Plot is characters doing things. This chapter was characters doing things. I'm glad you want to know more about creators and enablers, but I don't like info-dumps.
P.S. Interesting comment. Why is that?
Interested in your take on this. Brandon hasn't given his sexuality a lot of thought either way. Granted, making out with a girl whose name he doesn't know at a party when he is drunk is not a lot to go on.
You're not writing this, I am and I'll be goddamn if I am going to minimize Brandon AND Jordan's trauma just to move the plot along.
It was not copied and pasted. It was written in third person like the rest of the story and when Brandon was referring to himself he used "I" and "me" pronouns so I'm really not sure what you're going on about.
Chapter Four of The In Between:
"I know," Jordan said. "And I stand by my word. I'll help you if you can find a way."
But I will not help you find the way. It was unspoken, but understood between them.
This is from Chapter 1 of Not The Sun:
Jordan had the classic all American good looks... blond hair, bright blue eyes and a perfect white smile. He was well built--not skinny and lanky like Brandon himself was. He looked every bit like the perfect prep school student and the polar opposite of himself. Probably made straight A's and played football or lacrosse.
I love that you touched on the language aspect of writing fantasy. My current WIP has multiple characters that don't speak the same language and had one of my characters have to learn an alien language. So my dialougue was awkward and stilted and I am still having to go back and make sure none of the "pretty" words I prefer are in the sentences. I also had to be very careful with slang like you mentioned.
I hate info dumps and skirted most of it by introducing a character from our world into a new world. He notes things that native characters wouldn't because it is part of their day to day. I drew from real world influences though, so I don't know if I would have the courage to create something from scratch. Kudos to those who can!
I'm on vacation right now, so I've been a bit lax in replying to reviews. But I do want to take a minute to say that I like cliffhangers and hot guys having sex and I'm not going to stop writing either. I'm also a character driven romance writer that likes to write weird shit from time to time. If that's not your cup.of tea, that's 100% okay and feel free to read something else. I've appreciated reading your comments.
I'm glad the plot caught your attention. It was an idea that ended up being a lot of fun to explore. Thanks for commenting, I'm glad you are enjoying the story!
That's an interesting take. I was allowed to have female friends in my room, but no boyfriends. So I guess I was fortunate not to have any. Thanks for commenting!
It's been warm during the day but very cold in the mornings ans evenings over here. My boss won't turn the heat on yet, but when he saw me bundled up in a blanket, he brought in a tiny space heater.