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Summer - 21. Streets of Fire

Monday, 26 August 2013

“Thanks for the ride, Papa.” CJ took off his helmet and secured it to the sissy bar, behind the passenger seat. “I’ll see you at home tonight.”

“You’re welcome. Hope you have a good first day.” Brett flipped down the visor on his helmet, took the motorcycle out of neutral, and turned the throttle a couple of times making the Harley roar. The bike surged forward as he released the clutch. His next stop was the Pentagon.

Once alone, CJ turned around and looked up at his new school with a smile on his face. Walls, located on the campus of George Washington University, consisted of two buildings: a nineteenth-century historic structure, and a twenty-first-century modern one. This was where he would be spending the next three years of his life.

“Bro! That’s a mad ride! Is that your dad? He’s a soldier?” CJ pulled his gaze away from the school and turned his head to look at the guy talking to him.

“Hell no! He’s a marine. And yeah, he’s my dad, and the bike is hot as hell. Are you into motorcycles? Hey, I’m CJ.” The boys bumped fists as CJ checked out his new acquaintance. A tall, slim, shirtless guy, wearing D&C kicks, and orange shorts, with the top band of his boxers showing. A green shirt stuck out of the back pocket of his cargo shorts. He had a ball cap on backward, headphones around his neck, and held a brightly colored skateboard. A bunch of fabric and leather bracelets on both wrists completed his attire.

“Hey, bro. Yeah! I grew up around motorcycles, love them things. I’m Harley. I don’t recognize you. You must be new. Where’d you come from? What are you, a junior or a senior? I’m a sophomore. This is my second year at Walls.” Harley was a bundle of energy. He moved around constantly as he talked; hands, arms, and legs were in motion at all times.

“Dude! Slow down!” CJ started laughing at motor-mouth, he liked this kid. “Yeah, I’m new here. I moved from Miami at the beginning of the summer, and I’m also a sophomore. How many energy drinks already?”

“You’re a sophomore? Bro, you look―”

“CJ! It’s so good to see you again. Welcome to Walls. And it’s nice to have you back, Harley.” Principal Edwards was out in front of the main entrance welcoming students, she squeezed CJ’s shoulder as she greeted him. The remainder of Harley’s comment was lost in the exuberance of the greeting by the African-American woman.

“Bro, you know the principal? How the hell you do that? And she knows your name already? I thought you just moved to Washington.” Harley had put on his shirt before entering the school and was now walking down the hallway, backward, looking at CJ.

“Yeah, I met her over the summer. Her husband is my dad’s boss. She convinced me to apply here.” CJ laughed as Harley ran into the back of a girl, and quickly started apologizing. The girl gave him a dismissive stare but then caught sight of CJ, looked him up and down, and smiled. She and her friends walked away giggling.

“Bro! You got connections! Dope!”

After his initial meeting with Harley, the rest of the day was tame. The two boys were in the same homeroom and the same English class. They ended up together at lunch and Harley introduced CJ to a bunch of his friends.

As he walked towards the bus stop for his ride home, CJ was smiling. He felt good about his first day at Walls. Harley was a fun guy; he was gonna make a good friend.

 

Friday, 30 August 2013

Adriano prepared the staff schedule for Labor Day weekend at Rogo’s so he would be off work on Friday and Saturday. He had rented a cottage in Ocean City, Maryland for the weekend, and was looking forward to spending two days playing in the sand and surf with his wife and their five-year-old twins. He’d return to Washington Sunday morning so he could be at the bar for the lunchtime crowd. His wife and kids would remain at the beach through Monday afternoon.

Spending time with his family was something Adriano treasured. Sometimes his job prevented him from being home to read the twins a story, before putting them to bed. It was something he planned on enjoying this weekend. Adriano’s compensation, as General Manager of Rogo’s, was extremely generous. The hours were sometimes long and kept him away from his family, but the high salary had allowed him and his wife to have children.

After four years of unsuccessful attempts, Adriano and his wife had turned to in-vitro fertilization. An expensive procedure, but worth it since they both wanted a large family. Their first attempt brought a boy and a girl. Now, five years later, his wife was expecting another boy. He couldn’t wait to hold his second son.

