Daddydavek

When it rains it pours and sometimes things get a little sticky...like relationships with best friends that are hung up on you, a beat-up nephew getting an eyeful, an all-knowing mom and a hunky older guy that floats your boat. Other than that the story is sort of dragging. NOT!

"Air France Flight 4590, Concorde service to New York" and then the picture too. How interesting to see you weave the disparate elements of your story against the backdrop of the then current events. I remember the shock at that horrible crash where all were killed. However, I hope MatthewK is right and Gathan talked Kristen out of boarding that ill-fated plane as her character has a special panache and believability that I have found refreshing. However, there is still the issue of a long-distance romance with Gathan off to Stanford in the fall...

If Rick Jr is black and blue, I hate to think what Barbara will do or did to Rick Sr..... Ted is a distraction that Charlie could do without just now, but isn't that just like life, always something getting in the way. Scott is going to have to do some 'splaining if he really wants to get somewhere with Charlie, as Charlie is clueless. Yikes, you really know how to yank our chains, now we wait for the next installment.

Interesting meet up and disposition of Chartley. George certainly has his ups-and-downs, especially since the loss of Travers. His love life, family issues, naval politics, court politics, and the fact that there is a war on all make for a unique backdrop. I eagerly await the next chapter.

I think you have created a sense of realism in Will and John's relationship that is authentic, as each is still a very young teen, albeit somewhat more experienced than usual. Will in particular is undergoing life altering experiences at a fairly rapid pace and having to deal with real world issues at a dizzying pace. Yet he pays attention to his dad, pop and Stef as well as John and actually takes time to process what is happening. Much more mature than the usual in-the-moment teen. Will is even thinking ahead to how things will be back in SoCal. Now I wonder what little surprise Stef has??

You do tend to shift speakers without warning or identification which is sometimes confusing. However, I have not had too much trouble and the story is certainly interesting. The money is a little too unbelievable. Their fathers could not have had a separate company worth some 34 billion without there being something shown in their prior tax returns which the lawyers would have. With a net worth like that, the death taxes would be astronomical as well....Even with everything held in trusts, the income used or profits taken would still be taxable soooo!?? A couple of hundred million is a lot. Billions and billions starts to sound like the number of hamburgers sold at Mickey D's. Oprah is only worth a couple of billion (2.4 per Forbes).

Unghhh! I just read chapters 1 thru 14 and I get left out in the cold with a cliff-hanger. Interesting set-up. Somehow, I think Charlie is going to need to have another talk with mom....

Will is certainly Brad's son. A big dicked slut who has sense enough to lay back an enjoy it when he really has no other option. Even so, he was thinking about his future reactions, another quite mature observation. Will's use of his cell phone also shows he is smart and resourceful. Like someone else mentioned, I too was disappointed not to even get a smidgen of reaction in this chapter from Stef.... We all await the next installment with great anticipation.

An American voice was behind the gun... Brad has some bitter enemies whom he has taken down and some have lots of money. It seems they may have hired some thugs to follow him and his family to exact some revenge. Knowing Brad, and the rest of the clan including Stef and J.P., I would expect they will get to the bottom of this and exact their own retribution. I just hope Brad and his son make it through this latest challenge!

Chartley's wound is grievous and infection is almost unavoidable. The real question is what will George do with the information and what it is. Clearly, Bertie is Bertie, but now it seems the other brother has integrity issues as well! Mark is getting seduced by his power to keep us guessing and wanting more. I of course am completely under his spell.

Its interesting that Robbie decided to go to Paris; that Brad laid a 6 million dollar trust on Gathan; that Darius is about as much a smartass as Will; that JP and Kristin are related; that Gathan and Kristin joined the mile high club; and finally, that Stef is still trying to explain to Will that at 14 he still hasn't quite got it all figured out and that it is ok to be 14 and not 18. Having assimilated all that information, I eagerly await to see what happens in Paris with this eclectic mix of generations and personalities.

I've read through the first 13 chapters over the past 24 hours and I have to agree that Nephy's story is dark and compelling. However, the ending of Chapter 13 is way too much trauma for River, nevermind Silver... I am afraid to start on chapter 14. Perhaps I shall work up to it after awhile. My only hope is that there are 13 more chapters and then Enigma II, so there is a future and hopefully it is not completely bleak.

