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  1. Dabeagle

    Born Again

    What a neat twist for a story. The idea of past lives is very interesting, and on some levels appealing. I'm not at all sure I believe in it, but sometimes you just have to wonder.
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    Jus Sanguinis

    This was really intriguing and so nicely drawn! I'm left wondering if Rowan will be able to switch between his 'Ent' form and his human form, if The Green Man's history is etched in the forest like rings on a tree, how Ent/Human sex works because hey, The Green Man did it so it must work somehow (Ouch) and of course I wonder if the Hansen's are all fire faeries of a sort and will come for vengeance? Seems unlikely since he was adopted. Really imaginative and entertaining!
  3. Dabeagle

    Mom Hugs

    Cathy reminds me of a movie synopsis for something I didn't watch. Bobby's Story or something with Sigourny Weaver? It has to be a weight every day to know what a person inflicted on their child, the amount of pain caused for something that was no fault of the child's. She may be offering a helping hand to atone for a stain that can never be washed clean, and that's applaudable, but saying he has a Mom now is really, really presumptuous. Nice short, Val, made me think and feel πŸ™‚
  4. Dabeagle

    Chapter 10

    Instead of seeing Caleb for a treasure hunt through thrift shops that Sunday, my dad announced that the roof needed reshingling and he needed help. My sister and I spent the next two weeks, outside of my own work schedule and her successfully getting a job with the town road crew for the internship she'd been hoping for, on the roof. It wouldn't have taken that long except dad found a part of the roof that had rotted, and it explained a certain stain on the bathroom ceiling which then required r
  5. Dabeagle

    Chapter 9

    I think I used too many 'B' names. Andy is seeing Bruce, Brandon is Kari's step-dad, and Brett screwed up Hunter. What's funny is DQ writes to me and he said Brandon as well. I'm surprised no one noticed the camera being knocked over...I guess I didn't say specifically that Caleb was, um, startled by Hunter's statement. πŸ˜„ I'll release at 50 if we get there, or next Sunday - whichever comes first.
  6. Dabeagle