The drive to the Maryland shore, from their home in Falls Church, Virginia, would take about three hours, most of it on US Route 50. Because of the different return times, they were taking both of their cars, Adriano was driving in front, while his wife followed with the twins in her car.

 

Detective Tom Kennedy was not happy to be working. With a three-day weekend ahead, he’d planned to take Friday off, so he could get the PP ready for the last outing of summer. He and JP, along with their friends, would sail again over the next two or three months, but Labor Day weekend was the traditional end of the season.

Yet, here he sat, in his partner, Walter’s car, headed to Chinatown. They had been working on a case for a few weeks, involving a fencing operation, run out of a Chinese laundry on Eighth Street. One of their sources had given them a lead concerning a truckload of computers being delivered to the laundry. The items described by the snitch, matched goods reported stolen in New Jersey the previous week. Tommy and Walter were on their way to the suspect business, hoping to observe an actual transfer of merchandise.

 

After the time together over the Fourth of July weekend, Doc and Sean had spent two days in Philadelphia, playing tourist, and enjoying amazing sex. Since then, Sean had been out in California working. The furry redhead was back in New York City and had invited Doc to spend Labor Day Weekend with him. They could catch a couple of shows on Broadway, go out to dinner, and spend their nights enjoying each other.

Doc took a cab from Georgetown to Union Station on Friday morning. The Acela Express would take him to Penn Station, in New York City, in three and a half hours. He wanted the time on the train to think. After the wedding, he and Walter had met for dinner during the week, and then again last weekend. Both men had a few drinks, relaxed, walked back to Doc’s place, and Walter ended up spending the night.

Doc needed to think about the two guys he’d dated since his breakup. He enjoyed his time with both men, who were similar in appearance, yet so different in personality. Walter promised good times and stability; Sean meant wild times and fireworks. Was he ready for a relationship with either one?

 

The Friday of Labor Day Weekend was designated as a Teacher’s Planning Day and students had the day off. CJ enjoyed his first four days at the new school and was looking forward to the remainder of the school year. Harley was fast becoming a friend. The boy was constantly at CJ’s side, introducing him to people, and showing him the ins and outs of the school campus.

CJ had slept in late and skipped his workout this morning. He’d told his dads he planned to run one of his five-mile circuits, after eating breakfast and cleaning up the kitchen. Following his run, the boy planned on going to the market, it was his turn to cook dinner tonight. He also had to pack an overnight bag; his fathers were taking him on a motorcycle trip along the entire length of Skyline Drive. CJ was looking forward to the trip, and to spending a night in a bed-and-breakfast in Virginia. He wrapped a rainbow print bandana, purchased during Pride, around his forehead, attached an iPod Nano to the waistband of his shorts, inserted earphones in his ears, and set off on his run.

 

Adriano knew that traffic, on the Friday of a holiday weekend, was always heavy around Washington. On the last such weekend of summer, it could turn into a virtual nightmare. Government offices, and businesses, seemed to empty earlier. People headed home for a weekend with the family, or out of town to the beach or the mountains. The number of vehicles on the road, before normal quitting time increased in proportion. The number of automobile accidents and fatalities was always higher at these times.

Just before crossing the Potomac, Adriano and his wife temporarily switched to the Interstate, to avoid the additional time it would take to drive US Route 50 / New York Avenue, through the District of Columbia. They planned on following I-395 until it split off, and for the next segment, they would drive on I-695. They would make another switch to travel on I-295, before finally rejoining US Route 50 in Maryland. The highways would still be crowded and have a large number of trucks, but it would be faster.

 

Walter parked his car in the Fire Lane in front of Chopstix. The little mom-and-pop restaurant had a limited menu, but it had good food and large portions. It was a favorite lunch spot for cops. The owners liked having so many police officers around; their neighborhood wasn’t the best area in town. Someone tried to hold up the restaurant one time and was confronted by half a dozen officers. The man was arrested, and meals were on the house that day.

The laundry store Tommy and his partner were interested in, was halfway down the block and across the street. It was easily visible from their position. According to their informant, the goods were being dropped off in a truck for a chemicals supply company. They were to be delivered through the front door, in rolling, canvas laundry bins, like those used in large institutions. The two cops just had to sit and wait.

