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2015 - Winter - Blackout Entry

Day and Night - 1. Day and Night

Going to Adam’s, I’ll be back by 9. Love you.
 
The message sent, Luke quickly put away his phone after making sure once more that a teacher wasn’t in sight. With a sigh of relief, he closed his locker and with everything in tow, made his way to the main entrance.
 
Autumn had finally set in, the trees were now mostly bare and most of the leaves had finally dispersed, with some colorful patches still seen here and there. With the afternoon sun shining so brightly, Luke hoped it might be a warm day. But after stepping outside the school’s main doors, a cold breeze blew past him. Luke wisely zipped up his sweater and after adjusting his backpack, placed his hands in his pockets.
 
That taken care of, Luke headed to the bike rack and, with obvious reluctance, took out his hands to unlock his bike’s chain. The bike had clearly seen many years of use; the red paint no longer gleamed in the sunlight. But with meticulous care from its attentive owner, there was no need to consider buying a new one.
 
After leaving the school’s parking lot, Luke headed down the street until the familiar sign of Crockett Street came ever closer. He made a right turn onto Crockett and continued on to his best friend’s house. Another breeze rushed through Luke’s brown hair as he neared Adam’s home.
 
Finally, Luke arrived at the two-story house. Leaving the bike by the garage, he went up the steps to the porch and entered his second home.
 
Making his way to the sitting room, he found Mrs. Wilson reading her Bible.
 
“Hey Martha!” She looked up with a smile.
 
Adam’s mother insisted he stop calling her Mrs. Wilson, and with much reluctance, Luke complied. By now, he was comfortable with it. How could he not be? She was always so nice, a smile never far from her lips, and warmth always in her green eyes.
 
She got up from the armchair and gave Luke a warm hug. “How are you sweetie?”
 
“I’m fine, I’m just here to help Adam with his homework.”
 
A coy smile playing on her lips, she asked, “Is it math?”
 
Snickering, he said, “Oh yeah, although rescuing him from that C won’t be easy.” He couldn’t help but roll his eyes.
 
Martha laughed, “Okay, go rescue my son,” she gave him a peck on the cheek, “and good luck sweetie; you’ll need it.”
 
Luke went upstairs to Adam’s bedroom. When he opened his door, Luke was greeted by the sight of Adam pacing back and forth. His usually neat blond hair was mussed up from running his fingers through it. His broad chest moved with each short breath he took. His green eyes were strained, and held so much worry.
 
“I’m finally here!”
 
Adam looked over to Luke, relief now in his eyes. He ran towards his best friend and embraced him.
 
“Oh thank God! Luke, I’m so screwed!”
 
“Adam, Mr. Howard’s test isn’t for three days, relax.”
 
With a pat on Adam’s back, Luke walked further into the room and noticed the mess strewn all over the desk. Luke sat on the bed beside it, and looked over the mess. The calculus textbook was closest to him, it was opened to Chapter 3: Introduction to Differentiation. Next was the assignment, The Difference Quotient: Practice. Beyond that were notes haphazardly all over the desk.
 
Looking up from the desk, Luke raised an eyebrow at Adam, “So how can I help you?”
 
“There’s the comedian,” Adam said as he let out a chuckle.
 
“What do you expect? Besides, I’m here to save your ass.” Luke couldn’t help but end it by sticking his tongue out.
 
With a smirk, Adam asked, “What are you, five?”
 
He sat down at the desk chair and turned to face Luke. “Seriously dude, I don’t understand this crap,” he said as he gestured to the mess.
 
Luke’s brown eyes became serious and focused. “Okay, tell me what you're having trouble with and we can go from there.”
 
“With all of it.”
 
“Oh boy,” Luke unzipped his backpack and got out his own notes, “do you want me to start with the basics?”
 
“Sure.”
 
“Hm… okay, let’s start with you telling me what the slope represents.”
 
“Uhm… rise over run?”
 
“Yeah Adam, but I was looking for something more specific,” with a smile, Luke continued, “Slopes are rates of change. Back in Algebra, we could find slopes easily enough with linear functions, but not power functions since they were curved, and—“
 
“Hate to butt in dude, but you’re droning on,” Adam immediately cracked up.
 