    Chapter 9

    One of the challenges in writing Caleb was his thinking. His condition, to me, is challenging because he filters the world differently. For Caleb, following directions to please Hunter is just that. How he interpreted Hunter's distraction ploy could go a few ways; the fact it wasn't really a distraction attempt doesn't change things much - unless Caleb was hoping Hunter had enjoyed the distraction as more than that.
  7. I find characters fascinating. If the story isn't that great, sometimes a neat character can really lift the whole thing up - or sometimes poor characters can drag down a neat story idea. When I write I can spend weeks thinking of the story and how a character may react in a given circumstance - sometimes coming up with scenes that would be very deep into the story and then having to write all the supporting scenes to get to that point. Character building can be done tons of ways, but I usually start off one of two ways - either an image that I work from or I have no idea and build personality first. If I use an image my approach is normally that they are the love interest and so I will write from that direction - building on the image in the main characters mind because I think most folks start with the packaging - the outside - and then discover the product underneath. That's not to say there aren't other methods - meeting online such as in a virtual environment allows us to meet people by personality and the sound of their voice before we see their outside, as a for instance. If I choose to start writing without a firm idea of appearance it usually begins with an inciting incident - but I find it kind of funny that if I do so, I generally struggle early because I don't even have names for the characters. Over the course of a story or a series my characters will grow from a couple of different potentials: one is outside influences. This mostly happens during story development - I'll read or watch something and imagine how I'd do it differently. One example of that is the Tull Unification. I read a story - actually two by the same authors - and while enjoying the initial concepts, found places where I'd have made hard right turns on the choices the authors made. Will Tull the initial concept was of one of the primary characters dying, which can be a tough story two balance between the reality of death and not being maudlin so as to disengage the reader. The 'gimmick' here was the use of the band songs that ended up tying all the differing viewpoints together, but also because I chose not to extend the character dying very long. We meet Charlie Hampton, and in short order we lose him. By doing this we get an impression for who he is, but not a complete one so the reader is left with the impression, and it gives me a chance to alter that impression down the road. I think character building also includes character development. As a story progresses the character changes - not the basics of their personality, but perhaps they learn new things and adjust accordingly or situations change that make them reconsider or grow on a position or accepted set of behaviors. To me this can be a tricky area because the reader has grown used to the character, perhaps relates at that point and then things change. I read one story, by the unnamed authors above, whereby the reader was brought into a different characters POV and there was a scene that not only didn't seem to advance the story, but was decidedly uncomfortable to read (for me and some others, not to say it's a universal). The thing is reading is a subjective experience so when a character changes or grows, the reader may not approve. I used to not think about this very often, but I admit it affects my decision-making to a point now. One example would be that while writing the story arc in Sanitaria Springs with @Cynus, we developed the characters of Logan, Seth and Grayson. Cynus and I spent a lot - and I mean a ton - of time talking to each other and planning our characters to be consistent with who they are, honoring their motivations and allowing them to be breathing, living characters. The result of that was that, for a time, the three formed a 'thruple', or all three were dating each other at the same time - a form of a poly relationship. I can clearly recall a reader asking us both if this was a poly relationship, and then letting us know they'd no longer be reading. I understand. There are bright lines for every reader of discomfort or personal experience or (insert reason) that they won't read certain things. However as a writer it's a little frustrating because the characters have to grow as they would, not how I think life should be. Through the natural course of their development they tried the three-person relationship and it eventually failed. I think it was a valuable thing to have seen people make an honest effort to have the relationship they think works besot for them, and they continue to learn and grow whether it fails or succeeds. Another example would be a story that, at the time of this blog, is currently posting - Bloom. This story was influenced from many, many directions including a primary character in @Mrsgnomie's story, Three Strikes. The main character was developed over the course of several conversations with a young man who is very active in social media and he explained his motivations with various platforms and how people he knows of his own age group view his efforts. I found it very interesting, though I think many people would find it to be something of a generational or moral gap due to differing opinions and sets of morals. It was one reason I found my main character so interesting to write because his opinions weren't necessarily my own - though I feel more enlightened after having gone on his journey. My characters have allowed forays into the tried-and-true boy-meets-boy, but also boy-meets-boy-meets-boy. I once had couple + couple. One guy - okay more than one - has a thing for legs. One kind of has a thing for feet. Some like blonds while others find cinnamon colored skin attractive; some are dying to have sex and others just want a solid cuddle. Of the hundreds of characters I've written, the challenge sometimes is to make them stand out on their own. Sometimes it's hair color - like Caleb Montgomery's golden-red - or sometimes it's because the relationship isn't standard or because their boyfriend is a Nephilim (angel/human hybrid). Good characters can take us to strange, uncomfortable, scary, fun, sexy, heartfelt places all from the safety of our screens. Through these unique characters we get the chance to look through keyholes into a new experience. Thank you to the readers who are indulging my forays into the different ways people relate and fall in love.
  8. Dabeagle

    Chapter 9

    β€œOkay, Caleb. Ready?” β€œYep!” I opened the door to find him still in his boxers, but he'd ditched the shitty socks. β€œOkay! Let's do....” I set the underwear and socks down and hung the other items before looking carefully. That green pair really did seem like they'd match his eyes. β€œLet's do the green undies to see if the cut really works for you or not, and lets do the – ack!” He'd pulled down his boxers and discarded them, and I turned away quickly as he was pull
  9. Dabeagle

    Chapter 8

    I was sleeping in the next morning – one of my favorite things – when the harbinger of doom otherwise known as my sister jumped on my bed and woke me. β€œHunter. I have a great idea. Get up.” Without removing my eye mask I said, β€œNo. Your ideas suck. Let me sleep.” As if I'd not replied she said, β€œLet's do a twin brain ask me anything – live!” Sometimes I called her my other brain, and sometimes we called it twin brain when we were online. β€œNo. That's a dumb
  10. Dabeagle

    Chapter 7

    Part of Caleb's construction as a character came from watching the movie Lucky Number Slevin with my kids (I'd seen it before, but it was fun to introduce them to it). In my research afterward Ataraxia was the only thing I could find that was named as the reason for Slevin's inability to feel stress - and he wasn't Buddhist. There is also no real evidence it exists, though others who weren't spiritually inclined also claim to have felt this and were pleased to have a name for it - I have no evidence if they were trolls or truthful. I make no claims one way or another, it's simply a plot device and that was the information I had.
  11. Dabeagle

