joann414

Different, but lovely first encounter into the sexual world.

OMG! what a feel good read, and it made my day so much better. Your story flowed along at just the right feel, and had a wonderful ending. Loved both characters, and their determination to win, one pulling, and one pushing. Great story:)

Ok, I know I don't have to tell you that this was great writing since all the reviews reflected that. Sad, but beautiful. I have on queston tho. Why, the reference to the pregnant woman? Death and birth? What? You know me. Curious

I knew that the nudist deal was going to be mistake, and I am glad Jacob is keeping his head on his shoulders, and looking out for Matthew. I can't wait for more and I am now caught up. Hurry up!lol

I loved the wabbit line also. I felt that Sarah was out of the house, but oh well, I know I will have to wait to see what happens with her. For some reason, uncertainty rears it's head about the nudist inn. Hope the guys keep their wits about them, and think with their right head. Another good one! Thanx

I laughed out loud in this chapter several times. Love the though of Nicholas so anxious to see Matthew that he comes over before daylight in his pj's. The way that you wrote Jacob's dad talking to Sarah made me fall out laughing. I just could not help. Sounded like a big fly swatter swatting at a raving banshee. It was so damn funny if you know what I mean. Sure hope she comes around, and sounds like she needs to if she wants to stay a family to these three males. Matthew could be such a slut if he was not so young, and he and Nicholas are as bad as the older ones as far as sex and affection. All of that being said, I loved this chapter, and the interaction with the out of town boys seems like is going to become quite interesting! Can't wait for the next chapter, and as for the "easter egg." True Love

Wow, long second part, but definitely my fav chapter so far, and not only for the sex You had some great imagery in this chapter. Loved the melting ice cream one. That one just did it for me. As far as other things, some of your little details tickled the shit out of me. Glad Jacob is telling Matthew the right and wrong as far as brother to brother relationships. Hope Jacob's mom is as accepting of the situation as Kyle's is, and if my mom had ever put a condom in my suitcase, I would have died of a heart attack right when I found it. lol Kyle has had some horrible things happen to him, and on top of that knowing what a homophobic prick his own father is. Good riddance to him is all I can say. HIs mom seems to be a great parent w/o any help. Your little sex scenes are hot. I loved where Matthew was watching Jacob and Kyle, pleasuring himself all the while. He's really young to be so cute and sexy. lol Well, I will quit boring you now. On to the next one:)

THe dream deal was a little eerie, but added a little mystery to the chapter. Matthew is so sweet, and so is Nicholas. The guys, (Jacob and Kyle) are so funny in their anticipation mode. On to the rest of the chapter

" look of pleasure", I bet he did have pleasure written all over his face, and body if anyone looked. All of this brotherly love stuff beginning to develop seems to be pretty normal when young guys are growing up. I am really curious about how Matthew will develop in the story tho, even tho he is not one of your two main characters. Loving your story!

Finally got around to your story, and I absolutely love it. Can definitely tell you know the feelings of a fourteen year old boy finding his first love. Jacob is so cute when he spaces out, getting lost in his thoughts about Kyle. I love your style of writing, and you have a gift of knowing how to entertain the reader. I have read some stories that were well written, had a great plot, but still came across as just plain dull, but yours kept my interest thruout. Headed to the next chapter.

What sadness the leaving of our loved one can be, and you captured it beautifully. I was in awe of this writing John. Just ventured into, and received a wonderful gift here.

Great start here. Love the meet over the dogs and the little girl. Off to the next chapter.

Now this was different, but wow, it just drew me in, and when you said the shadow of horns at the end, I was like , oh shit, the devil himself. Enjoying all of these much. Have to say, glad you posted your frustration today! lol

And to think I want a wolf tattoo. Now, I am contemplating the facial expression. This was great!

Saw where u were so frustrated with your writing today, and decided to lurk around in the writings of someone who was so concerned with his stories, and I have to say that I am very pleased that I did. This is a wonderful, feel good , story. thank u. Btw, i am a total Christmas buff.

Sad storyline, but perfect ending. It feels like happily ever after for the guys. So glad that I stopped and read both of these after reading the review on the home page. Great work!

So sad and tragic. So glad to know that there is another part. Great storytelling here!

Love to think that you have the ability to predict the future, and the world will eventually become a better place. I really love reading your different take on things.

Your imagery in the first part was waaaaay up there, and It was a very sweet story as Andy said. Your writing is very easy to read, and very enjoyable. thanx

My heart goes out to you, and I am so glad you have someone who loves you so much. Sounds as if you are both very lucky. Naked emotion always makes a beautiful story be it 10 words, or 1000.

Man, I could feel the emotions slapping me in the face here. Waiting around and uncertainty in a relationship takes a hard toll on anyone.

Very, very, moving, and heartwrenching. No real purpose in life if you don't feel needed and loved. Beautiful.

This is so neat. Writing a poem about writing, and drawing the reader into your story and it's character. You have a huge thought process, having this idea.

Wow, you are full of surprises. This is a very sad, but great piece. Hard to think that things like this happen everyday. Good job though even if it was pretty sad.

This piece made me reflect on so many times in my life when I was alone, and pushed anyone away who tried to be there for me, and deep inside, I wanted them there, but was hurting too much to allow them to be close. Words of this poem is the truth, no matter what anyone says about being happier as a loner. great writing!