Luke’s frown slipped as he burst out laughing. “Do you want my help or not?” He added a raised eyebrow for good measure.
 
In a pompous voice, Adam said, “Please continue, my good man!”
 
Luke was tempted to respond with an eye roll, but settled with, “Your wish is my command, Master.”
 
A huge grin came over Adam’s face. “What was that? I didn’t hear, can you repeat it?”
 
“Oh hush! As I was saying earlier, now that we are in Calculus, we have to consider average and instantaneous rates of change in order to understand derivatives, so…”
 
And Luke fired off into his long winded explanation of slopes, limits, derivatives, and a bunch of delta x’s thrown into the mix. Of course, he made sure his friend was following. If he wasn’t, he’d clarify. Luke led Adam through the first few problems of the worksheet so he could understand and master the steps in solving each problem.
 
Thirty minutes in, Adam felt confident enough to try some of the problems on his own. This left Luke to go to Adam’s bookcase. Where his weakness was math, literature was his strength. His bookcase had everything from Homer, to Dickens, to Rowling. Finally, Luke settled on The Hobbit and went to lie on the bed as he read, only stopping now and then to check on Adam.
 
Consequently, the room was quiet as each did their own thing, until Adam broke the silence.
 
“Hey Luke, let’s take a break. Besides, it’s almost dinnertime!”
 
That certainly got Luke’s attention. He loved food, especially Martha’s. Of course that isn’t to say his own mom was a terrible cook. He knew he was one lucky teenager to have a feast fit for a teen, whether it was at his own home, or here at Adam’s. As they went downstairs, the smell of one particular food reached them.
 
With huge grins they yelled, “Pizza!” and high fived each other.
 
Homemade pizza! To the guys, this was heaven. When everyone was seated, Adam’s father asked Martha to say grace. All bowed their heads as she thanked the Lord for their meal.
 
After everyone said “Amen” they dug into the pepperoni pizza.
 
Martha turned to her husband and asked, “How was work, sweetie?”
 
“It went well, darling,” he smiled fondly at his wife, “I went over this Sunday’s sermon, a church member came by for counseling, and lastly I had a meeting with the deacons on missionary work.”
 
Ben Wilson was the Pastor of First Baptist and a leading member of the community. As a result, he was well known and loved by everyone.
 
He turned to Adam and Luke, “So boys, how’s school going?”
 
Adam gulped before plunging in, “Well… you see Dad… I’m still struggling with Calculus.”
 
At the disappointed look on his father’s face, Adam rushed on, “But Dad, I’m more than okay in my other classes, especially English Lit.”
 
“Son, we just want you to be as successful as your older brother and sister. They—“
 
He was cut off by Martha, “Oh sweetie, don’t worry. Adam has Luke to tutor him. Right, honey?”
 
Luke put down the slice of pizza he was about to eat after she called on him.
 
“Yeah,” he smiled at the Pastor, “today, I went over the lesson with Adam and he is starting to understand it.”
 
“Oh Luke, you are a godsend! I don’t know where my son would be without you.”
 
Luke cheekily replied, “Probably being a bane in someone else’s existence.”
 
Laughs erupted from the parents as Adam said, “Hey, I’m not that bad.”
 
“Of course not, dear,” his mother said, as she tried to stifle her laughter.
 
Adam looked up to the ceiling and mumbled, “Why me?”
 
“We mean well.” Luke plastered on an innocent look. Alas, the Wilson family snorted since they had become very familiar with Luke’s mischievous ways.
 
Ben turned to Luke. “I’ve grilled my own son, now what about you? How is school?”
 
The Wilsons finished up the last of their pizza as Luke said with a wink, “My straight “A” streak continues.”
 
“Lucky you,” Adam joked.
 
With a giggle, Martha said, “All right boys, if you’re done, you can go back upstairs.”
 
As soon as they finished, they ran upstairs and when they entered the bedroom, Adam fell back onto the bed, letting out a sigh.
 
After a moment of silence he said, “They expect too much from me. It’s like they can’t see I’m not Charlie or Samantha.”
 
