Jason Rimbaud

So this chapter has Joel realizing he's being a douche by keeping out the mother. Can't spell her name, don't have the energy to scroll up. A visit with the twins, it seems Joel will be juggling six balls in the air. We better get Joel and Davin sitting up all night confessing secrets, Davin will admit he has a crush on Colt, because they used to play around in the barn but Colt discovered breasticles and left him behind. Joel and Davin becomes friends and seduced him, (pronouns pal) Colt into having what they accused that poor girl having a few chapters ago. I am calling it a night. But I am enjoying this tale, its slow paced but a bunch of fun to read. Truly a fun story! PS: I purposefully skimmed the horse riding thingy, please let me know if anything happened worthwhile in those forty seven pages.

You misspelled wuss

Since you brought up your poor titling skills. I do have a legit complaint about your writing I wish to share in this very public forum. Ahem... Name your freaking chapters please, quit wussing out by using Chapter One, Chapter Two. Like this one should have been called Domesticated Equine. I'm pretty proud that I didn't say fuck right there, I'm trying to keep it classy in your comments. On my story page, it's a disaster. I'll try not to lower your comments to my level. 😇

Straight boys are stupid...stupid enough to be talked into sharing a sleeping bag with me.

You named her after his truck...how original I didn't get Joel being timid, scared to be found out, but you don't play the boringest sport in the world being timid. I thought the fistfight was authentic to his personality. Plus its very much, I'm reaching the end of my rope and I have nothing left to lose.

No one would believe that lie Joel. For having an entire story named after about lying, you suck at it. When are you going to learn to lie? I hit a rock? Really? Joel's stupid. And I don't care how cute someone is, I'm never getting on the back of a domesticated equine. I'd punch that little girl into the next day.

Um, seeing as I'm from a small town, who have attended plenty of bonfires, I've slept in the back of a lot of trucks. A few times even with boys. But we always have sleeping bags at least. One cowboy in one sleeping bag, is not as good as two cowboys in one sleeping bag. Davin I feel is gay, Colt and Gavin know. Colt didn't seem such a shit, maybe all he needed was a few beers.

Finally something happens, Truthfully, I'm surprised Joel hadn't acted out earlier. It's been a rough 36 hours. I love a good fistfight. Davin is so going to be the love interest and now I'm upset. He has brown hair, blech Colt has a girlfriend, I might have to start finding out what small town Krista lives in. Small towns never lock their doors and I have a bunch of shoelaces to get to tying.

So we finally have some kind of interaction with Colt, of course he's put out, his parents just bringing in a new person into his life, all sorts of feelings would be the result. I don't blame him for saying, "He's not my friend why do I have to play with him" Something with the twins parents, Trace didn't like that at all. So their house seems to always be filled with smelly boys as Lacey would say. I agree, boys are smelly, especially straight ones Blech Maybe we'll learn more about Colt at the falls, but I think Colt is going to ditch him...cause plot. Mowing the lawn, sounds nice, something I miss from my childhood. It took me nearly eight hours to mow my growing up lawn. It was something I loved to do, was never told to mow the lawn. As for herding cows, farm life sucks and I don't like it. Blech

So Krista has thrown out the red herring and has now introduced the McGuffin. It's Colt, blond Colt that needs to be broke. Davin seems like a genuine human, kind and insightful. Their little interchange on the porch is rather revealing how guarded Joel is. He won't answer questions but has no trouble filling the silence with questions for the twin. I am growing concerned the lack of Colt in this story, and how I might be wrong and Davin is the interest. Though we are seven chapters in and it's barely 24 hours. Though Joel is already in bed with another boy, so there's that. What are the chances we'll get up to no good gay stuff next chapter? I'm betting zero.

So way back in chapter three I made a prediction. I swear if that doesn't come true i will sneak into your house, big burly husband or not, and tie all your shoelaces together so you'll keep tripping every time you take a step. Davin is not the one destined for Joel. As for the bedroom, I would have picked the one next to Joel, just so it wouldn't be across the hall from the parents. No one likes to hear old people having sex. When your seventeen that is. I'm old and have no trouble hearing old people having sex... The lingering looks from Davin and Joel, maybe I have to go back and read the twins description before I really start the opposite of shipping two literary characters. For that matter, I don't remember what Joel looks like either. Shit, maybe he's not good enough for Colt. I have to re-think my entire life now.

I'm also not reading anyone's comments, as they aren't "live" and months behind. I'm sure once I catch I'll really begin my quest to annoy you with bad theories and assumptions. At least, that's my goal.