 

Doc had enjoyed the two dates he had with Walter the previous week. And the night they spent together had been fun. They seemed to fit comfortably into each other and the sex was solid. But there were no fireworks, as there had been with Sean. Although new to being on the receiving end, he had definitely enjoyed being a catcher for the New York Irishman. The memory brought a smile to his face, made his butt twitch, and had him looking forward to the next few days.

But Sean was ten years younger and lived a couple of hundred miles away. Was Doc ready for a steady relationship so soon after his breakup? Were the muscle car and the muscle stud just signs of a mid-life crisis? And then there was the matter of Sean’s profession. Doc was being honest when he said he had no moral objections to it. But could he be seriously involved with someone in his line of work? As the train arrived in New York, he still had not decided about the future of his relationship with Sean.

 

About halfway through his run, as he passed the Watergate Complex, CJ whipped off his shirt, now soaked with sweat, and stuck it in the back of his shorts. While still running, he removed the bandanna from his head, wrung it out, and tied it around his head once again. It helped keep the sweat out of his eyes. The high temperature, combined with the high humidity, caused the air to shimmer in front of him. The asphalt and concrete beneath his feet were so hot he felt it through the shoes. It was as if he was running on streets of fire.

The heat and humidity reminded him of the worst days of summer in Miami―funny how he didn’t think of Florida as home anymore. His tanned body glistened in the sunlight due to the perspiration; his size, demeanor, scruffy face, and the hair sprouting on his chest made him look much older than his fifteen years, to anyone watching him run. He was still trying to get used to young kids calling him sir. It made him laugh when they did.

 

The Interstate’s traffic through Washington resembled a well-choreographed ballet of motorcycles, cars, and trucks. Every vehicle seemed to perform a passé, looking for its right spot, as they traveled east on the Southwest Freeway. Each attempting to move faster than the speed of traffic, or looking to position themselves so they could take their intended exit. Nearing the point where I-395 and I-695 split, Adriano and his wife were traveling on the right lane of the highway when he lost sight of her car. A trailer truck had cut into their lane, taking position between their two automobiles.

He tried slowing down, hoping the trucker would decide to pass him also. Adriano saw the driver attempt a switch to the left lane, where there was a second truck about to overtake him. The shrill horn of that second rig must have surprised the truck driver, he turned sharply to the right, his vehicle went into a skid, and the trailer began to overturn.

 

Adriano’s wife was unable to stop her car quickly enough; it ran into the overturned, skidding trailer. The screech of braking wheels competed with the noise of crunching metal. The driver’s side airbag deployed, exploded, and sent shrapnel flying, the front bumper and hood crumpled, absorbing some of the impact energy, as the car’s engine partially dropped to the ground after its breakaway mounts tore off as designed to do.

 

Tommy and Walter were tired of sitting in the car, they decided to get out and stretch their legs, and placed a POLICE DEPARTMENT card on the dashboard, not unusual for cars parked in front of Chopstix. Tommy opened the passenger side door and stepped to the curb while keeping an eye on the suspected fencing facility.

A man wearing a dark gray hoodie, running on the sidewalk, bumped into him and almost knocked him over. There were shouts of “Thief” and “My purse, my purse!” Tommy reached for his gun in the holster beneath his jacket and shouted at the running man. “Stop! Police Officer!”

“Fuck you asshole!” shouted back the man in the hoodie, as he turned with a gun in his hand, and fired two quick shots at the cop. The first bullet hit high, the impact pushing Tommy back against the car, even with most of its force being absorbed by his Kevlar vest. The second one hit his left thigh, as he fell to the sidewalk, hitting his head on the concrete.

As everything was going dark for Detective Kennedy, he heard Walter scream out: "Officer down! Officer down! Need EVAC. Eighth Street Northwest, Chopstix Restaurant."

 

Doc caught a cab outside Penn Station, for the drive to J. G. Melon. The restaurant, on the Upper East Side, was where a scene, between Dustin Hoffman and Meryl Streep, was filmed for the movie Kramer vs. Kramer. It was a favorite place for neighborhood residents, well known for its burgers, and three blocks away from Doc’s apartment on Seventy-Sixth Street.

