Jump to content

  • Join Gay Authors

    Join us for free and follow your favorite authors and stories.

    MacGreg
  • MacGreg
  • Author
  • 07/30/2018
  • 23 Words
  • 976 Views
  • 21 Comments
Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
Note: While authors are asked to place warnings on their stories for some moderated content, everyone has different thresholds, and it is your responsibility as a reader to avoid stories or stop reading if something bothers you. 

Poetry Prompts - 1. Tanka #1

@AC Benus kindly suggested that I take a look at his Tanka poetry prompt.
A Tanka contains five lines arranged in the following syllables: 5-7-5-7-7. Unlike a Haiku, a Tanka is not meant to be abstract. Rather, it should illustrate the poet's observation of a season and the feelings it conjures up within him.
Here is a Tanka I wrote for the prompt. I enjoyed creating it and will probably try my hand at more.

Raindrops that sizzle

Dancing across scorched pavement

Bring little reprieve

To the desert of my heart

Where your presence still smolders

Copyright © 2018 MacGreg; All Rights Reserved.
  • Like 6
  • Love 9
Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
Note: While authors are asked to place warnings on their stories for some moderated content, everyone has different thresholds, and it is your responsibility as a reader to avoid stories or stop reading if something bothers you. 
You are not currently following this story. Be sure to follow to keep up to date with new chapters.

Recommended Comments

Chapter Comments

  • Popular Comment
Mikiesboy
  • Popular Comment

oh my Sir.. that is truly wonderful . my gosh i can see the rain drops .. . i hope you write more, too

  • Like 6
  • Love 1
Link to comment
  • Popular Comment
AC Benus
  • Popular Comment

Very strong work. Thank you for kicking the tires on my re-worked Tanka prompt. To think it produced this in you, with no prior Tanka knowledge, makes me feel I must be doing something right :)  

 

I'm glad you posted it

  • Like 4
  • Love 3
Link to comment
  • Popular Comment
mollyhousemouse
  • Popular Comment

very nice Sir

i can hear those first rain drops, and smell them too

thank you for sharing your effort on AC's prompt 

 

  • Like 7
Link to comment
Brayon

An excellent Tanka, Mac. It's like the raindrops are real tears being shed over a love that has ended/parted/gone away. Very profound.

  • Like 3
  • Love 1
Link to comment
MichaelS36

First @BHopper2 your comments are profound. I'm pleased to see you finding all sorts of words!

 

Mac, A, is right. It is heart wrenching this piece. Truly a master work.  Bravo.

  • Like 3
  • Love 1
Link to comment
Brayon
6 minutes ago, MichaelS36 said:

First @BHopper2 your comments are profound. I'm pleased to see you finding all sorts of words!

Thank you, Mike.

7 minutes ago, MichaelS36 said:

Mac, A, is right. It is heart wrenching this piece. Truly a master work.  Bravo.

I agree it is heart-wrenching.

  • Like 4
Link to comment
MacGreg
On 7/30/2018 at 5:43 PM, Mikiesboy said:

oh my Sir.. that is truly wonderful . my gosh i can see the rain drops .. . i hope you write more, too

Thanks, tim. I plan to write more, at some point.

  • Like 5
Link to comment
MacGreg
On 7/30/2018 at 5:50 PM, AC Benus said:

Very strong work. Thank you for kicking the tires on my re-worked Tanka prompt. To think it produced this in you, with no prior Tanka knowledge, makes me feel I must be doing something right :)  

 

I'm glad you posted it

Your prompt was/is brilliant, therefore it was easy to grasp the idea. Writing this Tanka, however, was not quite as easy.  It was a good challenge for me. I should have written a series of Tanka, as your instructions suggested, but this was all I had in me at the time.

 

I appreciate you asking me to give it a try.

  • Like 4
  • Love 1
Link to comment
MacGreg
On 7/30/2018 at 5:59 PM, Starrynight22 said:

I like this.  I can feel the burning ache it evokes. 

Thank you for reading, Starry. 

  • Like 5
Link to comment
MacGreg
On 7/30/2018 at 6:53 PM, mollyhousemouse said:

very nice Sir

i can hear those first rain drops, and smell them too

thank you for sharing your effort on AC's prompt 

 

Thank you, molly. I hope you will share yours!

  • Like 5
Link to comment
  • Popular Comment
Parker Owens
  • Popular Comment

Okay, this absolutely sizzles, like the words you wrote. It’s alive and vivid. I love it. 

  • Like 7
Link to comment
MacGreg
On 7/30/2018 at 7:32 PM, Defiance19 said:

Wow.. This is great.. well done, Mac. 

Thank you, Def. I appreciate you reading it!

  • Like 5
Link to comment
MacGreg
On 7/30/2018 at 8:20 PM, BHopper2 said:

An excellent Tanka, Mac. It's like the raindrops are real tears being shed over a love that has ended/parted/gone away. Very profound.

Ah, A. I'm glad you felt what I wrote so strongly. The intended emotion came through. Thank you for reading it.

  • Like 4
Link to comment
MacGreg
On 7/30/2018 at 9:20 PM, MichaelS36 said:

First @BHopper2 your comments are profound. I'm pleased to see you finding all sorts of words!

 

Mac, A, is right. It is heart wrenching this piece. Truly a master work.  Bravo.

Thank you, Mike. Your words are equally profound.

  • Like 2
Link to comment
MacGreg
On 8/2/2018 at 12:14 PM, Parker Owens said:

Okay, this absolutely sizzles, like the words you wrote. It’s alive and vivid. I love it. 

Alive and sizzling - perfect. I'm glad you felt what I wrote. Thank you for the kind words, Parker. This was a good challenge.

  • Like 2
  • Love 1
Link to comment
mollyhousemouse
On 8/2/2018 at 12:53 PM, MacGreg said:

Thank you, molly. I hope you will share yours!

yes Sir

i've done the challenge, my results are not on Your level, but You may see it soon

  • Like 3
Link to comment
MacGreg
Just now, mollyhousemouse said:

yes Sir

i've done the challenge, my results are not on Your level, but You may see it soon

What level? I'm a novice, it's my first Tanka! I look forward to reading yours.

  • Like 3
Link to comment
Parker Owens
13 minutes ago, MacGreg said:

Alive and sizzling - perfect. I'm glad you felt what I wrote. Thank you for the kind words, Parker. This was a good challenge.

 

You succeded at the challenge admirably. Thank you for sharing it. 

  • Like 4
Link to comment
View Guidelines

Create an account or sign in to comment

You need to be a member in order to leave a comment

Create an account

Sign up for a new account in our community. It's easy!

Register a new account

Sign in

Already have an account? Sign in here.

Sign In Now

  • Newsletter

    Sign Up and get an occasional Newsletter.  Fill out your profile with favorite genres and say yes to genre news to get the monthly update for your favorite genres.

    Sign Up
×
×
  • Create New...