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hey, i'm for team Zeke! for team Zeke to find his 'mate' and let Jian and Emm to each other. but then again, i love sappy, happy endings mogwai
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A Vacation With Regrets 2-3 Modern High & There Once Was Love
mogwhy commented on Remijay's story chapter in A Vacation With Regrets 2-3 Modern High & There Once Was Love
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A Vacation With Regrets 3-3
mogwhy commented on Remijay's story chapter in A Vacation With Regrets 3-3
this story was going so much better until this chapter. i'm so confused. the character keep alluding to "SOMETHING' happened and it's why everyone is pissed, but we as readers have no clue. seems like some paragraphs (or even pages) are missing -
every chapter i read, makes me think there are pieces missing. in the beginning it was his mother, then it changed to a step-mom. stalker? what stalker? Zach and the gang, who's that? big blow up with dad when he finds Tom and Eric, but all of a sudden every thing is peachy-keen? the paramedic? did it really happen or was it fantasy?
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the basic story is good, but i find the chapters a bit disjointed. the passage of time is not really spelled much. for example: few chapters back Daemon started a conversation with his brother but they said they'd finish later, but that didn't happen and the next chapter it seemed like a year had past. the jumping around is hard to follow, but since i'm on chapter 11 and still reading, says something. mogwai
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well done Graeme! you read my mind, because what you did with Dad is what i thought would happen. but now i have to cry, no more Friday night treats. i had really hoped for a book 4, but any story would be great. mogwai
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i had the feeling that Julie was in up to her neck with Scoot's disappearance when she was so insistent on getting that 3rd page. can't wait to read the next installment. mogwai
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aarrgghh. i keep reading and hoping for a happy ending and the knife keeps twisting. mogwwai
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Graeme, i finally figured out what is wrong with your writing. it only took 2 books and 23 chapters (all have been read more than once). the main problem is, you write too damn good. . you have made readers love and care about your characters (although i still don't like Kevin, but your working on me). heck you made this non-sports person interested in watching a match or two. now, with the draft here i fear this might be the end to reading about these people. you've made them almost real. looking forward for the next chapter. thanks for making Friday/Saturday something to look forward too mogwai
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this is my second time reading this story. its a very good start. i keep hoping for another chapter to continue. hope you can finish this one mogwai
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intense, but not unexpected for me. when dave 1st started having problems, i was sure this where you were going. having been (i was 7 when it started) and known several people who have been sexually abused as small children, i know how the mind can hide memories from the conscious mind. when the person is strong enough the subconscious mind starts to "prime" itself to relive those things. trouble with relationships, drugs, alcohol and sleep are ways to try to forget with what happened. but the forgetting doesn't last. well, and sensitively written, good job.
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i'm not in the "anti josh" camp. the amount of abuse roger heaped on josh was a lot. i think josh was starting to come to the same conclusion. roger took advantage of a very fragile man. lonely and heartbroken, josh was ripe for the picking. having been in that situation with an ex (not quite as f*ed-up as roger, but close) i never had a clue until it blew up in my face. yes josh needed to be called out about hanging on as long a he did, but the guilt and pain he will go through might kill him. i hope he'll have some support to get through it. you'll never get over it (its been 30 years for me and still have nightmares--and i was only his ex, not even involved with what he did), you'll only get through it.
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i know this is one of your older stories, but i still wanted to comment on it. i'm so enjoying your Leopards series that i decided to read some of your other works. the writing on this story had me pulling my hair out in parts. almost in tears in other sections, and still other parts almost made me pee my pants. all hallmarks of a good story-teller. the links were interesting. thanks for another good tale. mogwai
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this was an enjoyable read. it reminded me back to the crap i had to do in "social studies-history class". i understood what these kids were going through. i was adopted too and those lessons were painful to do.some laws were changed a number of years ago about obtaining non-identifying info, the process is time consuming. but, alas, i was not even able to get those types of records because my adoption was a step parent adoption. no matter how i tried to make the government understand how much of a lying bitch my mother was, they told me i'd had to talk with her.i only wanted the medical stuff, she refused to even tell me that he died of diabetes and had asked to see me before he died. the witch. anyways a good story. mogwai
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i like this very much. i laughed out loud. well written characters. the purity rind was genius mogwai
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i really hope you can finish this story. other than a problem in earlier chapters with line spacing, this is very enjoyable and you have me hooked. mogwai
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Epilogue -- Christmas Eve Eve
mogwhy commented on Dayne Mora's story chapter in Epilogue -- Christmas Eve Eve
great cliff hanger. i love Cory but i did think things would not turn out well when he came out to his family. i wonder if the parents sent him to one of those places that try to make you not gay/bi. i know there is a name for them, but can't think of it (other than evil) hope the next book/chapters are coming soon. mogwai -
had to tell you, i have enjoyed this series unfolding. i'm not gay, not a guy, don't care for sports and never heard of this sport until reading this series. i like that Doug is growing up some. Kevin is such a wildcard to me.not sure if i like or dislike him. loving Warwick and Ross, but i see problems for them from Stuart, at the very least i clicked on the story just because i like the title. can't wait for more chapters. keep them coming
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thank you for this great story. i read it all in one sitting. who needed sleep? i wouldn't mind seeing so of the other characters' back stories fleshed out. mogwai
