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At least Dylan is starting to recover from his wounds, even after surgery to remove his spleen and stop the bleeding. I’m glad he was able to wake up enough to hear the doctor talking to Paul and Martha about the surgery and his overall condition at that time. When Dylan made a sound to alert the others talking to the dr they all came over and he told the dr what he heard him telling Paul and Martha. Paul told Dylan that Henry and his mom were flying to get to Israel to be with him while he recovers. That day Dylan was in and out of it due to the anesthesia and the pain meds they were giving him. Although while he was awake enough to talk to Paul and Martha about the casualties and the injured people which the dr tried to stop but Dylan gave him a look that shut him up. A few days later Dylan along with Henry and their mom held a press conference to let everyone see that he was doing well and he let the press know that they would be releasing the information about the cause of the great oil crisis as it was being called in a few weeks after they had the opportunity to meet with the world leaders of the countries who were affected by the people who caused the problems in the first place. Now after the press conference the surgeon comes in with the X-ray that was taken of Dylan’s abdomen so they could see about his recovery and he was informed that they were trying to get permission to use extra energy for the mri because it appeared that Dylan was regrowing his spleen. As if they didn’t have enough to worry about, how will they explain this situation to the doctor.
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I can definitely see Eric and Peter becoming a couple. Great chapter.
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I’m liking Eric more and more. Eric came to Boston to attend Northeastern University and is different from the usual college freshman in that he’s 24 years old. Eric got a late start attending college because he spent his time after graduating high school taking care of his mom who has since passed away from cancer. At the orientation Eric met Ted Dawe who is from Tuscaloosa, Alabama to where Eric is from Charleston, SC both southerners. When classes started in the first class the professor asked Eric if he was reading correctly that he spoke Ukrainian as well as Russian, Eric said that he did and the professor said that for the project he wanted Eric to work with Peter Ivanov who would possibly need help with some of the meanings, and pronunciation of words that he may not understand due to the fact that even though he spoke English he was from a country that spoke either language. After the first session of working on the project in the library they started to become friends. Eric asked Peter if they could be friends and if so Peter needed a wardrobe change as the goth look was out so he was going to take him shopping for clothes and afterwards they would have something to eat. I’m glad that Eric and Peter became friends because Eric’s doing everything he can to make Peter feel better about himself and in the process come out of his shell and increase his self esteem. Great chapter for the beginning, now onto the next one.
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It’s great that Kohen is finally getting better with the crew members which shows by his apologies for the use of a weapon that he was unfamiliar with. I’m glad that Everett took Kohen to where he could get some clothing to wear other than the few meger pieces he had now. Ellard is going to be in worse shape than he is now if he tries anything to attempt to get away Kohen will make sure of it. Especially since he tried to kill Everett who was kind enough to make sure that Kohen was cared for properly. Great chapter.
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What a great chapter. Dylan’s gotten himself into the thick of things and in the process he was held hostage and he was touched by Sofia in an attempt to make him a slave to her and Rahlil. They didn’t count on him being one of them, Dylan’s ability was more tuned than theirs so he was able to block Sofia’s ability from getting to him. While he was connected to her he learned that she had been raped by her father as well as other things being done to her. After breaking the connection with Sofia Dylan was able to get the knife he had hidden and then he had Sofia as his shield so that he wouldn’t be able to be shot by the guards in the room. Once Dylan had shot Rahlil he was able to get the three clerics free from the hold of Rahlil before his team was able to get him out of the mosque and aboard a medivac chopper in order for him to get to a hospital for treatment of his injuries the more serious of which is the stab wound to his abdomen. I hope Dylan doesn’t completely pass out due to the amount of blood loss he has. I wonder what he will do to stop his father from carrying out his plan for turning the UNITED STATES 🇺🇸 into the religious country he wants and then the world after that.
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A most interesting chapter, I think the book 📖 is very evil especially when the true owner of the book has put a spell on it. I hope Jurandir will be safe and unharmed, in order for that to happen Murompi must give up his life. I just hope that everyone who was taken gets free safely and unharmed.
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A most interesting chapter, I think the book 📖 is very evil especially when the true owner of the book has put a spell on it. I hope Jurandir will be safe and unharmed, in order for that to happen Murompi must give up his life. I just hope that everyone who was taken gets free safely and unharmed.
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A most interesting chapter, I think the book 📖 is very evil especially when the true owner of the book has put a spell on it. I hope Jurandir will be safe and unharmed, in order for that to happen Murompi must give up his life. I just hope that everyone who was taken gets free safely and unharmed.
