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I think it's horrible that there are people out there who think nothing of stealing someone else's work. Each and every author puts everything they have into their stories. How can someone disrespect an author and steal his/her work and pass it off as his/her own? Years ago, when I was on that site you were talking about, Cia, I was reading a story that was pretty much word for word of Cassie's Not the Sun. I immediately informed the mods there, and they pulled it and I think banned the impostor. Being a big fan of Cassie's writing, I was very upset that someone was trying to post it as his/her own. I have heard of Gee from someone somewhere, and I've always meant to start reading his stories. Now he made it easier by coming on here. Thank you, Cia, for posting this and also for informing authors how they can find out if their stories have been plagiarized. I would have never thought of going onto Google and/or Bing.

Hopefully Woods and Lettman will get in there before MD tries to stab Brian! What I'm really looking forward to is Eddie saving the day! =) He's gotta be a terror when he gets so angry! Never mind the cops! MD better watch out for Eddie!! Awesome chapter, Mom! I'm on pins and needles yet again! lol

Pastor Pig-Fucker! Hahaha!! I was with that one! Leave it to David to crack me up! Great question and answer he had with PP-F. Totally stumped him! After reading David and Tommy's exchange, now I'm questioning Tommy's insight with David and Twoey. He seems to be freaked out by Twoey. Donny, Danny, David...any more D names? lol Donny seems cute. I'm sure Twoey will see him here and there in school. I wonder if David and Gary will tell Twoey to stay out of Danny's house. Hey, better Twoey hangs out with Danny, then Danny taking off with older people in cars. Why did he put on his nice clothes after Twoey left the other day? Danny's after school activities need to be monitored I think.

HAPPY BIRTHDAY DADDY!!!!! I hope you had a great day today!

Omg, Mom, I'm on pins and needles here!! I hope MD doesn't lock Eddie down in the basement too. Now who got there first? Bryan and Sarah or Nathan and his partner? Whoever it is needs to get Wyatt to the hospital ASAP. And I'm with Puppi; reading from Wyatt's pov, thinking that any moment would be his last breath and then he'd be free to just be and love Bryan forever, and then thinking he was in heaven and would see his mom who he never knew, really got me all choked up.

HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO YOU!!! HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO YOU!!! HAPPY BIRTHDAY DEAR DADDY, HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO YOU!!! Happy B-day, Daddy!! Ok, sorry, totally took over this thread!

I agree -- Twoey and Danny are cute together, but yeah, I don't trust Danny's folks. Plus as your readers pointed out, there's the people Danny goes with in the cars, and THAT'S not looking good at all! And David -- yep, he lost the perfect opportunity to tell Kathy, but he's sending out mixed signals. Why on EARTH is he HOLDING HER HAND?????? Why would he do that? Does he have any idea what girls think or feel when a boy is HOLDING THEIR HAND???? Idiot! She's gonna think they're going steady or something. He's gonna have to give her his crosscountry letterman jacket! lol You did the paragraph/dialogue thingy again towards the end of the chapter when T&D are talking; they were both talking in the same paragraph.

Danny has an odd way of speaking. lol I guess it's a little quirk of his. I'm glad he and Twoey had that talk. Hopefully they can be good friends. I agree with your other readers; they should be good friends, not boyfriends. Although...if they did really, really like each other, that would be one way of diminishing their crush on David. So Twoey thinks David is straight, but Danny's not sure. Of course if David finally gets a clue of his feelings, and realizes he really likes Twoey 'like that', that would certainly crush (no pun intended! ) Danny. It's too bad about Danny's home life. He can certainly use more friends. I just hope he's not getting involved with the wrong people. He has all the time in the world to get in trouble and his parents wouldn't even know and maybe not even care. Oh, I almost forgot: there were some paragraphs where Twoey and Danny had dialogue in the paragraph. If you want specifics, Skinny, let me know. Ok, on to the next chapter!

I know this last post was back in April, but maybe someone will still be reading this thread. I was just looking at the movies that are out now when I noticed Asa Butterfield is in one. It's called A Brilliant Young Mind, and Asa has the title role. It sounds like a prequel to A Brilliant Mind with Russell Crowe. Of course Asa doesn't look anything like he's described in Comsie's story. lol At least not to me! Anyway...thought you guys would be interested.

Make that four. I totally agree with Defiance (as I usually do); Jeff sent you away b/c he knew you could survive, but it was already too late for him. Maybe in the end he realized he couldn't survive without you. I needed my Kleenex for this one.

I think Gary is right; you were unconsciously (subconsciously?) separating or distancing yourself from the boy who was cutting or burning himself with boiling water. Isn't cutting a type of control? The people who cut feel they have no control over their lives (as you must have felt), and so they cut b/c it's the one thing they have control over. Also, the pain from the cutting can make them forget (at least temporarily) the pain from their lives. It's amazing to me to think that you wrote these when you were so young. You are a very talented writer, Tim. I think if you got these poems together and were able to publish them in a book, you could bring it to missions and places where you think street kids (again, I'm sorry for using the term), might see it. It helps to know you're not alone, you know? I think it would give them hope that if you made it out of there, they could make it out too. Just a thought.

