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Tell me about it. The systems rotten so deep you can't move them anymore without letting the whole society fall apart. But at least in Tarquin's case, there's still hope that he gets what he deserves, and you'd better keep your promise or I'll take your Delorean away.
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Rick hadn’t planned to take the day off; the day had simply decided for him to stay, while Liam decided to fight his way to his office. Their daughter had finally fallen asleep listening to her detective story, fever broken, lungs tight from coughing, sprawled across the bed with the theatrical finality of someone who had suffered greatly and expected to be remembered for it like a war hero. Rick checked on her one more time then closed the door with care, stood in the hallway for a moment,
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::sighs:: good point. I still have the 10 mm wrench I used on Ollie with the results to be observed by his future boyfriend. I can use that wrench again but its too small for Tarquin. Can I get a bit violent against your character? Im thinking of using the 50 mm. And I need to make a hole in Tarquin's tyres.... And the hula girls?! Oh no I thought they were inflatable dolls😅
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I hope nobody shuffles the cards too long.
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I have a few questions, I really didn't get what Tarquin has as backup plan. What is he really planning? What is his selling? I am still not convinced/ not satisfied with the story of Finn and the jail/ crime scene. It has some holes. And I want that T-shirt of Kyle.
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Chapter 3 - Brothers in Arms
Kileoli commented on ChromedOutCortex's story chapter in Chapter 3 - Brothers in Arms
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Accepted, Absolutely Unprepared
Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Accepted, Absolutely Unprepared
Seriously, Rick is human and there's no need he suffers as well, right? And he's not the one going to Japan 🤔 -
Cool, I didn't know about them. I want one anyway.😅
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Do you mean the earlier versions of A-UGVs? I can think of mission master but I guess they are more complex than the MULE. I have no military background but I might be able to help you on the mechanical functions if you are not looking for a certain version. Was there a Delorean version of MULE in the barn?
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It's still annoying how Oliver keeps some data from Orel. Analysis of the environment with half the data is more dangerous than moving carefully because there's no data available. So I might shove the 10 mm wrench somewhere in Oliver's anatomy so he stops destroying himself and helps Orel building a new equation on Grady-basis.
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Accepted, Absolutely Unprepared
Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Accepted, Absolutely Unprepared
He gets creative but he has to be careful not to overdo it since it can backfire😁 -
Liam found out he was going to Japan standing with bad conference coffee in hand during a poster session, the kind of coffee that tasted faintly of regret and burnt optimism. This was important, because bad conference coffee was where hope usually went to die, with similar people having accepted their fate and just waiting with you to drink from the magical I-am-awake-even-if-you-don’t-believe-it liquid. It was a communal surrender, a shared punishment for having chosen academia. But this t
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It took forever but they are finally together. So who gets the wedding invitations? Do we get to see Brad or Bradina?
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Just 5? I wonder if I should buy new tissues, new stress balls for anger management or come back in a week to see you drank from the magic fountain of Merrickville and added another 10 chapters to let your readers suffer in their Shakespearen misery.
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Oliver can simply die in his self-designed tomb. Has he ever thought about asking Finn and Orel what they want, offering them the whole story?! And Tarquin is given another chance to play with his doll house.
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Chapter 7: One More Reincarnation — Revisited
Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Chapter 7: One More Reincarnation — Revisited
Both? Lol, when someone wants to help with the whole logic. -
Chapter 7: One More Reincarnation — Revisited
Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Chapter 7: One More Reincarnation — Revisited
I have already two parallel plots sketched and everything, but I cannot decide which one to write, a sad realistic one or something light hearted. -
Chapter 7: One More Reincarnation — Revisited
Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Chapter 7: One More Reincarnation — Revisited
Though I'm not sure if I can really stay away from here. * Highly addicted to this mega perfect procrastination medicine* -
perhaps a glass of the house red? We can provide a bendy straw, if that would be… helpful." Orel looked up, his expression one of genuine, guileless consideration. "A bendy straw? For wine? That would significantly reduce the risk of spillage during gesticulation. Yes, please. I approve of this service upgrade." This was so good, thanks. Im gonna drink my wine with a bendy straw from now on.🙃 And I'll come back for another comment when I have time to finish this chapter.
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Chapter 7: One More Reincarnation — Revisited
Kileoli posted new chapter in Ctrl+S Is Never an Option
And back to 2012. Rick didn’t log out right away. He left his bard standing where the dungeon had spit him out, finally still, the last habitual micro-adjustments gone now that nothing required them. The ambient loop played on—distant armor, a low, meaningless hum—and for a few seconds Rick let it wash over him, the way you let water run over your hands after you’ve stopped scrubbing. Then he alt-tabbed. The desktop snapped into place too brightly, like a light switched on wi -
Theo has an upgrade but the kiss at the end is missing 😄 Im just thinking was that creature some kind of demon since I don't know witches with horns.
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Chapter 6: Quiet Substitution
Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Chapter 6: Quiet Substitution
They totally live in two different countries. Liam lives in Ukraine, Rick in Germany. That's why Liam said he didn't like learning German and had no intention of visiting Germany/Rick. 😅 -
Chapter 6: Quiet Substitution
Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Chapter 6: Quiet Substitution
What do you mean by ships passing in the night? Passing and not seeing?😅 -
By the time Rick noticed how often he was in transit, it had stopped feeling like movement and started feeling like posture. Every other weekend heading north to meet Anna. At least this time he had another destination. The bus ride home took five hours when traffic behaved, longer when it didn’t, and his body adjusted before his mind did—hips angled to avoid the loose screw that pressed into his thigh, one shoulder braced against the glass where the cold seeped through in a slow, patient w
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Please do it. It would be a waste of potential twist in the plot,...or a twist in the straw? Now I'm thinking of a spiral formed straw in a glass of red wine...
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