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Efiction Reviews as of 1-4-11 Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: taina1959 Wow Dion! This is the kind of story that grips you and never let you go! From the very beginning it took a hold of me. I will definitely be reading the rest of your stories. Thank you so very much for sharing with us!Author's Response: I'm happy that you enjoyed it. I know it wasn't everyone's cup of tea. Thank you for leaving a review! Date: 04/09/2009 08:59 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: GayUganda I love it.Author's Response: I'm very glad. Thanks for reading and leaving a review! Date: 12/09/2008 06:19 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: sparrow I enjoyed this story. Very moving and well written. I teared up a little at the end. Thanks for sharing!Author's Response: I'm happy to know it moved you as I'd intended. I appreciate your review - thank you! Date: 08/06/2008 02:44 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Conner365 A powerful story. I loved it. It is a story that I am glad to have read. Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reviewing! Date: 07/19/2008 10:47 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Steven Keiths Dion, With my first post I didn't realize you had the others already up, silly me. I really enjoyed your writing, Dion and hope you share more of your gift with us. I do not know how much ambiguity was done purposely with this writing, i.e., how they met, more of their personalities, etc. I do think you captured in a brief, the anguish of both of your protagonists. Again, I say, hope you write more. Warm regards,--StevenAuthor's Response: Two reviews for the price of one! Don't feel silly - I'm happy you kept reading after the first chapter! The abiguity was done on purpose... And surprise! You're one of the few who realized it! I wanted the focus to be more on Cameron's emotions than on his situation (hence the vague referral to his past). Thank you for leaving both reviews, Steven, and I have another story coming within the next few weeks. I hope you'll enjoy that one as well. -Dion Date: 07/09/2008 10:42 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Steven Keiths Dion, I am so looking forward to reading more. You definitely have my curiosity peaked. I am anxious to find out more about Cameron and what he decides to do. You've set your first chapter up very nicely. The only other thing I have to say is, now get to writing that second chapter:-)) Regards,--Steven Date: 07/09/2008 09:14 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: darkfoxprime Very well written. Believable and empathetic. Thank you :)Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! Date: 04/30/2008 04:30 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Dravenn Your story is well written, it has a nice conversational tone and I found this an easy and pleasant read. No major problems , but I did find it difficult to suspend my belief that the narrator would simply walk out upon finding his lover with another man-with no dialogue going on between the two beforehand. If someone had cleared all my clothes out from the closet, I’d want an argument about it first, before i left. But then again, we learn later on that Cameron is young, which you might like to introduce earlier, as this could help explain why he walked out of the house rather than staying to fight his ground. I assume that there is some kind of misunderstanding about John and this will be explained later on. I liked the internal dialogue in Cameron’s head at the hotel, his confusion as to what’s going on with John, and the way you introduce the backstory is well done and does not interrupt the flow of the story. I’m confused at the beginning to chapter two, as earlier I assumed Cameron was still a teenager but here he is with a secretary and a company car, so I now assume he’s older? There are sections of the story that seem drawn out in chapter two, and I’m uncertain of how much time has passed. I think a year, but it seems that the narrator has not moved on in his life at all, as he’s still waiting for the call that never comes. Also the stuff waiting at the airport phoning his secretary detracts from the urgency he feels to reach John. I also felt it dragged at little after John’s death, there seems to be a lot of story after his death where there’s not much going on. You might consider shortening this section to include only what is really relevant to the ending. Finally, one small suggestion, and this is a tip I picked up from a book on editing, is that you might like to change some of your participle endings ie, the words that end in ‘ing’, so that ‘who was staring’ becomes ‘who stared’, ‘fumbling with the door handle’ becomes ‘fumbled with (or for) the door handle’, I think the idea is that it helps strength the language, and therefore the story too.Author's Response: Thank you for your suggestions! I sometimes forget that what is pictured so clearly in my mind does not, in fact, come out in the writing.rnCameron and John got together when Cameron was a teenager, but at the beginning of the story they'd been together for several years. Upon rereading I realize I didn't convey that image. In chapter two, I did write about how the six-month anniversary of their separation was looming, but again it's not a very strong point and easily overlooked.rnI'll remember your advice and work hard on improving the next story. Thanks again! 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Title: The Poem Reviewer: Beautiful SeDUCTION LOL i knew it was something non erotic in a way but dammit if it didn't make me wonder hehe. Fool me four times shame on me. Good one Date: 12/26/2007 06:03 PM Title: The Poem Reviewer: Doveglion this is so beautiful...thank you for posting it here Date: 03/02/2007 06:36 PM Title: The Poem Reviewer: Sterling WOW. How cool is this!!! You're a magician with words, Dez. My favorite? "lovelustlonging" Your imagry is is not forced and works totally, in whatever context your reader choses.Very nicely done...--SterlingDate: 09/15/2006 02:56 PM Title: The Poem Reviewer: AFriendlyFace Dude!! That was amazing! Gosh if that's how you talk about your bicylce and I'd sure like to see how you talk about....hehe, Great job!! Date: 09/03/2006 05:34 AM Title: The Poem Reviewer: Whatsifsowhatsit2 Lol! This poem was just too funny =) afterwards, that is =)I'm gonna send it to Remy okay? =PAlmost a shame to put that 'plot' at the ending though... that made it funny, the rest was just kinda... you know pretty, beautiful =)Oh and I just don't understand that one line ... "Is ejaculation possible if we are one, with no beginning and no end to you and me?"How does that relate to the... you know... 'plot'? =P((still giggling)) Date: 08/24/2006 07:22 PM Title: The Poem Reviewer: Luc That is one awesome poem! "Is ejaculation possible if we are one, with no beginning and no end to you and me?" That was wonderful. Beautiful.Date: 08/02/2006 10:33 PM Title: The Poem Reviewer: Formosa Wow, powerful words and emotons. Certainly exerted yourself there... I guess you like riding bikes : P Date: 07/26/2006 08:23 AM Title: The Poem Reviewer: sparrow Absolutely stunning poem. Especially the last two lines. Thanks for sharing. Date: 07/26/2006 12:48 AM Title: The Poem Reviewer: Silven There are no words in any language to describe how your poem made me feel. Please keep on posting your poetryDate: 07/25/2006 11:37 PM Title: The Poem Reviewer: Boy In Doubt Such a sweet poem. :)Date: 07/25/2006 08:50 PM

Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Hylas oops, forgot the stars thing Date: 01/09/2008 02:39 PM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Hylas MORE! Date: 01/09/2008 02:38 PM Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: AFriendlyFace Great Chapter! And now we know why it's called "Spinning"! I'm not sure now whether it'll be Josh or Ben who's supposed to be with Jeff. I still think Ben is gay and maybe confused or scared or something. I'm thinking Josh is just the wise friend. But maybe he'll end up being gay and Ben will be a good friend. Anyway I'm looking forward to the next chapter!Date: 09/05/2006 10:14 PM Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: AFriendlyFace Ouch! WOW! So I really didn't see that coming. Mostly I didn't see Jeff working up the nerve to ask him out, but I really didn't see Ben saying no! I'm so glad there's another chapter for me to read! Date: 09/05/2006 09:42 PM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: AFriendlyFace Interesting first chapter! Jeff kind of gets on my nerves. I think unless he does a 180 before this conversation is over Ben should just leave him alone and clear out. LOL, but obviously he won't. So it'll be interesting to see what happens Date: 09/05/2006 09:10 PM Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: iThinkDifferent Wow. I had absolutely no idea you were such a good, no GREAT writer. This story is totally fantastic. I don't know what else to say, you left me pretty much speechless. Date: 08/23/2006 12:32 AM Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Boy In Doubt I liked this chapter and I think Josh's bike analogy was nice. I am disappointed that this turned out to be a Ben-less chapter but maybe we'll see him soon. Anyway, just wanted to say I like this story and that I'm still waiting for more. Date: 08/21/2006 07:22 AM Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Sterling OMG, Dezl, this is getting to be a really fine story! Chapter 1, for me, was a bit wobbly, but all that exposition sometimes bogs the reader down. I'm not sure we've heard the end of Ben, yet. There's definately something going on there, under the surface. And then, along comes Josh. Sometimes that happens in life--when you're down about as low as you can get, someone unexpectedly comes along and gives you a whole new slant on things. You've handled this whole thing expertly, Dezl. I'm really impressed. Can't wait for moreThanks for a great read.Date: 08/18/2006 07:49 AM Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Formosa Great, original story, and very well written in terms of style and how it's developed. The first section here in introducing Josh in more detailis a nice touch, since I guess he's not just going to be just any friend. And now we finally understand why the story is called "Spinning"--great metaphor for life, especially that of Jeff. Date: 08/15/2006 11:12 AM Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: buttershots Hi! Great chapter! I was curious in the begining where the title was coming from, but now I know. I'm going to be sitting here impatiently waiting for the next one!!! Date: 08/14/2006 09:46 PM Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: Luc I really like this. I like your characters. They feel real. Poor Jeff. What a slap in the face for him. All the signals seemed to be there, too. Just like real life there I really loved your description of the walk after the dinner. I'm really looking forward to reading more. Date: 08/06/2006 12:52 AM Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: Boy In Doubt I love Chapter 2! I like how it started and the ending is...wow! Can't wait to find out what happens to Jeff. Cool story. Date: 07/26/2006 02:32 PM Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: Why Not? I'm really loving this story so far excellent chapter and i can't wait to read more Date: 07/24/2006 02:12 PM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Boy In Doubt Wow, this is a really cool story. Love the way you write. Date: 07/24/2006 08:52 AM Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: Conner Nice job on this story. The story's title sure came through at the end of chapter 2. Jeff won't come out of his room for weeks. Looking forward to the next chapter. Date: 07/23/2006 10:40 PM Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: misanthropicfiend Hey Dez... I like your story so far. I like the bands dropped in here and there... Music is good. Thanks for writing! Date: 07/23/2006 09:46 PM

