Nephylim

Kevin and Kenny.... most cute

This one wasn't gay But you're right. It would be real fun to retell some story tales with a gay twist

TOTALLY AWESOME!!! It was SO the right ending. Loose ends nicely tied and the right person with the right person. What a roller coaster ride.

That was totally chilling. I can understand why the poor kid was such a bundle of nerves, so was I and I was just reading. Last chapter. Dare i read?

Well, I didn't expect that. Shit. Now what?

Oooooh, how exciting. Now it might seem that I read this chapter really quickly but not even i can be that fast. Truth is that I read this one first and then went back to read the rest... yeah i know, it's just me Anyway I LOVED this chapter. Things are really heating up and I LOVED the ending.

That was really interesting. I enjoyed the whole scientific thing because I like learning about new things. So they are having matching dreams... hmmm... and now we know where the outbreak is coming from so all the threads are weaving together nicely

I KNEW it would be Lucifer. He's the coolest. He's an angel you know. Lucifer Morningstar, the brightest of all angels. He's been sadly maligned. FYI all magic is neutral and it's the actions in using it that are dark or light I really love the premise of the story and the way that there are lots of different strands... Jayden, Lucifer's son: Arthur with his dreams of being an angel: the sickness. I figure they are all connected and look forward to seeing how. As a matter of criticism I would work on the dialogue.

Will give it a go May I ask which version of the devil you are referring to? Lucifer is my favourite

That was disturbingly beautiful. Silently still. Awesome title, awesome subject, awesome concept. Can you tell that I liked it

YEAH. \OMG. That was sooooo hot. Had me gasping for breath. I have never read such a scorching hot chapter where nothing actually happens... well you know what I mean. Erotic isn't even the word for it

I think I know why So Clive IS getting his fingers burned... and covered in charcoal. HEHE

Sneaky little shit. I hope he gets his fingers burned. I have to echo what the others have said. The imagery is awesome

When I first red it I thought you'd said that the red against the grey was blood on the bedstead. You might want to think of changing the colour of the bed Other than that it was a really fine piece of writing. You should have put it into and anthology; more people would have read it

we tried kidswirl but to be perfectly honest it was so complicated not even I could work it out and we couldn't work out how to blog. Never mind, he's happy now. Thanks so much for all the suggestions

Welcome everyone I missed since last time... which is LOADS. I do my best but I do miss you sometimes OMG I can't beliee that I missed welcoming you Andy. Come on everyone say Hello to Quonus the new guy I am sure you will make new friends Wood Stock we're awful friendly... well some are awful and some are friently There isn't really and etiquette about welcoming. And thanks are always appreciated no matter where they are posted. Take it as said

i guess. I adore Bridge. Maybe that's why. Thanks for reviewing again. I so appreciate it. This was a total fun experiment and I'm really glad that people like it

I like to move rapidly when i'm writing sex

Oh yeah Thanks for the review. I appreciate it

HAHA Not at all. Well unless I'm shallow too because I had SUCH a blast writing it

I would use we’re’ instead of we are This seems a bit redundant. I love your usage of the word “hollow” here in reference to someone being sick. It has a profoundly deep implication in the mind of the reader. By the way, I love how you write from the first person narrative in the present tense. An example is ‘I say’ as opposed to ‘I said’. It is a small change but really does add a certain crucial ingredient to your writing. Just noticed I never replied to this. I can't imagine why. This was a really thoughtful and useful review. I know that I have a habit of failing to use contractions. Quite often I have to go through my word and add them in. Don't know why but it feels more natural not to have them although I know it makes the writing more stilted sometimes.

Well... the whole story is kind of sexy and scary. Be warned. This one has more sex than any other story and it's all weird.

Lets face the truth huh. As much as I may fight against it I'm coming. If I have to sell my kids I'm coming. It may just be for the day or I might have to sleep with someone but I'm coming. I have ulterior motives that you don't need to know about but I am so definitely coming

WOW that was a shocking chapter, not getting round that. Kyle was an idiot, Coop was a slut and both of them need to be slapped and not in a good way I have to admit that I am getting a little tired of all the sleeping round now becuase it just feels as if it's getting in the way of the plot rather than adding to it. I want Coop and Kyle forever

Well, at least he's working through his list WITH Kyle now. WOW a hot chapter indeed and I should be feeling smug and satisfied but Kyle pretending to be asleeep? hmmm