Jason Rimbaud

See this is the part I was warning you about when I said I was annoying. But since your new to the experience of me, 🤪, I'm going to ignore the logic you created waaay back in chapter three I think.

You have already shown the world you created to be unreliable narrators. I can't believe no one picked up on your comment. But I did. You tipped your hand several times in the comments, like a trail to follow little bread crumbs, which makes the story more exciting as I put on my Homles hat. Just to let everyone know I see the spelling error but I won't correct because it makes me laugh and reminds me of Homie hat.

So he had sex with a roommate, and not one mention of his big dick? How is that possible, they did a 69 position, it would be hanging all up in the roommates face? Did I read that wrong? Yep, read it right. Boys in this Earth really are dumb.

Lord of The Rings trilogy wasn't that big really compared to other trilogies in the same genre. I'm just saying because I'm contrarian and never really liked the books. At the age when I discovered Tolkkein, I also discovered David Eddings and Terry Brooks, so I left LOTR's alone and only read it once.

I don't have fantasies, I just have people I have sex with. And when I was younger, let's just say I am happily married for eight years now and couldn't be happier. He's finally at college, can't wait for the story to kick it up a notch. I want to learn more about this world.

Twinkscape? 🤪

It seems the dads go back and forth about understanding about their son's condition to completely not realizing that he had a brain injury and are shock that he makes a mistake. Bad dads.

Smaller head, Especially in your world you created. I'd never let a four inch dick top me. J (the reformed whore)

Nothing much happened here, we get a peek of the world, Shawn/Sean runs into an old friend, they bang in the bathroom. It always amazes me how guys will let anything slide in pursuit of getting laid. Shawn/Sean's excuse on why his ass is completely different should have been a huge red flag for anyone with their education, but then he wouldn't have gotten to fuck. boys are stupid

spoken like a true politician

So I have a big problem with this statement Then, they all froze for a moment, then a moment later they resumed their conversation with one saying, "The United Earth Military must stay strong for our safety, That looks like a big AI adjustment happening on a grand scale. It reminds me of a Stargate SG1 episode where a community lived under a dome and each time it shrunk, it would adjust the population through the link they wore. This society is getting more interesting now that we are out in the world.

Skepticism: what every claim ever made should be met with. I only want to believe in anything for good reasons, it doesn’t matter what the claim is. If there is no evidence for the claim, feelings, personal experience, and comfort are not good reasons.

Probably, your mind is already sexy, the hottest part of any guy, and you make me laugh…the beard is negotiable if it’s short and groomed. But long unkempt beards requiring no kissing! gymnastics is too gay for me and I don’t think I’ve had a Lee before so definitely

Tease

So Shawn/Sean is a big ole bottom with a big ole dick. The society that on the surface looked so shiny and new might not be the paradise first thought.

Wouldn't it have been crazy if original Shawn/Sean was straight, and woke up to this reality, what a bunch of fun you could have gotten into.

Thank you Chris! I really appreciate your words and reviews.

So I missed this, I'm sorry, I had been sick with a stomach thing for the last four days, so apologize for the late response. The Jason from those journals was kind of dick, and wholly self involved. He was a drug addict, a whore, and a smart ass who used his body like a weapon. But I like to think he had a few human qualities. I actually think, out of the two, Konstantin was the more manipulative. When I first started putting this together, drawing on my own journals for inspiration, I wanted to see if I could have all characters be a bit unlikable yet still find a way to make them sympathetic. I also had to write in first person. The story is fiction with a bunch of situations from my own life. Though I never hooked up with an ex. Once I was done, I moved on and never looked back. Thanks for reading along, it meant a lot.

So if I'm remembering correctly, and I won't go back because I'm lazy, this planet, all males after puberty are either top or bottoms, yet Shawn/Sean seems to be both. Must be a way for him to level up faster, Fan Theory One: The Omega's, who king was gay, visit earth in the distant past. One of the homophobes made a crack, so he went to the Aliens and had them devise a virus to eradicate all females as punishment so all the male had to now be gay. And they are all "observing" a big TV screen and earth is one giant OnlyFans channel.

So I don't believe he was pushed. Matter of fact I think Shawn/Sean jumped on his own volition. By the way, I'm not looking for confirmation to any of my wild supposes. Nor if I criticize a character's motivation, that does not mean I'm criticizing the author. I get hyper into the story so from here on out, imagine I love this story and all comments are made with that in mind. The doctor is shit at his job. A few questions and then a pass off to "help". Looks like they aren't so evolved that doctor's have changed. They still don't care about their patients and once the insurance runs out, see ya! Bad little dick doctor. I agree with Navi, Shawn/Sean needs to get out of their as quick as possible. He needs to go to BBC and make the rounds with his donkey dick and upgrade so he can fight the aliens.

Baseball, uniforms are blocky and ugly, and they can't stop touching their balls. It's like they are taught in little league that you can't hit a ball until you touch your balls. I've worn a cup, for a different sport, there were balls involved but nevermind. Basketball, way too many clothes. Football, the only upside to football is you can't see the faces of the ugly players who love hurting other people. Soccer, they are ridiculous. they fall down when people run ten feet past them. What a bunch of babies. Swimming is the only sexy sport. Why? Undies!!!! If he did, it would only be in passing then I'd never mention it again. Nope I am almost exclusively attracted to darker men with dark features. I only had one blond yet almost all my protagonists are blond and their love interest is dark hair. I'm usually not attracted to white guys unless they are older than me. Then watch out, 65 year old white guys without beards, yes please.

I once played Red Dead Redemption 2 two and half years straight, everyday, as I explored the world and tried to get 100%. And the moment I did, I deleted all the saves and started over again. As for suggestions, I wouldn't know where to start, I love sci fi, games, fantasy, but I don't have a head for them. I have a great premise for a massive sci fi story that spans thousands of years but I can't get the technology/vision/alien species to a place I can write them. So you are decades ahead of me.

I'm so sorry, so very uncomfortably sorry. The great Stephen King wrote, "to be a good writer, you must do two things above all others, read a lot and write a lot." If I were to ever attempt to mess up your story, I would take Joel in a slightly different direction. And I don't just mean with Colt. But I think the core of who he is, the fears, frustrations, is key to the story you're writing. If you take the premise, and then change things, you would have to keep that element alive or the story wouldn't work. From chapter one, Joel is a very strong character and his journey is this story. But who needs baseball? But who needs Davin? Okay, that's the last bit of trolling.

I would hunt you down if you did The joy of gaming is discovering details on your own. I will get annoying with my wild theories, so again, I apologize in advance, though I did it in chapter one.

So another thing you might not know about me, I'm a gamer, I love role playing games. So I'm also a 100% completist, if I was in your world, I just might fuck myself to death trying to unlock everything. And I'm glad to see my gaming instincts were spot on from the previous chapter comment. I think I'm getting the hang of this story. Again, I'm enjoying this story.