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A Boy Named Zeke & From the Eyes of Cody


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A Boy Named Zeke - https://www.gayauthors.org/eficiton/viewstory.php?sid=353

 

From the Eyes of Cody -https://www.gayauthors.org/eficiton/viewstory.php?sid=352

 

About myself, I am 18 years old, gay, out to most people in my life.

I wrote both of these stories about 2 years ago, when i was 16.

I just recently discovered them on Nifty, fixed them up and posted them here.

I'm making a decision to continue either of the stories or create an entirely new one.

 

Just wanted to get feedback on either/both of the stories.

If you'd like to see more of either.

OR if i should write a new one, i think that way i'll have fresher ideas and can go further.

 

Hope you enjoy and that i don't totally suck.

I appreciate PMs and replies.

 

Thank You!

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Overall not too bad, but the dialogue is a bit stiff at times. I know it's hard to have a feel for characters early on in the writing, but I didn't really get the sense that these were real people living real lives. (I am making sense right....)

 

Also, description is your friend! I kept wanting to know more about the boys and about the locale etc.

 

Anyway, I have a tendency to focus on the negatives, so sorry. It was a good start to a story.

 

BTW, that was all about 'A boy named Zeke'

 

Menzo

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no, no problem at all.

negative eventually help don't they.

still trying to figure out what to write.

i know i want to, but I'm thinking of just starting a brand new story.

no point in continuing an old one with not much interest to begin with.

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