On Inspiration
Some poems
come straight out of left field,
others have pedigree and bloodlines
stretching generations back to the Mayflower;
but each one surprises in its way,
delighting eye and ear
with its song.
On Age
I cringe at
my interior noise;
the cacophony of my existence -
ringing ears, wheezing lungs, bones clacking in their joints -
but I would not trade this Gamelan
of age's i
I love the way you contrast the natural world with our own technological one. The land covered in stone and texting gloves are perfect symbols of this. You make me appreciate the sounds I’m hearing overhead all the more.
Hmmm. Joan is a pack leader. Is she going to try and claim Jed, too? And what will become of Daniel, now that he has submitted? I wonder deeply if there is something very, very odd going on here. The contrast of utter trust between Wolfgang and Jed versus the control Joan needs over Daniel is a big clue.
This chapter makes me grin a mile wide. Chipper has a fantastic visit to Coachella, including a chance to jam with big name artists. What a great coach Adam is turning out to be. And you had to throw us a blond surfer stud... oh my.
Niki is the best. Where are more wonderful people like that? Simon’s mum is right to be concerned- in fact, she can’t really help it - but Niki is right: vetting a boyfriend would have filtered Max right out, and saved Simon a lot of heartache.
Chipper’s awesome blind audition probably made more than four heads turn. I can imagine the home audience reaction, too. Who wouldn’t want to coach Chipper?
I have enjoyed chapters 1 and 2. Mark and Mickey are getting to know one another. In fact, I'd say you've made them indispensable to each other as friends. Now if Jimmy would just butt out...
Your poetry often resonates with me, and this one did so especially. You give voice to the vexation and discontent I feel at so much I see and hear. Yet I know you are loved beyond price by many who read your poems, including me.
Great, tumultuous chapter. Chipper’s psyche must feel like he’s on a roller coaster. How can he prepare for the contest properly? Looking forward to the next chapter.
The journey begins, and Keter is revealed to us as one with powers we cannot know. Stravor is not omniscient, or omnipotent, though he pretends otherwise. The will of his god is to see Keter killed on a far-off altar. It’s almost biblical. I’m becoming absorbed into this world and tale which you paint so vividly. Can’t wait for the next chapter.