AnytaSunday

Yep, some really are just blind as a bat. Or some don't trust themselves that it could actually be possibly happening. Poor James.

Hey Kevin, thanks for stopping in and checking this story out. Yeah, unrequited love sucks real bad. Never want to do that again, lol. When I wrote this, I wanted to get some of those feelings across, but NEEDED the story to have a good ending, hehe. Indulgent, but necessary. Sometimes a story is for escapism. Something to offer hope. BUT, a friend of mine was in unrequited pain for YEARS, now they are living and loving together--so it DOES happen. *stop rambling, Anyta. Thanks for reading.

I think constructive criticism is a good thing, especially if authors are serious about learning the craft. May I suggest writing to them in a PM, that way the exchange is done privately, which is better for those that are more sensitive. Also, you can ask them/feel them out for how well they respond and whether they mind if you write criticisms in the reviews or in GA stories discussion.

How do you do it? Really, that was simply wonderful. It hit all the right emotions, and somehow, the very little contact the two has makes it all that much more powerful when they do have their moments. I liked how they didn't kiss again at the beach, but rather embraced each other on a different level--an emotional one. That will make anything that happens in future feel even stronger. Thanks for the character interaction, hehe, awesomeness mate. And the mystery you touched on with the uncle... I suspect that has something to do with the dad... I am mighty curious there. I really look forward to reading each of your chappies--they always make me feel something. Looking forward to more...

Actually, for me it was an author. Still is.

Well that was a sweet chapter. I like how these two boys interact, so far. It really does the story credit that you kept the tension between them a bit by not having Ryan state outright that he'd be his boyfriend. This way the reader (er, me at least) is still unsure what their romantic dance will be. That keeps up the rom suspense! Of course, I couldn't help but thinking while it's nice they found a spot a little more secluded for themselves, what about the raving lunatic murderer out there?!?! Perhaps this concern/worry should cross Ryan's mind for a moment about where they chose to set up, even regardless of the fact more police are around. Of course, you could then have him simply decide to take the risk as something was going on between them and he wanted to explore it a little further... etc. Coolness, I am enjoying this read!

Ohhh, lucky me. I get to review this chappy first! Another excellent addition to this story. Yeah, I'm liking this! Ryan's voice is just right--and I like how it's a mystery but also light-hearted. Also, you do a great job of adding in a few sentences here and there that give us more depth into Ryan's life. It's not all easy. I have a question for you--is this story finished? Or are you writing chapter by chapter? Only I hope it's the former and you will keep posting often! So looking forward to chappy three.

Okay, first off: YAY for mysteries! I love a mystery with a romance in it, in fact over the last weekend, I attempted to write a short story for the next anthology and oops, somehow it turned into the beginning of a mystery. I guess that was what ticked me to check out your story--when I read the title Dim Sum Mysteries. So, I really liked how easy your chapter was to read. I like the stream-of-consciousness narration and some of the descriptions you used are steller, and warmed me more to your characters. I also like the pacing--in that exciting and interesting things are happening right from the get-go. Ending on a body for a mystery is a great hook! As for feedback, personally, I think you could do without the subheadings with the time. Just separating into a separate scene (paragraph break) works fine. Readers are generally pretty clever with those transitions. Thank you movies and jump cuts. Also, if you are just as serious about writing as your main character, Ryan, is, then be sure to check out Sol Stein's 'Solutions for Writers'. (Which I love to bits--and read and re-read). But, a good start, Mark.

Girls can kick-ass at soccer too. Enough said. P.S. Really curious to know her name...

Hey Frosty, My thoughts are still with you and your family. I like your honesty in this blog piece--it's hard to admit how you feel sometimes. I think I can relate a little. Esp, with the attention part It's just nice to have someone interested in your life and what you're doing--even if it is a complete bore, LOL. (Though yours is NOT that at all). Well, I just want you to know, I hear so many wonderful things about you from many different people here. You put a smile on many, many people's faces. Including mine, so thanks! Somehow you keep up a cheery impression--I think that shows a strong character. Basically, you're pretty cool. Look after yourself! Anyta

Have an awesome b.day! Hope you get spoiled!

