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The length of your chapters are fine to this reader. Even though I don’t agree with the choice Noah made, I understand and respect him for making it. His family already knows (or highly suspects) about his homosexuality, in my opinion; Even that bitch mother of his-Mama always knows, right? That woman won’t face it tho, unless she catches Noah with a dick in his mouth or up his ass. I honestly don’t know what to make of where things should go between the guys because sometimes love isn’t enough to stay together. Sebastian is a mystery, how could he think that Noah or Jordan would trust him knowing all the things he did to them? While I am curious to understand what makes him tick, I am a-okay if this is the last we see of him in the story. This was a bittersweet chapter....more bitter than sweet.

What the fuck did Sebastian do now?!?! My Noah issues aside, Sebastian is the worst thing in this story, with Noah’s mom a veryclose second. While I was hugely relieved Noah owned up to his actions and apologized, I’m side eyeing him for the foreseeable future because he still has some growing up to do. I’m just wondering what Sebastian said, did or threatened to make Noah feel the best thing he can do is be away from Jordan....

It’s the italicized part of CscottyCA’s review that concerns me more than the whole gay issue. Noah does not deal in a constructive way with conflict and that’s detrimental to any relationship he has.

The way Noah’s acting in this time of crisis, maybe Jordan is better off without him. He is totally wrong for putting any of this on Jordan. Who asked who to move in with whom?! He is transferring the pressures he’s putting on himself to Jordan. He is sheltered and selfish and will continue sucking Mother’s milk; it’s very disappointing. Noah should realize that if your family truly loves you, it won’t matter who you sleep with; Conditional love is not true love.

“Happy as I was for them, I hung back a moment. It had finally dawned on me that life is rarely still, rarely without changes. I wondered why we were so afraid of it and them.” Because the devil we know is better than the devil we don’t; We sell ourselves short in that mindset tho because sometimes change brings around angels and slices of heaven. (Is anyone else thinking of an angel food cake now? 😊) “He held me tightly as I struggled to get up. “You … us, it means everything to me. I don’t take it for granted. You know that too?” It was this passage that changed my strong like for this chapter into love. This was a big admission for Don and I’m glad he did it; Sometimes hearing that you’re truly appreciated rights all the wrongs. Good progression chapter, tim; The calm before the storm, as it were. And congratulations to Robert and Rena!! 🎉

“....Though i've written a lot of poetry, i know i have a lot to learn and to practice....” Your modesty and humility are part and parcel of who you are, tim: What you already know is more than most in the tricky world of the rhymed word. Practice can only perfect your natural ability but you’re way ahead of many other’s game. I liked the Tankas, the sample ones as well as your efforts; I respect your willingness to grow your skill by stepping out of your comfort zone.

What a beautiful description of taking Cookie for a walk and congratulations on her addition to your family. “....Filled to the brim, she bursts ahead, and I feel my age Yet, I am still an infant To this mother on whose broad back I plod proudly....” While there were many other phrases I liked and could’ve highlighted here, the phrase I selected above particularly touched me, it speaks to your deep affinity and respect for nature. Viewed through that prism, we are all as young as Cookie, compared to our moody, beautiful Mother Earth 🌎. I admire the gift that enables you to write something this melodic so quickly, in the midst of what is clearly a full day, 🐶 😊 Thank you for sharing.

Wishes count.

“I got me a boyfriend!" YAY GARY!!!! What Ben and Griffin did for Gary was life changing (maybe even lifesaving). Even if he and Gary didn’t last, I hope it was step forward in Clint accepting himself as gay man in his future. Ben truly does humanize Griffin, even to his parents, whom he was unaware were worried about their little boy. They seem pretty great, too, not just int their love for their child but the acceptance of his boyfriend.

"I wonder why. I wonder why. I wonder why I wonder. I wonder why I wonder why I wonder why I wonder!" This may be a simple poem, but it is simply magnificent. Astronomy and stargazing are also interests of mine so I’m glad it another reason the boys are bonded. Ben and Grif are two halves of the same whole, a true complement to each other. I read this chapter with a sad foreboding, thinking that Griffin was right in his fears about the future....😔

Oh Laura: The end of this story was a lovely look into their happily ever after; Of course it makes me wonder (as I am wont to do): Are the kids biological for the both of them or adopted? My curiousity aside, whichever way they came to Carter and Aron, they are theirs and Freddy and Deidre are lucky to have them as Dads. Thank you for another wonderful journey, Laura, I look forward to the next one. 😘

“I am, by the way, quite gay. I've known who I was for a couple of years now, and I have arrived at the fatalist's viewpoint that there is nothing to be done about it. I'm not even sure I would do something about it, even if I could. I like boys, and the idea of somehow switching that perspective to seeing girls as my choice for primary companionship is just beyond me. What appeals to you is not a choice. The female mind works on a different plane from the male mind, and the female anatomy is just not as interesting to my eye as is the male anatomy. Girls are nice, and they have their place; but they lack the wonderful attraction that somehow makes boys special. Boys are often beautiful and appealing, in a mysterious way that girls just cannot match. No, I am gay to stay.” What a refreshing mature viewpoint on self acceptance from a 13 year old, no less!! “I've read about love. It usually comes on slowly, and builds, and has time for the person that is doing the loving to both accept it and understand it a little. That's why they call it falling in love. You never start to take a tumble, and then arrive upon the floor without the passage of time. There is always that small interval between the loss of balance and striking the floor, when you realize what is happening, and at least get to yell, "Oh, shit!" But that did not happen here. Quite suddenly, I was spread-eagle upon the floor, with no idea how I had gotten there. Even gravity is not that quick. But maybe love is? Or lust?” Who is this kid?!?! Or should I say old man in a kid’s body? What insight he has!! Reading on, l realize he’s above average in intelligence but good God!! LOL!! What a captivating wonder of a story; Griffin and Ben’s meeting is kismet. I can’t wait to read more.