Traffic was good, by New York City standards; the ride took just over twenty minutes with the cabbie taking Madison Avenue up. As the taxi came to a stop, Doc paid the fare with his credit card, took the receipt, and grabbed his backpack. He saw the man waiting for him, and opened the door with a smile on his face.

“Hey handsome, how’s my favorite physician doing?” Sean was waiting outside the restaurant and enveloped Doc in a bear hug as soon as the man stepped out of the cab. The furry stud had a shoulder bag with him, he was spending the weekend with Doc, in his apartment.

“Well, that’s a welcome… You’re looking great as usual, Sean. Damn you’re a sexy fucker. I’ve been looking forward to this weekend.” The two men broke their embrace and stood for a minute, looking and smiling at each other.

“So have I, Doc.”

“Are you hungry? I’m ready for some lunch.” Doc had decided to enjoy his weekend with Sean and to have a serious conversation with the younger man before returning home to Washington.

“Hell yeah, I can always eat. I wasn’t sure what show you’d wanna see tomorrow night. We need to figure it out so I can make some calls to get us tickets.”

“I guess you have connections?”

“Let’s say there are quite a few theatre people who I’ve closely worked with in the past.”

“I bet!” They were walking towards their table, following the hostess, when Doc’s phone started ringing.

“That’s an attention-grabbing ringtone.” Sean smiled at the European-style, emergency vehicle siren, playing from the inside pocket of Doc’s coat.

“That’s my emergency tone. It means a call from the private number in the office. Excuse me a minute, Sean, I need to take this call.” Doc placed his black leather backpack on the floor next to his chair, pulled the phone out of his pocket, and stood by the table without taking a seat.

“Hello? Hi, buddy.” Doc moved the phone away from his mouth and whispered to Sean: “My office manager.” His mood suddenly turned serious, and he almost collapsed onto the chair next to him. “Fuck! When did it happen? He’s at GW Hospital? Is my partner there already? Okay, I’ll be there as soon as possible, I’m leaving now.”

“What’s going on, babe?” Sean showed concern at the agitation in his friend’s voice.

“I’m sorry, Sean, but I need to go back to Washington now. Tom Kennedy’s been shot.”

 

CJ ran, following the Rock Creek Park Trails, until he reached the Arlington Memorial Bridge. He slowed down as he crossed it, heading west into Virginia. Pedestrian traffic was heavy on the sidewalk, and the number of cars zooming by didn’t allow him to pass people by taking to the road. Once he was on the other side of the Potomac, he turned north in front of Arlington National Cemetery.

He followed Arlington Boulevard, heading towards the Iwo Jima Memorial, turning into the driveway which circled the imposing statue. As he rounded the monument, heading towards the wooded area behind it, he almost ran into a muscular Asian man, limping around, bent over, while holding his right calf.

“Hey, man, are you alright?” CJ jogged in place as he talked to the grimacing guy. He noticed the man’s shirt was not wet with sweat and assumed he’d just begun his run.

“Bad cramp, buddy.”

“You need any help?” CJ stopped moving and approached the other runner, wondering if there was anything he could do for the man.

“I just need to walk it off… Maybe I could lean on you so I don’t fall over?”

“Sure, here, put your arm around me.” CJ wrapped his left arm around the muscular man’s waist and leaned into him to support his weight.”

“GET THE CAR, WE GOT ANOTHER ONE!” The Asian man grabbed the arm encircling his waist, swiveled around, and twisted it upwards against CJ’s back. He used his foot to push on CJ’s knees from the back, making the boy stumble, fall to the sidewalk, and scrape his skin. The man put his knee in CJ’s back, brought the teen’s other hand around, and secured his wrists with a plastic tie he retrieved from his shorts.

“What’s going on, man? Let me go!”

“You’re not going anywhere but jail, faggot. Officer Xin Gray, and you just tried to molest a member of the Arlington Police Vice Squad. You’re under arrest.”

 

The End

And that’s the story of CJ’s Summer of 2013…
Comments and suggestions, praise and damnation, are all welcome and encouraged. Leave a review, send me a private message, comment on the Summer Discussion Forum, or email me at cjabello1997@gmail.com
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On 05/10/2015 06:40 AM, Jorgen Jackson said:
Carlos, you are an evil, evil man. Come sit by me. ;)

This chapter was outstanding. Really nicely done, and very dynamic. Short scenes, hopping from one to the next. It works.