Brushing his long hair from his eyes, Luke finally responded after thinking on it, “Adam, they just want you to do well academically. You know how parents can be, wanting the best from us.”
 
Adam got up and went to get A Tale of Two Cities from the bookcase. “Luke, they demand I excel in all my classes.”
 
Looking down at the book, he continued, “How can I when the only class I am good at, and enjoy, is English?”
 
Adam set aside the book, and a pensive silence descended on the pair, until Luke decided to cheer his friend up. “Hey, at least graduation is only seven months away.”
 
Adam’s frown morphed into a smile, “Yeah, so close and yet so far away.”
 
“You know what, hand me your iPod and let’s forget about your worries for now.”
 
Adam gave him the iPod and Luke went to plug it in to the docking station. He returned to bed to lay down beside Adam.
 
Soon enough, the sounds of Alt-J, Chevelle, Panic at the Disco, and more washed over the guys, taking away all their worries and troubles. All that was left were two very calm boys. Time lost all meaning, when all of a sudden What Makes You Beautiful blasted through the room. The serene atmosphere was ripped to shreds as they jumped from the bed. Adam made a dash towards his iPod, and thankfully turned it off.
 
“Adam, what the hell was that?”
 
“Must‘ve been Abby.” Adam shook his head.
 
With a huff, Luke said, “Your girlfriend is great and all, but I will never understand her obsession with One Direction.”
 
“Well, she might be growing out of it,” and with a thumbs up, Adam continued, “just cross your fingers.”
 
“Well One Direction ruined the moment, we might as well get back to studying,” Luke said as he got his notes from the desk.
 
Pouting, Adam asked, “Do we have to?”
 
An eyebrow raised, Luke said, “Don’t even try, I’ve long since become immune to your pouts.”
 
“But… but…” and a tear, a tear for crying out loud, dripped down his cheek!
 
Dammit! Luke thought. “Oh fine… We’ll just go over the problems you did for the next half hour. Sound good?”
 
Adam’s triumphant smile fell. “Really? We’re still going to study?” With a shake of his head he said, “You drive a hard bargain.”
 
“What can I say, it’s the inner businessman in me.” Luke ended that with a wink.
 
“A businessman? And here I thought you’d end up as a lonely old math teacher with only numbers and equations to keep you company.”
 
“What are you saying?” Mock indignation was dripping from Luke’s tone.
 
Mirth in his eyes, Adam said, “That you’ll be a loser!”
 
“Says the guy with a C,” and Luke smiled evilly, “or an F if you don’t do well on Friday.”
 
“Okay, okay, we’ll study… for a bit.”
 
More teasing ensued, but they quickly got back to work. Luke checked his friend’s work, marking up things he did wrong and then explaining each problem. Slowly but surely, Adam became more confident. Getting a good grade on the exam no longer felt impossible.
 
Finally, it was time for Luke to head home. As Luke was gathering his things, Adam stopped his friend.
 
“Hey Luke, uhm… Abby has a friend. Do you want to double date on Saturday?”
 
Luke froze in place. His eyes widened, his heart beat picked up, and his hands shook ever so slightly.
 
Not meeting Adam’s eyes, Luke said, “Sorry Adam, but I’ll be busy with my history report.”
 
“Oh come on, can’t you just do that later? Or how about this, we set it up for next weekend?”
 
Heaving a sigh, Luke finally met Adam’s eyes. “Look, I’m not looking to date, much less a relationship. Okay?”
 
Laughing, Adam said, “Sometimes, I think you might be gay.”
 
The silence was deafening. Luke didn’t joke back and he avoided his longtime friend’s eyes. Adam couldn’t understand his best friend’s behavior, this was completely unlike him. Whenever they bantered, Luke was always quick with his witty remarks. Then Adam’s eyes widened.
 
“You’re not… right?”
 
Adam was met with guilty eyes. The silence intensified. Adam looked at his friend of six years as if he was a stranger. He shook his head in denial, unable to really process the thoughts running through his head. Adam began pacing the room and avoided eye contact with Luke. He couldn’t bear to look at his friend.
 
“Adam, I—“
 
“No!” Luke had never seen Adam so angry. “You can’t be… you just can’t.”
 
