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As far as I can see, you're not doing anything wrong. You write with fluency and passion. You create a fascinating and involving scenario. Your writing is sensual and vivid and ... well, hot. So, give me excess of it, I say. But I guess that's just me. Well done. Hope you post more like this. You've to talent, imagination and verbal dexterity.

Interesting. Neatly handled. Thanks for sharing this. Wonder what will happen next.

Sorry it's been a tough week. Wish I had sexy dreams!

Have a great time.

ooo, good to see joann's writing!

It's great that you have somewhere to share these thoughts.

I love a hot bath!

A sorry story, for sure. But your compassion remains a source of hope.

Always enjoy reading your thoughts.

Good job, KC. Some very dark, vivid twists in there. Your writing is so rich and precise and energetic. A pleasure to read.

Good hearted good sense as usual, big fella.

Very strange response to getting mail! I guess the person has their own issues that they are dealing with. I love getting mail. Tried to get my facebook friends to do letter writing and got a few responses, but I always want more. You're a good-hearted guy who loves to connect. I'm sure all your other correspondents just love to get a postcard from you.

Good comments above. Here are my quick thoughts on this one. I think with feedback we have to try to treat others as we would wish to be treated. As stated above, writers here are not professionals and are mostly offering their work for free. If there are little errors - which there always are in my work, because I'm too busy to be careful - then a PM pointer can be useful. But it's a risky thing to expose your work to criticism and I think we all need to be sensitive to that. Friendly, sympathetic, good-humoured comments are always welcome; nit-picky, point-scoring is never worth anything, I'd say. When someone says something nice about my writing, I get a massive buzz. Isn't it better to be a spreader of such joy than a purveyor of misery, discomfort or disappointment? In the end, anyone who goes out of their way to make mean, unpleasant comments to someone else probably needs to think about what it is that they are really angry about.

Particularly well written. Horrific in places, but very sweet too. I liked the idea of Jake being the saviour and then revealing more. People can surprise us sometimes, and sometimes in good ways!

A really refreshing, different and interesting story. You write very well, especially in a second language! Lots of things to intrigue about this story. Thanks for sharing.

An interesting twist there. Thanks for sharing.

You write so well - pace, precision, energy, drive. You're the real thing: a writer. Those dark themes are always there, but did I actually see a happy ending here?! You cover serious issues dramatically and interestingly, not taking easy options anwyhere. Thanks for sharing.

A good idea - rival pitchers who are lovers. Thanks for sharing.

Some places are really precise and fine, with some evocative details. Thanks for sharing. It's really hard to bring off historical fiction. Well done.

You obviously enjoyed yourself writing this one. I like a story that is about joy and positivity. You write with great clarity! You should certainly enter more anthology pieces in the future. You obviously have a talent for writing short stories. Thanks for sharing.

You are so good at creating an imagined world. You invent lots of curious and interesting details. As ever, the story is full of heart. Thanks for sharing.

thanks so much for sharing this. you tell the story so well. and it's brave of you to share something personal. thanks for letting us in!

Nice job with a simple but resonant story. You don't try to over-complicate it, and that makes it work beautifully.

Happy birthday ... or not, as the case may be.

You do write very well, with real confidence and pace. You build things precisely and with real skill.