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Def's Scribbles - 1. Poetry Prompt 19 - Lullaby

The Prompt: write lyrics to accompany George Gershwin's piano version of his composition, Lullaby. On the Video, the place to begin setting the words occurs at minute 0:27.

http://youtu.be/mk2TMZNv0Rc. Hope that works..

Lullaby

 
 
Hush, lay your head on my chest
In my arms safely rest
Nothing to fear
I'll be right here
 
Let my voice be your guide
I'll be there at your side
Slip into the deep
Soothe you to sleep
 
Day is over, you've slain the beast
This safe haven will bring you peace
 
Hush, feel my love slumber on
Fingers ease your troubled brow
Let my touch spell you
As only I do
 
Let go I will count every breath
Till I'm sure you've reached the depth
Where dreams bring bliss
Of your lover’s kiss
 
Hush, though the world out there hurts
I promise to love you for better or worse
You run to me first
I'll put it all in reverse
 
Feel my love wash the stain away
Tomorrow will be a brighter day.
 
Hush, lay your head on my chest
In my arms safely rest
Nothing to fear
I'm always right here
 
 
 
Forum auditions were successful. This is my first Author post!
Thank you, all of you who've been supportive..

AC.. Without you none of this would be happening. Thank you so, very much for holding my hand, and being kind and encouraging..
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"Feel my love wash the stain away
Tomorrow will be a brighter day."

 

So much to like here. I found the very personal feel of this stunning... a lullaby to a lover... a commitment to always be there. Who couldn't fall asleep to such reassurance... wonderful, Def... I loved it... it didn't hurt a bit, did it? Cheers... Gary....

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:wizard::D Congrats Mama! :D :wizard:
I really love this lullaby. I actually started humming a bit as I read it. I can see myself sing this to nephew or niece if they were younger (I doubt my nine year old nephew would appreciate it now :lol: )
Mama, you have a way with words :hug: We all saw that when you first posted that carol in AC's prompt, and here you are now :D officially posting a lullaby as the first chapter of many more to come in your first story! :kiss:

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Def, red is your colour! Lullaby is really lovely. :D
Well done my friend, well done!! :hug:

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Authors and poets seem to sprout around here like weeds! However, in this case, I think we're seeing a budding flower instead of a noxious plant. I'm looking forward to seeing it continuosly bloom.
Way to go, Def.

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This was beautiful. I loved how this could be sung to the person you love. You want your love and strength to support and soothe them. There is a feeling of comfort and commitment with every verse.
Congratulations on your first posting, with hopefully many, many more to come!

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On 04/12/2016 11:59 AM, Headstall said:

"Feel my love wash the stain away

Tomorrow will be a brighter day."

 

So much to like here. I found the very personal feel of this stunning... a lullaby to a lover... a commitment to always be there. Who couldn't fall asleep to such reassurance... wonderful, Def... I loved it... it didn't hurt a bit, did it? Cheers... Gary....

My first review of my first official posting. We will always have this moment. Lol.. It didn't hurt too much.

Thank you for a lovely review Gary. You are amazingly supportive and what you think means a lot to me. Thanks again..

 

Def...

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On 04/12/2016 12:03 PM, Drew Espinosa said:

:wizard::D Congrats Mama! :D :wizard:

I really love this lullaby. I actually started humming a bit as I read it. I can see myself sing this to nephew or niece if they were younger (I doubt my nine year old nephew would appreciate it now :lol: )

Mama, you have a way with words :hug: We all saw that when you first posted that carol in AC's prompt, and here you are now :D officially posting a lullaby as the first chapter of many more to come in your first story! :kiss:

The Carol prompt feels so long ago. That you remember, makes me happy. Funny that this is also a musical prompt.. Hmm.

Thank you for your enthusiastic review Drew. Your kind words and support mean so much..

 

Mama...

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On 04/12/2016 12:08 PM, skinnydragon said:

Aw ...really lovely Def!

 

It has such warmth and sincerity. Just the things which enhance a lullaby!

Kind words from a Dragon.. Very much appreciated..

Thank you for reading and the review SkinnyD..

 

Def...

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On 04/12/2016 12:17 PM, Reader1810 said:

Def, red is your colour! Lullaby is really lovely. :D

Well done my friend, well done!! :hug:

You've been a great friend.. I'm glad that you like this. Thank you for leaving a review and I so appreciate the encouragement..

 

Def...

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On 04/12/2016 12:55 PM, Mikiesboy said:

Oh Def ...beyond beautiful. Congratulations. I'm so glad you're here.

 

tim xoxo

Aw tim, thank you. I'm glad you like it.. I can't believe I'm here. Thank you for always cheering me on and supporting me. It means so much to me that you're in my corner..

 

Def....

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On 04/12/2016 10:27 PM, Carlos Hazday said:

Authors and poets seem to sprout around here like weeds! However, in this case, I think we're seeing a budding flower instead of a noxious plant. I'm looking forward to seeing it continuosly bloom.

Way to go, Def.

You know just what to say to this girl... I may never quite be a poet but I hope to never become noxious. Lol.

I'm so happy you actually like it.. I appreciate the review and all of your support.. Thank you Carlos!

 

Def...

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On 04/13/2016 12:04 AM, LitLover said:

This was beautiful. I loved how this could be sung to the person you love. You want your love and strength to support and soothe them. There is a feeling of comfort and commitment with every verse.

Congratulations on your first posting, with hopefully many, many more to come!

Thank you Lit, for a lovely review. I'm glad that it struck that tone with you.. I appreciate you reading this, and for your support and encouragement, thank you so much!

 

Def....

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You've made a wonderful marriage of words and music. I could follow all the lyrics right through the composition, and in the development section when it slows almost to a stop on your lyrics of "Day is over, you've slain the beast; This safe haven will bring you peace" it nearly brought me to tears.

 

Thanks you for taking the Poetry Prompt challenge. You did a great job!

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On 04/13/2016 03:57 AM, AC Benus said:

You've made a wonderful marriage of words and music. I could follow all the lyrics right through the composition, and in the development section when it slows almost to a stop on your lyrics of "Day is over, you've slain the beast; This safe haven will bring you peace" it nearly brought me to tears.

 

Thanks you for taking the Poetry Prompt challenge. You did a great job!

Thank you for this wonderful review. I hope it's not wrong to feel pleased that it moved you the way it did. That makes me feel like I got something right.

 

You provide great prompts that I connect to so thanks for that too..

 

I appreciate all your help AC, and your support and encouragement. Thank you for taking me on.

 

Def...

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That's what I call a perfect debut! Red fits you well. :)
The words you found are beautiful, your sense of rhythm excellent.

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I am so very pleased and proud of you. You do realize this will increase the pressure on others of us to follow your lead.

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On 04/14/2016 01:59 AM, aditus said:

That's what I call a perfect debut! Red fits you well. :)

The words you found are beautiful, your sense of rhythm excellent.

Aw shucks Adi.. Thank you so kindly. I appreciate this lovely review and your support..

 

 

Def...

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On 04/14/2016 05:11 AM, dughlas said:

I am so very pleased and proud of you. You do realize this will increase the pressure on others of us to follow your lead.

Thank you so much Dugh.. You know your support means a lot.

If by others you mean you too, I would especially love for that to happen.

 

Thanks again for the encouragement and the review.

 

Def...

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