jkeeling Posted October 15, 2008 Posted October 15, 2008 (edited) um its wed thought it was gonna be up on tues. Hiding now. Edited October 19, 2008 by C James just changed the title, now that the chapter is online. :)
Benji Posted October 15, 2008 Posted October 15, 2008 um its wed thought it was gonna be up on tues. Hiding now. ........I know the feeling!!
C James Posted October 15, 2008 Posted October 15, 2008 um its wed thought it was gonna be up on tues. Hiding now. Sorry, it's late, and its my fault. I made a big plot blunder and had to re-do chapters 10 and 11, and so I was greatly delayed in sending 10 and 11 in for editing. We're likely looking at Monday, sorry! But look at the bright side: Chapter 9 left us with a nice, calm stopping place, so it was a good place to pause, right? CJ
Benji Posted October 15, 2008 Posted October 15, 2008 (edited) Sorry, it's late, and its my fault. I made a big plot blunder and had to re-do chapters 10 and 11, and so I was greatly delayed in sending 10 and 11 in for editing. We're likely looking at Monday, sorry! But look at the bright side: Chapter 9 left us with a nice, calm stopping place, so it was a good place to pause, right? CJ .............Your right, this is calming, "Jim's sudden defeat left Brandon with a bit of a problem; two hostile bikers and no way out. He knew that he couldn't take on one, let alone two. The soft whirr of the heavy chain in the larger one's hand left no doubt as to their intent as they turned on Brandon.' Edited October 15, 2008 by Benji
C James Posted October 15, 2008 Posted October 15, 2008 .............Your right, this is calming, "Jim's sudden defeat left Brandon with a bit of a problem; two hostile bikers and no way out. He knew that he couldn't take on one, let alone two. The soft whirr of the heavy chain in the larger one's hand left no doubt as to their intent as they turned on Brandon.' Thanks for agreeing with me! I'm glad I'm not the only one who sees that as calming. Or, alternatively, we could all just blame His Shadowyness. And BTW, it does say in the text that Brandon has a bit of a problem. See? Not so bad.
jkeeling Posted October 16, 2008 Author Posted October 16, 2008 Thanks for agreeing with me! I'm glad I'm not the only one who sees that as calming. Or, alternatively, we could all just blame His Shadowyness. And BTW, it does say in the text that Brandon has a bit of a problem. See? Not so bad. I don't find anything calming about that segment of the story. GASP!!!!!! Plot blunder!?!?!?!?!? Perhaps the rallying cry wasn't loud enough to reach everyone to prepare for a goat roast to protect the guys. Both Brandon and the general's son. :nuke: :2hands: :king: :ranger: :nuke:
C James Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 I don't find anything calming about that segment of the story. No? Well, then by all means, blame Benji: He said it. GASP!!!!!! Plot blunder!?!?!?!?!? Perhaps the rallying cry wasn't loud enough to reach everyone to prepare for a goat roast to protect the guys. Both Brandon and the general's son. :nuke: :2hands: :king: :ranger: :nuke: Basically, I took the story in a certain direction, and when i got there, it looked rotten looking back. Graeme and Shadowgod both agreed. It wasn't any bloodshed type thing, just a change, but huge parts needed re-writing. I can't say what the blunder was, as that would give clues to what is coming next, but if anyone is curious, ask me after chapter 11 posts. Or, ask me now, and I'll comment on it, but only after posting 11. Oh, and don't worry: during the re-write I nixed the part that Shadowgod added, where every character was dangling over the edge of a crumbling cliff, holding on by their fingernails, slowly losing their grip...
Tiger Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 Yes, that ending was about as calming a little girl screaming her lungs out...
C James Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 Yes, that ending was about as calming a little girl screaming her lungs out... Okay, seems that Tiger agrees with Benji and I: the scene was calming.
Tiger Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 (edited) Okay, seems that Tiger agrees with Benji and I: the scene was calming. You think that a little girl screaming is calming? Psst... I was being sarcastic. Edited October 16, 2008 by Tiger
Benji Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 You think that a little girl screaming is calming? Psst... I was being sarcastic. .........Sheeeeeze! We don't even have the very late Chapter 10 out, and yet we have at least ten responses to his next chapter. The Evilness does not diminish with the platitudes from the goat or the minions responses.
jkeeling Posted October 16, 2008 Author Posted October 16, 2008 Wow I almost feel special. I started a topic and it actually went somewhere. LoL I still insist that there was nothing calming about that segment. :wacko: I'm gonna have to request copies of the chapters prior to the rewrite. oooooo better hide.... Don't wanna get a reputation of being a frequent poster.
