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Wow! So many things were able to be resolved at the same time, but I feel it is only the head of the centipede that has been removed in each area. There are more "legs" to be found and cut off!!. Such a powerful story and superb story telling!
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Chapter 172 Welcome to the Real World
pvtguy commented on Dodger's story chapter in Chapter 172 Welcome to the Real World
Robbie's dose of reality will be a turning point in his maturity, for sure! Sue has really been a great influence on him simply by loving him and not letting him get away with more nonsense than he has. She is more aware than he thought of his actions, but is turning them into growing experiences. His growing relationship with Rory will teach him the true depth of friendship. Daniel let his unease show when he said he had no choice but to go to Don's. I'm not sure what age Canada has about parental visitation, but there are ages in each State in the U.S. that allow a child to decide whether s/he wants to continue regular visitation. Great chapter!- 14 comments
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A wonderful time and warm chapter which finds the relationship growing deeper! Now, hoping to find out what's going on with Mike, et all.
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Skillfully said! I do reluctantly accept some of the slang that has invaded and become a part of the "advancement" of language, but still long for what was considered "proper" English that I was taught many decades ago. I was one of the weird ones who loved to diagram sentences which inevitably leads to making corrections to such phrases as "none of us like to..." instead of "none of us likes to..." (since the subject of the verb is singular (none), not plural (as implied in "us")....
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Freddie is definitely exploring... Another word I've never heard: Scandiwegian! I love it! Another minor correction: “It’s the principal of the thing... a principal is a person, a principle is a value or rule.... This is a common error (along with affect and effect)...sorry, pet peeve of a former language instructor... I truly love the Hugillverse that you have created in your writing.
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The mystery that is Cottontail certainly has the skills to help Jamie with this so-called "reality" show. Still, it does nothing to reveal who Cottontail really is. Is the title of this story a cynical view on all people or just those presented in the story? Do we all present many faces to others, depending on the various situations in which we find ourselves? And are some of those faces a lie? Something to ponder!
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I still feel we are in the calm before a storm! It was great serendipity that Chase happened to show up and then meet Bryan! Dad seems a lot more comfortable with Gray and Raffa. I'm still worried about Mike's situation at the moment.
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Engineer Benson Chapter 13
pvtguy commented on Wayne Gray's story chapter in Engineer Benson Chapter 13
@Wayne Gray says, " I try to get inside every character's head..." And that is precisely why your stories are so compelling!- 21 comments
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Engineer Benson Chapter 13
pvtguy commented on Wayne Gray's story chapter in Engineer Benson Chapter 13
I am just wondering how much longer they can find supplies. I know they will soon have vegetables from the garden. And so the small community grows again. I am so glad you returned to writing! I hate to see what's going on, but there's little I can do personally to change it other than making my voice known to the elected officials who supposedly are there to defend the Constitution and look out for our welfare. I am very angry that no one seems to be challenging the unelected guy who is dismantling entire governmental departments. Where are the courts and challenges coming from Congress?- 21 comments
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Ah....I see @Summerabbacat beat me to it, but great minds.... Glad to be back with these characters for a while! It's off to a great start. And the title is quite intriguing.
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Hmmm....let me see...a woman with a broom ...cackling... Deidre!
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Things are smoothing out for Grayson and his relationship with Raffa is developing nicely. Uncle Bryan will be a welcome confidant. Now we have to move on to see what happens with Mike, the new position at work, and Dad.
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As the brothers never really had a chance to truly know each other, it seems they are now willing to build a relationship as people and not just from the same parentage. I do hope they start building a more social life and open the house to others! Wouldn't it be a slap in Father's face if events for those served by the centre took place there?!? I am already excited about this story!
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The tension in this chapter is palpable! Things are moving quickly on all fronts. I am hoping Daniel isn't showing signs of Kaposi's Sarcoma. Superb writing once again!
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@weinerdog wonders: I'm not sure if a family gathering like this is the best place for Bryan to talk to Gray's Dad. Perhaps it is a good place to start. After all, the family is well aware of the situation. This can turn into a true family affair. Great chapter!!!
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Robert Hugill can craft a story! In this one, we find a man who has been betrayed by his wife and is able to rise from the challenges and maintain a positive environment with his son while at the same time forging a new relationship with a widowed friend and his son. Together, they form a wonderful family unit and support each other through the challenges caused by the betrayal of the wife. It is a remarkable story of growth, redemption, and allowing truth to self to finally shine through.
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>The poor sods left behind to pick up the pieces after the vultures have gone. An apt observation and the summary of this wonderful tale. Jackie may have thought Arthur "boring", but he brought stability and joy into Ludo's life - more than she did! Ludo would have lived his life of "quiet desperation" per Thoreau had it not been for Jackie's pursuit of excitement with Andreas, but this also was the seed event that led Ludo to break that mold. Damian has truly been a consistent source of joy, curiosity, and love of Ludo! Thanks for sharing this story. I, too, hope to run across these characters again!
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1. We sometimes have to pause and forget the angst of life, realizing we have things to do in the time ahead. Beautifully written. 2. As a retired educator, I have many reminders of former students who stood out to me. That we remember those who have touched us in many ways is to honor their memory even while wondering "what if" or "what has become of them?" 3. Building a "nest" that protects us from the elements is to find a place of respite. In these days where more are forced into homelessness, my thoughts are focused on the hope that they may find rest.
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I hope the positive things happening in Gray's life help push away the fears and negative thoughts he holds about himself. He's accepted in his family, he has a wonderful boyfriend, he has an awesome brother and great support at work!
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Ah, the secrets that Mike holds.... Hope it tames, or better yet, contains the Animal! Things are getting better and better for Gray and Raffa!
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Daddy issues & a friendly twitcher
pvtguy commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in Daddy issues & a friendly twitcher
As one story ended, another one begins. Thankfully, the Hugilverse continues and keeps me starting my day on a wonderful note. I'm looking forward to this story already.- 13 comments
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Apparently, Olly is oblivious to what worried Gray so much. He is definitely delightful! Things are looking up for Gray at work with the promotion coming sooner than he imagined. Now to find out what Mike meant....
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Let’s all go on a Summer holiday
pvtguy commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in Let’s all go on a Summer holiday
So...we don't get to perv on the extracurricular activities with Graham, but then again, that's not the focus, is it? I do believe that Jackie will find her relationship with Damian to weaken as the years pass due to her own actions and regardless of how long she is sentenced to prison. The vacation gives them time to relax and get away from the ongoing tension at home. While I hate to leave this story, as I do all wonderful stories, you have very adequately described the effect of poor decisions by one parent on not only her son, but also the work of moving on. Well done, @Robert Hugill! -
The threads are starting to pull together: Th various agencies are working together to dismantle the Deck and rescue the boys that they can; Liberty Academy is becoming a reality; Don DeLuca and Mr Motts will provide some solid financing; adoptions are taking place; and Roger is healing along with the boys! What a wonderfully powerful chapter which leaves me longing for the next one!!!
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Another wonderful chapter to add to this incredible work! I wanted to taste everything offered! What a wonderful way to celebrate their 10th anniversary! So glad you are able to post again, @Andre Delport.
