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Hi All! Good Morning, Good Evening and Good Afternoon! Does anyone else thing Drew's suggestion for the change in his title sounds more like a power grab? "God and Emperor of the Texas Empire" sounds like he wants to control more than just Texas.
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I'll wait until Spike comments on this. The Imperial Rubber Stamp doesn't sway Spike's judgement.
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Hi Page! Thanks for the support! As for the doctor, he's a product of western culture. I'm glad the doctors here are not like that. They actually listen and learn about their patients. Last year I was spared an operation because the doctor spent time talking and listening to me. He then verified I didn't have cancer with some quick and inexpensive tests.
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I think you should update your cover picture to this. It says so much about you!
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I am confident that there is no way you're going to let the statistics get lower than they are now. 🤪
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Good Morning Albert! This place is a Thai style coffee shop! Going to coffee here is a daily occurrence lasting hours.
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Good Morning Clo!
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Tyrant!
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and good evening to you too, Drew! Nope, I saw the post. However, I am doubtful that you would give up your position to anyone real and different body. Of course the kids will lose the election, and you will blame Clo and Spike for their loses.
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An ex as a houseguest is not a good idea for anyone. It's difficult having friends crash for a night, but long term guests that impose and create chaos are the worst. I do feel sorry for Cat, but she should have set some rules and maximum length of stay from their first day sharing her house. Hope the idiot is gone very soon. Dejected little boy eyes should only work for the young and innocent! I'm glad Cat was pissed off enough to call James on his actions.
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Still a young man! Happy belated birthday Gary.
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Want to guess who Yayo is immitating?🤔
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Drew's definition of give is probably the same as share in Drewth!
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Me too! I think the guy is one of Drew's Russian friends.
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Are these some of your split personalities?
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A word of caution about the house. I suspect the family quarters will be 99.99% of the total area.
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I like the way this entry ties in to many of your other writing tips from a slightly different POV. Having read a lot of stories this year, I often ran into some of these sins. One example is the sex as a drama brick. In several stories when I got too many of these, I just stopped reading the bricks, and skipped to the good parts. I also see the emotional leapfrogging as a reason I could not bond with some character(s). When I cannot bond with a character I lose interest and become uninvolved with the story. Thanks for these insights to writing Comicality!
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I love how the sexual tension is building between Rusty and Matty. Rusty is trying to develop a game plan to capture his kitty. However, he's in denial about his own sexuality, and I don't think he will know what to do when he captures Slicky. Matty has been planning a lot longer and is ably assisted by Zoey. I think Jonathan is correct in his statement about the student overcoming the teacher when it comes to Matty being taught how to become a super gay. In this respect Rusty is also giving Matty a great big assist. Of course both are cats in this game, and when they both go in heat it will be spectacular!
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An interesting start to the story that I think is very well written. I agree that the dialogue is very real. I do see many possibilities for conflict and drama, since religion seems to be in the mix. Of course that could just be me. I have little respect for any religion.
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Alfie is a great guy for encouraging and supporting Cat to make the change to a projectionist. Cat worked hard to learn what was needed, and I applaud both her efforts and success.
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I am enjoying Cat's story and her career.
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That's true, but he did keep bargains with me. And that's the Drewth!
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Hi Spike! This is Drew's first offer. I suggest negotiating a bit. You might get a full year instead of one month.
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I may have also read this story before, but don't remember it. I have read Ronyx on other sites, and finished a great book by him last month on GA. I am looking forward to reading this story. If I do remember reading it before, I promise no spoilers. You might want to check out the story I read also, Finding Good Trouble.
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In a brief respite, Garjah and Essell have exchanged beautiful vows of their love.