Benji Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 Wow I almost feel special. I started a topic and it actually went somewhere. LoL I still insist that there was nothing calming about that segment. :wacko: I'm gonna have to request copies of the chapters prior to the rewrite. oooooo better hide.... Don't wanna get a reputation of being a frequent poster. .......At 116 posts, you have no worries, Tiger or CJ will respond enough to quell any your lingering doubts!!
Tiger Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 .......At 116 posts, you have no worries, Tiger or CJ will respond enough to quell any your lingering doubts!! So will Benji at over 3,000 posts. Speaking of Chapter 10, I am just dying to read it.
Benji Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 So will Benji at over 3,000 posts. Speaking of Chapter 10, I am just dying to read it. .......Well yeah, 15 posts so far on a non-existent chapter!!
Tiger Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 Who posted in: Chapter 10 Changing Lanes? Poster Posts Benji 5 C James 4 jkeeling 3 Tiger 4 (including this post) Yes, you have posted a lot in this thread, Benji. Tim (still patiently impatiently awaiting Chapter 10)
jkeeling Posted October 16, 2008 Author Posted October 16, 2008 Who posted in: Chapter 10 Changing Lanes?Poster Posts Benji 5 C James 4 jkeeling 3 Tiger 4 (including this post) Yes, you have posted a lot in this thread, Benji. Tim (still patiently impatiently awaiting Chapter 10) I'm with you on impatiently awaiting Chapter 10. Who has a roasting pit. I will get the spices.
Benji Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 Who posted in: Chapter 10 Changing Lanes?Poster Posts Benji 5 C James 4 jkeeling 3 Tiger 4 (including this post) Yes, you have posted a lot in this thread, Benji. Tim (still patiently impatiently awaiting Chapter 10) ........Sputters......ahj..... well I do have to make sure corrections are in place otherwise the goat will reprehend me on inaccuracies!! ....Damn it Tiger, you made me post another one here!!
Tiger Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 (edited) ........Sputters......ahj..... well I do have to make sure corrections are in place otherwise the goat will reprehend me on inaccuracies!! ....Damn it Tiger, you made me post another one here!! Don't worry. It's only 6 now. That puts me up to 5 Poster Posts Benji 6 Tiger 5 jkeeling 4 C James 4 Edited October 16, 2008 by Tiger
C James Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 Wow I almost feel special. I started a topic and it actually went somewhere. LoL I still insist that there was nothing calming about that segment. :wacko: I'm gonna have to request copies of the chapters prior to the rewrite. oooooo better hide.... Don't wanna get a reputation of being a frequent poster. But that segment was calming... the soothing soft whirr of the spinning chain, the relaxing, isolated barn, yes, all very calming... even Benji and Tiger said so too. I'm with you on impatiently awaiting Chapter 10. Who has a roasting pit. I will get the spices. ROasting? Spices? ACK! Now, now, no goat roasting! In order to calm everyone down, how about a sneak peek at the first part of Chapter 10, Dance with the Devil"? Dance with the Devil Chain whirring, ................................................................................ ............................................... ................................................................................ ...................................................................... ................................................................................ .................................. ................................................................................ ....................................... ................................................................................ ............................................ ................................................................................ ............................................. ................................................................................ ............................................. See, that's some of the chapter. :-)
Site Moderator TalonRider Posted October 16, 2008 Site Moderator Posted October 16, 2008 Word is, the chapter could be up as early as Monday. If it's not then, I'm flying out to go hunting for a goat.
Benji Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 But that segment was calming... the soothing soft whirr of the spinning chain, the relaxing, isolated barn, yes, all very calming... even Benji and Tiger said so too. ROasting? Spices? ACK! Now, now, no goat roasting! In order to calm everyone down, how about a sneak peek at the first part of Chapter 10, Dance with the Devil"? Dance with the Devil Chain whirring, ................................................................................ ............................................... ................................................................................ ...................................................................... ................................................................................ .................................. ................................................................................ ....................................... ................................................................................ ............................................ ................................................................................ ............................................. ................................................................................ ............................................. See, that's some of the chapter. :-) ..............That was soooooo revealing
C James Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 Word is, the chapter could be up as early as Monday. If it's not then, I'm flying out to go hunting for a goat. ACK! Jan, no need to go goat hunting! ..............That was soooooo revealing Don't blame me.. blame Graeme! Had i posted any more than that, it would have been a spoiler, and he'd have turned me into a pincushion!
EMoe57 Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 OK, I'll accept a micro-portion of blame on the delay. I just returned 10 & 11 to the goat.
C James Posted October 16, 2008 Posted October 16, 2008 OK, I'll accept a micro-portion of blame on the delay. I just returned 10 & 11 to the goat. Nope! Sorry, Emoe, but when it comes to delays, the blame is mine, all mine, and I won't share!!! Seriously everyone: The delays here are due to my extreme lateness.
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