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  1. LJH

    Chapter 7

    Nosty, thank goodness for giving me a reprieve. His ex, I'm afraid, is about to play devil's advocate. That's too much info. But I know you'll want to see just what it is exactly. Enough spoilers now. LOL. This was supposed to be a short story but I see it getting longer and longer and longer. Oh lawd. Thanks for your read support.
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    Footprints

    Will is a temperamental guy at heart. He loves the beauty in life and what happened in the sea that day, was the ugliest moment of his life. Save this little insight for the next chapter and be prepared to be wowed.
  3. I have a collection of imaginary dolls. Every morning I find them in different positions. What does this mean? LOL
  4. LJH

    Chapter 1

    I see unfinished business. The husband who tried to save the son. Regina who hated Cathy. The motivation for a haunting is evident and clear. Waiting for next chapter
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    We'll Never Know.

    Nothing is guaranteed in a relationship. In fact, a divorce, death or breakup in a relationship is one of the top stressors of life. The thing is to move on, which is not covered in this work. Tragic poetry is always two sided. Always asks questions. Romeo and Juliet is a prime example. Bolt's, Sir Thomas Moore is another. Human nature is such that we assume too much, expect too much and analyse too much. Nothing hurts more than live lost, and sometimes we are left to figure it out alone, and in the process, on the rebound, we hurt others.it's an unavoidable cycle. Nice work.
  6. A thousand hugs from the hug foundation to all our winners and nominees. Your creative ability is simply outstanding.
  7. Thanks for reading Bro. It's a revenge short.get in and get out. Unlike my other short called Speech Therapy, which is a atudy in characterization. Give it a try, you'll see what we mean when we say it's important to give each character a different attribution, or imperfection.
  8. Way to go Mr. Mann. Congratulations!
  9. LJH

    Chapter 7

    I watched that movie some time ago. It was heartbreaking and uplifting. I hope to have the same reaction to this story. Thanks for your support and reviews, Lisa. Always appreciated.
  10. LJH

    Chapter 7

    Yes, he did alienate himnself. Well, not entirely. He does make some money by exhibiting his art at galleries. Will is a wholesome, but temperamental dude, and he seems to hesitate at the question of love. You noticed that Ruwan answered for him. I think I'm falling for Ruwan.
  11. LJH

    Chapter 6

    If you've read Even Stars die, you'll notice that I can't write without drama thrown in. Thanks Lady Friday.
  12. LJH

    Chapter 6

    Sorry sorry but not really sorry about the tears. LOL. Totally intended. That's the thing with heroes, they don't think about the danger they put themselves into. Thanks for enjoying.
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    Chapter 7

    Will, Ruwan and Catherine necessarily do the same things people usually do in a hospital. Wait. Stare at blank walls. Pace. Willfully surrender to pangs of unrequited worry. Eat. Wait some more. But what if the unexpected happens? Something so remotely impossible that the only logical response is disbelief. Like the sudden appearance of an extinct dinosaur. Like the sudden ability to walk through walls. So it is when Will notices the man approaching them. His quick footsteps echo down the
  14. Thank you thank you thank you. Your post is so timeous. You been reading my mind? Your insight into a beta reader's skills is spot on. In publishing, they call a beta the developmental editor. LOL. Now these eds only assist the well known writers as far as I can tell, well, in South Africa at any rate. Publishers here are cash strapped so writers here must find their own editors and beta readers. I think it is different in the USA and other publishing hubs. But, not to change the subject. Thanks for this post. You rock.
  15. There are sites that block the public from reading reviews, and I have been subject to scathing criticism by fellow writers on these sites. In the early development stage of my writing, I dreaded opening a review. But those criticisms helped me. I took the negative with the positive. On GA, because the reviews and comments are made available to everyone to read, I would never humiliate a fellow writer by saying things like: Your work sucks. I will, however, PM the writer and tell him where I think the problem lies and suggest a solution. As an editor, that's entirely another issue. I am harsh. I never say, Please change this, or please delete that or Try to use a different word. I give an instruction. Change this. Delete that. This does not make sense contextually. Word is wrong, use your dictionary. Please buy a dictionary! Rewrite for clarity and precision etc,. I don't have time to dwell on benevolent requests. As a reader, however, I'm different.
  16. A collar!!!!! Leather!! I think I would b more scared of commitment than a doggy collar
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    Chapter 6

    I'm too sharky for that. Lol
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    Chapter 6

    Okay lol. I know its a heavy scene. But there was ample warning. Now how on earth are these four characters going to handle this tragedy?
  19. Wow! I say blame it on Jacob Zuma. Seriously though, the weather will be the death of our species. No. But we caused this. Our forefathers had mega time to sort this out. But they ignored our complaints. They ban and jail members of Green Peace, they simply raped the earth's resources and by implementing draconian production and mechanical methods that produce carbon monoxide or is that dioxide? partially destroyed our ozone layer. They call it progress. Green house gasses seen as progress. !!!!!!!! I say round up all these monsters, leaders of countries who do not comply, leaders of industry who rape our planet, put them against a wall and shoot them before they kill us all. Yes I am angry! How many millions of cars are there on this earth? Millions of cars that release emmisions. Why don't they develop and replace petrol cars with electric cars? I'll tell you why - because the oil companies have got us by the balls and shieks get richer and texan oil magnates laugh at the future of our planet because they won't see the planet self destruct, their kids will, so leave the problem for future generations to sort out. In the meantime I want your money all of your money you poor suckers. Selfish bastards. Hence climate change. Where will our future as a species be in three or four hundred years time? Living under gigantic domes, and half of every species dead?!!! Truly, blame ourselves. We did this to our home. No one else. Just us.
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    Chapter 6

    It’s a feeling like none other. An addiction. Exhilarating. Motivating. You’ve had it ever since you first said hi to him. It’s everything about him; his smell, his erotic passion, his romantic passion and his flaws. There is a strong, bold attachment to him and you cannot imagine him going home to Catherine although he must. Rubbing his fine, lithe body with suntan lotion, you recall that he’s just twenty, not a loser. When he’s thirty, you’ll be forty and so on. A lifetime is a short ti
  21. LJH

    Chapter Ten

    Humous. Loads of it. And Olives and flat unleavened bread.
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    Chapter Nine

    No! How could you do this to them? I'm in tears!
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    Chapter Six

    Its called love at first site woop woop woop
  24. LJH

    Chapter Two

    Lovely. Just lovely writing. So good to be here again. Yeah a committed number of words makes it difficult to lean in and get things done
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    Chapter 5

    I would never be so bold. But obviously my characters act in quirky ways. At this point Basil must know that his attraction to Will is love at firstbsite too. And maybe that's what this story is all about. Far toi often I hear the kids of today say they need time when they meet someone. I fell in love with my hubby through loce at first sight and we still together after almost twenty years. I think that's where Will and Basil are and let time do the rest ecen though Basil was hurt in the past, he is willing to trust this young man with his heart, and William is willing to give Basil a chance, until trust is broken I guess.
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