Title: Part I Reviewer: Bondwriter Got drawn in by the style and the pace. Really nice story, quite uplifting.Date: 12/04/2006 11:04 AM Title: Part III Reviewer: AFriendlyFace Great Story! I loved the ending; it was definitely a surprise! Date: 09/05/2006 08:36 PM Title: Part II Reviewer: AFriendlyFace ohh good, I'm so glad they didn't kiss. Great chapter though, I'm glad Brent's starting to feel better. I wonder what "the boy" 's name is? Anyway I'm looking forward to reading the last part. Date: 09/03/2006 06:25 AM Title: Part I Reviewer: AFriendlyFace wow, what a nice person is that boy! Great first part. Very depressing, but quite good. I'm looking forward to reading the next two parts! Date: 09/03/2006 05:54 AM Title: Part III Reviewer: Formosa Wow! I recommend everyone to read this, and be prepared to be amazed by how well this was written, developed and concluded. Bit from what I wrote to Dezlboi: "First thing that struck me was how 'witty' the writing style was. It really pulled me in, like the character is someone you've known for a long time is telling you his life and (life)story, with the added clever commentaries, muddle thoughts, ramblings and feelings. [...] The story itself is so simple, almost innocent, like the unique boy himself and his ability to touch people, but then deep, sweet rimming on romantic, and so very human, like the discussions on 'healing', the image of the angel, and the characters' simmering, but socially-awkward emotions. " Date: 07/24/2006 09:19 AM Admin Options: [

Efiction reviews as of 1-4-11 Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Gene i like your stories but not this one. i could rarely understand who was saying what. it also seemed very stiff and formal.Date: 07/02/2008 03:08 PM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Drewbie Going back home is scary, not knowing if things are the same, parents will treat us like back then, will I still have friends etc. Like Tony. Bud seems like he never had an easy child hood. nice to see two sides as well.Date: 07/01/2008 06:43 PM

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Yeah, help a writer out here If she doesn't write then I don't get to beta read her stories before she posts them! Then how will I taunt people in her forums by knowing what comes next? It would be a travesty, a travesty, I tell you if Nephy were to stop writing to post stories. I don't think she could physically stop writing but we need to make sure she knows we want to read what she produces! No stopping for you Nephy!

I do not want to close a valid topic someone else started because some members can not keep this from devolving into personal nitpicking. This topic is one with some sensitive situations where people are saying what they view their worst mistakes in their love life have been. Everyone needs to respect that they are sharing their personal stories and either share helpful and thoughtful conversation to the subject or stay out of the topic.

Thanks John, CJ! I can't even say where the idea for this came to me. I just sat down and started writing. I think the news was on with a lot of the political manuvering going on and that might have been what brought on the whole 'The President has gone insane,' bit but I just sat laughing the whole time. I'm glad you guys enjoyed the story!

How about we keep this civil and the insults out of it before I'm forced to step in and do the whole mod thing. If you guys want to squabble over semantics and make rude comments to each other use the pm system. Otherwise, please drop it and either stay on topic or don't post.

OMG, LMAO. You are great Marzipan!

A truly chilling little tale that was very spine tingling good. It was so very dark and yet ended on a high note. One way or the other the victim's physical torment is ending. I really liked this and you sooo need to expand on it. C'mon... you know you want to. Pretty please??

Early fall is awful for the preggo woman, being so big in summer but for holidays and such it's perfect. You'll know what baby/babies you'll have for all those nifty gifts they will be spoiled with by family. Plus you will get to live it up for your final non-diaper bag, formula can, spit rag and binky toting days. Trips to the beach, weekend mini-vacations, the ability to sleep in on Sunday morning, read the paper and have brunch, go for a walk before lazing around doing much of nothing will be things of the past. On the other hand your sleep and food deprived minds and bodies will fall under the spell of the yummy smelling, satin skinned, beautiful baby/babies and you will find every loss of freedom (and money) to be worth it. When you get to hold the baby for the first time and watch them blink and yawn sleepily and then gently pass out in your arms, the first smile and coo as they make eye contact, the first time they grab on to your neck and hold on with all the amazing strength in their chubby little hands will rock your world and blow your mind. It may just be a survival mechanism on their part to keep you from smothering them at the 4th wake up call in 5 hours in the wee hours of the morning but it sure as hell works. Prepare for a whole new love to enter your soul, it's coming for you soon.

Aha! I thought it might have been his lover who caught him, if the smell was a trigger. So often a smell and the feel of the arms around us is the strongest memory we carry of loved ones. Living or dying... I think that there would still be more to suffer. As much as your character endured his emotional pain was left unfulfilled by the outcome. And we all know that's the worst kind of all. I say he's still alive and someoneor several someones are going to pay dearly.

Hmm... I was a stupid teen and was into the party scene. Lots of mistakes there but the worst was a guy I was with who thought it was okay to beat on me. The worst thing was that I could have defended myself from him, I was capable physically but not mentally to defend myself from a guy who wanted to hit me. I snapped one day and just started laughing at him after he hit me and that lead to a major beating that left scars. That incident led me to finally get up the nerve to tell him to stay the hell away from me and I vowed to never let it happen again. I was young so it didn't manage to mess me up too much mentally and I have been with a great man for 13 years. I was one of the lucky ones who managed to escape the cycle that so many people who were abused early in life get stuck in. Not everyone is so fortunate.

Of course you're curious! Can't have you losing interest at this point. The next chapter is well on it's way to being done so you shouldn't have to wait too long. I think recovery without problems from the experiences they went through would be too unrealistic. Well, and too nice from me as a writer. I could never make things easy! I can't say more or I'll spoil things but I think you guys will like what comes next. Thanks so much for leaving another review!

A lot of the people who chat are 'regulars' so it can be intimdating for new people to come into the mix. Some persist and are quickly assimilated into the mob, some stay quietly watching for a while before testing the waters, and some come in and go, Holy hell, so not for me!!. It's okay to not 'get it' in chat in the beginning, it's like being plunked into a crowd of people you don't know in real life and being expected to be able to converse with them as they all talk about things you don't really relate to at times. It's not exactly comfortable to be in that place. However, I am always willing to private chat with someone in there to say hi and start letting them test the waters so if anyone is wanting to check it out and I'm in there feel free to click on my name in the online chat users box and start a private conversation. I promise I'll only ask 100 questions to start off with!

Let's see, Escaping the Pain is based off a memory I had from when I was a kid. Sorry, not going with which one but it's in there. Bonds Unbroken started as an idea for an idea for the winter anthol, Haunted. I wanted to play with dreams and the concept that sometimes they might be more than what we see them for but it became so much more than that when I started. I wanted to add in something to twist the story so the wings for the father to wrap around his son to comfort him came into being. The story got longer and longer as I thought up the whole society from there so I decided against it for the anthology. The NaNo story I am currently working on is due to the fact I love Celtic fiction, which I read a lot of, mythology, and ideology. It's fun to research various religions through time and see what sort of things each regional society came up with based upon their environment and social structure. I wanted to play with that a little bit. Plus, well, the idea of a hot guy in a kilt with a growly accent? Yums! In the past I have been inspired by a picture I took (Eren's Light, anthology story), Changing Focus, another anthology, was partly an article I saw in a magazine about passionettes in life versus passions as well as my own experiences as a photographer (yes, I've fallen out of trees). One of my stories, Balance, came from anger and an arguement with my husband. My longest story, The Price of Honor? I wish I could tell you. I sat down with a blank document and it just came to me. I have another fantasy story that is still in notes form but fully 'thought up' that is the same way. I just sat down with a blank document and voila, it flows out. It only seems to be with the fantasy stories though, perhaps because I have read them as far back as I can remember they are the ones that truly make it a joy to write.

Be nice Chase. Nice pics Patrick. Keep snapping those moments!

If I'm being honest about mine it's the color black and yellow. Predominately black. Shocking, I know! However, I'd like to say that whoever wrote up that color chart was obviously biased toward any kind of 'kinky' sex. Like anything between 2 consenting people should be called perverted or misfit just because it isn't your thing. Awful.