Resolved, Luke said, “I’m gay.”
 
Adam cringed. “Stop.”
 
Luke neared his best friend, “Adam, please—“
 
“Stay away from me!” Those words were like knives to Luke.
 
Adam continued, “I… I don’t think I can do this…”
 
Panicked, Luke asked, “What are you saying?”
 
With determination, Adam stated simply, “I’m ending this friendship.”
 
Everything stopped for Luke. For the second time, he was frozen in place. His mind was the opposite, moving from here to there and back in a matter of a few seconds. In that time, Luke relived the memories he had with Adam. From the first day of Junior High, when Adam was assigned as his seating partner, to the first time they slept over at each other’s house. Cheering Adam on in his first game on the basketball team, and so many more flashed before his eyes in those few seconds.
 
It was Adam turning his back on him that galvanized Luke to do something. He spoke.
 
“Adam Richard Wilson, you listen here! We have been friends for years. Since the beginning we have always been night and day to each other, especially in how we think. I remember that argument we had on evolution and creationism. It never came close to destroying our friendship. Or how about the time when I told you I was a bleeding heart liberal? That didn’t destroy our friendship. What about most recently, when I told you I was no longer Christian? Even when you thought I was an atheist, our friendship didn’t end. And here you are, willing to end a friendship that has weathered so much already.” Tears were streaming down Luke’s face by the time he finished.
 
He turned to leave. At the door, he looked back at Adam, still facing away, and said, “I refuse to throw away six years, and Adam, you know how stubborn I can be when I set my mind on something.”
 
Luke left the room, and headed downstairs. As he neared the entrance to the sitting room, he wiped away his tears. When he was presentable, he entered the room to say goodnight to Martha and Ben. Hugs and kisses shared all around, Luke then made his way to the front door. When he opened it, the light from the hall spilled before him, illuminating a large swath of the front yard.
 
He took a moment to stand there. He knew things would be different, for good or bad he did not know. Finally, he took a step forward and closed the door behind him. Immediately the darkness beyond the light rushed in. Moonlight, starlight, and streetlights were enough to guide Luke to his bike and on his way home.
 
Fortunately, it was only two blocks away. In only a matter of minutes, he arrived at his single story home and went inside.
 
Luke welcomed the light and warmth as he entered. He was immediately greeted by his mom, and after a quick kiss on the cheek, he went on to his own room.
 
He went through his nightly routine; changing into his pajamas and brushing his teeth. All taken care of, he turned off the lights in his room and got in bed. Just before the clutches of sleep claimed him, Luke made a spur-of-the-moment decision.
 
He got out his phone, and sent a quick message: Adam, study tomorrow. Else, I’ll kick your ass. A small smile on his face, Luke put aside his phone and drifted off to sleep.
 
The light from the phone turned off a minute later.
 
Thirty minutes later, the phone lit up once again, the screen reading: one new message.
 
I'd like to take the opportunity to thank Kitt for being a wonderful editor. She sent back my story with a lot of red marks all over the place. And I'm positive, with her guidance, those red marks will be fewer as I continue to work with her. I'd also like to thank my beta-readers, Victor and Clo. They each gave me invaluable insight and feedback on Day and Night.
I'm so grateful to have all three of them as my friends.
Finally, I want to thank Renee and her team for all they've done in getting this Winter Anthology together.
Copyright © 2015 Drew Espinosa; All Rights Reserved.
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On 12/12/2015 06:39 AM, skinnydragon said:

WooHoo! Finally made it to your story Drew!!

 

Glad I did!

Luke is super. He won't take Adam's knee jerk reaction as an answer.

Let's hope Adam's love of literature has left him open to some original thought.

Great ending. Actually the best you could write. Anything else would be anticlimactic.

 

Thanks for sharing this!

I'm so glad you like the ending! I actually thought long and hard on how I wanted to end this story, and "one new message" felt just right :)

 

Ah, Adam. He does love literature... maybe he should join GA and learn a thing or two :P

 

Luke is the kind of guy that doesn't take BS from anyone, even his best friend.