“Winter has this unique beauty. A blanket of fresh, fluffy, white snow has covered the ground below my feet. The ice-covered tree branches are glistening as they gently sway in the chilly wind. The sky is a brilliant mirage of vibrant colours: blue, yellow, orange, and pink. In the distance, perfectly framed in the centre by trees on both sides, the sun is setting on the horizon. This is the definition of picturesque. We walk, hand-in-hand, through the snow,creating a trail of footprints behind us. We’re laughing, at what, I don’t know. In this atmosphere you have to feel content; you have to feel, well, simply alive.” This was a gorgeous beginning to this lovely chapter. I’m glad you felt the need to add it. The mention of Jenn’s driving was funny and you are correct, Aiden is winning the best friend award, he’s awesome!! (and it would be interesting to see what can kick off between he and Jenn) On that point....yes, Jordan and Jenn dated briefly but unless my memory fails me, they didn’t even kiss, did they? I don’t consider them having had a real relationship and would not consider that brief association between the two an impediment between Jenn and Aiden or any other friends of Jordan’s she might find interesting, but that’s just me. Does Noah’s mom suspect something? I’m surprised she’s now taking the initiative to visit Noah in his what, junior year of college? And she’s willing to forego a family holiday for the visit? 🤔 I think that clingy, controlling bitch wants to see what outside influences are making her son stand up to her. Can you tell I’m not pleased she’s coming? 😄 As I stated before, this is a good addition to the story, it’s nice to see how comfortable and happy Noah and Jordan are with each other and how their communication with each other improves. 👏. Is this the calm before hurricane Mother? 😳 Oh and the cabin sex was hot!! Take that, Mother!!

Deville and Kitt captured most of what I was thinking. I like how real Max felt, too; Guarded but open to being friendly; Food is a great equalizer, lol. Good set up. The real test will commence with the visitations.

Happy Birthday!!🎂 🎁 🎈🎉

Sons of bitches. I knew they weren’t going to leave Avi alone, it’s a shame Morgan was taken, too. I know Ashur (I misspelled his name as “Asshur” before but I think that spelling fits him more) and his family had something to do with this; I don’t let Giles off the hook, even tho he helped to “find” them. I love Avion’s “moxie”.

I hope you’re sister’s okay. I’m reading all 10 chapters today, after always passing this title over and over again, lol. It’s a very good story. After this chapter, I have an awful feeling Giles and Ashur will become partners in crime....😳

I think with Milan's transformation complete and his acceptance of being Rory’s mate, Milan’s first communication when he woke was the telepathic way Rory and his intimates relate to each other, delighting Rory at how complete the transformation was and at hearing his love call him “mate”.

An absolutely beautiful metamorphosis. I can’t wait to see a reborn Milan. 🦋 💞

Dude is giving off some kind of pheromone that have people flocking to him like bees to flowers. A lot of people do seem to want his “pollination”. 🐝 🌺 And what’s Jared fussing about? He’s one of those queueing up for a ride on the Paul pole too 💈 (unless he wants to be the one riding Paul) 🐪 😶 Something is ripening for the picking on our sexy widower, whether he’s ready or not. 🥭

It was “A Good Servant”. I was excited to see another story from you on another site and started to read it. As you said, the sexual content is, um....NC-17 rated compared to the stories you post here. Giving me the other title had me look that one up, too. 😊

Boxers?? I know you publish on other sites, (I read a HOT story from you on Nifty a few months ago) Where is it?! What is it?! 😳 🥺

Oh. Would that we all be loved by “Box Shaped Hearts” 🥰 If I had ever read or seen “Alice in Wonderland”, I might have suspected this ending with Carter forgetting the body swap (would you like a mint?) but I’m glad it was a surprise; A bittersweet surprise but understood, as everything used to help us grow doesn’t stay, it serves its purpose and life goes on. I am curious who Alex was talking to when he got back into his car....did his guardian angel come back from witness protection? I kinda feel that entity is what made Alex do the right thing in the end. This story was so interesting in what it revealed about what lies beneath: Alex for example- he is considered selfish and superficial, yes, but no one truly knows the black heart that exists in and motivates him and he can easily do what he does because his “beauty” is an effective mask. There are many “Alex’s” among us but there are many “Carters”, too, so the battle of good vs. evil continues on. The ponytail girl, while providing much needed information, still made me sad in her all to common “film but don’t get involved” mindset. What a voyeuristic society we’ve become. This was definitely one of the most interesting stories I’ve ever read, Goldie. I think you are one of less than a handful of authors for me that possess the ability to make me read any genre, simply because you’re the author. You tell amazing stories, write hot sex and great characters; Thank you for sharing your gift, Laura. I sadly look forward to the epilogue next week.

Kindness really is a precious commodity and a little of it can go such a long way. “If you never say anything, nobody can help.” Truer words haven’t been spoken. You and Razor move me so much. Bless you both.

I totally get the kids having an issue with their dad potentially hooking up with the woman who caused trouble in their parent’s marriage, they may feel especially protective of their deceased mom’s memory. I can even see them treating their dad like crap because he cheated on their mom. Justified or not, there seems a note or two off rhythm in Paul’s interaction with his children, even the one he’s always “been able to connect with at a deeper level”. It’s just another interesting chord on Paul’s new sheet music.