charlieocho
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This is unbelievably good! The characters and their dialogue feel very real. Looking forward to lots more.
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A short but engaging chapter for this fine story. You are not going to separate them, now, are you?
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I don't want to analyze too much, but this story has captured me entirely. It is striking how so much "otherworldly" action comes across as being totally believable and natural. Definitely difficult for an author to accomplish, and you do it so well.
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i just had a flash of how difficult it's gonna' be for all of us Brotherhood junkies, when this story is over :wacko:.
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How do you do this? What an imagination you have. Ant's story unfolded so naturally and smoothly (and painfully). Where are we headed next, I wonder? Superb. Thank you.
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It is good to see I have lots of company....all of us wanting to read more of this great story. I will keep my fingers crossed, but if "that's all he wrote", so be it, and thanks for a heart-warming story.
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Chapter 6: Can't Keep Me Away pt 2
charlieocho commented on intune's story chapter in Chapter 6: Can't Keep Me Away pt 2
Well....things just got complicated. Usually, I am very patient with the unfolding of these stories. This time is an exception! Very well done. -
This story is unfolding very smoothly. I am being drawn right in!
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…Some Things Are Just Never What They Seem
charlieocho commented on Jwolf's story chapter in …Some Things Are Just Never What They Seem
Would like to echo Daddydavek's comment..."Just bitchy, quirky, and surprising enough to keep the reader wondering "what next?"!! -
What a great first chapter. I will try not to devour the whole thing at once.
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Whoa.....this gets better and better. So many twists and turns. When I see you have posted a new chapter, I delay reading it for a while, trying to stretch it all out! (But I can never wait too long.)
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This story is quite different, and I like it. Their future looks very interesting!
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Ch 17: The Indomitable Mrs. C
charlieocho commented on Hamen Cheese's story chapter in Ch 17: The Indomitable Mrs. C
wow Wow! That sure was vivid. The flood of emotions came right through. Good job. Can't wait for more, but also want it to last. Thanks. -
Damn! That was way too short!! Excellent. Left me wanting lots more.
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Yeah...I'm hooked, too. Hope there's more.
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Uh oh! Sounds like major trouble ahead. Those other players will be very angry.
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Chapter 1: Call Your First Witness
charlieocho commented on Andrew Q Gordon's story chapter in Chapter 1: Call Your First Witness
Perry Mason was great. Your narration is just as captivating. Courtroom drama sure can suck you right in. I like how your style in this story is slightly different from your other stories. Great dialogue. I agree, a companion piece sounds more appealing than a sequel. Looking forward to the rest. -
This is turning in to a fantastic story. Very spellbinding. Great job!
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Damn!! This is starting out like a real blockbuster. I am hooked....line and sinker. Take your time, and make this last a while.
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Good one! You are so good at this sort of interaction, what with the dialogue, and descriptions of physical actions, like sighs. You have the reader "eating out of your hand".
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This is so good I keep forgetting to vote! You are really not holding anything back with Jace's character, are you?
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...I Never Quite Knew What to Expect
charlieocho commented on Jwolf's story chapter in ...I Never Quite Knew What to Expect
Wheww!!! That was phenomenal. A lot of territory to cover in one chapter, but you pulled it off, Ace. -
We need lots more of this stuff. It reads smoothly and naturally. That isn't always the case with romantic scenes. We know this won't last, but.....
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I 'm afraid to hope for too much, here. But it does feel like things could pan out OK. They seem to fit together well. Kind of like opposites.
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Good, I am glad that part is done with now. I am thoroughly disgusted with Kai's actions, tho', and hope he gets what he deserves. Keep it coming!