 

Thanks for reading Skinny! :hug:

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I like that your story involved two friends who didn't have to be the same in order to be really close. You used a lot of details to make the story come alive, but some of the dialogue felt stilted so I'd recommend you work on that, as well as the punctuation. Try reading your work aloud to see how natural it sounds, especially in back and forth exchanges.

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Good job, Drew. Much better written that your previous effort. Reading the story, I had a feeling you were writing about things you knew and not only the Calculus stuff (I'm so glad I dropped AP Calculus when I was in high school!) Whatever corrections the two editors made, go back and pay attention to them, try to figure out why they made the changes, and incorporate that knowledge in future writings. Cia's comment about the stilted dialogue is on point, it took me forever to get my guys to sound real, but with practice I think you'll be able to get there also. You have a good base on which to build. Now stop fooling around and get writing some more! :)

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On 12/12/2015 08:12 AM, Cia said:

I like that your story involved two friends who didn't have to be the same in order to be really close. You used a lot of details to make the story come alive, but some of the dialogue felt stilted so I'd recommend you work on that, as well as the punctuation. Try reading your work aloud to see how natural it sounds, especially in back and forth exchanges.

Hey Cia, your topic on Dialogue Punctuation helped me a lot before I began writing this story. So Thank you! I'll follow your advice and go over my story and make any necessary corrections.

 

I'll also be sure to make dialogue a greater focus for myself and my editor with any future stories.

 

Thank you for the advice Cia! :)

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On 12/12/2015 09:12 AM, Carlos Hazday said:

Good job, Drew. Much better written that your previous effort. Reading the story, I had a feeling you were writing about things you knew and not only the Calculus stuff (I'm so glad I dropped AP Calculus when I was in high school!) Whatever corrections the two editors made, go back and pay attention to them, try to figure out why they made the changes, and incorporate that knowledge in future writings. Cia's comment about the stilted dialogue is on point, it took me forever to get my guys to sound real, but with practice I think you'll be able to get there also. You have a good base on which to build. Now stop fooling around and get writing some more! :)

Thanks for the advice Carlos! :)

 

I still have my rough draft and the copies with the corrections made by Kitt and Val. I'll be sure to go through them and learn from their edits.

 

You're right, I did write bout things I knew. Characteristics of friends and family made their way into this story.

 

Again, thank you for reading Daddy! :hug:

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DREW!!! I love the story. The story is realistic and very well. I can relate it well and so would many people can empathize. It's sad some of us must go through similar traumatizing event. But I really love the realistic nature of the story. Though I was hoping for some naughty bits, but I am glad you wrote the way it is. :)

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On 12/13/2015 03:23 PM, Ashi said:

DREW!!! I love the story. The story is realistic and very well. I can relate it well and so would many people can empathize. It's sad some of us must go through similar traumatizing event. But I really love the realistic nature of the story. Though I was hoping for some naughty bits, but I am glad you wrote the way it is. :)

Aww!!! :D

 

It is sad to experience such reactions to coming outs. But, there is hope that one day those reactions will be fewer and fewer.

 

Thanks for reading Ashi! :hug:

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Terrific story, Drew! :) I got to the end and I'm like, Wait, what did the text say??????? In my love of all things HEA, I imagine Adam texted back profusely apologizing for being a such a turd, and of COURSE they are still friends; he would NEVER throw away such an important friendship as theirs, and to hell what his parents will say! Or something similar.

 

When Luke was brave enough to tell Adam and Adam turned his back on him, I could imagine Adam thinking of everything his pastor father drummed into him about homo-sexuals (trying for a Southern drawl here :D), and how they're all going to burn in hell, yada, yada, yada, and all that other bullshit those ignorant Bible thumpers spew. I think that's why Adam's first reaction was to yell, "No!", because he didn't want to believe it, he didn't want Luke to be what his parents despise because then he knew he'd have to end the friendship. How could his parents possibly let him be friends with Luke?

 

I'm hoping Adam will grow a backbone and some balls and defend his friendship to his parents if need be.

 

I really loved this story, Drew! (Can you tell? :D) I loved the way you incorporated the theme into the story. :)

 

A sequel would be most ideal...hint, hint!!!!