E-fiction Reviews as of 12/29/2010. Title: Postscript from "Brian" Reviewer: fred-singapore Hi,actually i don't really know what to say.. it was just that, my heart goes to Sam.. For all the sufferings he had gone through and at last when Brian hold on tight to him.. Brian too had a bit of trouble.. anyway, I wish i can find a friend like Brian... There are alot of questions in my mind..anyway, i just wanted to wish Brian and chris all the Best.. Do take care of each other.. And i am very sad that Sam had to go at such a young age when things got much better for him with Brian.. I wish i know Brian personally tobe there for him it his difficult times.. anyway, guys all the best... Date: 12/23/2010 03:34 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Postscript from "Brian" Reviewer: DragonFire I can’t even begin to express how grateful I am that you shared part of your life with us. Both tragic & moving, this is something I will always remember for the rest of my life. How painful it was for you to remember and re-live those times I cannot imagine, nor will I try. In the end the love was beautiful and that’s what’s important. God Bless. Date: 12/09/2010 04:57 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Postscript from "Brian" Reviewer: bhavya its touching story i ever read.and thank u john for ur perspactive its realy nice.sam was a good man . he will live forever in heart.sure he's in peace. Date: 12/09/2010 12:59 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Postscript from "Brian" Reviewer: Nanmander That was honest-to-God the most beautiful thing I have ever seen. God bless you both. Date: 12/08/2010 03:55 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Postscript from "Brian" Reviewer: hh5 Wonderful posscript ... it opens the eyes to see things from a bit clearer perspective Thank you all for writing the novel. Date: 12/08/2010 01:34 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Postscript from "Brian" Reviewer: Nephylim It was a beautiful story fabulously told. Adam never looked for thanks or sensationalism and answered every question with sensitivity and humility never attributing anything to anyone but Sam. You all did a great job and if there are people who think otherwise... well, it's their right to think what they like, reaading is a very subective passtime and people can get cynical and judgemental. You know the truth and that's all that really counts Hugs and blessings to you all Date: 12/08/2010 10:09 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 34 Reviewer: rustyy That was beautiful. Through everything. All the emotion. Beautiful Date: 11/20/2010 04:56 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 31 Reviewer: rustyy Incredible. This his been an intense journey just reading everything. Date: 11/20/2010 03:11 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 16 Reviewer: rustyy Emotional rollercoaster right now. This whole thing was a little heavy from the start of the book, but in life after high school it seemed to affect me more. Date: 11/18/2010 11:58 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 15 Reviewer: rustyy Wow, that was intense. seriously Date: 11/18/2010 11:02 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 9 Reviewer: rustyy Really powerful. I like how it makes you feel. Not the feeling it gives you exactly, but the extent to which you feel. Date: 11/18/2010 04:31 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Vince Very touched by Sam's and Brian's story. Even more so when I found out it's a true story. For a person with so much tenacity and courage, I respect you Sam. It reminded me to look at my own self. Everyone comes with baggages, but don't give up hope. Date: 10/14/2010 01:59 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: ketiba I also like to add that this story will be graved in my heart and in my life. I will not forget this story as long as I live. Date: 10/13/2010 05:18 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 34 Reviewer: ketiba I think you've got already tons and tons of comments and emails about this story, but I really had to tell you this. I don't know how to begin, so I would start like this. I would like to introduce myself; my name is actually not ketiba. I'm 20 years old and my origin is Moroccan while I've been born and brought up in Holland. First of all, as I read from other people: thank you so much for finishing this marvellous story. It was really very courageous from you. Thank you so much form the bottom of my heart. I wish I could tell this to Dan Kincaid as well, but unfortunately he left us earlier.. Reading that news at a comment of yours at the last chapter, I cried my eyes out untill I couldn't cry no more. Secondly this touched my heart from the very first chapter. I cried, laughed and fell in love with it. I'm even still crying right now typing this. Your writing and Dan's writing is just breathtaking. I know that I'm late with reading this story, but I think this story will be timeless. Adam, could you give my greetings and love to "Brian" and "Chris" for me?. I'm really serious about this. This just made my eyes and heart way more open than it already was. If you and other think this all is only rambling and babbles, than you're wrong. I'm all saying this out the bottom from my heart. And it's not even the half of it what I'm trying to say. Actually, my feelings are undescribable. and again: THANK YOU SO MUCH FROM THE BOTTOM OF MY HEART! Date: 10/13/2010 05:09 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 34 Reviewer: DevFlower Wow.. love just transcends all barriers.Brian amazes me. So much of love, overflowing enough to cover many deep valleys.I barely trust anyone..and wish I had someone like that to surrender my trust totally.Dan.Such strength in all the downfalls..Even when the journey was dark, deep and depressing to go through from his point of view, yet simply can't escape the underlying strength there. When you portrayed everyone else as beautiful, but being you simply humbles me.Adam.Such amazing effort in recreating a life journey. So grateful for all your hard work and simply for keeping it going till the end. Date: 08/18/2010 01:36 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: russian Will do, Adam. By the way, dear readers, I'm perusing Adam's flagship story now, Crosscurrents, and I can't recommend it highly enough. If you are bisexual, or gay attracted to girls too, (I'm the latter), it's a must read. It's GA hosted as well. Go read it, you will be glad for it. Date: 08/10/2010 01:39 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: russian Adam, thanx so much for finishing this story. A buddy of mine from London (a fellow Russian, by the way) recommended it to me the other day, and I've read it all in one gulp, overnight, such is its pull. You have a fan in Russia now in me!I have several questions. if you don't want to answer in open forum, you can email me (look up my registration info). First off, please tell me Chris is ok, that he was not just placed in foster care, that he is still with Brian, or Mary, or somebody who loves him and will cherish him for the rest of their life. 'Cause children are truly the measure of our lives, as long as Chris is alive and well, Den's life will not have been in vain. My heart goes out to this boy, and I wish him all the happiness this world can possibly bring. For Dan's sake, as much as his own. Secondly, I know this story is a memoir, but please tell some creative license was taken there. It just makes me feel awful that somebody like Dan, so loving, so pure, would have to suffer so much in his short life. It kind of makes one question the existence of god, to see this happen to a wonderful soul like Dan.Third, you are Drew, arntchya?And lastly, even though Dan has been dead for almost two years now, or so I gather, his memory will live for as long people read his life story, and learn from it. You know, in Russian we have this saying, good ones always die young; and Dan is as good as they come. And you are a wonderful friend, Adam, to finish it for him, so that Dan's legacy can live on forever. This is as much as any of us could only hope for. A life well lived, albeit so painfully short. But no matter, this story is not a tragedy. It's an affirmation. Of live. Of love. For not matter what curve balls life threw at him, Dan persevered and came out with his humanity and compassion intact. Major kudos to him. And at the end of it all, Dan died in the arms of the love of his live, the man of his dream, his one and only. So even though Dan and Brian didn't have long to enjoy it, it is, and I'm paraphrasing here, better to have loved and died, than never to have loved at all. I'm 36, so maybe time is running out for me romantically, but I can only wish I could love somebody like that and be loved back by them in return. A love like this, transcending preconceptions and labels, pure, and all consuming, is one of a kind, and Dan is so lucky to have had it in his live. It's a beautiful, poignant, uplifting in its own way story, and I will keep Dan, Brian, and Chris with me forever now that I've had the privilege to get to know Dan's life story. Thanx Adam for this, you have no idea how blessed I feel to have this privilege. And now there is a guy in Siberia Russia who will carry a part of Dan's essence in his heart. I promise you that.Author's Response: I'm a Hosted Author here, so rather than my going on a search for your registration info, why don't you go to my site and leave me a pvt message? Here's the URL to my pages: https://www.gayauthors.org/adamphillips/.'>https://www.gayauthors.org/adamphillips/. I'll answer the questions that I can. --Adam Phillips Date: 08/09/2010 05:05 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: russian Oh, forgot to add. Maybe the reason this story has affected as much as it did is for the simple reason that there are obvious straight best friend parallels here. I've also had a very handsome athletic - he was a pole vaulter on our track and field team - best friend all though high school and med school and beyond (in Russia we go to med school straight from high school without going to college first). He's 37, will turn 38 come November, as is as beautiful to me now as the first day I laid my eyes on him when he was 15 (and I 14). He's married, happily from what I can tell, and raising two beautiful sons who look so much like him as a boy, it's like taking a trip down memory lane every damn time I see the two of them. His oldest has just turned 15, the same age his dad was when we first met all those years ago on the first day of our 10h grade (we have two years of high school to the four stateside). Sometimes it seems just like yesterday, and sometimes a lifetime ago. I've never stopped loving him, yearning for him, desiring him. But this being Russia, it has just always seemed safer to bury it as deep as possible. Having read It Started With Brian, however, maybe there is still hope for me, after all. Just one kiss, one embrace from him, and my life will have been well lived. If only... Date: 08/09/2010 04:57 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: nimmz Must be the millionth time I've read this story from the first chapter to the last and it never ceases to amaze me the strength of the human soul and words cant express how much hope this story has given me that despite how you look at yourself or think of yourself that there is always someone there who will love you because of who you are. All i can say is that I'm happy that even after everything that happened that they were able to find their way home to each other. Thank you for writing this. Date: 08/07/2010 03:07 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 34 Reviewer: totodile2mew First off, I know I'm probably getting to this story really late, but I only just recently found this site and all of its glory, but I just wanted to thank you for finishing this story for Dan. When you took over, I couldn't tell the difference in the writing styles whatsoever; it was truly amazing to me. Second, I wish I had caught this story before Dan has passed. Even though I couldn't truly empathize with him (except maybe for family issues), it would have been nice to tell him how much his story had touched me. I discovered this story when I needed to cry due to pent up family issues and a recent break up; just like Dan, I'm the type of person that bottles up my emotions and tries to hide them from everyone. Crying is a stress relief for me and is quite therapuetic and this story helped push me over that final edge and to start crying. It really helped. I'm so thankful to him for finding the courage to write this out and to you for finishing it. I'm sure this story will continue to provide an outlet for others for many years to come. I also wished I had had a chance to tell him how much I admire him for continuing on no matter what life threw at him. He will forever remain one of my heros and reminders that no matter what, I need to keep moving forward. Thirdly, I'm so happy that "Brian" and all of Dan's friends (especially his online ones) were there for him. I'm feel that if he had no one, he might have removed himself from this Earth before the cancer did. I hope that everyone knows just how much he loved them (I'm sure they do) and how much he needed them. I truly believe his energy and love lives on in those of you who knew him personally and in those of us who have only read his story and known him through that. Lastly, I have to say my favorite chapter and by far the most heartfelt for me is that last one. As I listened to the song and read along with the lyrics, hot, silent tears tracked down my face once more as I remembered his story. That song truly fits them wonderfully. Okay, I'm finally done with this very sappy review/comment. Again, just thank you so much for finsihing this. I plan to check out your work very soon Adam Phillips. I'm looking forward to reading Crosscurrents. Date: 07/10/2010 02:33 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 34 Reviewer: ddz008 It's difficult to express how much this story made feel, how deeply it moved me and how I'm sure I'll will always remember it. I started reading yesterday and I didn't go to sleep until 5 am.... now I have read the final chapter and I don't have any words that can do it justice. Reading about the actual life of someone was so powerful, reading about his problems, fears and dreams... and knowing that at the end he could find love, he could find peace and happiness. I would have wished that my thanks could have been read by him but thanks to you, Adam Phillips for finishing his story even if it was surely something difficult to do. I'm sure that Dan wanted this story to be read by others and you did a great job. I know that many other people are going to be touched by this and are going to leave with a lot of lessons... the most important, like you said... cherishing the good things in our lives and been happy for all the blessings that we got. It was terrible that Dan couldn't get more years to live and I can't imagine how this has affected all those that love him, but I'm glad that he could experience a love as powerful as the one he had with Brian, a love that goes beyond gender and labels and also that he had so many friends that loved him. I sent you, 'Brian'. 'Chris' and all of Dan's loved ones my best wishes. Thanks for this gift. Date: 07/05/2010 05:52 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 34 Reviewer: StangenBaer Well, I have to admit that I started crying when I found out Dan Kincaid is dead. I feel it is incredibly unfair for someone like him to go through so much heartship and die so young. My heart goes out to him, his "Brian", his "Chris"and everyone he held close. Adam Phillips, I think you have a lot of courage for finishing this, and for this, I take my imaginary hat off for you! Love, Stangy Date: 07/03/2010 05:10 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Jindal Oh I see, thanks to the author for clearing it up, though labels or not, I don't see how anyone could be "straight" and be in a healthy, loving, 'sexual' relationship with a person of the same sex. Seems more like denial to me, except if Sam is the ONLY guy Brian is attracted to? I'm really not trying to be close-minded, but it's a concept I just can't grasp. Of course love can transcend labels, gay people have straight friends and vice-versa, however can sex(which seems to be a part of their relationship by the last chapters) transcend the labels of sexuality? Don't see it myself.Author's Response: You are basing your assumptions on you own experience. That's fine. That's what we all do. But of course there are all kinds of experience out there. You need to keep in mind that what you call "labels of sexuality" are just that: Labels. They are not the reality itself. It appears to me that you have not experienced being able to love someone sexually who goes against your primary sexual attraction. My own experience has been very different. My own experience has caused me to realize that, at least for some people, sexuality and sexual loving are a function of the specific relationship under consideration. And in any case, "sexual orientation" runs a much wider and more variable range than the concepts "gay," "bi," and "straight" allow us to conceive. I'm good efriends with the real Brian. Trust me, he's straight. And as I've said, my own experience in love and sex has taught me that the shorthand labels sometimes confuse things rather than clarifying them, because they can blind you to what's right in front of your face. Date: 07/02/2010 09:39 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: xvader123123 i also have a best friend that i have been in love with for years and years. a day before i finished the story, events unfolded to where me and him are no longer seeing each other... i decided though that it is a good thing since he's straight, and i'm gay, and we could never be together anyways... buy who knows? A guy can dream can't he? Date: 06/24/2010 06:42 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 34 Reviewer: xvader123123 what a powerfull and touching story. Date: 06/24/2010 06:34 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 34 Reviewer: Jindal It was lovely to see the story end happily, but am I the only one who was bothered and slightly confused by Brian never truly admitting what he is to himself or at least Sam? That part confused me, so is he bi or gay or confused?Author's Response: Brian was perfectly clear to Sam and to himself about what he is. What part of that do you not get? He told Sam he is straight. One of the main points of the story is that love can transcend questions of labelling. That's certainly been my experience. And it was certainly Brian's. --Adam Phillips Date: 06/21/2010 12:21 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: LiveYourLife ive loved this story, its soo exciting to read, along with emotions, i loved it soo much, hope theres a movie to this!! Date: 06/05/2010 06:11 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 15 Reviewer: Tom in LV Okay, a little bit of strife in life is good. overcomming obstacles and fears is good. Making mistakes and LEARNING from them is good. But this story just involves one bad decision after another. Worse and worse, more and more miserable. A study in insanity. Sorry.... I can go no further. I'm stopping now. TomAuthor's Response: Your compassion is touching. Read or don't read, but don't presume to pass on judgment on somebody else's pain unless you've walked in their shoes. Sam did learn, against formidable odds. And he never lost his hope or his compassion for others. And the conclusion of his story, and his life, was a happy one, filled with love I'd call that a life well-lived life. I'm sorry if his difficulties got in the way of your entertainment. --Adam Phillips Date: 04/28/2010 10:14 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Sliver this is the first story i read in this website and it is so impressive to me. It is a wonderful story. Struggle for flashbacks, raped in child, love, desperating . .. and at the end Brian and Sam has a happy ending . . .. So good . . . . I love this story somuch and i'will read it again . . . . .Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the story. Sam was a first-rate guy, and Brian is too. I still touch base with Brian semi-regularly; I miss Sam like crazy. I was honored beyond words to be able to finish his story for him. By the way, if you thought I did okay, you might want to check out some of my own writing. I'm a hosted author at Gay Authors now, and my flagship story, Crosscurrents, is being brought to GA at the rate of a new chapter per week. Readers of It Started With Brian will have some familiarity with Crosscurrents, whether or not they know it. That story plays a role in Sam's own story. Anyway, here's my home page at GA: https://www.gayauthors.org/adamphillips/ Thanks again for reading. --Adam Phillips Date: 04/09/2010 11:58 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Tim Price I just don’t know what to make of Dan/Sam’s story. I assume the events happened as he described them. I know the dialogues were probably as best as he remembered them, but the events themselves were accurate. I also assume he wrote his story mostly in hindsight because any discerning reader would have seen from at least that first night Sam spent at Brian’s house with him and Mary that Brian wanted to be tight with Sam, no matter what. And it was reconfirmed at camp. I just can’t get why Sam couldn’t let himself, and Brian for that matter, be happy. I don’t get why he constantly made decisions for Brian about Brian liking him, like, “oh he just thinks he likes me, but he’s straight”. I don’t get it. It frustrates me to no end. ‘Straight’ is just a word with no meaning, especially if a guy tells me he loves me and he doesn’t care that he is ‘straight’. And then I really didn’t get the Duane thing except as another way to run away from Brian. I mean he was concerned about Brian, not wrecking his life to be with him, but had no concern about Duane wrecking his life with his wife and family? It seemed un-Sam-like other than as a way to not deal with his feelings for Brian. I don’t understand the demons of abuse, or having unloving, unsupportive parents, mine are more after the fashion of Brian’s, they have always loved me no matter what. I hope it doesn’t sound like I am being hard on Sam, I am not. As odd as it may sound, this story has made me a better person. My frustration comes from Sam not letting himself be happy. I am sure everyone wondered, Sam included, what would have happened in his life if he and Brian had gotten together and stayed together from that summer after high school on. Would something have ruined the relationship? I am so happy Sam found a measure of happiness with Brian before he passed, but it hurts and I cried and teared up for hours after finishing the story. I want to scream at God and know why he couldn’t have let Sam alone to be happy after all the pain in his younger years, but I know that isn’t the answer. I just hope Brian cherished the time he had with Sam and I hope Chris is okay after the loss of his father. I know that is never easy, I have been through it with young friends before. So thanks Sammy, God love you. Date: 04/05/2010 04:10 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: JasonMadeFighter Thank you, to Dan, his "Brian" and Adam. This is one of the very few stories I have ever read that I could really relate and resonate with. It's also one of the most sadly beautiful stories I've ever read in my life, especially because of the author's death. I am truly sorry I never got to know him. To be honest, there were points in the story where I've got so frustrated with the plot and the seemingly-never ending dead ends that Sam take that I skimmed through those parts, searching for something positive but it was all worth it just to read the last scene. Sam's strength inspires me, Brain's unconditional love gives me hope, and this story has left me feeling like I personally experienced a lifetime of sadness, happiness, learning and wisdom and it's ultimate conclusion. I always hate goodbyes to such...awe-inspiring stories but I realize I have my own life to continue, a life that has been reshaped, even if in the smallets way, and given strength by this reading. But for me, this story never ends, Sam, Brian and Chris continue to be a family together, living their lives with struggles and triumphs but their love always everpresent and continuous in my head. Thanks again. Date: 03/14/2010 05:48 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 34 Reviewer: PrincessElle I was in happy tears at the ending! Such a sweeeeeet ending for such a sad story. This is like better than chocolate! :') Thank you for finishing this story. <3 Date: 01/18/2010 05:57 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 34 Reviewer: rebelghost85 Quite honestly one of the greatest stories out there. Thank you for completing it. Date: 01/17/2010 08:01 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 33 Reviewer: Ricky I hope he got the help he needed. But still, so young. Date: 01/15/2010 03:44 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 32 Reviewer: Ricky Almost? Date: 01/15/2010 03:25 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 31 Reviewer: Ricky It's about time. There is hope. Date: 01/15/2010 02:19 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 30 Reviewer: Ricky I hope this young man had loving last days. Date: 01/15/2010 01:50 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 29 Reviewer: Ricky You are a much stronger man than I am. Being able to complete this creation for the young man who's life was so messed up. I weep for his misery. Date: 01/15/2010 07:23 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 28 Reviewer: Ricky Was the drinking thing an escape? We all know there is no cure. Once addicted, never beaten. When can he say he is "over it"? Never. Date: 01/15/2010 06:21 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 27 Reviewer: Ricky I guess the underlying fear I have is that he died so young that I know natural causes is out. The rest of the story scares me for that reason alone. Date: 01/15/2010 04:51 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 26 Reviewer: Ricky Damn, the outpouring. Date: 01/15/2010 04:27 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 25 Reviewer: Ricky More grief. How to let Jonah go, reconcile it to Christopher and to embrace that which he tried so deserately his entire life to find a substitute for. Date: 01/15/2010 03:40 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 24 Reviewer: Ricky Alas, a bit of sunshine. My curiosity now is down to, who ends up being the 'Sam's Man' in the dedication. The Jury is still out. Date: 01/15/2010 03:21 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 23 Reviewer: Ricky Is there hope? And what of dear Jonah. Will he understand? Oh this is really starting to suck. It is a great story. One I can not help but finish. But in a way I wish I were strong enough to walk away from it, leaving what will be, what is, behind for what I wish, had been. Date: 01/15/2010 02:42 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 22 Reviewer: Ricky All I can think of is how difficult it is to type through tears. You have a courage I don't know that I have. The story continues to be great. Sad but great. Date: 01/15/2010 02:20 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 21 Reviewer: Ricky So much pain in such a short life. Date: 01/15/2010 01:22 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 20 Reviewer: Ricky It was indeed a great day. Will he ever find out how much Brian loved him and wanted him? Date: 01/15/2010 01:08 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 19 Reviewer: Ricky I guess that explains my tears. I'm sorry that he did not get to read it either. I'm hoping for some remaining happiness in this last chapter. Date: 01/15/2010 12:49 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 18 Reviewer: Ricky More sun. We should be hearing more about Christopher next I think. He should be approaching that time of blossoms and jasmine. Date: 01/15/2010 12:25 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 17 Reviewer: Ricky It takes both the sun and the rain to make a rainbow. He is coming out of the rain. Date: 01/14/2010 11:57 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: 94Crispy He gave me a lopsided grin as I walked over. I found myself staring dumbly into piercing blue eyes.“You get lost too? It took me forever to find this damn room.” I nodded at him and managed to tear my eyes away long enough to slide into the seat. “My name's Brian.” “Uh, I'm Sam.” “Nice to meet you, Sam I am. So, do you like green eggs and ham?" they have come a long way. very bittersweet and amazing story. thanks Date: 01/14/2010 11:31 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 16 Reviewer: Ricky When good lives go bad. An excellent story. Heart wrenching but excellent. Date: 01/14/2010 11:06 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 15 Reviewer: Ricky It went from happy to disturbing. Why do I get the feeling that because of now needing help and a ghost writer that this story was/is theraputic. I hope this isn't a hell you lived through. Date: 01/14/2010 11:49 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 14 Reviewer: Ricky Bad is never good until worse comes along. Chinese Proverb Date: 01/14/2010 11:12 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 34 Reviewer: Nephylim Oh my GOD. That was the best ending there could possibly be for the most wonderful story. Thank you sooooo much. Date: 01/14/2010 10:46 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 13 Reviewer: Ricky Too Funny Date: 01/14/2010 10:42 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 12 Reviewer: Ricky Heart wrenching. Date: 01/14/2010 10:13 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 34 Reviewer: hh5 Never thought they get back to each other. Life is sure strange. But its great to finally see that the two are meant for each other. Date: 01/14/2010 09:53 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 11 Reviewer: Ricky Wow, that one racheted up the emotions one more notch. Well done. Date: 01/14/2010 09:32 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 10 Reviewer: Ricky oo, Didn't see that one coming. Date: 01/14/2010 09:04 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 9 Reviewer: Ricky A good story exercises all the emotions. It will make you laugh, make you cry and make you serious and make you silly. You're doing the job just right. r Date: 01/14/2010 08:49 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 8 Reviewer: Ricky Well I called it half right. Let's see if I'm truly psychic. A great story. Thanks. Date: 01/14/2010 08:36 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 7 Reviewer: Ricky Oh man, this one is going to hurt. I can tell. Let's see two years difference, she will be off to college and Sammy boy will get laid. By her brother I'm betting. Date: 01/14/2010 08:22 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 6 Reviewer: Ricky oo, Tough break. I know, I know. If I was going to ARM myself with a pun, couldn't I Break in with something better? Sorry, not with this cast! r Date: 01/14/2010 08:07 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 5 Reviewer: Ricky Excellent chapter, out of the blue that was. Date: 01/14/2010 07:25 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 4 Reviewer: Ricky Another great chapter. Wouldn't trust her with a goldfish! You crack me up. And I thought all this time that I was funny. Revelations! What can I say. I'll buy a new Joke book. And in the shoe! eeeeeew! Date: 01/14/2010 07:12 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Ricky It had to be chilli pepers too. Everyone knows chilli peppers are sexy. He just couldn't help himself. Probably. Maybe. Kinda sorta, almost. Date: 01/14/2010 06:28 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: Ricky OMG Socks to a snake! I thought I was going to slide off my chair. Loved it. I love the humor between the characters. The playful banter. Thanks. Date: 01/14/2010 06:14 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Ricky Enjoying this story a lot. It is well written and reads easy. Great character development. And delightfully large, wallow in the fantasy, man sized chapters. well at least the first one. I'm hooked though. Date: 01/14/2010 06:04 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 34 Reviewer: lostkid so, i know it looks stupid in words and corny, but seriously, this is THE most heart touching and heart renching stories ive EVER read. it gives me hope that us guys that have had a hard life will find love one day. and it breaks my heart that "sam" has passed away. i literally cried when i read the last chapter. i give my heart and soul out to "brian" and also to you adam for your loss of, im positive, an amazing person, boyfriend, and friend. thank you. seriously thank you sam for sharing a story that has filled me with hope of things turning out alright in the long run, and for you, adam, for completing a ray of light... wow, im crying haha. THANK YOU SO MUCH! i really needed a story like this in my life right now. this story has given me the strength to keep holding on to that hope of finding love through all these horrible times in ones life... and, thank you sam, brian, and adam from the deepest part of my heart and soul, you may never know how these words on a screen have helped me out... Date: 01/14/2010 02:11 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 34 Reviewer: Altimexis Wow, what a powerful ending to a powerful and exhausting story!Thanks for completing the story, Adam, particularly from those of us who've been following it from the beginning. Date: 01/13/2010 11:05 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 33 Reviewer: rebelghost85 I remember reading this story a year or two ago and then forgetting about it. I am so so happy I picked it up again. This is one of the most powerful works I have read. Thank you for helping it to continue. Date: 01/13/2010 04:37 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 33 Reviewer: Wyndham Powerful stuff. So glad you haven't given up with this difficult but great story. Date: 01/13/2010 04:57 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 33 Reviewer: Nephylim Wow that was emotional. Excellent as ever. Date: 01/13/2010 04:12 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 32 Reviewer: hh5 Wow full circle ... Sam sure is a nice guy. Even to Jonah.But I sure wish Neal find a new hobby. Date: 12/23/2009 04:41 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 32 Reviewer: Nephylim That was one of the most touching chapters of any story I have ever read.. even more poignant because we know how the story ends. Thank you so much for sharing this. Date: 12/20/2009 06:49 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 32 Reviewer: mcnc1966 Thank you so much for continuing this amazing story! It has been a joy to read and experience the range of emotions it has elicited. As always, I am touched you have continued Dan's masterpiece. Date: 12/19/2009 09:02 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Morebern Yeah! That's good news! I am sure there are people who have been reading since the beginning and they are probably way more patient than I am. I just found it two weeks ago and I am dying to know how things turned out. Thanks for trying for us. Date: 12/05/2009 01:53 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 31 Reviewer: Morebern I cannot believe you ended it here! Well I can, but I refuse to not be annoyed! I know its the holiday season, but please don't forget us!Author's Response: Holy crap! I just posted it on Thursday! And you're complaining that I don't have another chapter posted yet? I told readers I'd have the entire story done by the end of the year, and I intend to keep to that schedule. And if what you're complaining about is that the chapter ended where it did...well, that's just where the chapter needed to end. There are three chapters left to go. Sam already wrote the last one, so that only leaves two for me to prepare. I'm hoping that Chapter 32 will be up by Sunday evening--it's almost finished, though I'll have to work really fast to get it posted by Sunday. Thanksgiving messed with my schedule. After that, all I really have to work on is one more chapter. As soon as Chapter 33 is finished, Chapter 34 is ready to go. --Adam Phillips Date: 12/04/2009 10:00 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 31 Reviewer: Nephylim Awww..... Sigh. Date: 12/03/2009 11:48 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: cjames08 I have read and re-read this story many times over the past year and it always manages toreally hit home for me. I just really want to say thank you for continuing the story, it has always helped me make sense of life because unfortunatley I can relate to some of the earlier parts. But it also makes me happy because it gives me hope that there are some guys like brian out there...Thank you Adam for continuing the story. Date: 11/29/2009 03:42 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 30 Reviewer: PixyBit When it rains, it pours. But you know, despite the really sad ending I feel like this is the point in their lives where Sam and Brian can really make it happen. It's like there's no one's standing between them anymore, so they can really focus on each other. They do have a lot to work through though (personal demons, their past and all that). Great chapter, Adam. I really feel that I understand Sam and Brian better. Date: 11/24/2009 03:50 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 30 Reviewer: PrincessElle OMG this chapter was killing me but so exciting at the same time! I really hate Duane now though, never liked him because I alway wanted Sam and Brian to end up together but Duane came in. ARGH oh please pretty please stop bringing more boys in and let them be together! But the birthday part was really cute though and funny. thanks for posting!! <33Author's Response: "ARGU oh please pretty please stop bringing more boys in and let them be together! " The problem, PricessElle, is that the story is true, so I'm not in control of the plot. I just have to tell it the way it happened based on Sam's notes. :-) --Adam Phillips Date: 11/24/2009 02:18 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 30 Reviewer: writeincode wow, just wow. It really is a series of unfortunate events. Wonderfully written. I really feel for Sam. Date: 11/23/2009 10:36 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: PrincessElle OMG! That was soooo awesome! Do not stop!! Keep going, 3 chapters by the end of this month?! I want to read until the end! I been reading this since it started and been waiting for months for the next chapter. Could you pretty please go faster? <333 I really love this story!!!!!!!! Date: 11/20/2009 10:05 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 29 Reviewer: Nephylim just as awesome as ever. Date: 11/14/2009 06:33 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 28 Reviewer: guru I love it.... :-)) Date: 10/09/2009 01:24 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: semaj565 Wow... I stayed up all night and read the entire thing start to (current) finish. EXCELLENT read! Date: 10/09/2009 02:08 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 27 Reviewer: Morse Code There is so much realism, beauty and love in this chapter, it's overwhelming.Great chapter, excellent story! Date: 09/23/2009 01:32 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Chad Durans Very well thought out characters and paragraphs are well structured. I like Sam's character because when I tried out for sports in Junior High and looking on the list brought back my year as a seventh grader and was upset when I was canned. Your story brought back my years in Junior High. I really enjoyed reading your story. Date: 09/22/2009 10:47 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Marco Polo This was utterly moving and symmertical to some moments of my own life, more so Sam's feelings of needing Brian when he was giving himself to Tom rather than Sam. I'm glad you're doing this Adam, You know, I think Dan would be proud. Date: 09/22/2009 07:42 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 27 Reviewer: Nephylim wow Date: 09/22/2009 04:37 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 26 Reviewer: Always Hope I have been moved many times when Reading through this story. It needs to be told. This This chapter has many answers but I suppose Dan's family and friends are still asking the 'why' questions which will never be known this side of the grave. I am looking forward ( if one can say that at this point) to the rest of the story. Date: 09/19/2009 03:39 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 26 Reviewer: oldenough I enjoy this story, and keep checking back for updates. That said, it never completely gets me to suspend my disbelief; could someone working in mental health care, for example, never discover his own urgent needs for help--just for example. Would Brian's loving and supportive parents never have noticed him spiriling out of control? But, even with things like that, I keep happily coming back for more. Date: 07/21/2009 05:21 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 26 Reviewer: supertrooper9 I started reading this story slowly in the beginning without much attachment. However, as the chapters progressed, as I allowed myself to take in the story, and I learned that it was an autobiographical account of a person's life, I became passionate.I cannot personally relate to the Authors experiences but I never-the-less developed a sense of compassion for him. I wanted so badly for things to turn out ok for him, and I'd find myself reading at an unusually quick rate just to seek out what happens next.I read this chapter this morning and have since reread it over and over. It is so emotionally drawn out, so detailed and explanatory that afterwards, I couldn't help but feel deeply saddened for all of those people. I've always remained a bit skeptical of the intentions of young adults. This last chapter was a breakthrough for me in that it has shown me what I never thought were possible. This has been by far the most intensely emotional story I have ever came to read and I cannot wait for