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Blasphemy! I won't want to be you when Dugh sees your suggestion. I think your just trying to get me in trouble. 👿
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Dang! Plaid again. He does look good in black and white. I'm sure Dugh will be pleased. Especially with an eight pack and side bars.
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Taz may be good at matchmaking, but Luke is too far gone to take advantage. Luke needs to realise that Leander is not going to be in town long. Leander does seem to be a nice guy, but Luke won't find out if there can be something more if he keeps running away. Maybe this will give Luke the motivation to do something. Len is right to suggest that Luke gets help.
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Chapter 7 - That Woman!
raven1 commented on James Matthews's story chapter in Chapter 7 - That Woman!
An interesting chapter, especially Elaine. At least this time she was a lot less rude. Her description of her son sounded off somehow. She didn't say much, but her list of his interests and behaviors says he spends a lot of time alone. She doesn't mention that he does anything with friends. Is he trying to avoid his mother? -
Good Morning Albert!
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Chapter 5 - Crashing at Taz's
raven1 commented on James Matthews's story chapter in Chapter 5 - Crashing at Taz's
I'm in agreement with the good doctor. Keep the slang, idioms and words in the story that reflect the setting. They enrich the story and educate us for when we tourists visit the UK. Besides, we can probably figure out the meaning from the context, or like me look it up on the internet if I'm curious. I am definitely getting into the story. Elaine is even worse than I expected. Len call Luke out for rudeness, but it should have been Elaine. She has no relationship with Luke at this point on which to base her words. -
Chapter 3 - A Couple of Outings
raven1 commented on James Matthews's story chapter in Chapter 3 - A Couple of Outings
I do have some experience with ADHD. Luke sounds like he has many of those traits. Gradually some of the pieces are beginning to fit. -
Chapter 33: Final Face-off
raven1 commented on astone2292's story chapter in Chapter 33: Final Face-off
Yakob's death was sad, but provided Vincent one last lesson on death. To me that helps explain the last sentence. He is not prepared for the outcome of taking a life, but understands he must kill Stefan. I am looking forward to the battle. As for your future works, those will be great no matter which order the come when posted. I am looking forward to all of the stories you mentioned. -
Chapter 2 - You're not Weak
raven1 commented on James Matthews's story chapter in Chapter 2 - You're not Weak
Luke is an interesting character with his complex, but incomplete thoughts that jump from one place to another. It makes him seem like a cubist painting with distorted pieces in no particular order. Understanding him and gaining empathy for him is difficult and will need careful analysis to see him clearly. The other characters are only sketches at this point. I am intrigued, but not sure at this point where the plot is going. Since many people are reading this story, I hope that further chapters will coalesce these pieces into a clearer picture of the character and plot. I do like the general feeling and use of words to create the setting. -
The Sinead O'Connor look might fit Clo. 🤞
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That definitely would be a scary earthquake here. The worst I have felt was a 5.6 about 100 km away to the north along the border with Myanmar and Laos.
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Hey Albert! I forgot to tell you I really appreciated the hunky Hawaiian guys you posted. Of course by the time I got up, Drew had already staked his claim. How are you and Steve today? I hope the rain the douses that fire.
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Or...you could sleep in, after all it is Sunday there.
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I'd be lucky to find one dark hair amongst the white hairs. Oh... you meant how was my day. Boring! The biggest event was a very awesome lightning storm about two hours ago. Loud and close, but no outage. Just one flicker of the lights. Kitt wanted to know if any one had heard from me after the earthquake. I didn't even realize there was an earthquake here. I was having lunch when the was a tiny rumble like a truck going by. Actually, I wasn't really bored. I have been reading a lot of the Anthology 2022 today and finished the last one posted. There are some very awesome stories this year. It seems like all my favorite writers have contributed this year.
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Hi Clo! Hang in there, the neighbors will be history soon! How's your day going today?
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Hey Drew! Glad to see you up and about. I still have 4 hours in which to tease you! Awesome!
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Hi @Kitt! I am alive and well. The quake was only 15 kilometers away, but it was only a magnitude of 2.3 so barely noticeable. I was having lunch about that time and wasn't even sure if it was an earthquake or something going on in the building. Thanks for thinking of me! ❤️ I have been enjoying your comments today on the Anthology 2022 stories. This year has some very awesome entries!
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Hi Bucket! How was your day today? We had a tremendous lightning storm this evening and I thought we'd lose power. It flickered one, but came back on. I only had to restart the wifi to get service back. Other than that a very uneventful day for me.
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Nice little diversionary tactic by Cia in the last chapter. The rescue has started and the first obstacle encountered. I hope they rescue Garjah and all get out alive. Bouncer will probably go after the first one to fire on Essell or Asas.
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I always like authors who show appreciation to their betas and editors. Of course you do have one of the best in Mrsgnomie. Plus, she is a fellow Oregonian. Although, I now live in retirement in Thailand. Having lived a bit of history (I was a freshman in college when the Stonewall Riots happened) I can verify what your father and friends told you. In some cases where there was a great difference in age, some even posed as step-father and son. That was to explain the different last names. I am glad that people are not forced to live in lies hiding their love.
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This is a bright and delightful story of growing up and falling in love. Does it have a HEA ending. Possibly. The author leave what happens next to the imagination of the readers. It is somewhat bittersweet with its reminders for the struggle gay teens had to deal with during these formative years, but that is offset by the romance and beauty of first love.
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This brought a lot of memories to mind. The awkwardness and loneliness of a gay teen as well as wonderful memories of camping out as a scout. Unfortunately I never had a memory like this is scouts. That had to wait until I was 30 and had found a lover who enjoyed camping. Now, I can only savor the memories of camping out, but they are still great memories. Thank you for reminding me of the great times outdoors.
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For much of my life, I have spent a lot of time hiking and camping. I do so because of all the beauty and serenity I find in nature. This allegorical tale highlights the folly of humans who amass fortunes by indifferently throwing away the greatest treasure given us, our beautiful world filled with the diversity of life and love.
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This is a wonderfully written allegory of humanity fouling their nest in their efforts to gain wealth. There are many victims, not all human.
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This tale is like a perfectly cut brilliant diamond. Each facet of the story reflects the love of two young boys from Birmingham, UK. The car is not just the setting, but a character in the story that is created differently in each reader's mind based on their own memories of their first car. This gem is a warm tale of life, death, love and family. In spite of the death, you will feel comforted by this tale of two who succeeded in love.
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