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A most interesting chapter, I think the book 📖 is very evil especially when the true owner of the book has put a spell on it. I hope Jurandir will be safe and unharmed, in order for that to happen Murompi must give up his life. I just hope that everyone who was taken gets free safely and unharmed.
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Wow what a great chapter. It seems like the more that Dylan tries to make right someone else goes and screws it all up. Now on top of everything else Dylan has to deal with, he finds out that the CIA knows about the abilities of these children and they were even partly responsible for the drug that they were conceived from. This makes it harder to find and either be able to work with the children or destroy them before they can be used to bolster someone’s personal agenda. Dylan needs to find these twins quickly and then get the hell out of Israel he’s wearing out his welcome very quick. I hope that they are able to catch the twins and hopefully they don’t find anyone else that has the ability,also they can reprogram the people who have been found to have a suggestion put in them by the twins, I already know that the ones that are bonded with them will die when the twins die, that should stop alot of the suicide bombers. I can’t wait to see what the next chapter brings for Dylan and the others. I hope that Henry is able to get the people of Mexico to settle down.
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Wow what a great chapter. It seems like the more that Dylan tries to make right someone else goes and screws it all up. Now on top of everything else Dylan has to deal with, he finds out that the CIA knows about the abilities of these children and they were even partly responsible for the drug that they were conceived from. This makes it harder to find and either be able to work with the children or destroy them before they can be used to bolster someone’s personal agenda. Dylan needs to find these twins quickly and then get the hell out of Israel he’s wearing out his welcome very quick. I hope that they are able to catch the twins and hopefully they don’t find anyone else that has the ability,also they can reprogram the people who have been found to have a suggestion put in them by the twins, I already know that the ones that are bonded with them will die when the twins die, that should stop alot of the suicide bombers. I can’t wait to see what the next chapter brings for Dylan and the others. I hope that Henry is able to get the people of Mexico to settle down.
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Wow what a great chapter. It seems like the more that Dylan tries to make right someone else goes and screws it all up. Now on top of everything else Dylan has to deal with, he finds out that the CIA knows about the abilities of these children and they were even partly responsible for the drug that they were conceived from. This makes it harder to find and either be able to work with the children or destroy them before they can be used to bolster someone’s personal agenda. Dylan needs to find these twins quickly and then get the hell out of Israel he’s wearing out his welcome very quick. I hope that they are able to catch the twins and hopefully they don’t find anyone else that has the ability,also they can reprogram the people who have been found to have a suggestion put in them by the twins, I already know that the ones that are bonded with them will die when the twins die, that should stop alot of the suicide bombers. I can’t wait to see what the next chapter brings for Dylan and the others. I hope that Henry is able to get the people of Mexico to settle down.
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Wow what a great chapter. It seems like the more that Dylan tries to make right someone else goes and screws it all up. Now on top of everything else Dylan has to deal with, he finds out that the CIA knows about the abilities of these children and they were even partly responsible for the drug that they were conceived from. This makes it harder to find and either be able to work with the children or destroy them before they can be used to bolster someone’s personal agenda. Dylan needs to find these twins quickly and then get the hell out of Israel he’s wearing out his welcome very quick. I hope that they are able to catch the twins and hopefully they don’t find anyone else that has the ability,also they can reprogram the people who have been found to have a suggestion put in them by the twins, I already know that the ones that are bonded with them will die when the twins die, that should stop alot of the suicide bombers. I can’t wait to see what the next chapter brings for Dylan and the others. I hope that Henry is able to get the people of Mexico to settle down.
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This is a great story all about a young man who is in the Australian Navy. While on foreign tour he has an accident in which he is injured because the APC he was in was hit with a IED. Because of the work he was doing for the Navy he has a high security clearance and he has to notify the government before he makes any kind of trip outside the waters around Australia. While recouping from his injuries he goes to Christmas Island with his nephew for 2 weeks, unfortunately the trip is cut short, they don’t make it off the island for almost a month due to the trouble on the island. I suggest that you read the story to find out more about what goes on. If you like fiction stories then this is a great story to read.