the remaining chapters to be posted.Thank you so much for writing this, Dan (Sam) will never be forgotten. Date: 06/08/2009 04:09 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 26 Reviewer: Altimexis WOW! That's all I can say is WOW! Date: 05/13/2009 10:43 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 26 Reviewer: hh5 Part of me was at lost of how could the story end. Whats going to happen from here on with Brian, Joah, and Chris. (and Neal) The the other thing was full circle and the title of the story. So I guess an epilog would be nice to tie things together. Date: 05/11/2009 09:26 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 25 Reviewer: Jey OMG! I totally knew Brian liked him back! I knnnneeeeewwww it! And it's so amazing to see that he actually kissed him! I love this story more and more every chapter it gets. Bah... can't wait to see the next part. Date: 05/07/2009 03:48 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 25 Reviewer: ifnotnow OMG - Brian kissed him - has he wanted to all along? Could it hinder and not help their fragile friendship? I just so love this story. Thank you for the update - I love it. Date: 05/06/2009 11:09 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 25 Reviewer: guru I knew this was gonna happen.... at least for the last 10 chapters.... can´t wait for more Date: 05/03/2009 03:07 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 24 Reviewer: hh5 Great chapter. I'm glad that Jonah and Sam didn't breakup. But I am a bit hurt that Sam never told Brian about how much Neal damaged their relationship and life. I know whats it like to have ones life destroyed by another human being. I just don't know if I ever have a second chance at life as Sam had. But still the story about Sam is a very important read to me to at least know someone had a second chance at life to the very end. Date: 04/29/2009 11:06 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Looby I really enjoyed this story, I cannot wait for the rest of it. Please I hope Sam and Brian finally end up together. So sorry to hear about Dan.....you are a great friend to complete his story to share with us. Thank you so much. Date: 04/08/2009 07:13 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 23 Reviewer: MattJohnson Strangely enough.. this story hits me too. Particularly this chapter.I have had many problems with falling in love with my best friend too (and still am).Reading this story always make me feel.. strange, i dunno. but it gives me hope and i like it.R.I.P Dan, and thanks for continuing the story Adam Date: 04/04/2009 11:00 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 23 Reviewer: hh5 Interesting parallels and sharings; a break from the drama that will soon return. Date: 04/03/2009 09:04 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 23 Reviewer: ifnotnow This story is just GRIPPING. And leading up to this chapter I was feeling a loss of hope, but now there are glimmers of hope. I really feel so deeply for both Sam and Brian, and for Jonah. So much hurt all the way around. I'm so hoping for some peace and happiness for the men. It's good to see Sam evolve and grow and be able to begin to handle things that he couldn't before.Thank you! Date: 04/03/2009 04:02 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 22 Reviewer: ifnotnow I am absolutely enthralled by this story. It causes this ache in me, it has this residual presence in my mind. I love it. Date: 03/18/2009 09:40 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: amazongal hello again adam .....i am happy to finally read chapter 22 been checking often tfor the next installment.......i know ya friend would be happy to know that his labour of love is cherished...such a great piece can't waite for the next installment.... p.s. i emailed you ...did u recieve my response to your reply..would love hear from you again....... Date: 03/16/2009 11:44 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: hh5 Gosh - I hate Neal!!! But I am surprise campus security hasn't caught Neal for distruption and violation of a restraining order. Just hope Jonah and Sam and Chris - sticks together. Hope Walt survives his operation. Date: 03/15/2009 08:08 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 21 Reviewer: hh5 Good Chapter. Sorry for Brian. Yuck Neal is back? Date: 01/13/2009 07:29 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 20 Reviewer: hh5 I am happy for Sam and Jonah. Something good did come out of a hard life. Date: 01/09/2009 07:04 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 19 Reviewer: tombear Just wanted to say that this story has been very touching so far some men do have many demons to excise especially when dealing with sexual and physical abuse as a child My condolences also to Dans family on his loss Cancer is a very hard thing to deal with at that early age Date: 12/06/2008 07:36 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 19 Reviewer: Jey Oh God... I would generally be happy with this chapter if I had known that this was a fictinoal story. Though I AM glad that he seems to have finally found something special in this, it's sad to see that he's gone at such a young age with so much crap dealt with. He seems like such a nice and understanding person and having all of this dumped on him is just... brutal. I'm looking forward to later instalments. Thank you Adam, for finishing his story. Date: 11/22/2008 12:08 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 19 Reviewer: hh5 I am so happy for SAM in the sense of welcome back to the living a life. Date: 11/19/2008 09:50 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 19 Reviewer: Altimexis I still can't believe Dan's gone, and at such a young age. It's obscene. You're an angel for taking this on, Adam. I'm glad we'll be able to read the rest of his story. I've been following it from the beginning. Thank you.Sounds like 'Jonah' is a great guy. I hope he's the one. 'Sam' certainly deserved happiness after all he'd been through, and before what he was yet to face, and 'Chris' sure deserved to have a second daddy to take over after Dan's illness. Date: 11/19/2008 08:42 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: hh5 Yes this a very good story and getting to understand Sam phobias. However , It maybe prudent to place a CautionWarning for those that still have PTSS because the natures of a victim of PTSS that have not seek treatment may have an interaction with the content of the story. Also , a post story advisory to those with PTSS should be suggested to seek help (medicalchurch) Date: 10/15/2008 09:12 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: aaptx28 I'm Adam, the guy helping Dan complete It Started With Brian. Eno, the story is not finished yet. I've had to take a break to get my bearings on the way the plot relates to the chronology. I'm starting to get lost in the time sequence--it's not my story so I don't really have it down in my head as fully as I would if it were my own--so I've asked Dan to help me out by supplying me with a time-line for the narrative. He just got that to me today. Dan has written extensive notes through the end of the story, so it's all plotted out in terms of what happens, etc. But I have to supply the detail, and as I said, the chronology is throwing me a little right now. I promise that as soon as I've gotten all clear on the sequencing of events in the story I'll get Dan a completed Chapter 19 to look over and post. Maybe in as soon as a week's time. Thanks for your patience. Date: 08/18/2008 07:24 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 18 Reviewer: Eno Registered just to say this but I really hope this isn't the end. It just doesn't feel complete yet. Hope you update soontime!! Date: 08/11/2008 10:50 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: canundra I'm so glad that I found this story to read and thank you for writing it :)However, I feel that if we don't get a happy ending, such happy thoughts will promptly disappear. :PPlease! Happy ending! Date: 08/10/2008 07:22 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 18 Reviewer: Dion Wonderful. You are such a talented writer, Dan. I hope you update again soon. Date: 07/20/2008 12:30 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 17 Reviewer: Steven Keiths Dan, I have been following this story from when you first posted it at Nifty. It is for me a beautifully written 'tug n pull' emotionally charged story. Your character creation of Sam is well developed and though I know it's a story, sometimes I just want to slap him; and other times hug him. Just a very nicely written story. I'm glad I found it here at GA. Warm regards,--Steven Keiths Date: 07/19/2008 09:37 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: jovian_w2002 Great Story mate I just started reading it a few hours ago haha. I'll give you a more extensive review asap Thanks Adam and Dan Date: 06/24/2008 09:55 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 17 Reviewer: orangeeeena Wow. This has been an incredible read. Traveling with Sam through all his confusion and pain really took a toll on my emotions. Amazing, amazing, amazing job. You've got me cheering, not only for Sam, but for everyone in his life. I hope this isn't the end! There's still so much to be resolved, and so much that's been left unsaid (particularly with Brian). And will we ever find out what transpired between Tom & Brian that night? I can't believe I just spent so much time reading this, but it was truly time well spent. Cheers to you and your brilliance. Date: 06/23/2008 11:53 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 8 Reviewer: Bill Moretini Dan, You have gradually leeked details about Sam's scars and the reason for them. That keeps the intrigue and curiosity flowing. I'm enjoying your work. Date: 06/23/2008 10:29 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 17 Reviewer: Altimexis Another superbly written chapter, and an emotional roller coaster. One cannot help but wonder, is Dan telling the story of a real life. Looking forward to the next one. Date: 06/18/2008 07:44 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 16 Reviewer: Tiger Sorry for waiting so long to read it, but this was a good chapter. I look forward to more. Good job, Dan! Date: 06/07/2008 11:16 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 16 Reviewer: Dion Truly outstanding. Date: 05/26/2008 05:36 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 11 Reviewer: steph291 wow... the entire Walker family is just awesome. Date: 05/26/2008 12:36 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 9 Reviewer: steph291 very powerful chapter! Date: 05/26/2008 12:05 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: steph291 awww... they're so cute together! and they're not even together yet! =) Date: 05/25/2008 10:00 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 16 Reviewer: Altimexis A very powerful story that takes the reader on an emotional roller coaster. Date: 05/25/2008 09:39 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 15 Reviewer: Dion An absolutely fantastic, flawless story. The emotions are gut-wrenching and true-to-life. My hat is off to such a talented writer. Date: 05/13/2008 01:32 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 15 Reviewer: Jey I don't believe I've gotten a chance to review this yet... but dude, this story is simply AMAZING. I'm not going to suck up or anything but geez... Iall the stuff thats happening to him is just amazingly sad. I can't help but feel sorry for him. One of the things I love about this story is that it uses very cliche storylines on one character and somehow you turn them into very realistic events that don't seem cliche at all. *Sighhh* I wish Brian would just take him already... it's been like 5+ years into their friendship! Amazing story. Date: 05/02/2008 07:25 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: aaptx28 Gary, I appreciate what you said. The funny thing about the style is that it's not his and it's not mine either. The way we're doing this is that Dan has sent me his written notes, some of them quite extensive, on the remaining chapters. As much as I can, I use his own words from the written notes. But of course I have to fill in and do transitions and dialogues and things and that's where I can't imitate him. It has been an honor to work with him and I hope you will all keep reading. You will not be disappointed by Dan's storyline when all is said and done.--Adam Phillips Date: 04/30/2008 07:53 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: GaryInMiami Hi Adam. To me your style isn't annoying. It's just different and took some getting used to. It's a shame Dan can't finish the story himself. Thankfully you're generous enough to help him with it. For that you've got my sincere thanks. This has been a great read so far. I can't exactly say I've enjoyed it because it's just not that kind of story. But everything about it has been nearly perfect. Date: 04/30/2008 11:22 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 15 Reviewer: tlwritingtiger This is a great story. I look forward to reading more! I got into this story a long time ago but had not seen the updates until recently. I'm glad I did. I like it even more than I did before. Date: 04/28/2008 11:36 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Michael Sheridan I'm hooked on this story, and am glad that you're continuing it even with the long wait between chapters. A story this good is well worth that wait. Thank you! Date: 04/25/2008 11:27 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: aaptx28 For the reviewer who noticed the shift in tone between 11 & 12, I'm afraid I have to take the blame. Dan's not in a place to be able to complete the story unassisted. I'm helping him with the writing. He has plotted it out to the end. I tried initially to imitate his style, but it's not really possible. He's he and I'm me, LOL. I do try to include as much of his own wording and phraseology as possible. Please understand that Dan and I would both love it if I wouldn't have to be involved at all. Try to appreciate Dan's story, even if my style annoys you.--Adam PhillipsAuthor's Response: I want to respond to both corvus and Adam. The tone of the story would have shifted with chapter 12 anyway. There were a number of things that shifted with that chapter just by virtue of the story itself. I'm blessed and honored that Adam has offered to help me finish ISWB. I would not be able to finish it otherwise and I trust him implicitly. Date: 04/25/2008 08:41 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 13 Reviewer: Rogue State of Mind Hey, I just wanted to throw in my 2 cents and say this story is great! And I like the fact you've given Sam some space to breathe... It had to happen, he couldn't just stay with Brian night and day, the situation would have stifled his characters growth being stuck in some wacky unrequited lovers circle... Plus it gives him room to gain some sort of independence within his self (inner peace and all that jazz - well not really, but you know what I mean. ha!) which will do well when he does face Brian once more. And could cause more problems if Brian doesn't know how to take this new and improved Sam... Ugh, I need to stop jabbering! lol Anyway, keep up the great work! Date: 04/20/2008 03:44 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 13 Reviewer: corvus Eh. As much as I'm appreciative of the fact that the story is continuing, I don't like the tonal shift from chapter 11 to chapter 12. Don't get me wrong -- chapters 12 and 13 are well written, but it feels like a different story now. Date: 04/06/2008 02:02 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 13 Reviewer: Anonymous very hot keep going Date: 04/05/2008 01:24 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 13 Reviewer: kiefer(squeggie@gmail.com) I just wanted to say this story was pretty good.. I just think it should of never started like this.. i was so dissapointed, I was hoping that brian and sam would expirement or talk more then they do now.. something and mary to come back into the story.. thats what made it exciting.. not it feels like a run on story, so pleeeeasaseeeee bring back mary and brian into this... i would think it would be more exciting, like a thriller.... But thanks this was ok.. i will be reading the next story.. yay Date: 04/05/2008 05:07 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 13 Reviewer: Ash Soo sooo soooo good. I feel band for Brian though. Keep up the great work! =) Date: 04/05/2008 12:55 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 13 Reviewer: Altimexis The sex scene in this chapter has to be one of the most humorous I have read in any story. And very real! Great job! Date: 04/04/2008 08:02 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 12 Reviewer: Robbie I love this story so much, I can totally sympathize with Sam...look forward to the next chapter soon! Date: 04/03/2008 05:32 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 11 Reviewer: darkfoxprime whew! made it through all the chapters so far in about two or three hours.this is good. you've got characters that hooked me, a multi-layered storyline, and a believable plot. great work.now i want more. more more more! Date: 03/12/2008 12:39 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 11 Reviewer: corvus This is the best story I've read in a long time. The feelings are very raw, very real. Please update soon! Date: 02/04/2008 12:29 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 11 Reviewer: froggy12 Wonderful story with good characters/story line (The PTSD and Tom were too nuanced, at least for me), and totally believable. Thankfully, no RC dogma lectures. Hope author has more stuff to read because I would glady be a follower. Date: 01/25/2008 03:08 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 11 Reviewer: Larry Laetus Dan has done a superb job of protraying the angst that so many of us have gone through or are going thorough, are or aren't we and if we are to what degree, and we are intelligent and sensitive enough to punish ourselves needlessly. I sure hope Dan continues this story to a conclusion. Date: 01/25/2008 02:23 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Vince This is one of the best stories I've ever read. Now that I've cried my eyes out with Sam after the last chapter, I can't wait to see what you will do with the story (and to see if I still feel like you are channelling part of my life through Sam's character!) It really is wonderfully written, Dan! Date: 01/22/2008 11:04 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 11 Reviewer: Fred Wood Dan - Please don't end it here. My whole early life was Sam's. I need to see if you can do better with it than I did. Thanks! Fred Date: 01/22/2008 08:33 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 11 Reviewer: impdlx50 Great stuff and what an emotional roller coaster...I wonder what it was that Brian said to him at the canyon. Please keep this one going...Love it! Date: 01/20/2008 07:43 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 4 Reviewer: Larry Laetaus What a great job, tremendously well written and kept me going all night. Great story quality. Nigel is right, Dan you are a polished writer. Write on...more...more...more Date: 01/20/2008 03:03 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 11 Reviewer: Altimexis It's nice to see this story continuing, even if it has been quite some time since the last chapter. This installment was particularly nice, even if it was emotionally draining. I look forward to more! Date: 01/18/2008 09:44 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 11 Reviewer: excuse Love it! Date: 01/18/2008 04:20 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Vas Hi Dan.You know i got yo know your story trough another writer group, who that some months ago pointed out your story.I am very happy that you decided to come back to finish the story, I grow fond onit and the new two chapters are very good, they deal with some very important topics.Thanks so much for your work I am enjoying very much. Date: 11/10/2007 03:25 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: g_guy_q Great story! The author has a real talent for drawing the reader in. Date: 11/04/2007 06:30 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 9 Reviewer: Thrideye I'm Hooked on this storyAuthor's Response: Thank you. I'm hoping to finish it soon. Date: 11/04/2007 01:17 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: tlwritingtiger This is a good introductory chapter. I look forward to reading more.Author's Response: Thank you. The remainder of the chapters should be posted in fairly short order. Date: 10/31/2007 12:28 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Benji Sam's mother confuses me, is she so bitter about being in a wheelchair she takes it out on her son? His father is another puzzle, why is he enraged? Other then Sam taking way too many activitys under his belt I really enjoyed reading this story and look forward to moreAuthor's Response: I'm afraid that Sam's parents won't be explored much in this, though some of the answers will come in time. Thank you for reading. Date: 10/31/2007 11:20 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete]

