Vignettes - 2. Ignored

These are very 'delicate.' That's pretty amazing. Your first sentence had my stomach turning – it was like, 'Oh, NO, are things really that bad between the boys again?!' But then by the end, we see it's all just a figment of the imagination.

Pretty brilliant. And very well written too. Thanks for doing these; they're quickly becoming a highlight to look forward to.

On 09/19/2015 07:15 AM, AC Benus said:

These are very 'delicate.' That's pretty amazing. Your first sentence had my stomach turning – it was like, 'Oh NO, are things really that bad between the boys again?!' But then by the end, we see it's all just a figment of the imagination.

 

Pretty brilliant. And very well written too. Thanks for doing these; they're quickly becoming a highlight to look forward to.

Thanks AC!

I find it fascinating how much I'm beginning to understand these guys in only 305 words of two scenes in this un-story

On 09/19/2015 07:55 AM, Reader1810 said:

Loved it. I so did not see that ending coming.

Thanks Reader!

Glad I could produce a happy surprise!

I think your touch with these chapters is great--yo pack a lot into a short piece of writing. And, I really like Miles and Ian--they are in for an 'interesting' relationship, which means they will never be bored.
I look forward to more of their story, and especially how they met!
More please!

On 09/19/2015 10:01 AM, ColumbusGuy said:

I think your touch with these chapters is great--yo pack a lot into a short piece of writing. And, I really like Miles and Ian--they are in for an 'interesting' relationship, which means they will never be bored.

I look forward to more of their story, and especially how they met!

More please!

Aw ...thanks CG!

I'll try to not disappoint

I've never done anything like this

Lovely, very cute, and wonderfully economical writing. AC used "delicate;" I might suggest "crystalline." Anyway, these are fun, and probably exquisite torture to produce. Or maybe just a lot of fun to write. Or both. Excellent reads, though.

I'm going to be cautious about trusting Ian. He set me up both times, but I love it. The ending priceless. I like how concise the pieces are, and still amazingly satisfying. Can't wait for more...
Well done SkinnyD

On 09/19/2015 09:53 PM, Parker Owens said:

Lovely, very cute, and wonderfully economical writing. AC used "delicate;" I might suggest "crystalline." Anyway, these are fun, and probably exquisite torture to produce. Or maybe just a lot of fun to write. Or both. Excellent reads, though.

Thanks for the nice words Parker!

I'm gonna choose "a lot of fun to write" if you don't mind.

Ian is a little needy, lol. I enjoyed it, I hope it was meant to make me laugh because I did. No kiss in 10 minutes and it's all over. Perfect.

On 09/20/2015 12:12 AM, Defiance19 said:

I'm going to be cautious about trusting Ian. He set me up both times, but I love it. The ending priceless. I like how concise the pieces are, and still amazingly satisfying. Can't wait for more...

Well done SkinnyD

Thanks Defiance! Aw ...poor Ian.

I recently read a piece in The New Yorker about the old Time magazine practice of returning an article to the author with 'Green #' if they wanted him to delete whatever number of words. I use that repeatedly when creating these. It's marvelously effective!

On 09/20/2015 02:45 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Ian is a little needy, lol. I enjoyed it, I hope it was meant to make me laugh because I did. No kiss in 10 minutes and it's all over. Perfect.

Thanks Tim!

Ian, needy? ...hehe

I'm working on one that'll turn the tables though. It'll probably be #6 or something. I hope you'll still be reading them.

Lol, I love your response to AC's review! This un-story! lol

As Tim said, Ian is very needy. This insecurity is not a good thing for a relationship. Ian needs to take calming breaths and not freak out so much. If he continues this, Miles will really get tired of it, and that's when trouble will really start.

On 09/26/2015 01:04 PM, Lisa said:

Lol, I love your response to AC's review! This un-story! lol

 

As Tim said, Ian is very needy. This insecurity is not a good thing for a relationship. Ian needs to take calming breaths and not freak out so much. If he continues this, Miles will really get tired of it, and that's when trouble will really start.

Thanks for reading and reviewing Lisa!

At least this are quick reads, huh?

I'm not sure how far I can go with this un-story, hehe, but maybe we can discover a bit about the boys by this fractured method.

OMG Hilarious, Skinny. I forgot about these... I remembered I owed you a like for the first one... so much insecurity in a thought...cheers... Gary

So adorable!

I gotta agree with Ian, ten minutes can feel like a very long time I really like his over-the-top exaggerations, whether it's the decaf crisis or being forever ignored. Ian is so endearing, I just want to hug him!

Thank you Skinny for writing this chapter

On 12/01/2015 10:51 AM, Drew Espinosa said:

So adorable!

 

I gotta agree with Ian, ten minutes can feel like a very long time I really like his over-the-top exaggerations, whether it's the decaf crisis or being forever ignored. Ian is so endearing, I just want to hug him!

 

Thank you Skinny for writing this chapter

Hehe Yep!

Ian is endearing, that's for sure. He'd better be or who knows what poor Miles would think. They seem perfect for each other at this stage of their relationship.

Thanks for taking the time to read and add a comment.

First I thought Ian might be a conceited in their relationship. But after seeing our PiBoy's comment, I changed my opinion. May be love might makes you vulnerable. Lovelier. 

~Emi.