Site Moderator TalonRider Posted November 25, 2007 Site Moderator Posted November 25, 2007 Not that I'm defending anyone for using lyrics in a story, but sometimes they fit. I usually scan ahead of them myself. But in the case of Nick, he used the lyrics to Time In A Bottle in his story by the same name. As I was reading them, I could hear Jim Crose singing them in my head. Jan
Site Administrator wildone Posted November 26, 2007 Site Administrator Posted November 26, 2007 In my humble opinion, the way you did the lyrics was correct. Not only using just the relevant part of a song, but putting the lyrics in context of what was going on. Too often I'll read a long set of lyrics and that's it. You've included what Brandon was doing while he was singing those lyrics, and, by implication, what he was thinking. It wasn't a dry recitation of the song -- it was the song in the context of not only a stage performance, but also a love affair. Oh yeah,,, the lyrics were nice, and yes, usually I don't really like it when it's putting in lyrics just to write lyrics. but I think that, here, it brings something special to the story, and knowing CJ I'm sure that it will play something later on in the next chapters Not that I'm defending anyone for using lyrics in a story, but sometimes they fit. I usually scan ahead of them myself. But in the case of Nick, he used the lyrics to Time In A Bottle in his story by the same name. As I was reading them, I could hear Jim Crose singing them in my head. Jan I agree. Maybe I didn't quite come across clearly in my post, when I used the expression "pet peeve". I guess you have all described what I meant to say in a more accurate way. Thanks, Steve
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