E-fiction reviews as of 12/28/2010. Title: Reflections Over Coffee Part II: Prologue Reviewer: kasjo_peja I liked Ben. I really preferred him to Mike, so now I'm really disappointed and feel lead on. It seems like the series sets up a very long and complicated road which will bring Aaron and Mike together. Because right now, with all this 'my friends hate your friends', Ben-Aaron relationship is doomed to failure. Date: 08/30/2010 09:26 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Reflections Over Coffee Part II: Prologue Reviewer: taina1959 Oh Kevin!!!! Knock Knock!! Where are you dear??? I need more!! You're killing me with the suspence! Feed my addiction sweetheart!! hehehe!! You are such a tallented writer, I've enjoyed everything you've written so far. You make your stories so much fun to read! They are definitely a good "Fix" when one is depressed and need a good laugh! Love and Light ~~ Rush Date: 02/01/2009 03:16 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 2: A Cosmo Mixer Reviewer: juliandarling I really like this story so far, please continue it! I'm practically in love with all the characters, although Matt is giving me a bit of a headache! What a queen. And I really really like Aaron, although he's a bit of an idiot, especially about what happened at the party, what with Dave's HIV status. Date: 09/11/2008 11:26 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Reflections Over Coffee Part II: Prologue Reviewer: tomon This chapter is so well written, I do wonder if this is actually just real life and you write it out as "aaron".All the characters are so well described, they seem human.Loved BMAD and this is ace too.Can't decide who i dislike the most, daisy or giorgio.Would LOVE a bitchfight between ronnie and daisy. Date: 09/06/2008 08:15 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 2: A Cosmo Mixer Reviewer: rbq4u weird, update soon! Date: 09/04/2008 09:51 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 2: A Cosmo Mixer Reviewer: emerald intense O.O this is a great continuation and WOW THIS CHAPTER IS REALLY COOL it really gives the reader a better look at all the characters. poor juan though. and.. thank you so much for using correct spanish (or you know, getting someone else to do it) that part was great. cant wait for next chapter Date: 08/31/2008 12:01 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 2: A Cosmo Mixer Reviewer: steph291 wow. nice strong finish! Date: 08/30/2008 01:01 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 2: A Cosmo Mixer Reviewer: Dion I find myself wondering when Aaron will get a clue and realize all the aggravation he's going through isn't worth it. Looking forward to your next chapter, Kevin. Date: 08/28/2008 12:08 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 2: A Cosmo Mixer Reviewer: excuse Ok... I only reviewed last night... but this chapter was THAT good... that well it deserves another :PI was inanely smiling to myself the whole way through this chapter... thankfully i was alone... otherwise I would have just looked weird.Anyway off topic, fantastic chapter, totally loved the fight scene, i really feel for Cosmo, like i totally just want to hug him, but at the same time slap some sense into him, Giorgio on the other hand... well... I don't know... I dislike him for the way he is with Ben and Aar, but I kind of warmed a lil to him because of the fight scene... I agree that he should probably just mind his own business... but he's totally just looking out for Cosmo... even though what was said needed to be said... just maybe not infront of everyone... oh and can Daisy maybe... just maybe... end up being out bitched by someone? i'd love him to be taken down a peg... or 20 (oops at the size of this thing...) Best wishes, Mike Date: 08/28/2008 11:31 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 2: A Cosmo Mixer Reviewer: Windkaizer I'm sitting here, just in awe of this chapter. Laughing my ass off through most of it, but still in awe.First, the burning thing at the begining of this chapter. The way you kept it up is priceless. And the butt-plug coment seriously had me laughin for awhile.Then, this took such a sharp turn that it caught me off gaurd. The serious turn of events was extremely well done. And the fight scene, very emotional.As for Giorgio, still don't like him. Just like Aaron, I don't like him. He needs to stay out of his friends life and let them deal with their own problems. WORRY ABOUT YOURSELF MY FRIEND! Literally.Keep up the great work. Date: 08/28/2008 10:35 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1: Something to do on a Quiet Saturday Reviewer: excuse Brilliant, if not very steamy :PI love your writing style, its so fluid and erm... *thinks of word* chatty? comfortable? laid back?ok those words all suck but thats what I'm getting at, well done on another great chapter!Author's Response: Thank you very much! :-D I was definitely trying to make it steamy :-P As for the chatty style, yep, it's supposed to be almost as though it's coming directly out of Aaron's head in an inner-monologue sort of way. Thanks so much for the review and comments! I really appreciate it! Date: 08/27/2008 09:40 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1: Something to do on a Quiet Saturday Reviewer: Windkaizer So glad to see this story up and around. Happinness abounds through me.Now, onto the story. Aaron, once again is extremely funny. Whole scene with the dildoe, priceless. 'I know where that goes...', seriously, laughing for about ten minutes.But, I get the feeling that he's handling C4 and it's going to explode whether he wants it to or not (he shouldn't though. Most people don't like explosives in the face). His whole relationship seems almost too perfect, and that usually ends up in total devistation.Because, here's what I think, if something bad does actually happen to the rela, he's so far into that false sense of security that he probably won't be able to bounce back into that forever shattered fantasy world of his without stepping on a lot of broken shards.All in all, I think the relationship is going to fail in a gala of fire and pretty colors.With Mick, however, I don't believe that will happen. So, uh...hintity hint hint.Author's Response: LOL! Thanks for the thoughtful review, Wind! I'm so glad you got a kick out of this chapter :-) Well, I won't say what I have planned or give spoilers of course, but I will say that relationships are usually messy, and that neither Ben nor Mick is going anywhere anytime soon Date: 08/23/2008 02:42 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1: Something to do on a Quiet Saturday Reviewer: steph291 I loved this chapter, Kevin! =)Author's Response: Thanks Steph! :-D Date: 08/22/2008 09:45 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Reflections Over Coffee Part II: Prologue Reviewer: steph291 Nice, Kevin. I liked this one much better than the last coffee. =)Author's Response: Thanks Steph! I was hoping this coffee would be a bit more popular than the last one. Date: 08/21/2008 11:34 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1: Something to do on a Quiet Saturday Reviewer: rbq4u nice start. cant wait for the updateAuthor's Response: Thanks! :-D Date: 08/21/2008 05:15 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1: Something to do on a Quiet Saturday Reviewer: Madrigal O_O So, I pretty much loved this chapter. I completely forgot about Mick when I reached the sex scene xD.Author's Response: Thanks Maddy! :-D LOL, I hope Aaron did too Date: 08/21/2008 03:27 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1: Something to do on a Quiet Saturday Reviewer: Dion Eight paragraphs up, the word is 'massaging'. Definitely hot, Kevin. Wow.Author's Response: My goodness! What an embarrassing mistake! Thanks for letting me know, Dion! :-D And thanks very much for the review! Date: 08/21/2008 04:06 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Reflections Over Coffee Part II: Prologue Reviewer: Dion Whew! Aaron's mind is something akin to being in a dinghy during hurricane season! I think my brain hurts. One peeve: "Most of the time when Cosmo is around I don’t even threatened by Giorgio at all." This sentence is missing a word. My guess is 'feel'. Another great start, Kevin. I'm glad to see your writing again!Author's Response: LOL, yep Aaron's a bit all over the place for sure! Thanks so much for giving me a heads up about the missing 'feel'! I've fixed it now :-D Date: 08/21/2008 03:54 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete]