Gar/Will is something else! What, I am not sure, but with his symbiont(?) he has the cumulative memories and experience of numerous prior hosts as revealed by this chapter. Somehow, he sees a difference with Ryan which reminds him of David and he also has noticed a difference in the police response with the inclusion of FBI interest. Somehow I don't see them staying in the current apartment too long. Again, the story has grabbed me! Thanks for the ride!

I thought it was a good time to bring this chapter to a close. I would not be surprised to see the next chapter begin well after the skirmish is over with the interval filled in by later recounts. There is a reason for the term "the fog of war" and it is because the chaos of the individual moments become overwhelming. It takes a while to process it all. That is why the best military soldiers and sailors, train so much; so that they don't have to think, just react and seize any opportunity that presents itself. Mark does a great job of describing the action and I think he deliberately chose to end it as he did. A cliff-hanger, maybe, but perhaps if you read the battle description again, you will agree, more would add nothing to the story. Now we just wonder about the outcome and how successful they were. After all, the battle of St. Vincent is still in their future.

Another chapter and still they dance but resolve nothing. Trevor does have his traumatic episode weighing on him, but Shane certainly does not and I still cannot believe that a resolution of their sexuality becoming known to each other, whatever the consequences, has not occurred. I am also completely in the dark about the big think Dirk will reveal to Trevor and for which Jim thinks Trevor will find it sufficient to reconcile with his dad! So many stray parts to this story still unresolved after 76 chapters!

Interesting set-up. Now I can't wait for J.P., Brad, John, Gathan and Kristin to get to Paris and see those interactions.

While I get that Trevor is repressed and worried about revealing being gay, Shane is not repressed and has been presented as fairly open and not as oblivious as so far implied by the last couple of chapters. I think he would have made a move by now if he was gay or put Trevor's fumbling instances together and made clear that he was not. They are living together on a fairly small boat with no other real distractions. Guys in their late teens of this generation are more in the know and like Joel and his fiancee more accepting.

Gathan is in lust but a long distance romance never seems to work. Brad has his hands full with a precocious almost 14 year old son. I bet he has a lot more heartburn after Will gets his driver's license as this kid really does test boundaries. I guess what goes around comes around as I remember all the fun J.P. had with his kids and Brad especially. Stef is interesting and sentimental as usual. His asking forgiveness from Will was very much in character. I am supposing that the journey to Paris will be a watershed, but hopefully not as traumatic as when Robbie went all those years ago. Then it was J.P. with a false positive HIV, now it's cancer. The possible parallels are mind-boggling.

I've read through the 10 chapters and I have come to the conclusion that Travis is as much the nowhere man as Tyler. Wade is a complication that could be fatal. All of these guys are drifters of a sort, with nothing to anchor them. Life without a purpose, buffeted by the vagaries of life soon seems fairly pointless. Hopefully, the moral of this story will have some merit but I have no clue where any of this is going....

Thanks for a great story Jack! I know that somehow, someway, many of these characters will re-surface in a later script because they are too interesting and challenging to let just evaporate into the ether...

"I was learning that sometimes boyfriends could be high-maintenance." Ain't it the truth! But as young teens, all relationships are so new and seem like so much work. I'd also like to mention that John is really young too and like most youngsters, it's all about them.... I think Mark captured the ambiance of the generation fairly well. And Gathan is a blast, calling Stef after the fact of using the house was seemingly right in character. The latest news about J.P. is unsettling. Colon cancer is more prevalent among gay men.

As noted, this chapter really moved along! But has the mob (a.k.a. Rocco) also infiltrated the Chicago P.D. and therefore does he know that Evan had protection which took out his two goons? Does he also know about Scotty and does Scotty need to be aware he could now be a target? Now back to the newsroom--and its coverage of the ongoing story including the latest kidnapping attempt gone bust? So many loose ends, including a hot party this weekend to write about....Again, I am filled with anticipation and can't wait to see the next offering.

Poor Sir George, he just gets a quick tryst in with a delectable piece and then is off to Italy and has to leave at once to ferry a self-righteous general, who insists on pulling rank, back to Gibraltar. Hopefully, the winds will turn and be as favorable sailing westward.

I think Mark is right that this younger generation is not hung up on labels and seem more cafeteria oriented toward sex...

Interesting, befuddling, and maybe a little pretentious? I am not familiar with the "Charmed" series so I am new to this. However, it seems the elves did a poor job of preparing our young hero for life in the "real" world. His finding the witches, was providential but potentially worrisome if he wishes to remain anonymous. His jinni is remiss in failing to remind him that the bag which can't be opened could still be stolen... Having said all that, I eagerly await the next installment and its bag of tricks!