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I also think that Alan is a very capable advisor to Dylan especially after he used his ability to help the Ayatollah get out of the control of the boy who was being used as a weapon against the Ayatollah and Dylan as the ones doing the controlling were doing their best to destroy Israel. It seems like they’re trying to do so know in Israel itself. I think the new assignment that the president told Dylan he was doing is going to root out trouble in the form of the twins and hopefully he can eliminate them with out too much work. I hope Dylan is able to help the new minister of Israel to restore peace to the country, if not the zealots win because that means that Israel will fall. Great chapter
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TC3 – Chapter 2: Heartbreak
Butcher56 commented on Brayon's story chapter in TC3 – Chapter 2: Heartbreak
I agree with everyone else who commented on this chapter, it was a very emotional chapter dealing with the loss of Jeremy’s parents and what he was going through. I’m very happy to see him have the best support who are more than willing to help Jeremy get to the point that he isn’t having the nightmares or feeling that he has lost everything in the world that was important to him. I really loved the way that Robert knew that Jeremy was having trouble sleeping so he did what Adam had done for him when he first came to live with him. I think the adoption of the two young men is going to be a great thing for all of them as it would make them a true family, not that they aren’t now this will just make it legal. I think the adoption of Jeremy is going to be the best way to give Adam & Duncan more rights than they have right now. At the end of the chapter it was stated that Adam and Duncan found out that there are obstacles in the way because of the fact that because Adam is the stepparent and Duncan has permanent guardianship of Jeremy there are things that they can and can’t do that they may want to. I just don’t understand why they would have the obstacles preventing them from doing what they want to do with their boys. The reason I say that is because of the way you said that “Rob this concerns you too. Duncan and I have been talking for over a week about Rob, and then we included you in the discussion when he was given permanent guardianship Jer. We want to adopt you as our son. Rob, Duncan wants to adopt you as well. This would make us a full family. We’ll only do it if you agree. You don’t have to agree now, you can think about it. However, the offer is there.” I’m glad that Robert and Jeremy both said yes to the adoption, I also think it’s great that they told Jeremy that they weren’t trying to replace his parents nor did they even want to do that. I can’t wait to see what the odd payments from the cleaning companies books is all about. -
What a chapter, it was suspenseful and intriguing. I think the meeting was a good starting point to get the Ayatollah to meet with Dylan and when the meeting broke up for refreshments Dylan and the Ayatollah went to a corner of the ballroom where the refreshments were in doing so they were able to get a dialogue going about what the United States was going to do to get what they want. During the time they were talking they came to an understanding and Ayatollah invited Dylan to come to prayer with him and observe the prayers and afterward they would discuss the issue for which they were meeting about. I hope that this will be a great starting point for the two countries to start working together as a team, I understand that the Ayatollah represents the UIC as a whole and that he must confer with the leaders of the other countries and he can say that he is interested in what the United States has to offer them.
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This was another amazing chapter. I believe that to me the story starts getting better with each chapter written, the reason I said this was because the more you say about the USA and the World beginning to really live again. True that this story is pure fiction but it still makes a hell of sense that we could face the same issues as the story. The way that Dylan is handling the crisis he was sent to try to get them to talk about what they want. I believe that this is the first step in getting these countries to be willing to work together with the others around them and they wouldn’t have any other reason to continue the fight. I don’t understand the hatred of some of these countries and that I believe they should listen to what he has to say. The US hasn’t done anything except help the other countries to make themselves better than they were before the oil crisis. As far as the gifted students go there are going to be times that they would need to use their abilities. I’m going to be waiting to see if they find just one gifted child or more than that.
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Another amazing chapter. It’s true that Dylan has made a few mistakes along the way by not heeding the cautions of his security chief which caused some problems with everyone on the plane. True Dylan was kidnaped by the Deacon who was sent out to have Tina put an idea in his head that he would have accepted the idea that the Mormon way was better than the Baptist religion of his father. The problem started when the lead negotiator was touched by Tina and put under the control of Deacon Roberts, by gaining his trust they were able to get the layout of the plane and where everyone was supposed to be. After Dylan was brought before the Prophet he was able to get the upper hand in the situation and he had the security people of the Deacon drop their weapons after which Dylan had Jeremy pick up one of the hand guns and hand it to him, Dylan shot Tina in the head and when she died Holt did as well since he was bonded to her. Dylan had control over the Prophet and he had Jeremy put the Deacons to sleep with his ability and they were to stay asleep for ten hours or until they heard his voice again. Dylan went to the security detail in the room and he gave them two options which were bond with him or die all but one said they would bond with him, the one that didn’t was shot at close range. After he bonded with the guards he became very tired and they carried him out of the room and into the Prophets vehicle, once in the vehicle they went to get the other children like him Henry and Jeremy are during that time they came across the brother of one of the guards that Dylan had just bonded with. Long story short they made it out alive and went back several hours later to meet with the representatives of the remaining government people, when they went back Dylan had an interview with a new reporter and needless to say he doesn’t like the man at all because he was sensattionalizing the deaths and wanting Dylan to go into details that he couldn’t go into because it would be a threat to not only his security but that of the country as well.