E-fiction reviews as of 12/28/2010. Title: The Long Goodnight Reviewer: Jaydee you have a knack for novelty.... this type of scenario is common, yet you really let the emotions out rawly and approached both characters with conviction. nice short Date: 06/01/2009 02:35 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: The Long Goodnight Reviewer: Conner365 This is a beautiful story. certainly one of the best of the many short stories i have read. To me, it says so much about the ideals of human nature that many of us try to seek, and mostly fail to find. Ed Date: 11/18/2008 12:45 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: The Long Goodnight Reviewer: rbq4u oh my god. that was really good. if i had writtan it i would have made them get together, but when u didn't, that's really what made it good. all in all it was a happy ending - sorta but VERY cute. loved it. that's probably how i feel with a lot of my...male friends (you know how bobby is...yeah that)Author's Response: Awww thanks rbq! I'm really glad you enjoyed it and I really appreciate your comments! I was going for a realistic, but sweet ending. Glad it worked :-) Date: 08/18/2008 07:41 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: The Long Goodnight Reviewer: steph291 I'm sensing a bittersweet pattern here... =pI can tell that this is one of your older works; the dialogue doesn't have the same punch as you're newer stuff.Author's Response: *gasp* Me, bittersweet? Nevah! :-P Date: 08/10/2008 04:49 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete]