Are you really going to drive over a thousand miles on your bike? On purpose? You must have buns of steel, man. :yes: I hope you enjoy your time in Washington, and come back with lots of energy and ideas to finish this story. :D

Two years ago I rode out to South Dakota and back. I love those long trips and I'll be doing some story plotting while I'm on the bike this time around. I usually spend lots of time just letting my imagination run wild. You wanna inspect my buns to see how the feel? :rofl:

 

You keep telling me you don't want to dumb down your story and I keep telling you I don't want mine to be a carbon copy of what so many others write. CJ beating up the biker came as a surprise to many, and I like surprising my readers so I decided to do it again.

 

I'll catch up with Diego before I leave town!

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And into every life a little rain must fall. In this chapter, its a tornado with baseball sized hailstones.!!! For some reason, I knew this was going to be a rough chapter and it was. I'm one of those people who doesn't like to read or see bad things happen to characters I like... like that tv show that just killed off a major character. :no: Took all my will power to read this chapter.It was worth it, car wreck, shooting and an arrest!!! Plus Doc's two men. Whew. I kinda feel sorry for that police officer and his department. The BIG guns are about to open a can of whoop-ass on them. How dare they arrest our baby??? And then you left us hanging to go ride a bike :huh::funny: Have fun and come back refreshed and with lots of ideas! :thankyou:

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On 5/9/2015 at 8:42 PM, LadyDe said:

And into every life a little rain must fall. In this chapter, its a tornado with baseball sized hailstones.!!! For some reason, I knew this was going to be a rough chapter and it was. I'm one of those people who doesn't like to read or see bad things happen to characters I like... like that tv show that just killed off a major character. :no: Took all my will power to read this chapter.It was worth it, car wreck, shooting and an arrest!!! Plus Doc's two men. Whew. I kinda feel sorry for that police officer and his department. The BIG guns are about to open a can of whoop-ass on them. How dare they arrest our baby??? And then you left us hanging to go ride a bike :huh::funny: Have fun and come back refreshed and with lots of ideas! :thankyou:

That was a great way to start my morning! Thank you for leaving a comment!!!

I don't really like bad things to happen to characters I like either, but sometimes a little pain can make things feel much better afterwards. Sort of like a root canal procedure?

Some people in positions of authority let their power go to their head and think they can get away with anything. Politicians and televangelists come to mind. I think a certain vice cop could be in the same situation. He could end up facing a crash and burn scenario!

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On 5/11/2015 at 11:16 AM, clochette said:

NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO!!!! :pissed: You can't do that Carlos! You can't leave us like that!

From the first lines I had a bad feeling, like something bad was going to happened, I knew it :no:

I really like the segmentation, it help build the suspence, grow the stress of the reader of what is going to happen. :2thumbs:

CJ new friend at school seems like an interesting and nice guy and a good new addition.

I guess things had been going pretty good for all of them during the summer, maybe a bit too good and we all know that life isn't always a walk in the park so something bad was bound to happen some day

PS: Carlos SUMMER ENDS ON SEPTEMBER 23 :yes: , so you still own us 23 days :yes::whistle:

PSS: I've done some researches :read: and apparently there're 3 other seasons in a years :yes: so maybe we, readers, won't have to wait too long before seeing all the guys again :whistle:

Merci pour le hommage, mademoiselle.

Yeah my calendar's a bit screwy. See, I started Summer on 1 January, there are 13 weeks in each season, but I've posted 21 chapters... Hmmm! :P

A couple of readers want a second book named Autumn, so should I write it and wait 'till September 24 to start posting? And now you mention two more seasons also? :)

Summer started with CJ getting kicked out of his home, a couple of weeks later a bully picked on an innocent kid and CJ beat the crap out oh him, then Chip and Doc broke up. I don't expect something really dramatic to happen every week, but I had to spice things up a bit :D

Don't you get bored with those stories where everything is always just lovely?

Thanks again for the comments, Clo!