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I also think this was a Great chapter. The dinner was a disaster only because the Deacons group was more prepared than Dylan thought as they had Holt under their control which Dylan was warned about only he didn’t think that was possible. They were able to kidnap Dylan to force him to be a pawn to get rid of his family only that didn’t work the way they thought it would. Their first mistake was thinking that Tina would be able to get him under her spell when he was able to resist her they changed the way they had to do what they wanted so they told Jeremy that he was to get Dylan to go along with the plan. When Jeremy went to Dylan he was able to get Dylan to see his desire to be free, Jeremy was able to convince Deacon Roberts that he was going to have to go deeper than he was supposed to and that he was told that Deacon Roberts didn’t want to see it again. That statement was all it took for Deacon Roberts to get Roger Killmer, who is Deacon Roberts nephew to pick Dylan up and take him to his room where he laid Dylan on the bed and took his handcuffs off so that he could be bonded to Jeremy. Dylan told Roger that he was fine and that Jeremy was in need of help and the way to get the help is to form a bond with Dylan and they were able to show each other their own history and they came up with a plan to get out of Utah. The Deacon made Dylan tell Paul that he was to let them off the plane and he was to listen to Killmer and that he would be back tomorrow.🤨
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I agree that this was a very Great chapter. The first thing I’m going to say is that the professor that they got to teach Dylan mathematics has my moms maiden name, it’s not a popular name as I’ve found out. I’m nervous for Dylan and those who are going to be with him for the dinner as the people from Utah are being very sketchy about the visit from Dylan. The way they’re going about things is getting wierd and that they have plans for Dylan. I don’t trust any of the Utah delegation as far as I could through them, which isn’t very far. 😏 I intend to go to the next chapter to see what happens at the dinner on Dylan’s plane.
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I hope that the plan to have Dylan and Henry interview the next group of people who are going to be on their personal details as security weeds out any potential threat to either of them. The reason for this unusual situation is because the last interview that Dylan had told him that he had been raised to believe that he was going to be a servant of his prophet, being a Mormon. The young man told Dylan that he thought he was doing God’s will and he was going to have to kill Dylan for his prophet. Dylan is getting better with his ability and isn’t getting tired the way he had when he first started using his ability. I think the brother of Michael Rogers is possibly the same as Dylan and Henry because Michael had said that his brother was very smart and he was so smart he thought he knew everything. Great chapter by the way.
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I think it’s great that Dylan has found at least one more boy who’s like he and Henry, this finding is going to require some serious work to be able to find out exactly where Tim is compared to Dylan and Henry. It seems like there might be more out there like them they’re going to have to be aware of the things they can do and what they’re good at like Tim is good with chemistry, Henry’s good at navigation, and Dylan’s good with people. Although I agree with flesco that the story is very sad but also very touching, for me it’s also about human nature and how we would act if this was an actual problem for the world. I think we as humans would probably be just like the characters in the story as there are the hardcore extremists who are the ones who would do like the story says and say that they don’t believe the government has their interests represented at all and they would be the ones who would try to get everything they want and keep it for themselves and not help anyone around them. I’m going to continue to read the story.
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See it pays off if you listen, really listen to what Dylan has to say about any situation that he feels needs a lot of work to make it better. I’m sure that Major Grant will be notifying General McFarland that he was overruled by Dylan Jacobs. I hope that after Dylan proved he was right and Major Grant was wrong about the situation on the ground with respect to the now deceased Governor-General and his idea that he was going to out live everyone else around. I don’t think he knew what happened before he dropped dead from a gun shot to his head. I think Major Grant is going to be thinking about the same thing, before he opens his mouth again.
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I think Dylan has a admirer in the form of the son of the Alabama National Guard Commander. Jimmy is so much infatuated with Dylan even though Jimmy’s the older boy by a couple of years. Jimmy just proved that he would do almost anything Dylan asked him to do, when Dylan and Henry walked into Dylan’s bedroom after he told Jimmy to go wait up there for him. When they walked in and Henry shut the door, Dylan walked over to the bed where Jimmy was sitting and started to kiss him. Jimmy said that Henry was in the room, Dylan said that he wouldn’t say anything to anyone, after which Dylan told Jimmy to strip and he did, after that he told Jimmy to go kiss Henry, this was a test to see if they had some kind of magic associated with them. After that Dylan had Jimmy go into the bathroom and turn on the shower making sure that it was almost hot enough to scald and that there was some new soap and shampoo in the bathroom on the shelf that he should open. In the end Henry decided that he would be the go between to allow Dylan and Jimmy some privacy to see how far Jimmy was willing to go. I hope to find out just what the jobs are that Dylan and Henry are going to be doing for the President?