    Chapter 7

    I decided to go work on my clock face as a distraction. I headed downstairs with the wafting smell of our traditional, favorite birthday dinner – chicken Parmesan – and was heading for the back door when I heard the doorbell. I paused and turned to head for the door, but my mom stepped from the living room to answer it. I turned again to go on my way, but my mother's voice stopped me. Not by calling me, but by what she said. β€œOh! Hi, Nancy. What a nice surprise! And Caleb – my God, ready
  12. Dabeagle

    Chapter 22

    Thank you for the notes and the review - I'm delighted new people are finding my stories.
  13. Dabeagle

    Chapter 8

    That's okay. Words are supposed to be my job.
  14. Dabeagle

    Chapter 6

    I nodded, waved and headed off on my walk home. Truthfully, I don't mind the long walk, and I think better when I don't have to deal with other people. I had laundry to get done, but I was going to post my steampunk cum clockwork costume tonight, and I was looking forward to the rush of approval. Plus, with this project over, I had to turn my eye to the next one. I also had to decide if I was going to go back down the sugar daddy route. Should I call Gary? He seemed okay about the not-having-sex
  15. Dabeagle

    Chapter 14

    Thank you Noah for such kind words. This story was very well received when I released it, and I'm still surprised at how well it did. Thank you for reading and for your comments - happy reading.
  16. Dabeagle

    Chapter 5

    Saturday morning brought another work day – and I really should see about adjusting my schedule so I can sleep in on Saturdays once in a while. I was stuck with the manager, so no buying things from my stash until the next day. Once home though, I got dressed for the final stress relief party of high school. I wore my ripped jeans with a pure black tee shirt that had rainbow blocks around the edge of one arm and my canvas sneakers. That was the easy part. Moisturizing my finicky skin took far lo
  17. Dabeagle

    Chapter 5

    The ~C~ just stands for Corners. I frequently use something of the story name when there is a scene break.
  18. Dabeagle

    Chapter 4

    That's a good point. I won't reveal anything yet, but Hunter has some of his roots in the way Chris Walsh conducts his online persona and he also has some roots in MrsGnomie's character from the baseball themed story they wrote that I enjoyed so much. Boy, my memory gets worse as I go!
  19. Dabeagle

    Chapter 4

    I enjoyed writing a lot of Hunter's lines πŸ™‚
  20. Dabeagle

    Chapter 3

    Thank you for giving it the chance to earn being read. As I mentioned earlier, every character has a journey, has growing to do. I hope you enjoy the remainder.
  21. Dabeagle

    Chapter 4

    Sunday was a work day, but not a fun one – the manager was there due to the assistant suddenly quitting. Or being fired. She was close-lipped but for telling us the former assistant was 'no longer with the company'. Bitch also put my stash back on the shelves. I was folding some jeans when Kari's grandparents came in with her little twinkie brother. The boy is too skinny for me, kind of angular like Bruce, but that doesn't mean he's not seriously cute. Kari introduced me and I made a lew
  22. Dabeagle

    Chapter 3

    Gary and his wife and his two kids. In my store. The night after a date and him stating he wanted to have sex with me. Just...shoot me now. I fought off my initial impulse, which was to run screaming from the store. My second impulse was to hide in the back room, but you know what? Fuck that. Fuck Gary. As Nicole went to see to them I folded some jeans more forcefully than I needed to. He knew where I worked, now – but there was something else. Something...slimy. Slithering around my guts like a
  23. Dabeagle

    Chapter 9

    At the end of those two weeks my mother's things were loaded into a moving truck. She made a halfhearted attempt to get me to join her, and then she was gone. I said goodbye to her and watched as her little Honda pulled away, heading down my street for the last time. I was dawdling at home, wondering when I'd see my mom again and what that would be like, when I got a surprise call from Elliot. β€œHi, Elliot. What's up?” β€œHey! Glad I got you. Listen, what are you doing in, l
  24. Dabeagle

    Chapter 1

    That's a shame. Every character has to go through an evolution or period of growth. Even though I say this as the person that wrote it, I'm proud of the story.
  25. Dabeagle

    Chapter 2

    I made it home by five and headed to my room. My dad wouldn't be home for another thirty minutes or so, but my mom should be here any minute. I breezed into my room – I love my room. It's the most unique room in the house. I put my own baseboards in and built a wooden canal around my ceiling into which I'd put a rope light that I could dim; it offered indirect light throughout my space. My closet was little more than a two-by-two cubby, and I'd hung a gauzy curtain over it with little white holi
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