AnytaSunday

OMG, Love this story. A helluva lot! Most of all the way I feel all confused and hurt and longing inside. You do such a great job building tension between Billy and David. Wonderful. My gut really clenched for both of them the second time David pulled away from Billy. So sad. Though I can understand both perspectives. It only irriated me that they weren't communicating enough, and then at the end, yay, they finally do speak about it, but what's the likelihood he'll have forgotten. Depends on the drug, I suppose, but drats if he doesn't remember... rrrrr. And while I felt all these more angsty emotions, I love the play and fun scenes too. Like, help, I really wanted to do some mud wrestling while reading that scene. Hell yeah, that sounds like FUN!!! LOL, there was only one description of Sam's arms when she hugged Billy...I really don't think Sam would agree with that description. hehehe. Thank you for writing this. Please, please, please write more of this one. I just, damn, I love it (which of course means I will wait, but... ME WANTS MORE! hehe)

Renee is right that in the end it's up to you. I think finishing a chapter where it feels right is important, and usually adds to reader enjoyment (and probably author satisfaction). So if there are some chappies that are 7k plus but they flow that's great. Also, I think that if ALL the chaps are hovering the same word mark it can drag a story a little. Having shorter and longer ones adds a texture and maybe more anticipation in a story. Too many long chapters though--that's harder to pull off. It's a bit psychological, but (at least for me) when I read a story that has shorter chapters, I'm more likely to read more in one go--because I think, help it's only another little one, I can squeeze it in before bed, haha. (because I really can't stand stopping my read half way through a chapter--and the longer ones can take me up to 1.5-2 hours to read--and just finding and preparing that slot of time is hard.) Anyway, I guess I'd wrap up my opinion by saying, yeah, finish the chapter the way you want it, even if it's long. But then, maybe other chapters naturally could be finished shorter. Yeah, varied is good. Keep up the awesome writing, Anyta

Yes, yes--another excellent story. Growing up in NZ and doing plenty of tramps out in the middle of nowhere, where one is really sometimes the only one (or two) out there--it's an amazing feeling. And I felt all that rushing back to me as I read this. Loved it! Nice pacing, good story line! One thing that I kept having in my mind, that I really thought would happen in the end (to tie it up, a bit twist-like) was for Jarrad to tell Joel (not sure exactly when--maybe while he was at the beach or when sleeping before they first pitch tent--anyway) at the end to say he'd taken the tent pegs and stashed them somewhere, so that Jarrad had a reason to offer them sharing a tent. Still, that was just something in my mind. I stayed up until one in the morning reading this, lol. Couldn't stop until I'd finished. Sweet! Until the next one!

Feels like an age ago I read this chappy. I perused it again, with my minxy eye to see how it looks up here, you know... lol. Anyway, as I may have said already, I like the foreshadowing you subtly weave into this chapter. I felt the feeling of frustration Jason has when he's chatting to the detective. Also, I like how we get to see Jason through other people's eyes (like what the detective said about Jase standing up was impressive.) This is actually a really good strategy to deepen characterization and allows for the readers to like him more (because he is modest, but we hear from other sources how amazing people think he is). Great stuff!

WOW, another story. It seems I am reading them in the wrong order, but they stand alone so... This really made for an enjoyable read. I smiled practically the entire way through it. In particular, I liked the way both boys interacted. To me it seemed they had a really solid friendship and that is such a beautiful thing. Now, all I can say is: must read more of your stuff. It's great, keep it coming.

I have to agree with Maria, I enjoyed this read a lot! hehe, it has me chuckling. Definitely keep the stories coming. I like the fact that in this short story there was a nice beginning, middle, and gotta love the end, . I was left wanting more at the end though, wondering if they would actually continue to be friends/more or not. Anyway, thanks for the read.

Interesting. To me it was a story of something so close, yet still so far off (unattainble,perhaps). Like the Groundhog Day effect. That's my take, anyhow. Thanks for the read,

Oh God, I'M STILL laughing from reading your thread on this topic, Sara. LOL! hehe (For those that haven't checked out the thread, you can find it here: http://www.gayauthors.org/forums/topic/30932-social-skills/ Anyway, what fun is this read?! That's right, LOADS... teehee...

So Peter knows about why Michael's really there now. I have to say, I'm a little confused with this turn. Why was that information passed on? Hmmm, maybe things will become clearer. The narrative styles changed in your chapters really do give the story texture. This chapter was again longer--the excerpt from Michael's diary made for a refreshing change of reading.

