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  1. peter rietbergen
    But, by the way: the children. Where did they come from and, more importantly: how old are they? Judging from their character descriptions, and from Julia's actions, words in chapter one, they seem in their late teens at least....
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    A very promising start.
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    I do love the mix of a potentially dangerous Adventure and the yes/no domesticity of this budding relationship. Let them buy lots of lovely second-hand stuff and we'll see how they develop.
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    An interesting tale, well-written.
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    Exciting indeed. So: well done. And if course Drsn and Julian will be together. Read the previous chapters: It has become apparent from Dean'd behaviour ever since Julian returned.
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    I don't remember the Shepherd, but the House is awesome indeed. A nice prop to graft your relationship-development plot on.
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    But what purpose does all this serve, regarding the sole occupancy of the apartment?
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    Are we really to believe that L would ever forgive B for this! Come to his wedding? Act, both with B and A, as if nothing had happened, all those years ago?
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    Chapter 12

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 12

    Running on the wrong fuel... A nice simile. Pancakes with bacon for breakfast? The wrong fuel altogether but that's because I'm Dutch and supposed to eat wholesome stuff. Those games? Wholesome? I simply have no inkling... Nor do I know how to write a recommendation. Never found the proper icon/button. But you're free to use everything favourable I ever wrote about your stories on the cover of anything you care to properly publish.
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    Thanks, but of course: the best writer makes the best reviewer😉
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    Chapter 3

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 3

    Yes, the memories are there, and so is the goodwill - but in the end economic ties with "Trumpia" will prevail....
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    Chapter 3

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 3

    I am not normally given to indulge in delusional prayer, but for the World's sake...
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    Chapter 3

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 3

    The other candidate... Yes. He's risen to greater heights of greed, power-lust, madness. Three more long, devastating years of him to use the world as his and his family 's playground. He'll take Greenland because he can. And then...Canada?
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    The best melodrama in times...! Or, to put it otherwise: fans of Bette Davis would have loved this too.
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    Chapter 10

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 10

    I love the beginning of this chapter, that shows the transforming power of (being in) love. It may be - well: not realistic. But it is not sacharine. Indeed, it is what one wishes people to experience. Well done.
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    Prologue

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Prologue

    I'd love to believe in the 'power of the few', the "willing". But Canada is so big, its towns so vast, the Americans are, presumably, so many... I wonder hoe you're going to make this courageous resistance a working, winning force.
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    Good HEAVENS: group therapy? You cannot be serious - or, and I apologize: you are American... We are dealing with emotionally stunted men who never grew up - Lynton least of the three, with that stupid question of why A loves him. B seems the only adult, though the pregnancy may be her choice, only - made to carve a life for herself after all. Obviously, in the end all will be well that ends well, although I would not have L for a partner, even if I were Alexander, whose unwillingness to reconnect with L after three years (8 - 5) I find incomprehensible in view of the few days it took him to seduce L in the wedding-week.
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    While, admittedly, in real life I would have left L to his own devices after a few months, in this tale of madness he's fun, though R is more so....
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    Chapter 20

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 20

    Of course the Kieran-saga always was a "Bildungsroman", a coming-of-age story. And it was a good one, a very good one, even. But yet: that sequel. Somehow, even in the outline, something doesn't feel good. Something tells me it will not work - for me, at least. But who am I?
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    Chapter 19

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 19

    Yes, (you) writers are cruel creatures. Not to your characters - who, however compelling, are but paper people. But to us, your readers. As to a sequel to Kieran's saga: as a reader I think I am permitted a say. Do not go there. Sometimes - often - what has been created should stand alone. But then again- you are a creature, too: created by your need to tell stories. So I Will await your ...
  21. peter rietbergen
    Wouldn't it be lovely if the two virago's - or harpies -:did band together to rescue their pet-men and clean out the Stables of any creeps from the Continent (Dutch-or otherwise-speaking) ?
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    I admit I don't understand what is being told us, here. For from my perspective the major part of this chapter, from the meal onwards, is one long, continuous, extremely loving 'question' from Henry about what Christian has gone through, needs, wants. Therefore I cannot accept the author's suggestion that the few manipulatieve R made do shake C' trust. It now seems it wasn't firmly grounded in the first place.
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    Yes, AI, e.g. when it is used as a psychotherapist, can do that: kill people or, at least: let them kill (themselves, or others).
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    Confession V

    peter rietbergen commented on ThePhallocrat's story chapter in Confession V

    Secrets in secrets in secrets, riddles in riddles in riddles. Lovely.
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    Actually, and despite my admiration for the learned discussion(s) above, I feel that the story really hinges on the non-converdation(s) between L and A - certainly in "the present" - and the question whether it is believable that two men in their late twenties/early thirties have allowed themselves - for more than 8 years! - to not address issues that, as the author wants us to accept, were/are vital to their lives.
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