having a hard time making ends meet. She has a new flat a new job and few relationship problem. i have been helping her out financially and the thought that I couldn't is unbearable. I need to be her safety net YES she's an adult and should be able to stand on her own feet but I didn't have a mother I could rely on for anything so I want to be that mother. Reason Three My friends. Most of my friends live a long way away, even my brother and I hate the thought of not being able to see them because I can't afford to travel. YES I know they could come and see me but why would they bother putting themselves out like that for me? They do but why the hell...? Reason Four I like to see Efan in nice clothes. Okay so my wardrobe is half a wardrobe and a chest of drawers while his is three chests of drawers, half a wardrobe and half the bed but he's a kid and he needs to look nice. Reason Five I am dependable. When I had a car all of my family depended on me utterly. i was always running around for one or the other. of course I can't do that now but I do other things. I have other kids here as often as I can... cousins, neices and nephews etc... because Efan is so alone all the time and I physically can't play with him and feel guilty as hell that I spend most of my time in front of a computer screen because it's the only thing that takes my mind off the pain. So i get other kids in whenever possible and I shower them with food... this is a Welsh thing I think... hospitality means that as soon as anyone steps over the threshold you have to stuff them full of food... my mother would have died of shame if anyone had come to her house and she didn't have cake or biscuits. Okay, so the thread, I think, is clear. None of the reasons is about what I want for myself, not really... they're all about other people. I have it programmed into me that other people and their needs are more important than mine. I have to take care of my family and friends, i have to make sure they're okay, they're taken care of, they're happy and secure...AND YES I KNOW... but if you're hardwired that way it's hard to break out of. So here I am. I have a new job and I am starting on Monday. It is 16 1/2 hours a week which is half hour more than I was working before. The office is 8 miles closer to home, a little over 6 miles away, and I wil be in charge of my own department. I guess I must be good at what i do because this is the third time in a row i have been called and asked did I want a job with no interview and basically on my terms. The issue is that I'm not really well enough to work at all. And I don't want to work because I like not being in pain so much and being able to put a hot water bottle on my back when it hurts. I like having time to do things because I need time to do things. My memory is not good and when I'm ill my coping skills are not good either. I get very emotional and every little thing becomes an insurmountable which I usually throw myself at with little thought trying to just make it go away. I'm between a rock and a hard place So... The Right Thing. Is it always best to do The Right Thing or is it sometimes better to do The Best Thing I can for me, even though it means other people get hurt or disappointed, Is doing the best I can, accepting the inevitable screw ups, and disappointment of others, enough; or should I work harder on not making the screw ups in the first place ( even when they're not my fault like the redundancy, which, ridiculously I do feel is somehow my fault), putting them right at all costs and thinking of others and their needs and feelings before my own. The problem is that I really can't help myself and it's the getting out of that conditioning that eludes me. Also, if I did break the conditioning and become more selfish and self centred (in the good not the bad sense of the words) would I still be me and if not would I still like myself. MEH

Sleep? What on earth do yu want to do that for? It gets in the way of living Thanks for the kind review and I'm glad that you think I have variety because I am always trying to find something a bit different.