E-fiction Reviews as of 12/28/2010. Title: Chapter 3 – Lying, Crying, and Flying Reviewer: Nephylim I read three chapters together and now I want more. There are so many threads, so many twists and turns, so many characters to care about. So far my favourite is Nicky. I really want to know his story. So tell me Date: 09/23/2009 03:32 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 2 – Best Friends Pt 1: Donny and Brad Reviewer: Procyon White You really left us readers hanging here! Good chapter, though I felt it'd have been good to finish with something about Jeff and Mikie maybe. Btw I'm reviewing here since I strongly suspect there may be spoilers in the thread about this story... Date: 05/21/2008 08:46 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 – Hungry Souls Reviewer: Procyon White Very captivating so far, especially with the unexpected twist at the end, and a great title for this chapter. The simultaneous sex scenes were great. The characters are all convincing and I understand the reason for Jeff and Mikie's lovey-dovey-ness now that I'm at the end of this chapter. When Brad showed up for the first time, though, I found it a bit hard to keep track of all the characters -- there's a lot of people in this story! But apart from that section I think it worked, the characters came to life in spite of rather short introductions, and I liked it that it was fast-paced, too. Can't wait to read the rest! Date: 05/18/2008 06:55 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 – Hungry Souls Reviewer: corvus Wow, you set up everything in one chapter! I'll have to read the rest of it (what! only two more chapters?) before saying anything intelligent, but I'm looking forward to it. Date: 03/12/2008 11:46 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 2 – Best Friends Pt 1: Donny and Brad Reviewer: nanaMY i gotta admit i hate sad story...why mikie has to die? Date: 03/10/2008 03:04 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 – Hungry Souls Reviewer: Razor I really like it, and I need just a bit more to read before I'm hooked to the point that I wouldn't be able to put it down before I find out what happens. You did a really good job of making the reader care about the character... but I guess when there's this many characters and stories in one, the reader has to identify with one or two, right? I think it's gonna be a really awesome story when you're finished, and I'll definitely keep up with it. I'll see ya around. Date: 10/29/2006 11:08 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 – Hungry Souls Reviewer: tracy oi. i like has that certain flavor to it that gets us readers hooked. cant wait for the next chapter ;)Author's Response: Thanks Tracy! I hope you did enjoy chapter 2!! :-D let me know what you think! Kevin Date: 10/09/2006 12:38 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 – Hungry Souls Reviewer: Empathy I'm really into this story already. Looking forward to the next installment. Author's Response: Thanks, Devin!! I hope you like the next chapter! Date: 10/02/2006 10:46 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 – Hungry Souls Reviewer: DarkShadow I like it! I'm completely sucked in!Author's Response: Thanks! :-D I can't wait for you to see chapter 2 then! :)Kevin Date: 10/02/2006 09:59 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete]