She's Not What She Seems by Dolores Esteban

[Graeme]

She's Not What She Seems by Dolores Esteban

 

Natalie is not what she seems.

 

 

:nuke: :nuke: Spoilers Below!!! :nuke: :nuke:

[Graeme]

I think most readers will realise the truth well before the end of the story, but I found it an intriguing glimpse into the views and motivations of someone like Natalie. That sort of person isn't for me, at least I don't think so, but life would be boring is we all fitted into a narrow range of behaviour

 

Thanks, Dolores. A delightful short story

[Nephylim]

Yes I realised what was coming and no it didn't distract a whit from what came after. I loved this story. It really was delightful. It's almost unbelievable how so much story was fitted into such a small amount of text. I loved it.

[David McLeod]

"I am more beautiful than many women they have met. I don't have that haunted look in my eyes." What a powerful statement, how thought provoking. Ditto Nephylim's note about how much was packed into so brief a story. Yes, the punch-line was revealed before it was said, but that in no way detracted; rather, it caused me to read more carefully and think more deeply, so that at the last line of the story I felt more satisfaction than surprise.

The name, "Patrick," was given to me as if it were a gold star from a teacher, or a trophy from a coach.

[Dolores Esteban]

I was hesitant to submit this story. Now I'm glad I did. And I'm very happy you liked it. Thanks for your kind words and for reading and commenting

 

[Cia]

I think this story was less the 'punch line' as the journey to it. The conversation is candid, real and an interesting insight to "Natalie". I loved it!

[David McLeod]

I think this story was less the 'punch line' as the journey to it. The conversation is candid, real and an interesting insight to "Natalie". I loved it!

 

I wish I'd said that.

[Toast]

Thank you. I very much liked this. I liked its power. Its bold. Very, very good.

[Dolores Esteban]

Many thanks again for taking the time and reading my story. I appreciate your comments

[Menzoberranzen]

Beautiful.

 

No word in this was superfluous, nor were there any missing. Every single one of them was perfectly placed and the result is an understated, superbly elegant vignette.

 

Menzo

[Kev de Cauchery]

I love it! Even though it is obvious, it still holds my interest. Short but powerful!

 

FAb.

 

 

[Dolores Esteban]

Thank you.

 

 

[Zeoanne]

This was fantastic and makes you wonder, how many guys go through what 'Natalie' went through.

Thank you for sharing your story with us Dolores!