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On 05/12/2015 01:56 AM, W.E_Rosenthal said:
Wait that can't be the way you are going to end this story?? I mean really....h-how could you? I'm pretty sure you just killed me. Please, oh please let there be a part 2 that tells the story of CJ's fall. o(╥﹏╥)o
Wow! It's so damn cool to find out some of the other people reading my story! You guys may think we're kidding, but your hitting the like button, and/or leaving a review means the world to us. Maybe in a few years I'll feel comfortable knowing I'm reaching and audience, but 'til then, the tiniest bit of feedback is very much appreciated.

 

I want you to ignore any comments you may read in the reviews, or the story forum, about 'bloody authors'. Contrary to what some Aussies may claim, I don't write just to torture the readers! CJ has a way of carving out a spot for himself inside a heart, sure as hell did it with me. I would love to find out how things work out for him also. I'll have a word about it with the author and the editor.

 

Thanks for the review, bud!

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Hi Carlos, I heard rumor of multiple cliffies, so snuck in to read this chapter. :)

At first, I wondered how the vice cop knew CJ was gay but then I remembered his Rainbow bandana. Other reviewers have already commented on the HUGE mistake by that guy in arresting a minor with heavy duty connections, so I won't comment on that except to say I agree. :D

But my other feeling was that CJ is probably clever enough to keep his mouth shut at first, in order to find out how deep this scheme runs. Ie if he tells his age and his dads' names to the cop arresting him, they'll probably let him go, and then he has no evidence. But if he lets them take him in and make the arrest formal (including finding out who their boss is) he can potentially help other peope falsely arrested by exposing the whole thing. His dads will be so proud of him. Oh and I loved the background story of your former clients.

Hope you have a nice break and a great bike ride.

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On 5/15/2015 at 4:20 PM, Timothy M. said:

Hi Carlos, I heard rumor of multiple cliffies, so snuck in to read this chapter. :)

At first, I wondered how the vice cop knew CJ was gay but then I remembered his Rainbow bandana. Other reviewers have already commented on the HUGE mistake by that guy in arresting a minor with heavy duty connections, so I won't comment on that except to say I agree. :D

But my other feeling was that CJ is probably clever enough to keep his mouth shut at first, in order to find out how deep this scheme runs. Ie if he tells his age and his dads' names to the cop arresting him, they'll probably let him go, and then he has no evidence. But if he lets them take him in and make the arrest formal (including finding out who their boss is) he can potentially help other peope falsely arrested by exposing the whole thing. His dads will be so proud of him. Oh and I loved the background story of your former clients.

Hope you have a nice break and a great bike ride.

Hey Tim- I hope you enjoyed the chapter, and realized there were no such thing as cliffhangers at the end!

CJ gave the cops his name, date of birth, address, and home phone number; the two officers who detained him didn't believe him about the age. They were talking to each other, trying to decide what to do, when the Chief started getting phone calls from the big guns.

Cesar and Brett are wealthy,and some connections but are not widely know in the city. They tend to be fairly private people, which is why when their son doesn't want publicity, they are so supportive of him.The cop wouldn't know an accountant and a Marine from Adam.

Ben Cohen and Senator Marco Rubio are now in their lives because of CJ. That boy is quietly making a name for himself and he doesn't even realize it! :D

Thanks for the review!

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On 06/19/2015 12:00 PM, craftingmom said:

Oh, man! That sucks! I waited until now to finish and I get huge cliffhangers!!!! And people yell at me for them, hehe. Great story, Carlos!

Cliffhangers? Blame the editor-easy scapegoat-for missing them and not making me correct that little mistake.

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing, Mom. Part two of the story, 'Autumn', will begin posting on July 1. I'lll make sure those clifffies get fixed!

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On 07/14/2015 12:26 AM, AceKebabs said:

Okie Dokie.

First off, I kinda had a felling from the beginning that Adriano's family is gonna have an accident, and that Tommy's gonna get shot :P lol But I rather thought CJ was kidnapped than to be arrested :gikkle:

I gather you'd not finished the story before :P

 

Glad I surprised you at least once!