So Krista has thrown a red herring our way when Trace made the comment, I don't know how Colt will react, he's a teenage boy after all. He also said I don't know much about people like you. I don't believe that. I've known our author for years now, the love interest is not Roy, he's too far away. I hope its not the twins, because, and I'll tread lightly seeing as I just found out someone is the proud mother of twins. I think if I fell for one twin I'd want to bang them both. So lets hope it's not the twins. PS: I nearly spilled my soda when I found out you are taller than me. No wonder I'm petrified of you and Cassie. Joel is trying desperately to put his world into order, some kind of framework to proceed forward. Though his comment about running away again is promising. No gay boy should ever grow up on a farm, too many animal sexy time jokes to make. I'm still going on the assumption that Colt is going to be the one that Joel tries to break. (See what I did there)

So I will be posting my first Person story starting Tuesday, mostly because of all the grief you've given me over the years. Though it's written in journal form, that was the only way I could make it interesting enough to capture my attention. But it's called The Art Of Letting Go and it's dedicated to you!

I feel that Trace is the type of person that couldn't understand until he saw it for himself. Like in real life, good people never understand the awfulness humans can achieve based on bigotry, religion, conditioning, small mindness. Even when Joel told him it was stupid, (I would have Joel sticking up more for himself in regards to returning) Trace felt if they could only see each other than it would be repaired. Because Trace couldn't imagine a scenario where'd he would abandon his family. Trace learned that hard lesson, when a kid says I don't want to go back, it's never peaches and roses. Phil is not spineless, there are hints that he continued to speak up for Joel after the boy was kicked out. If, as @Krista showed, they were a loving family before the secret. Phil is torn between the love to his wife, his other two kids, being unsure of what to do is not being spineless. He doesn't get a pass from me but I also can see a redemption arc coming. Trace knows, what I am sure he already suspected, Joel is one of those people. Again because Colt. One of my questions was answered, so thank you Krista for going back and writing that explanation into your story after you read my comment from chapter three.

Trace is helping Joel because of Colt. Prediction One: And Joel, stop wearing other boys underwear, your boys don't need to be touching by proxy. Unless they are...nevermind, this is Krista's story and she's not obsessed with undies like me. Moving on. The twins, I already don't like them. Twins are creepy, with their rhyming names and identical faces. If they start finishing each other's sentences I'm going to withhold your coffee order for the next month. After three chapters in, I have questions. Why was Trace out in the middle of nowhere if he was going home? Why are the couple so keen on opening their door to Joel? Why does anyone have dogs? Why is it titled Learned to Lie when Joel hadn't been lying at all?

You have captured the broken mind frame one goes through when their entire world is ripped from them. They retreat into themselves and they go into a self-preservation mode that takes someone special to move inside. He was lucky, he found a Trace the same day. I didn't find my Trace for three years. I was surprised how perfectly the two chapters fit seeing as they were written so far apart. I'm unsure of the title but I'm happy I saw this today. Great chapter no matter the POV.

So I remember this from the SA contest a few years ago. But I had no idea you were continuing it. So I'm gonna start bugging you again with this story. Sorry but not really sorry.

Thank you, there is a thread somewhere where I complained about first person POV and how I don't enjoy that writing form. And after getting my balls kicked a few times I promised I would attempt a first person POV. This is my attempt at using first person. Probably the hardest thing I ever wrote. And I have six chapters. Maybe I'll post them all in chronological order so you can see how the story began

I think I disagree, though I agree with the sentiment. River deserves better than Zayn for sure. but I think our worthy author will give it a happy ending. Thus far the author has embraced the tropes, and have done so very well and thoroughly enjoyably. If you follow the logic of the narrative, they have to get back together. At least that’s my take, but this is the first story I have read with this author so I don’t know the style yet. after this one I will for sure go back and look at the others. I think he’s brilliant

There is a lot more but i'm not sure if I'm going to continue or not. It's not my style, its first person, told through journal entries. NOt sure

I do feel sorry for Dylan, I wonder what is going on in his head. Or if he has the willpower to seek out help. Here's hoping it gets better instead of worse. I've been doing my laundry for so long it's like a comfortable friend. Did I mention I actually love to do laundry? I do about seven loads a week. On my one day off, Wednesday's, I spend half the day folding, ironing, changing bed sheets, comforters. I find it really relaxing. I pop in a movie, lose myself in mindless tasks. I think that's the only way I have that really lets me destress after working 90 hours a week. Next week we delve deeper into Dylan's head, sometimes its not a pretty place to be.

February 26th, 2008 It’s around 2:30 in the morning. Tuesday morning to be precise and for once I’m at a loss of words. I was asleep. All cozy wrapped in my favorite comforter and dreaming of a blond haired boy with dancing eyes. And right when I was getting to the good part, my phone made a sound that woke me with a start. And for a moment, I glanced at the table with half opened eyes and debated internally whether or not to even look at the phone or try to fall back asleep so I

Okay, I'll say it. You included a trope I hate, though you did it well and it was well written. The misdirect regarding the asshole Zayn entering the party with Harry. It made no logical sense, it was just to trick the reader into believing something false. But it's your story and really, I am enjoying this tale muchly. You are highly entertaining with a tired premise you made fresh and vital again. So my hat is doffed.

I swear I'm not going to say it, I'm going to keep it inside, I'm going to bottle up until it makes my head explode. I think you picked the right amount of chapters for this story. Can't wait for the conclusion.