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Is this really a plot for a Hallmark movie? Wonderful chapter!
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I like the commingling of stories - they certainly enhance this story! We learn more about the past accomplishments/history of the family as well as hints of what is to come! That meal sounded absolutely delicious. Slimies as the warm-up to the rest was great! Liebe is developing a very educated palate! Tony
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As a former school counselor, and simply one who is interested in helping others, I am most impressed with how well you explore the inner workings of the minds of each of these individuals: Niki's fear of yet desire for personal freedom; Lukas' growth through his experience of homelessness; Inno's inner voice and feeling of guilt as a victim of a predatory priest and the strict "Catholic" teachings which lacked any humanity; Niki's father and brother and the weasel, Herr Weber. Having experienced that type of teaching in my past, that propelled me to study counseling psychology and offer a much warmer experience of acceptance to my students.
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Before and After the Wedding
pvtguy commented on Refugium's story chapter in Before and After the Wedding
I love the story but this was definitely a sad chapter. Well written, it certainly evokes the emotions both men felt. -
And more seeds are planted...literally and figuratively, apparently.
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In spite of the errors mentioned (formatting - not content), it is a bittersweet chapter in that they are saying goodbye to My Amira. Still, what awaits when they get home sounds wonderful and exciting.
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Accepting oneself - warts and all - and realizing that these all add up to make us realize these are the source of the gifts we can share with others. It is in that sharing that we give ourselves the space to grow even more. The self-reflection you have shared with us does resonate as elements of the journey we all go through to finding and developing our purpose in life. Your gift of writing - a talent not all of us are able to do so eloquently - comes from your experience of your own life journey. Thank you for sharing it with us. It certainly resonates with me - and so many others, based on the comments.
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You certainly haven't disappointed in sharing these stories with all of us! Happy? Yes...but always hungry for more!
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When the community feels ownership into their institutions, there should be more cooperation and respect for the police and fire responders. Good job here!
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I certainly hope there were some open minds in Franklin - if only Mrs. Ogilvie. Maybe an escape to another environment would be good for both Layne and Owen.
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Agree with all the comments above! And I agree with Liebe - she could make art that looked like what passes for "modern" (ok...I'm not a fan of a lot of these styles!). I took a narrow rail ride in the mountains of Ecuador - it is truly a wonderful way to see places otherwise one woudn't. Thanks for the chapter and insights!
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Excellent portrayal of a strict Catholic upbringing, the guilt Inno felt, the true rape of the boy followed by making him feel like we was the one who initiated it - all the signs of a predator - wow! Simply well done!!
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Nice handling of the situation so far! But it will be interesting to see the seemingly pleasant town get a shake-up.
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Old Friends and Perfection
pvtguy commented on Parker Owens's story chapter in Old Friends and Perfection
I love this style of poetry. That said, the imagery of Old Friends is so vivid! Loved it! And how I do resemble the real description left in Perfection. Thanks once again for sharing your talent! -
Reverend Fielden Takes a Position
pvtguy commented on Refugium's story chapter in Reverend Fielden Takes a Position
Ah...now we see the hypocrisy of Felden as is evidenced in the history of most organized religions. The story grows a bit more complicated. Will Jordan actually be the key to exposing "all the white married men"? -
It is interesting to see how the situation of Niki's life is viewed by him and his father. There is mystery indeed which I hope he finds out. You've done an outstanding job in giving us a view into Niki's life through his eyes and experience.
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I love the poem. The story has begun with planting intrigue!
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I can see the bureaucrats' arguments. Whoever made the decision to move (if it was the entire department) now owns the mistake...so it will be good they do the work to make things better. Lesson hopefully learned.
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Small-minded bigots exist in every town. Those with "power" don't like to share it with anyone and the "natural order" of the town has been disrupted, causing much discomfort to the existing power structure. Interesting chapter. How long till Miss Ellie is jilted once again?
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I would be glad to share a piece with you!
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I think I gained 10 pounds from those vicarious meals! That cake sounded scrumptious! While I couldn't dream of taking such a trip, I sure enjoy accompanying them on the charter! Thanks again for another wonderful chapter!
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Ah, the politics of a small town with small minds. Methinks Ma Owen may have some inkling of truth...
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I've re-read them 3 times, and each time, I was reminded of my feelings when fall settled when I lived in the northern U.S.: The first biddings of fall were of beauty - colorful leaves, crisp air, clear days - soon to be followed by grey days , bare trees, frigid temperatures and eventually snow! I am not one who relishes either cold weather or bare trees. Thus, I was left with a feeling of melancholy. It also reminds me of aging, where there are fewer days ahead than behind and yet so many ideas and projects that will be "pressed between the pages of thick, obscure volumes and forgotten." I am left with a strong sense of loneliness, perhaps not what you intended but what these poems evoked in me. Beautiful writing!
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Entertaining and educational! Teaching by example with both a lightness in the first 2 stanzas and insight into the discomfort one might feel as present but not part of a group. That especially resonated with me!
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Simply wow to both you and @AC Benus.
