Miles Long

Masterful approach to solving the Will rumblings from Zach's less enlightened teammates. While manipulative it was awesomely inspiring and a constructive solution. Go Zach! JJ was less graceful but I think hormones were too high to notice the lack of panache in his "Aw shucks" routine. Many thanks for all the work.

George is like the Scooby Gang of the Royal Navy. Thank you for the enjoyable chapter.

JJ may be headed for disaster but Brad is way out of line trying to interfere. I'm glad to see JJ start to stand up for himself and call Brad out when he's acting too Bradish. Exciting chapter, thanks.

Zach is such a devious little shit (I love it) and it's hard to fault his actions when others are being such a-holes. Satisfying chapter, thank you Mark and team.

The handcuff debacle was hilarious and a complimentary contrast to the intensity of the football game. Thanks for the laugh. Despite my reservation, JJ's first kiss with creepazoid was sweet. Thanks for the chapter.

Thanks for another great chapter. It feels like some seeds of discontent have been planted and I look forward to learning how it all turns out.

This story introduced me to whole new overwhelming universe of other stories and for that I must extended continued thanks for this interpretation.

Congratulations on a romantic tale that stymies the readers by denying them a clear happily ever after. Overall, I enjoyed this story. The premise while not unique had enough of a twist, it was refreshing and believable. I was very impressed with the richness of the imagery, like the many falls Rover encounters throughout the tale and the call back to the consistent themes. The chemistry between Rover and Slade is also so electric, it draws readers in and demands they route for their coupling. There were a couple/few areas that the author may want to consider refining should the story be revisited, pace and backstory revelation. It was most confusing in explaining the tertiary characters like Sett and George (they felt like completely expendable characters) and it really prevented the reader from having any empathy for Rover's father (not enough redeeming qualities were shown in Rover's dad's current actions to make me believe that Rover's quest to fix things isn't a suicide mission). Regardless of the opportunities, the story was moving and I appreciate you sharing your work Luc Rosen.

Wow! Tragically, beautifully, sad and an excellent ending though I was really wishing on a star for a joined HEA. Thank up you for sharing.

Rousing first kiss. I hope Rover reconsiders.

On one hand Whew Hoo! On the other I think Rover is mistaken in his desire. Abuse is not the victims responsibility. Rover's dad needs to save himself.

Decision time.

The limited likes is very vexing. Nice work. Trust. like falling, appears to be a continuous thread. The call back to the "Do you trust me?" theme has been very effective.

Humongous compliments for clearing up some of the dangling threads that I commented on previously and giving some basis for his father's seemingly outrageous behavior. He's obviously a whack job, but is was refreshing to learn some of the drivers of his twist.

Argh another hone cliffhanger. Beautiful depiction of the emptiness.

They are like ninja guards...I'm not sure how much more punishment our hero should have to endure.

Nice dynamic between the two lead characters.

Rapturous description of Rover's experience.

At first the stories jump cut pacing created a compelling tension, but now it's starting to feel like key plot points are being avoided. The premise still drives me to finish but I have to admit I am floundering a bit and while I could just ignore it and say nothing, I feel your creativity deserves honest and constructive feedback.

Another fall for Rover...he needs a jet back or a plastic bubble. He brings up a good question about visibility...what about goggle earth?

I have likes again. Good to see Rover's starting to open his mind.

Falling is a constant theme for Rover.

And now we have our title .

While I'm still enjoying the story overall, the unravelling of his father's situation is staring to feel less believable, it maybe how key bits of information are being introduced so I am willing to force my disbelief suspension. Thanks for the work.

Who is George?