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Thanks Tim. There's no feel good factor in this story I'm afraid and I don't expect Jeff to get a great deal of sympathy from anyone reading it, even if they are able to understand why he is like that. I know that there are a lot of people out there who were/are like him and they don't see themselves as the problem. There are heroes in this story but the narrator isn't necessarily one of them and for that reason it may not be particularly easy to read but I wanted it to be realistic. It was difficult for me to write because I dislike Jeff as much as anyone else. I hope that I've done a reasonable job.
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A lot of good points made here most of which will be answered in the coming chapters but it may not be an easy read for many. David and Jeff are on a collision course, which will shake the whole family. Jon, as you point out is an unknown quantity at the moment. Jeff seems to favour his second son already but it's not clear whether he will want to follow his dad's mantra. Suzanne is probably having the worst of it at the moment and making a valid attempt to keep the lid on a very volatile situation.
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Well, Jeff's personality invites trouble so we're pretty much guaranteed to see some sparks flying soon.
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Thanks Gary. Jeff certainly has some serious issues but as you point out, they're not limited to his wartime experiences. His family will provide the biggest test for him and maybe a much needed wake-up call.
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Nicely written. I guess that answered a lot of Matt's questions. I like the rope ladder bit. I've tried climbing a rope ladder before-although not in the same circumstances as Matt- and it was incredibly difficult to do. I might have done better had I had the same incentive as Matt.
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Nice chapter. I enjoyed the movie theater bit. 'Finger licking good,' I think they call it but the end was a little unexpected.
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Seems to be a well thought out plan by Parker who knows what he wants and Matt's eagerness to play along must have been music to his ears.
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'No one could be that good looking physically and not have serious flaws of some kind.' Yeah, and it's normally because they're straight! Parker seems to have everything going for him though and the 'young Richard Gere' thing is an enormous compliment. I would have been wagging my tail at that one. Sounds as if Barbara is trying to set them up, I wonder if she can see something that our protagonist seems to want to hide?
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He's not fooling anyone with his 'I can talk music all day' line. He's as gay as it's possible to be! Haha I can almost see him drooling at the prospect of meeting this boy.
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The gun is a worry, especially with kids in the house and Jeff's increasing reliance on alcohol. If he really cares about his kids then he's going to have to make some big decisions. Thanks JayT.
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I suppose Jeff isn't going to be too popular around here. He does have some good points...I just can't think of any at the moment.
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Now that would have been interesting assuming of course that it wasn't a girl in there with him and they weren't playing board games. Thanks Edward.
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Thanks for your comment. I'm not expecting Jeff to get a great deal of sympathy from the readers because he has a lot of faults, problems, and preconceived ideas that will put him in direct confrontation with his kids and ultimately lead to......well, we will have to wait and see what it leads to.
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Whatever makes you think there's going to be fireworks? Thanks for reading and commenting.
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Jeff is definitely not in denial, he's just a homophobic, sexist, bigot with PTSD, a hard-core drink problem and some serious emotional issues. Thanks for reading and commenting.
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Thanks Dave. Yes, he certainly has some very serious issues that need to be dealt with and his family, particularly Suzanne, are suffering because of it. There's a lot going on here which will become apparent soon.
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A nice story covering a lifetime. It could easily have been a lifetime of disappointment and misery for Tyler. Thanks @Daddydavek
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The following day was difficult; my hangovers were getting worse, although I couldn’t remember having that much to drink. I spent twenty minutes searching for my car keys and when I found them, I remembered I had left the car at work. I slumped in the armchair and closed my eyes. “What’s wrong with you?” “Suzanne, where have you been?” “I could ask the same of you. What time did you get in last night?” “Not late.” “Come on, Dad. I went to bed at eleven and you still weren’t h
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This is a wonderful article by @Comicality. Anyone who has written anything and posted it online will be able to relate to this and I'm sure agree wholeheartedly with what he says. I think that no matter what people say, it is always difficult to accept criticism over something that you have put so much time and effort into. Even if you know that it is justified and will ultimately prove helpful and make you a better writer, it's still not easy. I'm always wary about criticizing other people's work because I know that this is their baby and to them it's the best looking baby in the world.
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Thank you @dughlas for reading and commenting. Yes, it doesn't look good for Jeff. Unless he turns things around, it can only end badly for him and he's probably the only one who can't see it.
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After getting it so wrong last week I decided to play safe this time and keep my thoughts to myself. Nice chapter Gary. But Jimmy has the patience of a saint. And I've seen some fairly erotic dancing between gay guys and women.
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Thank you @rockycs for posting this link. I wasn't aware of this although I did read once about the Agent Orange testing that went on here. It's interesting that the figures are roughly the same although I certainly wouldn't trivialize anyone's participation in the Vietnam War. It was a little before my time so I didn't really know enough about it to have an opinion on what happened but recently I started reading about it for the story and I found it really interesting. I ended up doing way too much research than was necessary but I found it fascinating.
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Thanks CG. Jeff isn't going to make many friends on this site, even I dislike the character although as you point out he is dealing with a few issues. He won't be able to solve those problems with alcohol so it will get worse, I'm afraid, and not much hope in the next few chapters. Todd is his counterbalance and it would be great if every Jeff out there had a brother like him to reel him in but even Todd has his work cut out here.
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The city and year is shown in the last chapter @Sweetlion but if you're where I think you are then you will probably know for certain by the end of the next chapter. BTW I love your city but not your hockey team.
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A very good guess Carlos. I did a lot of research for this one and this means that I got it more or less right which is good.