WooHoo--Finally managed to find a spot of time to INDULGE in this (because, believe me, that's what reading your story is ). I get so tense and worked up with the expert way you handle suspense. Two thumbs up from me, mate. hehe. I'm curious to hear Haze's side of this--and for the two to have a bit more communication together! Also, it's still burning in my mind about the mystery of his father--hope that gets touched on (or hinted at) again soon. Sweet As. Keep up the awesome writing, Frank. Keep well, and I'm looking forward to the next installment (Duh).

Hquaio--I'm nervous and excited to be introduced to him properly... This will be interesting. Thanks for the read, Stu--Things are still hectic this end, but I look forward to the catching up ahead of me.

Hey, thanks for reading! Yeah--bit busy at the moment to continue this, but I plan to when I get the chance later on. Your vote is tucked away safely. Thanks agiain!!! Have a lovely day,

Well, I saw this thread a few hours ago, but didn't want to write in it until it was officially your B.day. Now it's twelve minutes into it. Have an AWESOME DAY. Happy B.day to you!

Lovely, John. That's really special. (also, thanks Bleu for making him share!!!) hehe. The line I love most is: words bloomed into feelings. Though I really liked the smile on your mind part a lot too (well, the whole thing, but that lingers in my head). Keep smiling the both of you.

Thanks Wildone! Three yeses marked (as for it being a word: Indeed--it is the plural of yes. ). I've thought about continuing this story and considering the feedback I've got so far, I think I'd like to very much. But at this current time, I have a few projects underway as well as a move overseas--so I wouldn't be able to give it justice in the upcoming months. I hope after things have settled somewhat, I will continue. When that happens there won't be such long waits between chapters (weekly, I'd imagine). Yeah, I have a couple of scenes already in my head between Zen/Chris/(and Zoe)so I know I'm not done with this yet. Lol. Cheers again for the review.

You're so incredibly lucky. Hope things work out wonderfully. I wish you both happiness.

hehe. Yeah. Hey, I love you Aussies, A. On a more serious note, yes, this is a day to reflect on the horrors and sadness of this time.

LOL--That was minxy of him, hehe. Thanks for reading though.

Holy shit is this story hot, or what?! Okay, so on the one hand--freaking turned on like hell reading this, which I guess is partly the point. On the other hand it's depressing. Sorta reminds me of eating eclairs. I mean, nom nom nom, yummy as help,more please. Then you realize it's going straight to your ass and will be a f***er to burn off. Yeah, sorta sums this up. Moment on the lips, forever on the hips. I'm curious to see how and if and when Coop goes on a diet.

Amarillo Sky--shoot, that is such an awesome title. I have sooooo much to read at the moment, but I saw that title and just had to pop in. Then I ended up reading it all. There's definite mystery and intrigue in this. The dream scene bit was fascinating--made me extremely curious. Good amounts of conflict too. (Though, if I would give you a tip, I'd have cut the chapter when Zach runs off as a good hook. Ppl would be scratching at the ants in their pants to know what happens after that then. just a thought.) Still, I enjoyed this. I like the use of language--there was imagery I really felt in here. Good start.

hehehe, I agree with Bleu about the sweetness of their interactions together--that's nice. I did wonder at Dan's gift to Matt though--I mean, he's sorta getting something he wants himself too. On that note, seeing them make love is sweet--so long as it's not all technical and we can experience through the characters and their emotions, you know? But whatever shall be, shall be. Okay, lucky I didn't burn anything this time, LOL. Till next chappy, Anyta

That was so incredible sad. Yeah, that's the strongest emotion I had with that. The desperation, the feeling of being stuck, of not knowing what to do or how to continue. It's so heavy. I really felt with Haze. It made me very teary. It takes a strong character to stay and help someone through these difficult times if that person doesn't want help. It's very draining, and I feel sorry for Blake. His emotions are getting the roller-coaster ride--and that can't be easy for him to handle on top of his other anxities. The kiss was perfect--a wonderful offering of light and hope for just a moment before it lost itself (quite literally) in the depths of the sea. Had the feeling Haze would be up to something, I just hope that he doesn't go through with it--that something in the moment the two shared together stopped him. It will be interesting to read the next chapters. I feel thoroughly depressed right now. Wonderfully written, Frank. Thank you.

Thanks Whisperer. Glad you enjoyed it!