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Bellini

   (7 reviews)
Genres: Mystery
Sub-genres: Cozy Mystery

Howard and Betsy have a problem.  They can't find a stash of money, and need help finding it.  Who can help them?

Copyright © 2022 Cole Matthews; All Rights Reserved.

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  • Action Packed 0
  • Addictive/Pacing 3
  • Characters 7
  • Chills 0
  • Cliffhanger 0
  • Compelling 7
  • Feel-Good 5
  • Humor 1
  • Smoldering 0
  • Tearjerker 2
  • Unique 4
  • World Building 2

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Gary L

   2 of 2 members found this review helpful 2 / 2 members

I love Bellini the artist, Bellini the composer of great operas, and Bellini the cocktail.  And now we have another Bellini, a great little story full of delightful descriptions and a wide range of emotions beautifully expressed by the author.

Having read this I’m off to see what else Cole has written.  If it is as good as this readers will be v happy.

thank you and well done!

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Kiom

  

Hot Damn Mister, you can really write (and this is from one chef to another)!  Your characters spring from the page (this observation is based not only on this story, but several others of yours that I've read).  So how do you do it chef, do you add baking soda, or is it all in the technique?

I'm posting this as a review as many of us here aspire to write, or think of ourselves as writers--poor creatures that we are, and we need to understand that "taking pen in hand" is not the same thing as being a writer, any more than putting some comestibles in a pot along with a few condiments makes anyone a chef. 

I chose this story to review, rather than others of yours, as it's the only one to which I heard an objection somewhere in the back of my mind. I loved the story, and the setup, and the characters. I also loved how you used the bartender as eye-candy, which in fact is often how a restaurant uses its bartenders, and that though the bartender has a very large role, his character recedes, if it surfaces at all, and makes way for the main players.  

The bit that doesn't seem to work is important, the more so, however, as it is tied to the title. After I turned out the lights instead of drifting off to sleep it nagged me that Danny, the son and possibly the most important character in the story, would not have left his daughter's fate to the backside of a photo. (As a dad I am sure of this). In a castle, perhaps, the treasure might have been sewn into the hem of an arras to keep it from the hands of a greedy uncle or a litigious ex, but nowadays there are iron-clad trusts and custodial accounts that will serve far better, though with less dramatic flair (boring!).  

Inasmuch as there are so many of us here who do not know the difference between edible substances tossed into a pot and being a chef, and given my love for the knack of speech and its corollary, the written word, considering the merits of my argument here offers an opportunity to examine what is too oft left in the dark, to wit, the structures that make a story successful.  

So thank you again for the good stories and best of luck on the book (though I may already be published by now). And thank you for putting up with my complaint and for allowing how it may help the rest of us to improve our skills.  

Best and Happy Holidays,

Kiom

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