Good chapter. I love the pacing of this story. It feels very real--so that is a big plus for me. The emotions/lack of, hmmm, this hits close to home. I think you've done an excellent job describing them. Kudos for that. OMG Penelope is such a manipulative bitch. I have a really bad feeling about her--it started in the chapter where they met on the beach, but it really came to live in your opening scene here. I feel frustrated on Blake's behalf. Damn women. He didn't say anything to her--is what I want to tell Haze right now. (then add something about his mom being the wicked bitch of the west). Well, that 'wanting to see justice' emotion added to the whole, 'self reflection' and you know the romancey issues is really making this an addictive read. Keep it up. Write faster, even! hehe. Until the next chappy, Anyta

Ouch, that's just sad! No matter if I like a chapter or not, I'd never neg. rep it: Soooo much work goes into creating the writing. And from what I've read of your stories, I can only imagine green pluses.

Welcome, James. I hope you find what you're looking for! All the best with your writing, looking forward to checking it out. There are some great threads in thewriter's corner that may help you.

LOL!!! Hey, if it's after the 22 that they come, they'll be born in your favorite season. The red and golden leaves will rustle in their congratulations.

OMG, at this stage of writing it looks like I'm the first to reply. FINALLY, LOL! hehe. Yeah, Life changing. Perfect title for this post, because that's what it is. Nothing will ever compare to this. Welcome to the start of this most amazing adventure. I can't wait to see the uploaded ultrasound pics--if you put any up! Oh, and the babies heartbeat--I think it was the first time I saw my husband cry (also same day we learned I was preggie). It's an amazing moment. Again, I cannot say how much I'm happy for you and Mike. Mike will be fine! Hehe, I can't wait to see your family! Also, be prepared the babies might come earlier.

You probably have a million reviews on this, but since the new change over they've gone. Anyway, I just feel there needs to be more reviews on this.//Can you see how totally impressed I am?lol, yeah.//Well, this chapter is the chapter that is most vivid in my mind. I keep thinking back to it. The game they played with the ball Oweee(sorta reminded me of Rugby, lol). And then that sudden kiss and the dread that came as the flash of camera light hit them. Wham. The conflict really starts.

Hmm, in the review I just wrote, that was in fact separated into separate paragraphs! Sorry, if it's difficult to read. // Again, excellent story. Oh, and I really like Taylor, so I'm glad you're writing another story featuring him!

Awwww. Such stories make me all sappy. Thanks!!!

Yeah, that is heart warming! I felt like that reading about dolphins saving a guy when a Great White shark attacked him(got hit three times), and they formed a protective circle around the guy allowing him to get to shore. At their own risk they did it to save someone. Amazing. This is not uncommon of dolphins. In NZ a bit back, four lifeguards were saved by dolphins too. Thanks for the post!

Hell yeah! I'll help you set up!

There is definitely mystery here. I like a bit of mystery to open up a story. At times it was a bit difficult for me to keep all the different characters straight, but then this is only the prologue. Will have to read chapter one very soon. Thanks for the read!

Hey, these are all fabulous tips!!! Music is amazing and can really help, so can reading those sappy romances. I must say I find cleaning sort of helpful too, it's like it clears my head at the same time, if that makes sense. Like straightening the outside world is reflected in my head. Also, another thing that I've done the last couple of days is change where I work so I can see more outside. I also like taking time just for yourself--but I know myself, I'd be wanting to plan my 'to do' list in that time, lol. Yep concentrating on work helps a lot, too. These things are all helping Thanks.

Wow--I can't say how happy I am for you two! I know this is short, but I can't see the screen through my blurry eyes. You so deserve this and it's just so amazing that this is happening for you. Simply, there aren't the right words to say how glad I am that you're going to be a papa. all the best for you and Mike!

Well, it was indirectly--actually it probably was a bit of a fluke. See, it mentioned 'bomb' so I was like, eekk, do one of the main two die? So I checked the last scene in book. Which was a death of the boy by hanging. Um, yeah... so I do know. I've tried to read more folks, but no matter how well it's written, I find it too sad to get emotionally involved with the characters' relationship and each of them personally to be able to handle the boy dying. It makes me sad, and I want escapism-- HOWEVER, that's not to say I don't like/read bittersweet endings, or anything. In fact, I do like a little realism in the stories I read, just, I don't want the main character to die.

This is extremely powerful. VERY WELL written. I immediately felt immersed in Evan's world. His grief and anger are palpable and had a strong effect on me when reading. I want to ask how how long this is expected to be 'on hold' I know I'm going to love the writing and hopefully the story too, but I want to know it'll be completed. Thank you so much for the read!

Ohhh yes, the antique car chappy! I think I may have mentioned this already, but for not knowing anything about cars, I wasn't bored in the slightest--quite the opposite, it was intriguing to read about the world of auctioning and all that, because I had no clue about it. Sweet!