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Really enjoyed this chapter; we got to see Esthor and Rulf getting closer, yet both are keeping secrets that will effect how they interact with each other in the end. Glad the Prince arrived; but Zane needs to realize that brute strength and action or reaction without thinking and understanding what is going on; rarely proves to be the winning move. Keep up the great work.
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It seemed that Gene was specifically targeted by the last sniper; why, there has to be more to it than we can see. Truly well written, but just too sad for more...
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You can be the boss tonight - Shane's POV
centexhairysub commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in You can be the boss tonight - Shane's POV
This was so fabulous. The writing and pacing was spot on. Hard to write funny hot but this chapter has it more than one time. Thad seems a little insecure about his past with Shane, especially since he has someone back in Atlanta. Shane has it bad for Donovan but no more than Donovan has for him. The scene in the parking lot was hot; but a little bit slutty, no wonder I liked it so much. Both of these groups in this story have such chemistry between them and in seemingly any amalgamation. Can't wait to see what comes next.- 14 comments
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Good chapter, there is a little more insight into the kids and their circumstances in each one. I do think it would be smart to not tempt fate. Even though the monsters/zombies are dangerous because of their actions; any surviving humans could be as well. Maybe more so, because the kids would want to trust them, especially an adult or two, but not everyone will turn out to be like Jack. Some would see the kids as easy pickings, or to be used as other things... Keep up the great work and can't wait for the next chapter...
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This was just a really sweet chapter, well written and the pacing was excellent in this chapter.
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Another interesting chapter; but why are they so sure it was a plane? If it was high altitude, maybe it was an alien spacecraft, just saying. I really like how methodical they are about everything, but of course when it is a matter of survival, I guess you get that way quick, or you don't survive. Also like how they don't waste anything, never know when something might come in handy. Keep up the great work.
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Chapter 7 - The Dawn of Day
centexhairysub commented on Dolores Esteban's story chapter in Chapter 7 - The Dawn of Day
Another good chapter that moved the story along nicely; the pacing was especially good in this chapter. I can't decide if the Aryaka are really evil or nefarious or just full of themselves, either way, the human crew may not have much of a choice about how they handle the coming situation. I do hope we find out more about the planet we just left, want to see what is developing there as well. -
Big, Strong...Friend - Shane's POV
centexhairysub commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Big, Strong...Friend - Shane's POV
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Great chapter with a great discussion; must be terrifying in a way to have all of this happen and not understand or know why the changes occurred. What the creature was before, at least to some extent is irrelevant. It is a killer now, and no one will be safe as long as it is around. Plus, it's actions might attract more of them, could the group survive intact against a group of these creatures? They don't seem to work together; but as recent events show, we don't know everything about them. If most of those that survived were younger, why or how did Jack survive? So many questions, keep up the great work.
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Esthor thought the guards were coming for him because he killed the Princess, Rulf thought the guards were coming for him because he ran from them when he tried to see the Princess, but Fendrel knew why there were there, even if no one realized it was him before it was too late. Already like Terryn, hope we get to know him better. Maybe he can have a grand adventure, he just doesn't realize it yet. Hope when Rulf and Esthor get to Master Khalgos's place that he has good news, or at least an idea of what to do next...
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Chapter 6 - The Dawn of Day
centexhairysub commented on Dolores Esteban's story chapter in Chapter 6 - The Dawn of Day
WOW, that did not go how I thought it would one either front, but really well written. Surprised that Vaajat has run away again; although I guess under the circumstance, not sure what else he could have done. Wish we knew for sure what happened in the past that makes the monk fear the men so much, this much hate only comes for a great deal of fear. What do the High Priest and his group know that no one else does yet??? The Aryaka have proven to be violent and exploitive; but what can you expect from a reptilian creature. Not sure what the men can do to fight back; the Dragon system totally controls their ship now, and doubt they could run it. I think if the Aryaka wanted them dead, they would be already. Can't wait to see what happens next. -
To be young and in love again; that first rush of passion. Glad to see that Rory is more than just a pretty face; he seems to be absorbing all facets of the pack and it's life. Love how this pack seems to be structured and how the town works; but it does sound like they have their own reactionaries. Wonder what about the work that Milan's father does that could be such a threat, could it interfere with the mutation in the were blood makeup? Can't wait for the next one.