 

I wonder why people don't realize there's a 4th question? Are Doc and Sean going to end up together? Wouldn't that be poetic justice after Chip cheated with the younger brother? :)

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11 hours ago, Dmrman said:

You know I glad I'm not the only one feeling.... somewhat" SHORTED" hanging around with the flash of summer Gone... Poof!!!!!!!!!!!!!:unsure::huh: I thought I was suffering Old age syndrome or something:P. I mean I am the first one to agree for a Bike Ride, but I not sure ... at the risk of a Heart attack counts....?:unsure2::no: I'll keep the Nitro handy, while you go refresh yourself..... enjoy the ride while we .......W..ait:thankyou::hug:

 

Don't worry. Be happy. The next installment is published and waiting for you unlike original readers who had to wait a few weeks to discover what happened afterwards.

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Well, well, well. I'd forgotten the multiple cliffhangers that ended this story. It does remind me I was spitting nails knowing I'd have to wait until the next story to find out what has happened. But this time I just chuckle to myself knowing how each cliffie turns out. And knowing I can move right on to the next story.

I'm thinking this is my third time reading this story. (pause while the broken record is placed on the turntable) You have done an amazing job of creating these believable characters who move about in a world I can picture, speaking dialogue that sounds very real to me. On top of that you have made me care about these people. Bravo! and thanks.

 

P.S. How could I overlook meeting Harley and how funny he was when he met CJ? Like so many others he is one of my favorite characters!

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14 hours ago, JeffreyL said:

Well, well, well. I'd forgotten the multiple cliffhangers that ended this story. It does remind me I was spitting nails knowing I'd have to wait until the next story to find out what has happened. But this time I just chuckle to myself knowing how each cliffie turns out. And knowing I can move right on to the next story.

I'm thinking this is my third time reading this story. (pause while the broken record is placed on the turntable) You have done an amazing job of creating these believable characters who move about in a world I can picture, speaking dialogue that sounds very real to me. On top of that you have made me care about these people. Bravo! and thanks.

 

P.S. How could I overlook meeting Harley and how funny he was when he met CJ? Like so many others he is one of my favorite characters!

 

When this chapter appeared, I had to run from the lynching mob intent on extracting painful payment for leaving them hanging. I was new and readers had no idea if I would continue the story. Hopefully, they've calmed down by now :P

 

Harley was the first in what would become CJ's group of close friends. He's the only one to make an appearance in Summer!

 

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Wow! You going for the prize for the most dramatic cliffies ever! Shucks. I'm glad I only have to find the next book and not wait on the next posting. That was a very dramatic chapter with such atmosphere built up with each of the stories unfolding in such a tense manner. I feel like you just did to me what that bloody cop did to CJ and I'm lying gutted on the sidewalk struggling to breathe.

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6 hours ago, Jaro_423 said:

Wow! You going for the prize for the most dramatic cliffies ever! Shucks. I'm glad I only have to find the next book and not wait on the next posting. That was a very dramatic chapter with such atmosphere built up with each of the stories unfolding in such a tense manner. I feel like you just did to me what that bloody cop did to CJ and I'm lying gutted on the sidewalk struggling to breathe.

 

My editor wasn't too happy with this chapter's format, but I stuck to my guns. Part of my experimentation with different approaches. I think in the end it worked well. Cliffies? Not sure what you're talking about. :P

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We meet Harley. I love that motor-mouth. H will be a great friend for CJ because CJ has a tendency to clam up, from embarrassment I guess. I cannot see a person like Harley ever embarrassed enough to be speechless. I think there is going to be at least one over-zealous cop who will be looking for a new job when some people find out about the entrapment, and CJ is going to be a real hit at Walls. I'm looking forward to starting Autumn at any time you are ready.

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16 hours ago, Will Hawkins said:

We meet Harley. I love that motor-mouth. H will be a great friend for CJ because CJ has a tendency to clam up, from embarrassment I guess. I cannot see a person like Harley ever embarrassed enough to be speechless. I think there is going to be at least one over-zealous cop who will be looking for a new job when some people find out about the entrapment, and CJ is going to be a real hit at Walls. I'm looking forward to starting Autumn at any time you are ready.

Harley's one of those happy-go-lucky individuals who rarely worry about anything. He'll be a good complement to CJ's more serious personality.

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