Daddydavek

Out of the frying pan into the fire, hi-ho, hi-ho, it's off to work they go....

Now Bridget has Trevor's car, still titled in his name. I think she has just set up Joel and Lisa. Trevor meanwhile is somewhat gobsmacked by Shane and too insecure and timid to try anything. Will we ever get to Christmas?

More edits..The whole chapter repeats itself??? "Wylie invited and encouraged John, with a flex of him magnificent gluts. The smell was heady a aroma of Wylie." (Both sentences need fixing.) "Wylie groaned his approval,<and> encouragement. Both <were>frosted with frustration at not being allowed to speak." "If he couldn’t f**k him, he would definitely being tonguing his ass again; tonight." (Replace being with "be".) Pavlov's dog's are mentioned and mentioned exactly the same way again. In truth, they salivated and did not pre-cum!

Joe Don is an interesting character and provides further details into John's love of the dealership. With all the details provided, I am beginning to wonder how long this opus will take to get back to the present??? Since the editor has awoken in me, I noted you used the word corporeal when I suspect you meant corporal. I also saw the word employee when I assume you meant employ.

I like where this chapter went, but the spell checker was on the blink. "Already, John's mouth had raised the bar on sexually drived pleasure." (I think you mean DERIVED.) "This time Wylie’s cock seemed to be drawn into his throat, as a drought of water might be." (You may have alternatively meant DRAUGHT or DRAFT for drought.) " He would have laughed as he envisioned himself being smootered to death, by a BALLSACK!" (I think you meant SMOTHERED.) "Pain was the fartherest thing from his mind as his body tnsed in preparation to experience his greatest orgasm yet!" (FURTHEST and TENSED are my guesses.) I note the chapter has a real bite in the butt and that all the misspellings occurred during the sex scenes. Makes me think the author has a sense of humor and perhaps gets a little excited parsing the sex.

ef·ful·gent    /ɪˈfʌldʒənt, ɪˈfʊl-/ Show Spelled[ih-fuhl-juhnt, ih-fool-] –adjective shining forth brilliantly; radiant. Now, now, not really a word that a college freshman majoring in business would use! Nor would a full grown Texas businessman (remembering with fondness) think of it in describing the scene between Wylie and John's mamacita.

Ok, still keeping up a partial charade, but obviously into each other and we're just through the first semester. I wonder how the relationship would have progressed if they had actually talked to each other and explored their feelings and not just sought sexual release?

Ah ha!

Since this is a flashback, I guess this could be a defining moment. However, I am sure, many college freshmen have had erotic thoughts about room mates after seeing them up close and personal, much less actually shaving them. Some probably even experiment without ever losing their hetero orientation. So I guess, I just didn't see the "Ah-ha" moment from your prose. Now that you've taken steps to set up the past, I am actually looking forward more to the present.

It was hard to get through this first chapter. Anyone hitting bottom is in a lot of pain and of course, John is at low ebb. Much better days are certainly anticipated. Starting a story at the low point is always a risk, but one that can be worth it if there is healing.

Foisting young Darby onto Sir Jervis was a handy solution to a problem which was becoming obvious. I wondered if the meeting with Nelson would go well since George's knighthood and found it interesting that Nelson sent the newly arrived captain to deal with ship blocking the mole. Perhaps Nelson's test was double-edged, one to get the job done and two to let the rest of his contingent know how capable Sir George could be. I thought he handled the "request" to Captain Sutton of the Egmont with poise and understated deftness.....Now if only the council of thirty reacts responsibly! (Another cliff-hangar:))

I know Will is Brad's son, but after reading this chapter I have to keep reminding myself this is a young teen talking and in my opinion he is coming off way more mature than every 13-14 year old I have ever met. Gathan, is still having interesting experiences and his poor step-parents are still feeling out of their league. An interesting chapter, but I have to wonder what the devious mind of the author is up to in laying this background?

A well told, sweet, somewhat predictable story. Being sentimental, parts did make me cry.....and I am always a sucker for a happy ending!

What a crock:( This did not just make my day:( Pitooey! As I have mentioned elsewhere, patience is not my strong suit.

Jared and his lover are in for it now. Why do I think this will NOT be a cakewalk?

Hmmm, not much resolution nor insightful hints as to what is to come. More of a teaser with the actual state of Jacob still a mystery. No follow-up to be expected for a while ....And patience is not my strong suit.

Jeanine is pregnant. Like many pregnant women she is a she bear when pregnant. Will and the rest of the kids will get over it. Tiffany is also pregnant and a little she bear herself. What they work out doesn't seem to be central to the story, they are just part of the milieu. Robbie and Brad have seen her pregnant before and seem to realize that sometimes you just have to go with the flow, it is a self-resolving issue, babies are finally born. My main interest is to see what the whole crew at Stanford gets up to in the coming academic year and the effect on the old man, J.P. I'm also interested in how Brad and Steff progress in their newly expanded business empire.

I was waiting for the story to continue with Scotty, nooo, we had to get back to Evan and Marv (not my two favorite characters) and neither is doing anything much except hunkering down. Now I'm hoping Kris will find a lover at the party. Oh, by the way, I read in your forum that you expect this to go through mid-May with weekly releases. As usual, I will be looking forward each week to sample your offering!

Thanks for my Granger fix! I was starting to worry that George was going to end up emotionally crippled and sexually repressed for the whole voyage! Thank the stars for cousin Darby!

I can empathize with all the posters and Mark's replies. Gathan is 17, old enough to be tried as an adult in just about every jurisdiction in the country. He is not a young adolescent. Stef is not Iggy Pop. I am more interested in where this poor man's son is going and what happens along the way and how the complex inter-relationships in this extended "family" are affected. Having read the CAP series from the beginning, I care about the main characters and want to see them grow, mature, and attain some measure of fulfillment and a sense of accomplishment. Brad's interest in the Mission and getting Stef involved was a beginning. Mark is inventive, surprising and has been known to aggravate his readers on occasions. I suspect he will continue to do all three in the future.

I looked at the options in your poll about Gathan and think you should have included at least one more for: OTHER and let us write in our choice. I would have chose Anthony.....

Contrasting events in business and in personal matters make this a very interesting chapter. Young Gathan is amazingly mature and insightful and makes full use of his obvious intelligence. Throw in a little fearlessness and we have all the ingredients for a leading player as the poor man's son....

Great chapter! Nice how their ship's repairs/upgrades turned the tide of that battle. Nice how the transition to Pluto station got parental and personal with love interests all around. I just love a story that has explosions, excitement and a constant sexual undertone.....

The PI and the detective are still dancing. Joel and Lisa still are clueless about the dragon lady. Dirk is guilty of something, but what? Trevor is our hero, and a pawn in much larger schemes and the picture is still really not any clearer..... On the brighter side, Shane is real eyecandy for Trevor and it seems they both need to open up to each other.

I've read through Chapter 40 and have come to the realization that I still haven't a clue as to what will happen next. I also wonder why Adam has not told his uncle about the divided spirit that inhabits/inhabited both he and Jacob and about his somewhat imperfect knowledge about the underlying spirits and their world? Seems a lot of misunderstanding about the basic source of their magic should be investigated. I hope the epilogue is not a blow-off that nicely but in broad strokes kills off any chance of a sequel.