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Gathan is in lust but a long distance romance never seems to work. Brad has his hands full with a precocious almost 14 year old son. I bet he has a lot more heartburn after Will gets his driver's license as this kid really does test boundaries. I guess what goes around comes around as I remember all the fun J.P. had with his kids and Brad especially. Stef is interesting and sentimental as usual. His asking forgiveness from Will was very much in character. I am supposing that the journey to Paris will be a watershed, but hopefully not as traumatic as when Robbie went all those years ago. Then it was J.P. with a false positive HIV, now it's cancer. The possible parallels are mind-boggling.

I've read through the 10 chapters and I have come to the conclusion that Travis is as much the nowhere man as Tyler. Wade is a complication that could be fatal. All of these guys are drifters of a sort, with nothing to anchor them. Life without a purpose, buffeted by the vagaries of life soon seems fairly pointless. Hopefully, the moral of this story will have some merit but I have no clue where any of this is going....

Thanks for a great story Jack! I know that somehow, someway, many of these characters will re-surface in a later script because they are too interesting and challenging to let just evaporate into the ether...

"I was learning that sometimes boyfriends could be high-maintenance." Ain't it the truth! But as young teens, all relationships are so new and seem like so much work. I'd also like to mention that John is really young too and like most youngsters, it's all about them.... I think Mark captured the ambiance of the generation fairly well. And Gathan is a blast, calling Stef after the fact of using the house was seemingly right in character. The latest news about J.P. is unsettling. Colon cancer is more prevalent among gay men.

As noted, this chapter really moved along! But has the mob (a.k.a. Rocco) also infiltrated the Chicago P.D. and therefore does he know that Evan had protection which took out his two goons? Does he also know about Scotty and does Scotty need to be aware he could now be a target? Now back to the newsroom--and its coverage of the ongoing story including the latest kidnapping attempt gone bust? So many loose ends, including a hot party this weekend to write about....Again, I am filled with anticipation and can't wait to see the next offering.

Poor Sir George, he just gets a quick tryst in with a delectable piece and then is off to Italy and has to leave at once to ferry a self-righteous general, who insists on pulling rank, back to Gibraltar. Hopefully, the winds will turn and be as favorable sailing westward.

I think Mark is right that this younger generation is not hung up on labels and seem more cafeteria oriented toward sex...

Interesting, befuddling, and maybe a little pretentious? I am not familiar with the "Charmed" series so I am new to this. However, it seems the elves did a poor job of preparing our young hero for life in the "real" world. His finding the witches, was providential but potentially worrisome if he wishes to remain anonymous. His jinni is remiss in failing to remind him that the bag which can't be opened could still be stolen... Having said all that, I eagerly await the next installment and its bag of tricks!

Your response to Bumblebee was somewhat surprising. If I were a betting man I would have lost, as I would have thought your reply would have said: "No, its all about plowing!" Just to keep the mixed metaphor on track....

Jared was already well-motivated and with his augmentation, and new combat suit, ferociously armed. As his kids have some augmentation they could well survive if they got into escape pods. The fear is that they fall into the hands of officials loyal to the infamous president. Jared will find some way to carry out his mission and destroy him or end up mortally wounded trying. He will also try to find out about his kids and lover. That ship was their best hope and it was compromised running into a mine field. The amount of bad luck, devastating surprises and other calamities hitting the space force of the federation, (likened in the story as more Coast Guard like than true Navy or Marine) is almost like a comic book story...

Machinations, as such all occurred in the first quarter of the chapter. The story of Trevor and Shane covers the other three-quarters and still there is no hint as to whether they will become more than just friends. I am breathlessly awaiting the rest of this remarkable adventure/thriller/mystery.

Interesting chapter, but again Will seems way more mature than an almost 14 year old, in how he handled his mom and both dads, especially in a stressful situation. I guess, I am used to early teens who try to manipulate one parent to influence the other one. Here was a perfect chance for Will to enlist Brad to convince Robbie that he was the natural one to take Jeanine aside and get her to see she was making everyone's life terrible so they could join her in a pity party and that it was instead driving a further wedge into the family. Gathan is something else and as he explores his sexuality and prowess in the manly arts, it seems he is more confident. I still think that when the crew assembles in Paly that J.P. will have his hands full.

I am a sucker for happy endings, even when the main characters are total screw-ups and really don't deserve one. Alright, most of us screw-up more often than we like to admit and we still want happiness. I guess being imperfect human beings is what makes us interesting. Thanks for the story!

UGH, ARRHHH, sound of grinding teeth, lasting relationships are not built on deception, or on being less than truthful with significant others.

Very interesting and fast-paced chapter that left many questions unanswered. Hopefully, the house will be a trove of information and our kind author will deign to share. As usual, I find it will be hard to wait for the next installment.

I really like what you did with this chapter. The flow is good throughout. Nice job in putting it all together!

Gathan now as match-maker? Cute! Gathan manipulated by Zack? Not cute. Tiffany telling Will that pregnant women can be bitches: Too true. Steff's upcoming trip to Paris: Sounds intriguing and fun! Something for everyone.

PRECOGNITION!?! Out of the frying pan into the fire, hi-ho, hi-ho, it's off to work they go.... Reply from Rilbur (author) Why oh why did you have to use the word 'fire'

Out of the frying pan into the fire, hi-ho, hi-ho, it's off to work they go....

Now Bridget has Trevor's car, still titled in his name. I think she has just set up Joel and Lisa. Trevor meanwhile is somewhat gobsmacked by Shane and too insecure and timid to try anything. Will we ever get to Christmas?

More edits..The whole chapter repeats itself??? "Wylie invited and encouraged John, with a flex of him magnificent gluts. The smell was heady a aroma of Wylie." (Both sentences need fixing.) "Wylie groaned his approval,<and> encouragement. Both <were>frosted with frustration at not being allowed to speak." "If he couldn’t f**k him, he would definitely being tonguing his ass again; tonight." (Replace being with "be".) Pavlov's dog's are mentioned and mentioned exactly the same way again. In truth, they salivated and did not pre-cum!

Joe Don is an interesting character and provides further details into John's love of the dealership. With all the details provided, I am beginning to wonder how long this opus will take to get back to the present??? Since the editor has awoken in me, I noted you used the word corporeal when I suspect you meant corporal. I also saw the word employee when I assume you meant employ.

I like where this chapter went, but the spell checker was on the blink. "Already, John's mouth had raised the bar on sexually drived pleasure." (I think you mean DERIVED.) "This time Wylie’s cock seemed to be drawn into his throat, as a drought of water might be." (You may have alternatively meant DRAUGHT or DRAFT for drought.) " He would have laughed as he envisioned himself being smootered to death, by a BALLSACK!" (I think you meant SMOTHERED.) "Pain was the fartherest thing from his mind as his body tnsed in preparation to experience his greatest orgasm yet!" (FURTHEST and TENSED are my guesses.) I note the chapter has a real bite in the butt and that all the misspellings occurred during the sex scenes. Makes me think the author has a sense of humor and perhaps gets a little excited parsing the sex.

ef·ful·gent    /ɪˈfʌldʒənt, ɪˈfʊl-/ Show Spelled[ih-fuhl-juhnt, ih-fool-] –adjective shining forth brilliantly; radiant. Now, now, not really a word that a college freshman majoring in business would use! Nor would a full grown Texas businessman (remembering with fondness) think of it in describing the scene between Wylie and John's mamacita.

Ok, still keeping up a partial charade, but obviously into each other and we're just through the first semester. I wonder how the relationship would have progressed if they had actually talked to each other and explored their feelings and not just sought sexual release?