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Great story. I'm glad Luke didn't wither under Adam's harsh words and wants to fight for their friendship. But I want to know: what did the text say! :)

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On 12/14/2015 01:13 PM, Lisa said:

Terrific story, Drew! :) I got to the end and I'm like, Wait, what did the text say??????? In my love of all things HEA, I imagine Adam texted back profusely apologizing for being a such a turd, and of COURSE they are still friends; he would NEVER throw away such an important friendship as theirs, and to hell what his parents will say! Or something similar.

 

When Luke was brave enough to tell Adam and Adam turned his back on him, I could imagine Adam thinking of everything his pastor father drummed into him about homo-sexuals (trying for a Southern drawl here :D), and how they're all going to burn in hell, yada, yada, yada, and all that other bullshit those ignorant Bible thumpers spew. I think that's why Adam's first reaction was to yell, "No!", because he didn't want to believe it, he didn't want Luke to be what his parents despise because then he knew he'd have to end the friendship. How could his parents possibly let him be friends with Luke?

 

I'm hoping Adam will grow a backbone and some balls and defend his friendship to his parents if need be.

 

I really loved this story, Drew! (Can you tell? :D) I loved the way you incorporated the theme into the story. :)

 

A sequel would be most ideal...hint, hint!!!!

Your observations are uncanny! Adam's parents played a huge role in how Adam reacted. They are the "proper Christian" parents who will raise "proper Christian" children. As a result, Adam is homophobic.

But attitudes and beliefs aren't set in stone. Many former bigots changed because they encountered the very people they hated and simply talked with them. Became friends even. And well, Adam is already friends with a gay guy ;) He just needs to be reminded what friendship means.

 

When I started out this story, I had no clue how I'd exactly end it. Then inspiration struck, voila! "One new message" :D For me, it was an ending open to interpretation. Whether the message was positive or negative was up to each reader.

While my editing and I were going over the story, they brought up the possibility of a sequel. Ultimately, I decided that I'd write one if that was what the readers wanted.

 

Well Lisa... you're in the majority, and I'll be writing a sequel! :)

 

Lisa, thank you for this terrific review :hug: I've read some of your other reviews from all the stories you read, and I always enjoy them. It's pretty neat to see you review my own story. :)

 

Again thanks!

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On 12/15/2015 10:43 AM, craftingmom said:

Great story. I'm glad Luke didn't wither under Adam's harsh words and wants to fight for their friendship. But I want to know: what did the text say! :)

Thanks CM! :) It means a lot coming from a great author like yourself.

 

Yep, Luke isn't one to back down, especially when it concerns things he holds dear. Hopefully, Adam will get his sh*t together.

 

As for what the text said... that'll be revealed in the sequel ;)

 

Again, thanks for reading!

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Great story, Drew! I like that Luke wants to fight for their friendship. But the end? Really? You're worse than me! lol

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On 12/15/2015 11:49 PM, aditus said:

Great story, Drew! I like that Luke wants to fight for their friendship. But the end? Really? You're worse than me! lol

Thanks Adi! :) As for the end, that's open to your interpretation ;)

 

Again, thank you!

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The personalities of your two teenage characters come through strongly for me. Everything felt very realistic, and for a little while I forgot that I was reading a piece of fiction and could have imagined that this was someone's very real life. That realism creates more of an emotional impact, I hope that you use it often in your writing.
As others have suggested, while the story is 'complete', I hope you consider adding onto the story and providing more closure Luke and Adam. The cliffhanger ending is begging for a resolution.

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On 01/10/2016 03:28 PM, Hunter Thomson said:

The personalities of your two teenage characters come through strongly for me. Everything felt very realistic, and for a little while I forgot that I was reading a piece of fiction and could have imagined that this was someone's very real life. That realism creates more of an emotional impact, I hope that you use it often in your writing.

As others have suggested, while the story is 'complete', I hope you consider adding onto the story and providing more closure Luke and Adam. The cliffhanger ending is begging for a resolution.

Oh wow! :*) That's high praise, I'm really flattered. Thank you so much Hunter! :hug:

 

And yes, there will be a sequel I promise :)

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On 02/03/2016 02:08 PM, tor200534 said:

Hey Tor, your review didn't post correctly. If you want, you are welcomed to PM me :)

 

Thanks for reading!

