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Into a better place by Riley Jericho. It was intense, extremely powerful, shocking, and well written

Well, I don't have anyone at the moment and that might be an indication why

Bitch

Because I am technologically challenged I would LOVE to see them posted together

Awesome. I love unusual names and Zenith is just fab, Zen even better. This was in many ways a shocking chapter in all sorts of ways. It was totally explosive and I can't wait for more.

Why not? But only if I was absolutely sure that my friend was over them. It also depends on why they split. If it was becasue the ex was cheating or beating them then why the hell would I want to date them.

Okay the nit picker in me is screaming... how can a question which says' Would you adopt or have your own?' be answered yes or no? Isn't it either or? On a lighter note I have two children. One is 25 and living with her partner of 5 years in Cardiff. The other is 10 and still living with me. I adore both of them. If i'd had my time over would I still have them... hell yeah but I would foster them out until they were 8 and then again from 13 to 18 They actually used to do this in the dark ages so the children would be taught different skills which they would then bring back to their village. Great idea I wanted to call my daughter Mererid Angharad and my son Celyn but both fathers put their feet down firmly, especially dad no 1. I was gutted I wanted to call her Merry

I can't post pictures but my absolute dream (or should that be cream) team would be Jonny Depp and Nicole Kidman SIGH Can you imagine a sandwich of those two with me as the filling. *shiver*

My laptop My two favourite paintings I would then have a nervous breakdown because I couldn't take the rest of my paintings and it would be like losing part of myself. The only other thing I would regret losing is my goth dolls Keys money, phone, cards, material good mean absolutely nothing to me.

That was sooooo cool. Wicked sense of humour darling. I laughed till I snorted coffee. I'm getting used to that when i come on here

Welcome to GA hun. Yeah, it had a huge overhaul a short while ago. It was very disorienting to start with but it's shaking down now Look forward to reading your work and hope you have fun here

Get a beta and / or an editor and not only will they give you input on whether the story is ready or not they will also help you improve it

Gosh, you're speechless

Rain does have a habit of washing things away. I remember feeling exactly like this when I went on to sixth form when my crush left school. The really sad thing is that we had begun to get really close and if only I'd had more time it could maybe have been a lot different. But hey

Thank you so much for your review. I'm really glad you liked the story. Unfortunately there isn't going to be another chapter as it is just a short. Lots of my other ones are longer though

I really liked this first chapter. I mean it's about vampires after all ( I did a typo there and it made me laugh so much I have to say it campires *smirk* ) The only complaint I have is that you seem posessed with muscles and have mentioned a million times how muscular various parts of their bodies were. Apart from that slight annoyance I really loved the story. The whole premise of the shadow creature is sweet, I love that kind of thing.I am imvested in the characters and the story so yeah good start and lots of potential for a wonderful story

Hugs to all the new guys. I'm getting used to being late to the post now so I'll just give everyone a group hug and say hi and welcome.

Depends how you define expectations. If you are talking about expectations in yourself and the way you act and react then yeah, I reckon it is a good thing to have expectations because it is something you have some control over. You can expect yourself to be strong, or brave, or honest, or truthful or whatever you think you are or should be. But I think it is silly to have too many expectations about your life, people and the world. How can you have expectations for something you can't control? You can expect rain tomorrow but it's as likely to rain as not. You can expect people to behave in a reasonable fashion when the chances are they won't. You can expect to live for another day but that doesnt mean you will. You can expect your friends to be honest with you and support you but there are all sorts of reasons good and bad why they won;t always be able to. I think that you can have hopes and dreams and wishes and desires and you can and should reach for the stars but you can't expect to touch them

Clearly you haven't read my stories

That was quite a roller coaster chapter. I have to nit pick just a tiny bit before I start because that one didn;t seem to be as well edited as the rest. Anyway. So much emotion. First Dad then Joe Don then Mary Ann, But it brought him Wylie. If it wasn't for the first chapter I would have hoped that Wylie and John would get together. So Gordy is about to appear. I've waited and wondered a long time. The last chapter is a long one so I shall read it when I am fresh to the hunt. I promise I won't neglect you for so long. I think this is one of my favourite chapters. Not only because of the emotion but because of the realism of the interaction. The dialogue was slightly stilted at times but, as usual it flows and 'feels right' for each character. I find myself caring about all the characters, not just John and Wylie and that goes even for the 'amall' characters like Sally.

Why did I stop reading this story at such a crucial time... well I have excuses but no good reasons because this is such a good story. I have one small nit pick... why does the size of the print increse in places? Is it deliberate? As far as the story is concerned I am still loving it. Gods above when are people going to learn that speaking is so much better than not speaking. It might hurt more in the short term but it is so much better in the long run. The whole shower scene is shocking, more so because of it's realism. It seems as if that is exactly how someone would react. I LOVE the little saying his dad comes up with. Sometimes the worst medicine makes the best cure but sometimes the best tasting is poison. How true. WHAT a shock. Mary Ann was shock enough but Linda!!!!!! I smel disaster

Totally a top, although maybe I should bottom more because I am a total control freak. Having said that the last time I bottomed it didn't end too well. I fight back

This is a real fun piece. I't with Joaquin on calling it a fair. I love the idea of calling it a Fairnival. This group sounds... interesting and I would love to hear more about them. I really like the tight writing and how compact and self contained this story it. The descriptions are very vivid and the characterisation is well drawn. I really like the dialogue as well which is fluid and realistic. Dialogue is really hard to write so this impresses me. All in all I like the story and I would like to see it expanded. I would love to find out more about Nate and his friends

HAPPY BIRTHDAY :wub:

Ditto