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Damn, to be able to take that amount of damage and survive is remarkable. Almost sounds like the idea of a perfect soldier; have to wonder if this was not some kind of government virus/bug/vaccine that got out and did not act the way the brains in charge thought it would... Sherry was brilliant, as was Mike; but they can't just keep reacting to what the creature is doing; they have to do something more... Keep up the great work.
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Shane Simpleton and Donovan Difficult
centexhairysub commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Shane Simpleton and Donovan Difficult
Shane Simpleton and Donny Difficult, laughed till I thought I would pee myself. This was a great chapter, well written and paced just right. Gives you plenty to think about and let marinate while you wait for the next morsel coming up. Just delish. -
WOW, sabotage from within; but what was the saboteur trying to do? Only one other person knows that the outside can be accessed beside Alex; and with the base on lockdown, if a fire had gotten out of control; then it could have killed them all because they could not have escaped it, at least everyone but two should have believed this. Was it an attempt to shake up the leadership or to try and force everyone to find a way out more quickly? I would doubt that any other base would make an attempt to get to this one; the one near London is just too far away. Well written and the pacing was spot on; can't wait for the next update...
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Another great chapter; the writing and plotting just keep getting better and better; the pacing was excellent in this one as well. I was very impressed by how well those left behind handled the diversionary attack; ;although I do think they should have stopped firing the Thompson as soon as they realized after the first burst that they could not get the shots off accurately. That said, travlbug is right; if the zombie focuses to much on the vehicle; then someone in the camp with a powerful caliber rifle could do serious damage. I was starting to think that the zombie was driving the smaller trees through at lower locations to try and form a ladder up the side of the structure. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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Glad to see that Esthor and Rulf are getting along so well; they need to bond some more before the truth comes out. I have a feeling that Zane is going to stir up more of a hornets nest than even he realizes; you can tell that he doesn't think this is a good idea, but he will follow the King's orders. The Queen needs to step up and be the Queen.
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Lord, Donovan needs therapy and to be medicated. He is being much more of an ass than Shane is now...
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Hot Hot Hot, but I keep waiting for store security to bust in and advise that a camera was behind one of the mirrors... Glad to see they are getting to know each other and taking it slow... LOL
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Bride of Frankenstein
centexhairysub commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Bride of Frankenstein
I don't know if they will ever make sense together; they both need some therapy, but I think they already truly care about each other. I did find the pacing a bit off in this chapter; not sure why, read it twice and can't decide; the writing was first rate as always. -
Two steps forward and one step back
centexhairysub commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Two steps forward and one step back
Calvin would be so disappointed in Donovan, not because of what happened on the field but because of how he acted afterwards. Shane may have issues; but Donovan's issues maybe more involved than his. -
This was lovely, just need to sit back and let it marinate some... Can't wait to see what happens next.
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LOL, Donovan played the I was drunk and can't remember card way to well; he might actually have been so drunk that he did not remember. The writing and pacing were both perfect. I just love this story; and I am Team Shonovan, because I like them together...
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How to say stupid things - Shane 1/2
centexhairysub commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in How to say stupid things - Shane 1/2
I just knew that Shane was one of those men that have no idea how to talk to the person they really like. I know so many guys over the years that grew up in the right kind of families that are like this after they come out. They are just missing a key component of the gay lifestyles; the fact they either had to hide who they are for so many years; or the disapproval of a key family or parental figure to certain behavior makes it hard to relate to some men. -
Donovan would be an idiot not to go. I can't believe that he doesn't understand that Shane is flirting with him when he is being an ass; that is just how some guys flirt. It is like when the boy is in elementary school and they pull the hair or throw sand at the person they really like; some men just never outgrow the behavior.