Tim, I'm so happy that you persevered and got off the streets (at one point you must have, since you commented your sad tears are long gone), in one piece. You were in one piece, right? This was a heartbreaking poem, showing a barely-sixteen-year-old boy crying in the arms of his pimp, using his 'gift', going to the mission for Christmas dinner, and then back to the streets, as Defiance said, back to business.

I did click the 'Like' button, despite the fact that I don't really 'like' these poems. As poems they're terrific -- they make you stop and think and reread them over and over, and each time you come away with more. But as a sort of autobiography, I don't like them. It's so easy to see how the street kids (please don't take offense, none was intended), turn to drugs; they need something to numb them so they don't have to think about the horrible pedo john they're with. These are very powerful, thought-provoking poems, Tim. I realized after I reviewed the previous chapter that I called you 'Mikie', but obviously, if you're 'Mikiesboy', you're not 'Mikie'.

FINALLY!!!!! Thank the lord Bryan called the home! I just hope to God Bryan gets there before MD takes off with Eddie and Wyatt for Wyatt's 'last supper', so to speak. lol I know Bryan won't be thinking this, but maybe Sarah will give the cops the head's up so they can meet them there. This was an exceptionally exciting chapter, Mom! I'm on pins and needles now, hoping B&S get there in time.

Ah, so that's why you've been MIA for so long! And you have the best excuse! Congrats, Sasha and Cris!!!!!

I loved Noah's New Plan, and I really enjoyed reading what the readers thought of the story. Great idea, Cia!

Yeah, poor Eddie is right. They're gonna go in there like gangbusters, and Eddie's gonna be scared shitless. He won't talk for anything. They need Bryan to go with them. Bryan needs to be the one asking the questions; Eddie will listen to Bryan. Great chapter, Mom! Finally a break!!

When I read about David introducing Twoey to Tommy's mom, did he actually say, "This is Tommy's mom."? lol I agree with your other readers; I think Tommy's very insightful for a thirteen/fourteen year old. It was really nice to see David and Twoey actually getting along! lol And they were even talking about sorta deep stuff, with Kathy and the date and all. And yes, Twoey's in a tough place, since he knows all about Gary's matchmaking plan. I really enjoyed reading about them talking. Great chapter, as always, Skinny!

Shit, that was funny!!!!

Shit, Mikie, this was heartbreaking. I hope it's not your true story, although I know unfortunately, it happens a lot.

I ditto Defiance; I think Erik's statement about introducing Twoey to other guys went right over his head. He was probably concentrating on other things Erik was saying. So obviously Erik's not looking for a committed relationship, just someone he can get his rocks off with. Hopefully Twoey won't fall for him. I don't think so, because he's still so focused on David. Ha, and Delicious Danny! So Matty too, eh? The wrestling team has their own table at our high school. My kid was a captain of the team his junior and senior years. Our school has a HUGE wrestling team, including JV. And David's so funny with his thinking the wrestling team is only at their table to recruit new members! lol If only he knew... This was another great chapter, Skinny!

Maybe Kory's is a place where guys go cruising. You know, like a park, but with walls. And food. lol Danny goes there whenever his folks aren't home for dinner. Hmmm, could be a lot. Hope he's not picking up tricks or anything. I love David and all his 'plans'. lol He's got a great grampa, putting money in his account whenever he runs out. Does he know his daughter-in-law can't cook? lol I just wanted to point out something about dialogue tags. I hadn't noticed this in earlier chapters, but in this chapter you used a comma after dialogue that should have been a period. When Kathy laughed in one sentence, and then she blushed in another, you have commas after what she said, when there should have been periods. "Blah, blah, blah," Kathy laughed (or blushed, etc.). Laughing and blushing aren't dialogue tags. A dialogue tag has to be something a character would speak (said, replied, stated, asked). Laugh technically isn't a dialogue tag because it's hard to laugh and talk at the same time. This is how the sentences should look: "Blah, blah, blah (fill in the dialogue, lol)." Kathy laughed. (or blushed, etc.) Just thought I'd point that out, Skinny. Ok, on to the next chapter!

Oh my lord, Skinny! You had me peeing in my pants when David and Burch were going at it with the Pledge of Allegiance. I could see Burch's face in my mind, turning all shades of purple, screaming about there being only one God. A little red flag went up when Erik (stupid question: if Erik's real name is Derrich, and Erik is just a nickname, why isn't it spelled Erich? Just curious.), mentioned talking with Danny about David, and how he didn't seem upset at all that Twoey was ogling another boy. So I get the feeling Erik just wants to be fwb, fuck buddies, whatever, and not like a boyfriend. Obviously if he wanted to go out with Twoey, he'd be pretty hurt that Twoey's getting boners thinking about another boy. Great chapter, Skinny! Oh hey, do you like SD better than Skinny?

Also, thank you, Coastguard for writing all that on your tablet. I know what a pain in the neck it is to write on anything other than a computer keyboard! At least for me. Of course it would be easier if I could only get the two-thumbs-texting part down... :

Omg, Coastguard!!!! I'm so flattered! lol Jeez, I really better get my s**t together, and write better/longer reviews. Thank you so much!!!! And what a great compliment to come on my five year GAversary!! Sorry!!! Tim! Thank you also!! And I'm sure you've been reviewing way more than I have. But of course we have great excuses -- we've been very busy b/c one author on here keeps us on our toes with his updates! But yes, there are tons of great reviewers out there, including you.