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Well... I can't help it, what did the message say??? 

 

What this story reminded me of is the attitude and mentality of so many homophobic people out there.  Many of the very religious, like Adam's family.  I see what they say and wonder, have you ever actually met a gay person before.  I'm half convinced that while they may very well know more than one gay person, they probably have no idea. That's Adam to me in this story.  He doesn't like "those people" and has no idea that's his best friend.  

 

Very intersting premise.  I wonder what Luke gets up to in the future.

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Much enjoyed the story which left me wanting to know more, but then I don't like to be left hanging...........

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On 3/23/2017 at 7:42 AM, spikey582 said:

Well... I can't help it, what did the message say??? 

 

What this story reminded me of is the attitude and mentality of so many homophobic people out there.  Many of the very religious, like Adam's family.  I see what they say and wonder, have you ever actually met a gay person before.  I'm half convinced that while they may very well know more than one gay person, they probably have no idea. That's Adam to me in this story.  He doesn't like "those people" and has no idea that's his best friend.  

 

Very intersting premise.  I wonder what Luke gets up to in the future.

Thanks Spikey! :hug: Glad you liked it. I think for many religious people, they conjure up a caricature of gay people that more often than not doesn't reflect reality. And when they do meet a gay person, they are confronted by the human face of this "deviant life-style." It becomes a question on whether of not they will cling to that caricature, or embrace the human face. :)

 

As for what Luke gets up to in the future... :X I'll say this now, after the Spring Anthology, I am making the sequel my priority. :thumbup: 

 

Anyways, thanks for the wonderful review Spikey! :hug:

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On 3/25/2017 at 1:45 PM, Ivor Slipper said:

Much enjoyed the story which left me wanting to know more, but then I don't like to be left hanging...........

Ivor: Thanks so much for reading. :) I get the feeling about being left hanging. But my intent was to leave the ending open-ended, and let the readers draw their own conclusions. I did plan on writing a follow up in a different anthology, but I couldn't work it out with the themes presented. So I've shelved the sequel for the time being. 

 

Like I told Spikey, I'm making the sequel my top priority after this year's Spring Anthology. Between writing and editing the sequel, it should be ready sometime this summer. :) 

 

Thanks for the review Ivor!

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On 1/9/2016 at 8:54 PM, Drew Espinosa said:

Oh wow! :*) That's high praise, I'm really flattered. Thank you so much Hunter! :hug:

 

And yes, there will be a sequel I promise :)

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Great story Drew. Very emotional, and reminded me of something in my past. I'm now wondering what that Text message was.

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17 minutes ago, BHopper2 said:

Great story Drew. Very emotional, and reminded me of something in my past. I'm now wondering what that Text message was.

Thanks! :hug: I promise, I'll get to the sequel as soon as I can. :) 

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The scene was very well set, as were the characters who are strong but have different personalities. It's probably those differences that drew them together and strengthens their friendship until the bombshell dropped. Adam's reaction is understandable considering his upbringing by a preacher and his wife, although that does not make it right. Naturally, Luke is hurt and understandably so. Reading between the lines I'd say that Luke hoped their friendship was strong enough to overcome this difference too, but feared that it wasn't. Luke's hurt shows, hence his tears, but he regains his strength and holds out hope that the friendship can be saved and I hope that he is right. I applaud the bravery in sending the text, he's fighting for the friendship letting Luke know that it means something and important. It is my hope that Luke realises that and that his response is a positive one. I know what want that last message to be.

You drew me in and I could feel the friendship. You told me a good story that held my interest, I was enjoying it until you dropped the bombshell and I read the end through tears. How could you end on such a cliffhanger? Not really, I enjoyed it from start to finish. The ending is nicely done leaving it all in the reader's mind as you left us to end the story in our own way. I know how I want it to end and would love to see a follow-up.

Okay, some have said that there are some writing and grammatical errors, so what, it is still a good story and they did not detract from that. None of us authors are perfect, my own stories prove that I'm not, but we can all improve given time and some good help. You show good talent, please continue to write and share that talent.

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